Feb 07 2017

A Review of Holy Temptation by Gianna Quinn

Holy Temptation by Gianna Quinn

Holy Temptation by Gianna Quinn

The thing about writing a short story is that there comes a point where, somehow, the story has to get to the point, tell it well and offer some kind of satisfaction with how things unfold. But that’s difficult to find when the editing leaves something to be desired, the dialogue just sounds wrong as well. But most of all, the real problem comes when the climax of the work only serves to bring more confusion than understanding.

It’s also a problem when the main character’s name recalls an image of a well known television series character that derails so much of the story as a whole. British comedy will do that, quite often really, especially when the character’s name is so close to Broderick that I couldn’t get over the image itself for the story that was trying to get my attention.

The work tells the story of:

Rodrik is a newly forged paladin that has come to a small town that is being haunted by a demon. He has agreed to assist the villagers, however when night falls, the succubus emerges. Can Rodrik’s holy magik s stand up against the seductive might of the succubus or will Rodrik fall for this Holy Temptation? Read on and find out!

Rodrik travels to a town on first first mission to do good. But before he can rid them of a demon in their midst, a lovely woman comes calling in the night. But not all that appears lovely is quite so, and when Lilith reveals herself, Rodrik is trapped with nowhere to run and only one thing to count on.

The work is a hot flash, with the actual erotica appearing in the latter third of the work. Being that it is short, there’s not much in the way of plot, character development or for that matter, heat in the erotica as well. The story stumbles around, trying to find itself and by the time it does so, well over half the work has passed by.

While much of that comes from the setting up of the story, that’s rather odd in that events come to pass, mentioned out of hand, but with little in the way of a resolution by the time the story comes to a close. The writing tries to tell the story, but a number of tense changes, grammar issues and odd dialogue structure at times make the story difficult to read, never mind enjoy.

Lilith, the succubus of the work, attempts to be seductive, but soon falls into the trap of being very close to being a stereotypical succubus in character, which disappointed me. More so, the way she spoke didn’t have much in the way of seduction in play, bordering on being almost rote in what she cries out for, over and over again with Rodrik.

The erotica’s heat is muted by the speed at which things unfold, the seeming lack of emotion from both characters, even when Rodrik knows what Lilith is doing to him. Some of that can be said to be Lilith’s control over him, but that doesn’t give much to telling why Lilith is there, what her purpose is and most of all, what happens between herself and Rodrik.

It’s the climax of the work, and the very last paragraph, that offers something really interesting, but it’s not at all explored. It’s a tease, suggesting there’s more to the story, but in doing so that removes the point of the climax, setting it off and away, not to be explained, or told. That’s a real shame because in spite of the overall difficulty in how the story is told, that very last page caught my attention, far more than the erotica or anything else did.

The work needs a serious editing for tense, structure and most of all the dialogue to make it sounds real rather than robotic at many points. The thing is, the last page gives a wonderful mystery and promise to explore, but the author, as of this review, has not continued this story. It’s a shame really because the idea of a paladin chasing a succubus, the two circling around each other, really interests me.

Three out of five pitchforks.

As the opening to a longer work, the story could be expanded, given more depth and give both Rodrik and Lilith more to their characters. There is something here, it’s just not told as it could have been and that’s more the shame.



Feb 07 2017

A Review of the The Succubus Confesses series by Xandra Fraser

The Succubus Confesses – A Paean to Priapos by Xandra Fraser

The Succubus Confesses – A Paean to Priapos by Xandra Fraser

Some of the most interesting works about succubi are ones in which the author uses history to tell a story within which succubi have a hand, or a tail for that matter, in it. Seeing the world, it’s history, through the eyes of beings that live for millennia leads to some introspective moments, ones that I really enjoy.

Some of these stories have passion others are lust. Some fall into the depths of despair and loss. Through the focus comes in not so much the sexual adventure that appears, but rather in the revealing of another way to look at history and beyond.

As this series of two works are written in a similar tone, I will list them both before commenting on the series as a whole.

The first work in the series is:

The work tells the story of:

The Succubus Confesses is a series of stories written in no particular order and intended to be read similarly. The narrator, Zuzanne, claims to be a daughter of Lilith, one of many sisters. She has lived among humans for several millennia, receiving nourishment from the vital life energy generated by her human lovers, but also giving inspiration to their endeavors.

A Paean to Priapos recounts some of Zuzanne’s early life, her awakening to awareness of the god Priapos, and her experiences at a Roman orgy at the villa of Tiberius Caesar on the island of Capri.

Suzanne tells the story of her past, the lives she has encountered and a singular truth about herself. Along the way she describes her needs, her powers and those souls found in mythology, history and passion. A world of tastes and experiences which shape her and form who she has become.

The following work focuses on Zuzanne trying to solve a mystery, the depths to which she must descend in order to find, if not solace then a measure of justice in a time when there was really no such thing.

The Succubus Confesses – An Inquisitor Meets His Maker by Xandra Fraser

The Succubus Confesses – An Inquisitor Meets His Maker by Xandra Fraser

The greatest evils are those that we bring upon ourselves. We can be awful petty things when our own hidden wants press against us. Giving into that darkness only brings more upon us. Even those with the best of intentions can stumble and fall.

In the end, the truth doesn’t always set us free, it binds us forever.

The second work in the series is:

The work tells the story of:

The Succubus Confesses is a series of stories written in no particular order and intended to be read similarly. The narrator, Zuzanne, claims to be a daughter of Lilith, one of many sisters. She has lived among humans for several millennia, receiving nourishment from the vital life energy generated by her human lovers, but also giving inspiration to their endeavors.

An Inquisitor Meets His Maker tells the story of Zuzanne’s search for her last living sister which takes her from Northern Italy to France. Zuzanne is drawn to Loudun where demons have taken possession of a convent of Ursuline nuns. On the road into France, she hears tales of exorcism, torture, and execution. She fears her sister has been caught up in the chaos of this 17th century witch hunt. When she arrives in Loudun, she finds that the fate of her sister is far worse than she had imagined.

Zuzanne tells of a tragic discovery in her past. A search for her sister brings her to an event that offers little in the way of hope for her. But the truth will not be denied, she will find it and whatever the cost, someone will pay. Along with Zuzanne herself.

The singular thing about this series that tells so much about it comes to the detail in each work. The stories are told from Zuzanne’s perspective and quite a lot of care was taken by the author to be sure her voice is clear and strong. The emotional connection with the memories allows for a wash of melancholy to pass through each tale. It’s as if Zuzanne herself is pining for the past, remembering the better things from a time where things are not so good in many ways.

She makes a statement which clearly says, from her perspective, that she is the last of her kind, the last of the succubi. The sadness in those words is deeply felt and beyond that, Zuzanne almost seems as if she’s trying to justify to herself what she’s done in order to find a reason to live.

The first work tends towards telling of passions and thrills of the past, of her own and that of her kind’s history. The detail is stunning, the stories are richly woven and touch upon the past from the time of Eden to the midst of the Greeks. There is no feeling of modern judgement upon the past, rather the stores are memories and thoughts from Zuzanne that offer a glimpse into herself when she had passion.

The second work presses upon a short note in the first where Zuzanne tells that she does not kill those she is intimate with, save for one instance and the second work explains that point and how that all came to be. Again, the story is based on history, telling of the moments that occurred during the time the story is set in.

While that happens, Zuzanne’s path to the truth is told, both sexually and otherwise. The erotica doesn’t overwhelm the story, it helps to push Zuzanne along towards the truth, whatever form that will take for her. Once to her destination, learning of her sister’s fate, Zuzanne makes a choice and she falls, for a time, into being what the legends claim of her kind to be.

There’s no rush through these stories, they take the time they need to, they tell a complete story and then leave one wondering about Zuzanne. Again, that melancholy I spoke of never leaves the storytelling and it makes me wonder about Zuzanne in the “here and now” that she seems to be speaking of.

I wanted to see more of Zuzanne now, what she’s like, who she has become. Perhaps another work might have taken things closer to the current time, to reveal what’s happened and if Zuzanne still has a soul after so much history has taken its toll upon her. While the past is complete, it’s that question of the present that makes me wonder and want more.

For the series as a whole, I’ll give four out of five pitchforks.

I dearly wish the author had continued the series, taken Zuzanne into the present, perhaps into the far future and told of how she’s changed and why. The melancholy in her character is palatable throughout the series and while some of that can be explained, there’s quite a lot not told. Recommended for the writing, the attention to detail and a reflective succubus who seems to be trying to find her own way in a world where she is so very much alone.



Feb 06 2017

Thinking of You By TeraS

It is, I know, becoming a regular occurrence that I am not able to write, not able to construct the story I want to tell. For that matter, I’m finding it difficult to get back to the stories unfinished, though I dearly wish to. Still, my spirit guides me into other stories, which, in some ways, tell that I’m …


Thinking of You
By TeraS


The snows had blanketed the Realm overnight, a glistening white sheen coating all that the flakes fell upon. The weather suggested—and most did in fact pay attention—that the best place to be was curled up somewhere warm, in whatever sort of entwinement was most enjoyable. The wonders of the world outside of their windows and doors gave life to something a bit different, something that only really happened when one was allowed time to actually unwind, allowed to let their minds to wander and, in doing so, allowed to discover something special unfolding.

Off towards one part of the Succubi Realm was a small home, one that sat astride two realms, one that two Eternals called their own. A place within which, on this evening, Tera was curled up with Keith, watching the snows swirl and bluster on the other side of the windows frosted over from the outside and steamed over from the inside. She held a small mug of cocoa in her hands, rolling the cup from time to time before she took a small sip, then returned to watching the snows outside once more brush against the window, attracting her attention as her thoughts … wandered …

… wandered into thoughts of her Heart and his Beloved on the other side of the fence, cherished more than any words could say.

… wandered into worries for her Song, holding her always, hoping, never stopping.

… wandered into soft smiles as Rachel’s laughter was brought along with the winds, for she was always proud of their little Sister.

… wandered into a wistful smile for Alei, holding her in love, for always.

… wandered into a bit of concern for Legion—but then that he returned the same, for that was how things were.

… wandered into a little prayer for their brother, knowing of what had been, but more knowing what could be, Goddess willing.

… wandered into a teasing smile that couldn’t be helped when Sophia came to mind, a smile which didn’t wane when Bianca did, as well.

… wandered into hope for their son, holding onto the belief for his talents, knowing the best was yet to be.

… wandered into a small shake of her hair as Rianna’s voice came to mind, with her sister Branwyn’s own right beside.

It wasn’t a list, she knew. It was just a bare taste of the thoughts she had every day of them all, but not them alone. There were the thoughts for those she’d but known in passing, but still remained with her, held in her soul. Her hopes for all of them, as myriad as the snowflakes outside her window, passed through the snows to them all … at least, that was her fond hope.

A sigh escaped her lips as she took a breath, setting the mug onto the floor. The snows allowed for time to reflect, the chance to wonder. Perhaps there was a bit of melancholy, a bit of a wan smile in time passing as it was meant to do.

Keith’s voice caught her attention, asking if something was wrong. Tera’s answer was a smile and the truth: “Just thinking about our family.”

No matter how deep the snows, no matter how far-flung the realms in which all of them were, this was something she would always do.

Feb 05 2017

A Review of Succubus Called: Part 2 by Blair Barrett

Succubus Called: Part 2 by Blair Barrett

Succubus Called: Part 2 by Blair Barrett

A review of the second work in the Succubus Called series today on the Tale. You can find my review of the first work in the series here where I shared how much I like the story, how the main characters Cassandra and Lilith appealed to me. The second work in the series builds quite well upon what came before and offers quite a lot of character development that I loved. But the mystery remains and avoiding telling all has kept my love of this work, and the characters, as strong.

The truth of those you encounter isn’t what they look like, but rather the soul within them. Sometimes what that soul needs, more than anything else, is someone to love.

  • Title: Succubus Called: Part 2
  • Author: Blair Barrett
  • Published By: Amazon Digital Services
  • Length: 37 Pages
  • Format: eBook
  • ASIN: B01N1972MR
  • Publishing Date: February 5, 2017
  • This work in Kindle Format at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

Cassandra had been rescued, but does her rescuer have her best interests at heart? Dangerous creatures stalk her, and the only thing standing between her and them is a 191 year old succubus.

Cassandra finds herself drawn a little deeper into Lilith’s life, but as well, she discovers that what she desires can be given, for a price. But that price isn’t the problem, it’s dealing with newfound desires, released into the world. Given that Lilith is a succubus, those desires can be made reality for them both.

I feel that this work is somewhat stronger and more involved than the first in the series. There’s more of a direction to events, there’s quite a lot of character development for Cassandra in many ways as well. For Lilith, there’s a bit less for her, but much of that is overcome by revealing more of her personality and some of her secrets. In the same way, while Cassandra undergoes a transformation, she doesn’t lose her charm, attitude, or personality. She’s evolving as a character, searching for who she is and what she wants most of all.

Much of the story tells of their adventure, some of Lilith’s abilities, an aching threat they need to overcome which then leads to a choice that has a telling effect on Cassandra. That change is physical, not mental or personality-wise as a whole, which I was thankful for. The author has invested far too much into Cassandra to just throw all of that away and I’m very pleased they did not.

There is one small erotic scene in the work which has a bit of an oddity to it as a whole. It makes sense, it offers a bit of direction to both Cassandra and Lilith going forwards as well. There’s a bit of a D/s theme to it, but it isn’t harsh or feels wrong for both characters. How that develops going forwards and if that has a bearing on Cassandra’s transformation will be interesting.

The humour comes out quite a lot more in this work, the repartee is a delight and I could imagine the smirks and expressions on both characters as events came and went. It’s a fulfilling story, offering a lot, and I hope that continues on. Most of all, Lilith, while a succubus, has all of the appearance of being something different from her wings to all she is. Expanding on why things are needs to happen however as the teases of the past are quite heavy here and the payoff needs to be.

Four out of five pitchforks.

How the story is unfolding is a real delight, mainly in how both Cassandra and Lilith are trying to figure each other out and what’s going on exactly. The changes that Cassandra has been through haven’t changed who she is, nor has Lilith become other than who she seems to be. Holding onto the soul of both of them made the moments of laughter wonderful. I do look forwards to seeing what comes next, I feel like there’s something coming, not the least of which is the mystery of Cassandra herself. It’s more the question of who, really, Lilith is, and what she desires too.



Feb 05 2017

A Review of the Romance with the Incubus series by Danielle Voelkel

Romance with the Incubus: Taken by Him - Episode 1 by Danielle Voelkel

Romance with the Incubus: Taken by Him – Episode 1 by Danielle Voelkel

The discovery of one’s past can mean many things. For some it is freedom, the opening of their horizons, a glimpse of something more than they are. For others the past brings up shame, loss, and the wish that things didn’t happen as they did. Truth is a terribly blunt thing regardless of who it is directed at.

A new start can mean many different things. It can be a new city, a new place to work, or, sometimes, a new reality to deal with. It’s what happens next that tells of just how good, or bad, that start is.

These works tell the story of:

A small town girl moves to the city to escape her mundane life in the country. She is convinced that she was born to make others happy and would never actually achieve happiness herself. It isn’t until she meets a power hungry incubus that for some reason cannot feed on her chi that she realizes her bad experiences with love may have nothing to do luck and more to do with destiny.

Sage has left her small town life and started a new one in the big city. A new job found, she starts putting her life together, but finds that there’s something happening around her. Her new boss, Knox, isn’t exactly human, he’s an incubus, and he’s very interested in her. Sage has no idea why, but when the truth comes out, it leaves only questions behind.

These two works combined tell an interesting story that doesn’t depend on erotica or sexuality to drive the plot onwards. What does is the mystery of Sage’s past, who Knox is, and what exactly is going on around them both. There are quite a number of subplots and mysteries to untangle, which makes this quite good. But while the page count is over seventy pages, in fact each part is only twenty or so pages.

As a result, while much time is spent setting up the story, telling of Sage and introducing Knox and other characters, there isn’t much in the way of actually telling much about either Sage or Knox. Even when something is said, for example that Knox is an incubus, it’s skimmed over and barely registers overall. In the same way Sage’s reactions seem odd, almost matter of fact at times and that doesn’t quite feel right either.

Eventually Sage’s real secret, the one she doesn’t know, comes out, but that’s a fleeing moment that hasn’t time to go anywhere or do anything before the story comes to a screeching halt. There’s a real need for the story to continue, but at the time of this review that hadn’t happened.

There are some minor editing issues with the work, which do not take much away from the story. The lack of direction at times is a problem as is the extremely long building up to something happening in the work. Almost the entire first part is setting things up, but not getting very far or introducing Knox to the work. It takes the second work to have that happen, but again that seems to be without direction or focus. Combining the two works into a single volume would be a start, expanding on the story another and continuing the series onwards to what comes next would be the best thing by far. There’s something good here, it needs to have the chance to happen.

Three out of five pitchforks.

It’s a shame the author didn’t continue with this series as the first works had quite a lot going for them. There’s a good deal of mystery about Sage and her father, not to mention Knox himself. A lot of things unspoken, a lot of threads left to be gathered up and brought together. There is story here, it isn’t erotica, at least not as yet, that seems to be coming at some point from the story so far. If that ever happens that is.



Feb 04 2017

A Student Film called Succubus

Another of the, interestingly, many student films that pop up on YouTube regularly today on the Tale. There is no dialogue, really it is an art film more than anything else, but the setting and the music I found to be the most interesting thing of all.

If you cannot see this film here on the Tale, please try this link.

Here is a screenshot I pieced together with the title card and just about the best image of the succubus herself that I could manage.

Succubus Student Film MDC

The story, in case YouTube removes the film, comes to a man sitting on a bench and looking up to see a woman dressed in red looking at him from afar. After a few moments, she turns and walks away, entering a building. He runs after her and finds her in a darkened room. Her form shifts from the red dress to being cloaked in black, then she offers her hand to him. He takes her offered hand, the two then are shown together for a moment and then the film ends.

The music in this film I found to be really some of the most enthralling music I have heard in such short films and sets a wonderfully haunting mood to the overall experience of the film which I enjoyed. It isn’t a sexual film, there’s an undercurrent of mystery and questioning, perhaps discovery. There’s nothing to shatter that mood and I was pleasantly surprised. According to the information with the film that music is titled “Prologue” by Loreena McKennitt.

Simply a thoughtful work that I did enjoy…



Feb 03 2017

A Review of Baited & Switched by Lacy Lane

Baited & Switched by Lacy Lane

Baited & Switched by Lacy Lane

The thing about telling a story is that time needs to be taken to actually tell the story. By that I mean the characters need to have a soul, to have a life, a need and express that. Once that’s open, then what comes next should, as well, build the character more. The balance of setting up events, then following through with the point of the story, is a necessary part of telling that story.

Rushing through the climax, tossing out the close and then rushing away isn’t the way to end a story. Spending 20 pages setting up the moment and then having the moment be a pair of pages is a real shame. There needs to be more than just a summary of things, there needs to be the story behind things.

  • Title: Baited & Switched
  • Author: Lacy Lane
  • Published By: Amazon Digital Services
  • Length: 24 Pages
  • Format: eBook
  • Publishing Date: February 3, 2017
  • This work in Kindle Format at Amazon.com

The work tell the story of:

The old bait and switch has never been more satisfying…

Noah is a software programmer and a bit of a loser who spends his days alone at his computer. When he’s not busy fantasizing about the sexy girl next door, that is. Sonya is the woman of Noah’s dreams, and he would do anything to get the chance to be with her, which is why he jumps at the chance to help her set up her new webcam. How was he to know that the time spent in her apartment would place him on a crash course to being turned into a woman…and a sexy she demon’s newest pet?

Noah desires and wishes revolve around one lovely thing in his life. His neighbour Sonya is a delight, beautiful and, regrettably, out of reach. But a favour asked leads to unexpected delights that capture Noel and draw him to Sonya. But then a succubus does know the dreams of another, whatever they may be.

The story tells, for the most part, Noah’s life, his thoughts about Sonya, and how that effects him through his days and nights. Eventually there comes a moment when he has the chance to visit her apartment, be close to her, and then the story takes an interesting turn towards Sonya’s teasing and ensnaring of Noah. This is all really well done, and it breathes life into the work that I did like. But there’s a problem.

The problem is that after all of the delicious buildup, the time spent giving life to Noah and Sonya, the climax of the work rushes by at breakneck speed. Sonya is the catalyst for Noah to be gender transformed, the reveal comes that she’s a succubus as well. But it’s so fast, there’s so little time allowed to tell Sonya’s story, to express the transformation, to give the chance for something more than some self exploration, that it sucks so much that I liked away.

While Sonya explains she is a Succubus, and there are some teases about her world, it’s so dearly fleeting that it almost doesn’t seem to matter all that much. She could well be a witch or some other being as there’s so sign of horns, or tail. It’s disappointing as the reveal, and Noah’s reaction to his change, happen in the same moment, rushing over each other on the way to drawing the story to a close.

There’s little in the way of erotica in the work, it’s mainly a few short passages with varying levels of heat brewing. Overall, it’s more about Noah’s thoughts about Sonya, his desires for her and how Sonya plays upon those needs for herself. That in itself was interesting and I hoped that given the time spent in setting things up, the climax and conclusion would have as much care taken.

The writing is amazing, I’ve read some of the author’s longer Succubus stories and I was hoping for this work to be as captivating as they were. But in the end this is a build up to a hot flash that becomes twisted up in not quite knowing where to go next and how to get there. How this work ends and how things came rushing to close the story, makes me wonder if this is the first work in a new series for the author. If so, that would explain a lot of things, but doesn’t overcome the oddities found in the last pages I’m sorry to say.

Three and a half out of five pitchforks.

There’s really very little in the way of Sonya as a Succubus, which is a shame because her effects appear throughout the story. I wish the author hadn’t rushed into the reveal of Sonya being a Succubus in the last few pages. More so, the tease about other Succubi makes me what to see more. As well the sudden gender change for Noah is jarring, almost forced in the rush to the ending.

The build up was amazing, I loved both Sonya and Noah, but teasing for the entire work and then dropping the other shoes at the end, not giving that the same time to unfold as the rest of the work was a real shame.

The author has released some amazingly good works, and I’ll be reviewing those in the next little while. When they do allow the story to breathe, the characters to develop, their writing is amazing. I just really feel like this work isn’t up to their usual abilities sadly.