Aug 28 2016

A Review of The Widowed Succubus by Brian McGee

The Widowed Succubus by Brian McGee

The Widowed Succubus by Brian McGee

The problem with short stories is that so much story is left behind untold. The details which flesh out things aren’t really there, there is no time to explain why things happened and, sometimes, how it all connects together.

Occasionally there isn’t even enough time to say if a character is what they seem to be. Questions are good to have in a story. But leaving out a revelation or two isn’t I think.

Reality is what you make of it. Unless of course your reality isn’t what you think it is. It is someone else’s domain.

  • Title: The Widowed Succubus
  • Author: Brian McGee
  • Length: 11 Pages
  • ASIN: B00K25GUYS
  • Publishing Date: April 30, 2014
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells of:

If something supernatural and strange were happening around you, would you know? Would you want to?

Aaron tells of his past, his confusion, and a woman that isn’t all she appears to be. The path to madness is covered with mistakes, infatuation, lust and more. Sometimes not all of that is one’s own doing.

The work is told from Aaron’s perspective and being so, and considering his current state of affairs, it is a bit confused, disjointed and unclear at times. There’s not a lot of detail as the story is told as if Aaron was speaking to the reader of what happened to him. As a device to tell the story that works for the most part but there are some issues.

Aaron’s story reads very much like a summary of what has happened. There’s little detail to be found as much of his thoughts are about another character and his thoughts about her. There is very little dialogue to speak of, and as such the other characters in the work really never have a voice of their own to share. Everything comes from Aaron himself and as such there’s no real character development. Aaron’s path is complete from the beginning and so there’s nothing to carry him emotionally. Everything is told very matter of factly, leaving all else to the wayside.

The character that Aaron is focused on, Andrea, could possibly be a succubus, but that never really comes out in the story. There are some suggestions that she is, but really to claim she is a succubus is a difficult thing to do, even with the work’s title.

The story is tragic in many ways, both in action and tone. The events are told in such an emotionless way that one cannot be really sure about what happens, save for why Aaron is where he is. All else is conjecture really and interpretation of what he thought, felt, and reacted to otherwise.

I really didn’t enjoy the work very much because of the crushing sadness, loss, and mourning that was always lurking in each paragraph. This isn’t a work of erotica, it’s more a tragic story of one person trying to explain the unexplainable.

Two out of five pitchforks.

A difficult read in a lot of ways, one that could have been fleshed out more, told more about the other characters somehow.

 

Tera

Aug 27 2016

A very quick Morrigan Aensland YouTube sketch

A very quick YouTube today of an artist drawing Morrigan Aensland in their sketchbook. It really is a cute piece of art most of all…

 

If you can’t see this video here on the Tale, please try this link:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-KQZsH__BMA

And, as always, in case YouTube makes the video vanish, here is an image of the completed artwork…

Morrigan by Chany Kim

This is just the most adorable little sketch of Morrigan… I especially love her smile here and the little bits of detail and artistic touches the artist has added in her tights and hair.

A fun and cute image of Morrigan is something I do love and this does that quite well…

 

Tera

Aug 26 2016

A Review of Succubus Cheat Sheet by Samantha Nona

Succubus Cheat Sheet by Samantha Nona

Succubus Cheat Sheet by Samantha Nona

One of the story ideas that I have been mulling is the thought of a succubus with pink hair and horns that is… well… a bit of a bimbo overall. I think there’s a really interesting story to tell in that, it could be a lot of fun. An author released a story recently in which the main succubus character is, as a whole, perhaps not a total bimbo, but she is quite unique and more importantly, she isn’t a stereotypical evil succubus. That interested me.

Not all succubi are perfect. Not all succubi know the right spell, the right thing to say. Learning to be the best succubi one can be is a story about who each of them are. Some aren’t evil, they don’t particularly like being so. Sometimes the most powerful of the succubi are the ones that realize there’s more to their lives than being evil. There’s being smart in their own way… Even if that comes with a few missteps along the way.

  • Title: Succubus Cheat Sheet
  • Author: Samantha Nona
  • Length: 36 Pages
  • ASIN: B01KYHLWWI
  • Publishing Date: August 23, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

Reina is at the end of her rope as her roommate Karen won’t stop arguing with her boyfriend. She prays for anything that might help the couple make up, but she certainly never would have expected a pink-haired succubus to be the answer.

Discordelia is a succubus in training, and her test is to help Karen and her boyfriend embrace their hidden fetishes and enrich their sex lives. Only the spells are a little too hard for the ditzy succubus to remember, but she managed to write the erotic spells down onto a cheat sheet. Surely everything would turn out like she expected. Right?

Discordelia, better known as Dizzy to all of the succubi around her, has a problem. She’s not quite like the other succubi in a lot of ways, not the least of which is that she’s somewhat of a bimbo overall. Still, pink haired and all, Dizzy needs to pass a test and she knows she won’t be able to without some help. The test is harder than she expected and she’s going to need that help. But a cheat sheet might not be enough to get Dizzy out of the fix she’s in.

The story is summarized to be about Dizzy, but really there’s quite some time at the beginning of the story before Dizzy makes an appearance. The character that draws readers into the story has her own wants and needs, one of them being a rather strong mind control fetish which actually made me smile in how that was played into the overall story. This character pokes into the story at times in a voyeuristic manner which, at least for me, runs hot and cold. She’s on the edges of the story, acts as a catalyst for Dizzy’s appearance, but doesn’t really become part of the story, occasionally she’s a distraction, getting in the way of the storytelling.

Dizzy herself isn’t at all a stereotypical succubus and I enjoyed her personality, her thoughts and her struggles to deal with her flaws and those she encounters around her. Not every succubus is evil, not every succubus needs to be. Dizzy isn’t not by any means, really evil. She’s a bit clumsy, a little unsure and yes, she’s still using training wheels as a succubus, but there’s an adorable aspect to her that I liked in the story.

The thing is, overall, the story is less about Dizzy herself than it is about what Dizzy’s actions do. Dizzy tries to pass her test, we see her thoughts, her worries and at times panicking, but I didn’t feel like there was a lot of character development in her. She hasn’t changed much by the end of the work and I found that disappointing. I wanted to see her have some more belief in herself, to perhaps see something better for her future. But again the story didn’t really hold onto the focus it had on her, drifting to the couple that Dizzy is confronted with for her test.

There’s some moments of heat in that, the aspects of mind control in the work are well told, there’s a bit of a change in the couple, which worked well as it developed their characters and relationships overall. The heat in in the mind control and fantasy being played out between them, and that by itself works as a story on its own. But it doesn’t really push Dizzy’s story other than to tell of her test, how it goes and her grading as it unfolds.

There are quite a number of succubi other than Dizzy herself and in many ways they are somewhat stereotypical in how they act. I accept that Dizzy is looked down on, I understand that she’s not seen as being much of a succubi to those that are “better” than her. But they aren’t not really, and it takes some time before the reasons for that comes out. It’s actually rather sad in what that reason is and how someone that means so much to Dizzy doesn’t think that much of her, especially her hair.

There’s s bit of mind control used on Dizzy at one point and it didn’t quite work for me. The attitude of the succubus that toyed with Dizzy struck me as being counter to what she did for Dizzy. I think there’s a larger story in that, but it doesn’t develop. In the same way, the succubus teacher that administers Dizzy’s test reads odd. There’s a lot unspoken again about her and Dizzy and it’s a story left aside for the sake of what happens in the test for Dizzy and the humans she encounters.

This then brings me to the title of this work. The cheat sheet is at the core of the story, it leads Dizzy on her adventure and takes all of those around her upon it as well. It’s an interesting idea, one that I think worked well. However, the ending of the work left me a little cold. The comment made by the character which begins the story at the end made me wince a bit. It might work, it might make the character’s dreams come true. Should the author continue this work into a series about this, I really hope it won’t be as easy as the character thinks it will.

Overall I loved Dizzy as a succubus, I thought the mind control aspects were very hot and were told well. I was a bit disappointed in the slightly stereotypical aspects of the minor succubi characters, a bit sad that not more was told about Dizzy’s past, her family, and those around her. But this wasn’t the point of the work, it was really to use some succubus mind control on some unsuspecting humans and see what happens. The story is very good on that aspect, but I think it could have been more.

Four out of five pitchforks.

I really would like to know more about Dizzy, her mother, and her world. I like the idea of a pink haired succubus who isn’t stereotypically evil. I like the idea of her being a little bimboish in nature and stumbling along the way. Where I have a little problem is how the author tries to mix in what can only be described as an “interested observer” for the sake of the ending. I don’t think that needed to happen, I don’t believe that the ending really leads into what that character hopes for.

If there is a follow on to this story, I’d dearly like to see Dizzy become what all those around her think she cannot. I’d like her to be, in many ways, like the Succubi of the Realm. I think she is on the path, she just needs to be herself.

Perhaps that’s the story to be told?

 

Tera

Aug 26 2016

A Review of Seductive Wasteland by Luke Huntley

Seductive Wasteland by Luke Huntley

Seductive Wasteland by Luke Huntley

A story that does’t really contain a narrative of some sort, is lacking something. Erotica alone isn’t enough. A sequence of battles with no meaning isn’t enough. Having two characters entwined, dependant on each other, and not explaining how this happened is missing out on a lot of story. Just saying they love each other doesn’t explain why there are where they are.

Perhaps amongst all of the sex and battles, there needs to be a moment where something more comes than the surviving. There comes the living.

The work tells the story of:

A succubus warrior and her human lover work together to stay alive in the wastelands of a barbaric world. Will they find pleasure in each others arms in such a hellish land, or will the demonic creatures that roam the earth keep them apart.

The world around them is dark and evil. While they have each other, they also have the attention of those that want what they have. Defending themselves comes at a cost, but the rewards are well worth the trials they both must face.

This work is missing something, and that comes to an actual story. There’s really no explanation as to why Rydia, the succubus of the work, and Nimbus, her lover, are in the land they are in, why it is they are attacked so often, and how it became to pass they are now lovers. There’s a lot of detail about the why of things that simply isn’t told here and that means there are so many questions from the beginning that I found it difficult to follow the story as it went.

The work is a series of battles for each character with a few moments of passion for them before that is shattered and they must battle once more. There’s really no exposition about the characters, no reasons as to why those around them attach so often. More, there’s nothing told as to why, exactly, they are travelling through the lands in the first place, what their destination is or anything else.

Rydia, the succubus of the work, isn’t a stereotypical succubus, she loves, she cares and more interestingly, she gives life to her lover. She is also a warrior, quite a good one really, but why she is one never is told. More so, while some of her personality is understood from the story, really there’s no little dialogue, internal or otherwise, that her thoughts, like Nimbus, are just not explored.

Besides the lack of a story per se, the author mixes the words ‘succubus’ and ‘succubae’ throughout the work when speaking of Rydia. It needs to be one or the other, not a mixing up of the two, sometimes within the same paragraph. The battles are well described, the erotica is not really so much hot as it tries to be romantic, to tell of the lovers being in love, which sort of works, but needed to be more.

Beyond an editing, the work needs more plot, more story, more telling of why. As it reads now there is a distinct feeling that these are scraps of scenes taken from an unfinished work, connected together loosely and published. I wish the larger story was here. Sadly, it isn’t.

One and a half out of five pitchforks.

It is less a story than a loosely interconnected series of erotic scenes again moments of battle. There’s no plot to be found, the work feels like there should be, but it never appears. The author really should tell the rest of the story, the story that is suggested but doesn’t come to life as things are.

 

Tera

Aug 25 2016

Succubi Image of the Week 449

For this week’s image of a Succubus, I found something that feels very much like a portrait in a way. It is a focused work, drawing out the personality of the character, and in doing so there’s something about this art that brings all of that so strongly that, for me, it’s quite unashamedly so…

Succubus by Liehl

Succubus by Liehl

This work is called Succubus and is by an artist on DeviantArt called Liehl. You can find the original page with this art here and this artist’s page can be found here.

The work does feel very much like a portrait in how the character is posed, the expression she has, the jewelry and clothing too. There’s a certain formality here, as if she is some sort of Succubi Nobility somehow and I rather like that idea.

A wonderful expression, I think her horns and hair work together perfectly. The other thing that is interesting comes to how the work is generally in shares of grey, black and white, with but only the brooch she wears to be the single colour to be seen. In being so, that becomes the focal point of the art and that’s a neat decision by this artist to create.

Wonderful eyes, so very expressive too and they have the most interesting sheen and depth to them. Her smile is also just amazing in how it seems to be held in the moment of saying something, but not quite expressing the words themselves…

One of my favourite works of the year…

 

Tera

Aug 24 2016

Kind of a bland Devil Costume really…

Red Sequin Devil CostumeI wonder if there are moments when costume designers just toss things together and call it a day. Or, in this case, They really don’t use any imagination, slap a “devil” note on the concept and move on.

This is called the Red Sequin Devil Costume and it comes with the dress, what seems to be sort of, in a way, horns and that’s all. Shoes are not included and it sells for $45 US.

This is… bland. Really there’s no other way I can describe this. There’s nothing really seductive or sexy about it, it barely qualifies as any sort of devil costume as well.

I think the collar is far too over the top and makes this look like a cross between an ‘almost’ vampire and a ‘sort-of’ devil. It looks rather trashy, if not really cheap, and that just makes me like this even less.

There is really nothing positive in this costume, nothing to make it better, and as a whole there are a lot of other costumes I have found that are much better than this is.

I’ll give this one pitchfork out of five.

A mistake, in a lot of ways, and more so in just how ugly and cheap this looks…

 

Tera

Aug 23 2016

A Review of Drawn to Flame: A Dark Seduction by Bryan Stephens

Drawn to Flame: A Dark Seduction by Bryan Stephens

Drawn to Flame: A Dark Seduction by Bryan Stephens

A somewhat unexpected work for review today on the Tale. From the book summary I expected something far less than what appeared in the pages of this work. Perhaps that is the thing about writing a summary, if is very difficult to tell something about a story without revealing everything about it.

History matters to those that have lived long enough to know it, watch it pass by, and then have to remember all that has been before and will be again. Not even the fairest face can completely hide the deepest darkness after all. In the moment of perceived passions, memories intrude to remind of what one has done.

  • Title: Drawn to Flame: A Dark Seduction
  • Author: Bryan Stephens
  • Length: 11 Pages
  • ASIN: B01BULD6Z8
  • Publishing Date: February 15, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

A business trip…an overnight stay…a stunning redhead in a bar, waiting for someone to buy her a drink and get to know her. What could possibly go wrong?

Petyr is about to find out, though, that when you thrown caution to the wind, sometimes there is hell to pay.

The night is young, but the woman in the bar that Petyr meets isn’t what she appears to be. Severin is temptation, a promise of something unforgettable. But what lurks beneath the temptation is a heart of darkness that has seen all that humanity has been, even if she isn’t human herself.

The story is told from the perspective of Severin, the main character, and in being so there is a lot of thought about her past, what happens around her and what she thinks of it all. At times she is very unemotional, almost to a point and really only in the climax of the work does she show something of a real emotion before that passes and she is as cold as stone once more.

The work isn’t clear on whether Severin is a succubus or not, but the reveal of her powers, and what she does to her prey, seems to say she is one. That said, she has an air about her of existing for far too long, being bored for the most part, and only continuing because her hunger pushes her onwards.

As the work unfolds, Severin remembers some of her conquest from her past and in doing so there’s an interesting passage through history which makes sense for where she would appears and why. This is the part of the work that held my interest because it told of Severin herself, at least as much as might be learned of her. Things are skimmed over, much of the time, and for her personally there’s really nothing told and I think there should have been.

There is very little erotica in this work, and when it does appear it is interlaced with Severin’s thoughts and considerations along the way. The erotica is lukewarm at best, but then it isn’t the core of this work, so being so really doesn’t detract from things very much.

Being set in what seems to be Germany, there are some references made in German, which gave some flavour that I liked. There wasn’t any real editing problems save for how at times the story read very dryly, even in the erotica. But the chance to tell more of Severin’s past, to expand on her flashes of commentary of that past was not used and that left me wanting, Severin is an interesting succubus and learning more about her, considering how this work was written, would have been nice to see.

Three and a half out of five pitchforks.

As interesting as the story is, the opportunity to tell something of Severin’s past, at least more than in passing, is lost and as such there is a gap in the work. So many questions left unanswered, so much to be told and never was. In this work story matters, and it wasn’t fully realized.

 

Tera

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