Nov 20 2016

A Review of A Summoner’s Mishap by R.K Coventon

A Summoner's Mishap by R.K Coventon

A Summoner’s Mishap by R.K Coventon

A very common story theme that occurs with succubi and incubi are those who use magic to summon them and then are either tricked or just are foolish in the first place to be the pray. It can provide a story with some heat, but when the editing of that story leaves a lot to be desired, then there just isn’t any heat in the first place.

The other thing that can be a problem is when the dialog just doesn’t “sound” right. No work is perfect, but at least an effort should be made to make a work readable and enjoyable instead of cringing at the problems encountered.

  • Title: A Summoner’s Mishap
  • Author: R.K Coventon
  • Length: 18 Pages
  • ASIN: B01AYS9VYS
  • Publishing Date: January 22, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

Cameron is a disgruntled apprentice mage to Tiege Gistell, the grand Matron mage. One day, while Tiege is away for business, Cameron sneaks into her masters quarters and spots a grimoire open on a desk in it she learns how to summon a demon. Things however things go awry and she does not summon a helpful demon servant, but rather accidentally summons a powerful incubus intent on turning her into his servant instead!

Cameron has been training under her teacher for a very long time and finally has a chance to discover some secrets. A spell offers a means to summon a demon, which she does, and Cameron finds herself facing something she wasn’t prepared for. An incubus that has plans of his own. And Cameron will play a leading role in them.

The author attempts to set up Cameron as a character whom the reader is to be interested in, wanting to see what happens to her and how things unfold. This sort of works, why it doesn’t well I’ll talk about later.

The incubus of the work, Arion, is for the most part, very stereotypical in nature, having a one-track mind for most of the work. Even when the story takes a bit of a turn and twist, there’s not really a change in Arion’s overall tone, personality, or intentions. I would have liked him to be less overbearing dominant and somewhat more seductive. In truth, he isn’t seductive as a whole, instead simply using Cameron’s own body and emotions against her.

There’s a slight tone of mind control in the work, but the focus is on Cameron submitting to Arion’s control and then his having his way and where things go from there. Even when another character enters the fray, there’s no real battle for their own sexual needs are used against them. Again, this isn’t seduction, it’s simply brute force.

The erotica is held by a pair of hot flashes with some heat which attempts to bring something to the work, but it cannot overcome the lack of interest in the characters themselves, or how things are told in the story. It is the tone of the writing, and the issues with editing that are this work’s downfall most of all.

The writing tries to tell a story but there are so many issues with tense, spelling and word choices that at times the story faded away for how many mistakes caught me. The other problem was the dialog between the characters which just didn’t sound right at all. It was stilted, uneven, and at times the characters sounded like robots rather than anything else.

The story itself, the universe, seems to be interesting, but it can’t get past the editing errors and that it the biggest problem. In the midst of the erotica to have grammar mistakes and tense errors just doesn’t help keep the heat building. It’s like a bucket of cold water and it shouldn’t have been. Add to that an incubus that is, for the most part, very stereotypical in his actions and this becomes a work that just didn’t have the heat, or the story, that it could have been.

Two out of five pitchforks.

The work needs a serious editing for all of the tense and word errors. As well, the dialog simply sounds wrong and needs to be embellished. There is a story here, it could be quite a good one, but when the lack of editing strips the enjoyment of the story away that isn’t helpful.

 

Tera

Nov 19 2016

A neat Succubus WIP YouTube

What I thought to be a neat YouTube an artist created of a work of Succubus art while they were creating. I do love fun and cute Succubi and she really fits that description well…

 

If you can’t see the video here on the Tale, please try this link: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iti0bw8uh5c

The artist posted the completed image on their DeviantArt page which you can find here, and here is a small version of that art…

Fantasy by Jazzie-Simone

Fantasy
by Jazzie-Simone

She’s just the cuteness in so many different ways really. The eyepatch, her clothing, the pose, that little smile, not really a smirk, all just comes together to make one of the most adorable Succubi that I have found in some time…

 

Tera

Nov 18 2016

A Review of Succubus!: Hell High by Michael-Scott Earle

Succubus!: Hell High by Michael-Scott Earle

Succubus!: Hell High by Michael-Scott Earle

One of the hardest things to manage when creating characters is to give them something unique that holds the attention of a reader. Humour helps, being a “fish out of water” can be interesting as well. However, at the same time they can have what can really only be described as a “catch phrase” that makes one roll their eyes… a lot.

Being in love, and not being noticed by the one you love, is a hard thing to deal with. Meeting them, and they can’t quite remember your name, or what you look like, is more of a problem. When they happen to be a succubus, and you weren’t supposed to know, that’s when things can go off the rails and all hell, quite literally, breaks loose.

The work tells the story of:

Sherman had always thought high school was a real drag. He was looking forward to finishing his senior year so that he could coast through college, get a day job, and spend the rest of his life playing video games.

He is used to seeing Angels, but when a new girl transfers into his AP physics class, he thinks Demons might be more his style.

When his innocent crush leads him to the basement, he finds out that his school is exactly the kind of hellhole he always thought it was; only now he’ll be lucky to escape before they eat his soul.

Sherman’s life revolves around anime, video games, going to school and one other thing. The love of his life, Charlotte, even if she doesn’t know it. High school is a weird place, more so for Sherman as he can see something that no one else can. Charlotte’s a succubus. But then, everyone else at his high school isn’t exactly human either. Being that he’s the only human he knows of, that might be a real problem.

Sherman, the main character of the work, is an adorable nerd with a lovely personality. He’s very much a lost sheep amongst all that goes on around him, but there’s something else that’s interesting. He appears to be human, but there’s something odd about him and that is what pushes the story forwards, eventually creating the encounter between Sherman and the girl he’s in love with, Charlotte. His awkward personality, curiosity, but most of all, the singular trust he has in Charlotte sets him as being, in a lot of ways, a kind of anti-hero.

There is one thing about him, however, that made me cringe, over and over again. Whenever something goes right for him with Charlotte, his internal monologue uses a particular phase. The first time that happens, it’s really funny, but by the sixth time it had worn out it’s stay and really needed to be something other. It’s a minor quibble I know, but it really bothered me and it really shouldn’t have.

Charlotte, the succubus of this work, is delightfully focused, knowing what she has to do, but at the same time, she has a little bit of a flaw in her personality that Sherman falls into, thus being entwined with her in the adventure that is this story. While she has all of the physical aspects of being a succubus, the thing is that she really doesn’t as a whole, act like one. There’s really no seduction, nothing that defines her as being a succubus. What happens through the story, the things she does, say she is a devil of some kind and it’s really only Sherman that says she is a succubus, she agreeing that she is one. Otherwise the story doesn’t allow for anything like Charlotte using her powers to seduce as one might expect. Save for one scene, which was just too cute for words honestly.

The real question throughout revolves around Sherman, what he can do. There’s nothing really defined as to if he’s really all human, partly, or something else. That’s a plot thread that gets set to the side for drawing Sherman and Charlotte together, having the action begin, and the pair dealing with things as they happen. The universe, how it all works, what the high school is exactly, as well isn’t explained or explored much. From Sherman’s perspective, that’s just how things are and always has been. It works, as the story is told from him perspective, but that leaves a lot of questions unresolved and plots left dangling as the story comes to a close.

There’s a bit of a melancholy aspect to the ending, at the same time there’s a clear path to another work to follow. Part of the story is closed, Sherman’s managed to find himself with what he wanted, but then the question is, now that he does, what comes next? That’s interesting and where that goes, and who Sherman comes to face next, might be all I’m hoping for.

There’s no erotica to speak of, really there’s not any chance for that to occur. It’s more of an action/adventure with a long chase, the stirrings of a relationship, and a little bit of self-discovery. The work is written well, if a bit juvenile in tone, that happening because the story is told from Sherman’s perspective. It is very fast paced, not really allowing for much time to reflect before the next problem comes rushing up and knocking on the door.

It’s a good start to a series, I think there’s a lot of promise here. I would have liked more of Charlotte being a succubus, being seductive, than what does happen however. I’d also like Sherman to be a little more “in” the story than being dragged along as much as he is. Perhaps what comes next will, to an extent, allow both characters to develop more and turn the story towards the mystery that Sherman is.

Four of out five pitchforks.

While there were some things that bothered me about this work, that mostly comes to the characters themselves and the situation they were placed into. Charlotte is a succubus, that much is true, but so far she really hasn’t “been” a succubus. The next work in this series is scheduled to appear in January 2017 and I hope there’s more character development than action.

This work has more than enough action, I think the next thing needs to be Sherman finding out what makes him different, and telling more of Charlotte’s story. It’s silly at times, heartfelt in others, and I did enjoy the work dearly. I just wish that catchphrase didn’t keep popping up all of the time.

 

Tera

Nov 18 2016

A Review of Princes of Jacob by Kenneth E. Fultz Jr.

Princes of Jacob by Kenneth E. Fultz Jr.

Princes of Jacob by Kenneth E. Fultz Jr.

There are some works that suggest the appearance of succubi or incubi, but really do not quite have them appear as one might expect them to be. But succubi can have many different meanings, and finding one that is a bit different and still has some reference to the original myths is interesting.

The idea of lust being used to control the outcome of history is something that is not unheard of. Many battles have been won or lost for the sake of love or lust. The question that comes from that focuses on what the cost is, who pays it, and what comes after all has wained. There is a price, there always is one of course.

  • Title: Princes of Jacob
  • Author: Kenneth E. Fultz Jr.
  • Length: 165 Pages
  • ASIN: B010U7DSD8
  • Publishing Date: July 2, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells of:

Will Lust destroy a man, a family, and a kingdom?

In the land of Agnes, during the departure of King Jacob, Reuben the eldest prince sleeps with his father’s wife and the mother of his younger brothers Gad and Asher. The betrayal is quickly found out with Zabrina’s banishment and several princes being dethroned. Lust and succubi quickly flow through the City of Adam, destroying the peace it once had. Gad and Asher become known as sons of a whore as their very brotherhood and lives come into danger. With seducing women from pagans to succubi with sexual herbs the princes of the castle become the focus of every ones attention. The brothers must figure out what is truly happening to their lives as all twelve of their already dissolving bonds break to the point of war among themselves.

Family faces many challenges, from the small to the vast, every one of them takes a toll. Sometimes there is a purpose behind the suffering, the loss and the hate which comes. But in the end, family will survive, in one form or another. It is simply a question of who is able to lead and who is to fall.

The work follows the lives of a family, specially twelve brothers in their battles within themselves and the world around them. There is political intrigue, there is passion, betrayal, lust and loathing. It is a very complicated story which wraps itself around many characters and stories that are found in the Bible and in other religious texts.

Along the way a character named Lilith appears and with her comes a group of women calling themselves succubi. However, they are not succubi in the traditional sense they do not have horns or tails or supernatural powers. They do however understand the meaning of lust and how that can be used to control others and the world around them to their goals. They could well be described as a coven of women with a plan to overcome and destroy the kingdom they both fear and detest. In order to battle against powers stronger than themselves, the succubi turn to their knowledge of the world around them, schemes, plots and innuendo, to cause the downfall of the brothers.

As they do so, the lives of the brothers fall apart, leading towards ruin, and the inevitable confrontation to learn the truth. The theme of injustice works from both sides in this and it allows for some intriguing plots to unfold.

There are a tremendous number of characters in this work, but the author manages to hold each of their voices, stories and outcomes clearly. There are some moments in which the story becomes a little confusing, but the plot manages to remain true to itself. There are some moments in the dialogue that are a little wooden, odd, or strange, but that can be attributed to the time setting for the most part.

The work has an interesting attraction in that there is a sort of “soap opera” feeling to many moments which is both amusing and appealing as well. This isn’t to belittle the writing, I just cannot think of a better way to describe some of the plots and actions taken by the characters. There are a lot of interwoven collisions with the characters that never turn out well, the brothers going from riches to rags to riches again.

An interesting read, though it is not a story about succubi per se. While this is not a work that has the appearance of succubi, it is a captivating tale about the trials of a family and how they deal with their own faults, needs, wants and desires. A very interesting and unique read and one that I liked for its depth and characters most of all.

Three and a half out of five pitchforks.

Interesting biblical/historical storytelling, but it isn’t a story about succubi as I have said perviously.

 

Tera

Nov 17 2016

Succubi Image of the Week 461

An drawing of what I think is a lovely, sexy and tempting Succubus today for the Succubi of the Week. Apparently this work is for some sort of game, I am assuming it is called 99 Dragons or similar. Still, she’s very well done, I like the artist’s style quite a lot… I just wish there was a tail here somewhere…

Succubus by shawli

Succubus by shawli

I found this artwork originally on Pixiv and you can find the original page with this art here.

She’s very much a lovely sensual Succubus in a lot of ways… I especially like the look in her eyes and her expression. Her outfit works well, I like that her colours all match or blend together so well too.

Her horns I would normally say look a little large, but here, overall, they seem to fit quite well. I do wish she had a tail however, I think that would have been a nice addition to the overall setting, but then it is rather busy otherwise and doing so might have been a little too much.

Gorgeous hair, her skin tone and shading is amazing too. I like that her wings aren’t ripped or torn very much as considering her overall look, doing so would be quite jarring. Pink and evil doesn’t quite go together.

There’s a story in that somewhere…

 

Tera

Nov 16 2016

A red bodysuit with odd horns is odd…

Red Sexy Devil CostumeWhile I do give some ideas the benefit of the doubt, there are some where I can’t quite manage that for various reasons. A lot of the time is the the look of the costume which, in some way, makes me cringe. Then there are the horns, silly or awful looking is common. But then there are those costumes when I wonder at what point did the designer step that little bit too far and go from seductive to trashy?

This is called the Red Sexy Devil Costume and it comes with the bodysuit and the horns. The boots are not included and it sells for about $150 US at the sites I have found it.

What you cannot see from this image is that the sleeves have some really ugly zippers on them and that more than anything else ruins this for me.

It’s not really awful, as a whole, but there is the little detail that makes me cringe and shake my head. The other thing that bothers me are those horns, which really do look more like cat’s ears than anything else. But I suppose as they match the costume, that’s a sort of promising thing.

Pairing this costume up with those boots makes this look a lot more appealing, and I think that also should be said, in a positive way.

But it just steps over the line from being sexy and seductive into the realm of trashy just by a bit.

As such, I’m more tempted to find those boots for my one special outfit, if for no other reason than I think the overall look would be… interesting.

Especially with red hair and black horns.

As for this?

Two pitchforks out of five with the boots, one pitchfork without them.

But it does make me ponder…

 

Tera

Nov 15 2016

A Review of The Succubi Mansion: A Place Where Demons Lurk by Alicia Collins

The Succubi Mansion: A Place Where Demons Lurk by Alicia Collins

The Succubi Mansion: A Place Where Demons Lurk by Alicia Collins

The thing about telling a story is that, sometimes, the minutia gets in the way. The world around the characters takes on its own life, telling a story of its own and in doing so the characters get a bit lost in the shuffling of the tale to be told. It is important to tell of what’s going on, who’s there, and what happens along the way. The issue becomes when the path to the ending doesn’t really tell so much as shows what’s going on.

The question of what you desire isn’t the same as what you love. There’s a difference between them, a gulf that one needs to cross sometimes. Being offered an answer, but not knowing the question makes for confusion, uncertainty and, most of all, distrust. Sometimes it is the latter that matters the most.

The work tells the story of:

Jordan knows what she wants in life–to sketch and be left alone to play video games. She enjoys her life as much as the next girl, but during one night of weakness, she finds shelter in the sanctuary of online chat rooms. After hours of trying to find the right fit, a mysterious message arrives: “Do you know the Succubi Mansion?” Her answer is going to change her entire life.

Jordan finds her way to a world in which there are strange things, stranger people and the question of what’s real is something she can’t quite put her finger on. Being led by one’s nose doesn’t always mean what it seems to be. More so, making a deal without understanding isn’t much of a deal at all.

The one thing that this work seems to be missing is focus. There are so many layers under which each character exists that what’s real and what isn’t becomes blurred. There are some very interesting scenes, moments of thoughtful contemplation, but then the story rushes off in another direction, or Jordan gets pushed off another way. The story reads, in a lot of ways, as sort of looking through a distorted window, trying to make sense of what is seen.

Possibly the most interesting, yet confusing characters are the succubi in this work. The tease of what is going on really interested me, but then how the characters themselves went about the scenes, almost sleepwalking, if not in confusion, made it hard at time to figure out what was going on. The mystery is delightful, the story has a lot of promise, but it really doesn’t develop as far as I’d hoped it might.

There isn’t any erotica to speak of, really this isn’t so much a work of erotica as it is a mystery to discover and to watch unfold. There’s not a lot of need for erotica either, considering Jordan herself, her background, and her encounter with the succubi. There’s more to reveal than a hot flash or two, which was the best thing really to do.

Jordan gets some hints about what’s going on, finds something she needs, and that transformation of her character I adored. Seeing her get a clue about what was happening was telling, but then came the ending and I think that it didn’t add very much to the story overall. It does open a clear door to another work, it tells of a choice made, but its so fast and abrupt that it felt like an afterthought and I wish it wasn’t.

The characters are interesting, the main plot kept my interest. But it was the sidetracks, the odd encounters and how Jordan was not quite connecting with the characters she met until the story was close to the ending. Perhaps this work might have been better served to be split into two, the arrival and the departure, allowing for the time needed for the story to breathe.

Three out of five pitchforks.

It’s a bit confusing, a bit scattered, but the underlying plot interests me. I would have liked more focus, perhaps a little less obliqueness in the dialogue and events as well. I think the author has a lot of good ideas, but rushed through them far too quickly.

There appears to be a second work to come, I will be looking for it to see how things develop from here. Jordan has found something, then lost it. It’s the finding it again that holds me. I hope the author can find a way to focus more on the telling than the shadows that abound around Jordan.

 

Tera

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