Oct 23 2016

A Review of The Coed’s First Futa by Jocelyn Saragona

The Coed's First Futa by Jocelyn Saragona

The Coed’s First Futa by Jocelyn Saragona

A review of the second work in the Succubus in the Sorority series this time on the Tale. The series has, as one of the characters, a futa succubus named Sharis. You can find my review of the first work in the series here.

In the prior review, I noted that the author needed to edit this work more, which they have in this, the second work in the series. I hoped they would improve on their dialogue, which they did as well. But I also wanted to have Sharis grow as a character, telling moe about her, taking her from being a means for sex into something more substantial of a character.

Two out of three is a good thing really.


  • Title: The Coed’s First Futa
  • Author: Jocelyn Saragona
  • Published By: Amazon Digital Services
  • Length: 38 Pages
  • Format: eBook
  • ASIN: B01M05Y9LM
  • Publishing Date: October 15, 2016
  • This work in Kindle Format at Amazon.com

It is the story of:

Meghan is one tough, kick-boxing coed conflicted about her sexual temptations. Her purity ring tells her one thing. Her make outs with a hot guy tell her another. Only vigorous work outs keep her sexual cravings in check. That backfires when Meghan catches her exhibitionist sorority friend having sex with a futa. After that unbelievably steamy encounter, Meghan’s unexpected bisexual desires won’t go away. She finds the sexiest Halloween costume ever -if only it will make her brave enough for her first time.

Meghan’s life is complicated. Promises made, thoughts of need within her enflaming her passions. Her friends seem to understand, but when Meghan discovers that her friend Sharis isn’t quite what she seems, things change for her and her options open. But along the way, there are always bumps in the road to overcome.

While Sharis, the main succubus character of the series does appear, the work isn’t about her, or really connects to the prior work in any really meaningful way. It’s like all that happened before, including the appearance of Jacquette, a very dominant succubus, never happened. There’s little told of Sharis being a succubus, she’s never described as such either. Without being aware of the prior work, it isn’t clear that Sharis is a succubus in the first place.

That said, her character does develop a little bit, though some of the events are a little thin, not delved into or explained well. In the same way, the little bit of erotica that Sharis appears in really doesn’t have a lot of heat, seems to be added for the sake of doing so and doesn’t amount to much. This makes sense from the point that this work is about Meghan, and it’s understandable, but that’s the problem here.

The prior work ended in a way that I really wanted to see move onwards, to expand the universe, to tell more about the succubi that live in that world. Both Sharis and Jacquette had a lot of promise. Why that plot thread was tossed aside for a story which, overall, didn’t have much of a connection to the first work in the series bothered me.

However, as erotica with meaning, with a little bit of romance and a lot of story wrapped around Meghan’s coming of age, her choices, and the events that come from that, the work reads well, held my interest and I liked it overall.

But as a work about succubi, this isn’t one. Tangentially perhaps, but otherwise no. Meghan’s story is told, but the story of Sharis languishes in sort of a limbo, she being really barely used in the work and when she does appear, it’s so fleeting as to be almost invisible. Not even the one erotic scene she’s in can overcome that.

Two and a half out of five pitchforks.

This isn’t a story about Sharis, or about succubi really. It’s a coming of age story for Meghan overall. For that, the work is really well written and I liked the character development that came as well. I still want to see more of Sharis, developing her character more. It seems like Sharis is being worked into the background, not the focus of the series, but instead a means for some futa sex to be told. The little glimmers of her character I liked and, perhaps, the next work will give more of that.



Oct 23 2016

A Review of Broken Wings by Rebecca R. Pierce

Broken Wings by Rebecca R. Pierce

Broken Wings by Rebecca R. Pierce

There comes a point when we all look into who we are, where we’re been, and what has happened to us. Many times in doing so we lose a part of ourselves in the exploration. At the same time, if one is inclined to doing so, a soul can find their own truth, what matters to them and puts themselves on the path to something better.

Sometimes a change can do you good. Sometimes that change comes in more ways than we imagine. The risk is there of course. The challenge is taking that risk and seeing where it leads you.

  • Title: Broken Wings
  • Author: Rebecca R. Pierce
  • Length: 45 Pages
  • Publishing Date: April 6, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

It tells the story of:

When Valerie Tempest gets dumped by her live-in fiance, she panics, and suddenly needs to be “anywhere but here.” That impulsive “anywhere” finds her on the next flight to Istanbul, far away from any family, friends, or colleagues. A foreign land, a wrong turn, and an impulse buy of an ancient relic puts her face to face with a sexy genie named Kahlil. Is he everything she could wish for, or should she travel on?

Valerie finds herself far from home, thinking about her life, what’s happened, and where she goes from here. Alone, seeking herself amongst the ebb and flow of where she finds herself, things change. A connection is made, a life begins anew, and along the way, Valerie discovers that what she thought was her life was only the prelude to something far better.

The central focus of this story is that of Valerie’s character development most of all. While Kahlil has much to do with that, guiding her, offering her things to think about, and pleasures which Valerie’s ex didn’t seem to care about, the entire work revolves around Valerie’s own need to find herself, decide what she wants to do, and then make the decision to be herself and not what others want her to be.

The progression of Valerie from accepting how things are, just going along with things, to the more fully realized, mature, and most importantly, self-assured woman she becomes isn’t something that makes no sense. The seed of who she becomes is there from the beginning, it takes Valerie making a choice, holding to that, which turns the story forwards.

When Kahlil appears, the interesting thing about him is how he sees himself, what his reality is, and why. There’s a moment in telling his story which, for me, spoke to a certain view that I have about succubi and incubi and at that moment the author fully had me involved. Kahlil isn’t stereotypical, isn’t what one might expect him to be. But that’s clear from the moment he appears and he never betrays himself and his own truths.

The way both main characters are drawn together is told in a way that doesn’t rush headlong into over the top erotica. There is time spent for them to meet, touch, feel each other’s pain and needs in equal measure. That building up of their connection, the passions which come to the fore, is what needed to be told carefully and it is here. When the story turns to being erotic, it simmers at a low boil, a creeping desire that I thoroughly enjoyed. There isn’t a moment when the entwining of Kahlil and Valerie feels wrong, or out of place. There’s a connection which isn’t a fleeting one, it lasts and it makes the work so much better.

The conclusion is emotional, pushing Valerie into a place where her own truths, and that of Kahlil, create something that worked perfectly for them both, closed the circle of the story well, and I dearly loved the ending for how it contrasted with where the story came from.

The only thing I wished for, was to see the “after” when the story ended. The last words, the last moments, offered a direction for the story to take, even if fleetingly so, and I wanted to see part of that. To see Valerie as she became, what that first moment would be like, the possibility of meeting a certain character mentioned in passing by Kahlil would have I think added something that I think was missing at the end. Valerie wanted to find her equal, her soulmate, her life. The story ends just as that begins. It would have been so lovely to see Valerie be who she was meant to be for so long.

Simply one of my favourite incubi books of 2016. The story is deep, strong and complex, the characters are real, with their souls bared and needs open to be seen. A scene of love, compassion and understanding throughout the story leads to a moment unexpected and an ending that was perfect in so many ways. My only wish is that the moments after the final words were told to complete the circle for Valerie.

Four and a half out of five pitchforks.

I simply adored the story, the characters and more. A very unique and captivating view of the myth of succubi and incubi, of who they are and what their purpose is. Finding oneself is always a promising story idea. Finding oneself and then becoming who you really are is the better story. Here the author created something wondrous, something with heart and soul.

Those are, always, the best stories of all…



Oct 22 2016

A YouTube of the Queen of Pain in Dota 2

I’m sure there are a lot of gamers that know Dota2, have played it and so on. It’s a game that I really know nothing about, save for what I have read on Wikipedia and so on. I found a view of the Queen of Pain, a succubus, who can be played.

If you can’t see the video here on the Tale, try this link:


Here’s an image of the Queen of Pain, in the character setup screen as well, and I think she’s interesting…

Dota2 Queen of Pain

Certainly a unique look for this succubus character, I’ve mentioned before there aren’t a lot of blue skinned succubi to be found. Her wings are rather unique, but she needs a tail in all honesty I think.

Just something a little bit different to share, even if she can’t be played as succubi should be…



Oct 21 2016

A Review of Impaled by the Incubus: A Sexual Demon by J. D. Braxton

Impaled by the Incubus: A Sexual Demon by J. D. Braxton

Impaled by the Incubus: A Sexual Demon by J. D. Braxton

The thing about writing very short stories is that there are opportunities missed. The semblance of a plot gets left to the side, characters that need to be explored become afterthoughts. Most of all, and this is the largest issue. compression of detail becomes the need to summarize. For story, never mind erotica, this never works well.

The transformation of a character from who they were to something they never were to be, offers the possibility of adding layers to a story. To bring about conflict, passions, needs and, most of all, the desires to be fulfilled. Handwaving and summarization does not do justice to what could be the better story by far.

It tells the story of:

Heidi McCormick wanted nothing more than just to be a normal happily married housewife. It was all put in jeopardy when an Incubus Vampire Hybrid takes possession of Heidi. Lucky for Heidi she comes from a family of powerful witches.

Heidi wishes for something more, out of her own sense of her life spiralling away from her. Answered by an incubus, who offers something she desires, her life transforms and she is called to him. But there are those that want the Heidi they love returned and that battle will come to pass for them all.

The thing about this work is that it reads, very much, like a summary of a larger story. That’s to say there’s not a lot of time spent in character development, little in the way of a cohesive plot. There’s no understanding about who the incubus character is, they aren’t even given a name. Actually, from the perspective of this being a story about having incubi appear, they really don’t do much for the majority of the story.

When they do appear, it is a fleeting moment that reads as being very disjointed and hard to follow at times. The erotica, such as it is, has little to no heat in it for me, the incubi themselves are barely characters overall. There’s more time spent in telling about what are minor characters in the story than there is for Heidi, or for that matter her husband and family. This is a shame because there should have been more time spent in telling about Heidi’s life, telling about those that live around her. The scattered explanation about the incubi leaves so much that could be told, but isn’t as well.

Then, beyond all of that, comes Heidi’s transformation. It happens so quickly, the moment passed with little bits of change that are skimmed over. These are important things, they could have happened over time, or there could have been more of a reality shift that what actually happened. The “new” Heidi was an opportunity which the author didn’t do anything with. I could see, and really it’s so very obvious, that Heidi’s new self could have been, and really should have been, a succubus. But that didn’t come. What did left a enthralled soul and not a character behind. It sucked, quite literally, the life out of the story and the possibly for something better to be told.

The chase after Heidi, which brings in additional characters, is a series of short little moments, disjointed and not really connected or telling about what happens other than in passing. That again is a missed opportunity for expanding on the story. The seduction isn’t, the moment is fleeting and when the climax comes it falls flat for how rote and insignificant it reads.

The work really needs to be expanded on. I could see ten moments that could have been pages upon pages of exposition, character development and more. But none of that was used and it needed to be. Summarizing erotic scenes doesn’t work. Skimming over events doesn’t help in understand the story. Most of all, the telling of redemption, of fighting for someone, can’t be revealed in two sentences and a footnote scene. This could have been so much more, I expected that, but it didn’t happen. That’s the real shame here.

One pitchfork out of five.

The opportunity to use Heidi’s transformation further in the work than what was is the single most disappointing point of all. There was a clear path to take, but the author didn’t touch it, or try to explore it. Instead the just used the new Heidi as a means to get to the next scene, to pull the other characters along. Passing over plot, character development, even story for what amounts to a series of moments of teasing doesn’t make for a good story.

Taking what amounts to an outline, expanding on it, making this the story that is needs to be, would be. That, most of all, would interest me just for the sake of Heidi being more than the sexy threat she became. A lot more.



Oct 21 2016

A Review of Consuming His Passion by Quinn Dixon

Consuming His Passion by Quinn Dixon

Consuming His Passion by Quinn Dixon

The thing about creating succubus characters is that they can’t be simply “evil” or “have a need” alone. To say that they appear in a story for a singular purpose is one thing, but then to offer some other story ideas and not allow them to play out is a little disappointing.

Sometimes in the telling of a story, the characters become thin, almost transparent to the reader. It’s more of a problem when there isn’t a connection with them, and that’s more the shame when the erotica comes into play. Heat without passion isn’t really all that desirable… No matter how skilled of a succubus the main character is.

  • Title: Consuming His Passion
  • Author: Quinn Dixon
  • Length: 45 Pages
  • Publishing Date: April 9, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

It tells the story of:

Angelica is intent on finding this year’s victim to gain her power and live another year as a gorgeous 25-year-old. But this year she is having a hard time finding the right man – until Joseph shows up.

Rude and overly confident, he fits the bill. But will he leave the room alive once the succubus is done with him?

Angelica is on her annual hunt to find someone to give her the thing she needs. But she is particular about whom she takes and Joseph ticks all of the boxes in the worst way possible. A sip turns into something more when he awakens her dark side and what comes next is more than Joseph expected things to be.

The work is told from Angelica’s perspective and it’s a rather odd one overall. She’s very clinical in her thinking, there’s little or no passion, no emotion. She simply is looking for a victim to draw into her power and then take a portion of their live to continue her own. Angelica seems to be not quite a stereotypical succubus in that she has certain rules that she feeds by and i have to admit that those rules I thought offered an interesting view into who she is.

The problem is that all of the hints, the thoughts about her past, the moments of decision, really aren’t explored very much. While the work is said to be 45 pages in length, there is a bonus story, which means Angelica’s story is slightly over 25 pages. Thus the work is more of a hot flash with some introduction, some set up for the erotica, and then the majority of the work is Angelica having her way with Joseph before his personality grates against Angelica’s own and then the work takes a turn for the darker.

There’s some succubus mind control and manipulation which was quite good, but beyond that the actual erotica didn’t have much heat in it for me. I didn’t like Angelica nor Joseph from the beginning of the work and that makes it very difficult to care about either of them, or see the heat simmering as the story is told. There’s a distinct lack of emotional connection overall and it’s the single flaw in this work.

Being privy to Angelica’s thoughts, it’s odd to see her thinking about things outside of what she is doing with Joseph. It seems very much like she’s done this so many times that she is acting by rote, almost bored. Even when Angelica is pleasuring herself and Joseph, there’s not any emotional heat in her words. It takes Joseph being very unkind for Angelica to find her emotions, to push herself into a different state of being in the moment.

At that point, the story became hotter, but at the same time, what Angelica’s attentions do to Joseph are odd. There’s a kind of reality disconnect around Joseph, which is odd, and when the story comes to a close, the ending left me wanting for how dispassionate Angelica returned to being and her last thoughts about what had happened.

I just found Angelica simply dislikable from the first to the last, the heat in the work wasn’t what I had expected it to be either. There’s some real difficulty to finding heat when both main characters simply do not make a connection with the reader. I wish the author hadn’t taken the story in the direction they did, being rather a stereotypical direction for Angelica as a succubus to take.

Three out of five pitchforks.

I found myself thinking of a better story, actually two of them. What would Angelica’s reaction be to taking from someone good, which she avoids, or more interestingly, what if she took from someone that thought they were “evil” but weren’t? What happens then? That’s the story that I wonder about for who Angelica seems to be. This story had its moments, but didn’t find its footing in my eyes.



Oct 20 2016

Succubi Image of the Week 457

There hasn’t been a cheerleader Succubus as the Succubi of the Week for some time… I think that needs to be corrected with a cute image of one…

Cheerleading Succubus by Dino-master

Cheerleading Succubus by Dino-master

This art is called Cheerleading Succubus and is by the artist Dino-master on DeviantArt. You can find the original page on DeviantArt where I found this work here and this artist’s page can be found here.

This is simply fun. Just so much cuteness, playfulness and joy about her. The only thing I wish she had was a tail and horns instead of her headwings, but she is an anime Succubus and they are a bit more popular, mainly because of Morrigan. Nonetheless, her entire look just works in the best possible way.

I like the idea of Succubi Cheerleaders, not just for the really fun and silly stories that can be told, but there’s just something about the concept, how to make that work that appeals to me at the moment…

Must ponder I think…



Oct 19 2016

Once more they say Delight, but I’m not so sure

Devilish Delight CostumeThere are so many devil costumes that claim to be a “delight.” Really that is in the eye of the beholder, or the one that wears the costume. Still, the designers do have to give the costume a name, and it is as good as any other one really. However, when the “delight” isn’t so much in the costume as one of the accessories… That can be a problem…

This is the Devilish Delight Costume and it comes with the dress, but not the tutu which otherwise would seem to be part of it. The horns and the gloves the model is wearing are included, but not the stockings or the shoes. It sells for $45 US.

So, the thing that bothers me about this is that the entire image here is a bit of a mirage. Really the costume isn’t complete without some accessories and adding them brings the cost of this to about $140 US. Which is simply too much.

There are so many other costumes that are as expensive, are more complete, and actually stand out compared to this.

However, I will admit to rather liking the stockings, and recalling a story I wrote here on the Tale called “Knee Socks” and giggling a bit over them.

I don’t really care for the horns, the costume itself is rather plain. As such, as it is the stockings, and for that matter, the shoes, that attract me the most, I can’t say that I would really think about this costume as an option for Halloween…

Too much ballerina for me I think.

One and a half pitchforks out of five.

There’s better. Really there is.