Jul 07 2013

A Review of Night Machines by Kia Heavey

Night Machines by Kia Heavey

Night Machines by Kia Heavey

Something that I have thoughts about is mixing the supernatural world and the scientific one. If that can be done well, that would be interesting to read. It can be, and should be I think. I found a work that has an Incubus appear in it and I had hopes for it, but honestly I don’t think it came together as I thought it might.

  • Title: Night Machines
  • Author: Kia Heavey
  • Publishing Date: May 16, 2011
  • Length: 306 Pages
  • ASIN: B0051BTWD4
  • ISBN-13: 978-0615487090
  • This work at Amazon.com

The story tells of:

Maggie decided to have an affair. No one needed to know. Not even her lover.

Who would it hurt, if Maggie decided to carry on a torrid affair in her mind? It would soothe her feelings, hurt by her husband’s emotional abandonment while he worked on a disturbing new murder case. It would provide an outlet for the dizzying desire she felt for her employer. It would make her feel loved and appreciated and better able to be a good wife and mother. After all, it’s not really cheating if it’s only a fantasy. Right?

But Maggie loses control of the fantasy as lust becomes love, and things she believed confined to her own imagination are somehow known to her spectral lover. A harmless mind game spins out of control and threatens the sanctity of Maggie’s greatest treasure – her family.

I really had problems reading this work for a few different reasons. I think the main one was that I never really felt any connection to Maggie or her family, her situation, or for that matter anyone else in the story.

There were one or two moments in the story that were interesting and made me think about things, but otherwise this was more a mental game than anything else and even when the Incubus is revealed, it is unsatisfying to me.

I won’t spoil the story, who the Incubus is, or anything similar, but I have a few thoughts otherwise. The main one is that there is a lot of characters that spend most of their time monologuing internally. That bothered me because it went on for pages and pages, then short scene, and then more monologuing. I know that the forces behind the characters need to be explained. but sometimes actions really are more and I think in the case of this work that’s very true.

I also want to say that having one of your characters named in such a way that it is blatantly obvious that they are the Incubus of the story from the first moment we see them kind of removes a lot of mystery from the story as well.

It’s also a little disappointing when the Incubus of the story… isn’t. It’s one thing to be “evil” and another to do evil. While he does evil things, it is impossible for him to bring himself to see the evil that he does for his overwhelming desires. What is more striking is that when the truths are revealed about him… it’s too fast. The climax of the story and its resolution are much too fast and too pat for my liking.

I think I would have been happier if there was more thought given to that and the aftermath than what we are given here. While the story’s loose ends are tied up and everything is neatly put away, it feels wrong by the time that happens.

I think that my main difficulty in all of this is that, really, none of the characters held my attention. There was so much to dislike in all of them that I couldn’t invest myself in the story. Perhaps tightening up the story some would have helped, or reducing the internal dialog might have as well. Either way it was hard to read and I was pulled out of the story a lot which bothered me as well.

Two and a half out of five pitchforks.

Really didn’t do much for me, mostly because I just couldn’t bring myself to care about anyone in the story.



Jul 06 2013

Another Succubus WIP YouTube

I found a really lovely bit of Succubus art the other day and as it is a YouTube, I’ll be sharing that today on the Tale.

And if you cannot see the video here on the Tale:


And, of course, an image of the completed art:

Succubus by Lipsy Maddy

This is called Succubus and is by someone that calls themselves Lipsy Maddy on YouTube… They say, at least in their comments, that they can’t draw…

Well. I think they do and the cuteness is really lovely too.

I wonder what her name is… I have a really vague idea for a story and I’ll really have to make an effort to get it down somehow…

I do hope that they continue their art… I see a lot of promise so far…

You can find their YouTube page here, they have a few other pieces of art there too!



Jul 05 2013

A Review of Showertime Succubus by Ryl Zero

Showertime Succubus by Ryl Zero

Showertime Succubus by Ryl Zero

I don’t really enjoy stories that are more horror than erotic in nature. It’s a fine line to walk and many writers can’t quite manage to make that work in the best of ways I have found.

If they can manage that, then the question turns to one of the story, where it goes, and if it makes some kind of sense. If however there are more questions left behind at the end of the story, then I’m not quite so sure about that being good for the story overall.

It gets more difficult when a theme, like Succubi, is mixed with others such as futa porn… Once in a while that works and I can accept all of the story… But then, it can’t be something really short as well… That starts to bother me some…

The story tells of:

A succubus deals out some carnal karmic justice on a rapist. Erin arranges to be alone with a coach not known for being a gentleman in order to deal out some carnal karmic justice, and have a little fun into the bargain.

Erin is waiting for someone to arrive in the shower with her so that she can make him pay for what he’s been doing… And being that Erin is a Succubus, she can make sure that happens… permanently.

Erin interests me. She’s much more mature than she seems to be in the story. But as much as that is obvious and as much as it should be part of the story, it really isn’t. The core of the story is her revenge on him and then the aftermath of it.

That’s not poorly done by any means. The writing is very good, the characters, Erin in particular are well done, her attitude and control of the situation is very Succubus like. The problem is that, to me at least, it’s shadows and mirrors of what and who she is. We really never see the real Erin for the mirages around her. Oh there is a glimpse when her eye turn completely black, but otherwise we have no real idea of the real her.

Perhaps that’s the point if you think about it. A Succubus is, after all, supposed to be what the others around her want her to be… But then the question is, what is Stacy’s relationship with Erin here? Stacy is obviously human, but also knows what Erin is so… Who is she? We never really know by the time the story ends.

There is a transformation of Erin because of what she does, and that in itself is interesting. But what that means is only touched on for the erotic scene that follows it. Perhaps that is the one problem with this story… Lots of tease, lots of heat, but the ending… Not too satisfying to me at least… Heat without meaning isn’t quite enough.

There are too many questions left at the end of the story and I would have liked it to be longer and tell more about Erin and Stacy… Where they met, why Stacy knows all about Erin… Things like that are left unsaid and I would have liked to know.

I’ll give this work three pitchforks out of five.

Interesting but short, a little on the squick side for me personally, but I am glad that the majority of the horror is off the page… But still… Would like to know more about Erin… She’s more than she seems to be and we only get a tease of that…



Jul 04 2013

Succubi Image of the Week 287

A slightly different image of a Succubus this week on the Tale. I say that because rather than being a Succubus, she is a descendant of one, or at least that’s how she’s described… But she is, really, wonderfully lovely…

Mira by Cyzra

Mira by Cyzra

This work is called Mira and is by an artist named Cyzra. You can click on the image for a larger version and you can find the original page on DeviantArt with this art here. Cyzra’s artist page can be found here as well, and there are many lovely works of art there to find. I also would like to direct you to this artist’s website as well here, where the art is just stunning…

Mira is described as being a tiefling Succubi descendant, her full name being Miranda Kaijitsu and she is also known as Mira Shadowblood. I tried to find more about here but I cannot seem to find anything more about her. Should someone have a link to a book or something else that she appears in, or is written about, could you please leave a comment?

To me, she looks something like she’s in a steampunk slash pirate universe, I like her look, the clothing is wonderful and her horns fit her style perfectly. I’m a bit saddened that she doesn’t have a tail, but that red wrap around her waist kind of reminds me of one…

Lovely art that poses so many questions about Mira and, in that it looks like a portrait, opens so many stories in my thoughts…

Jul 03 2013

I’ve definitely seen this costume before… Another way.

So, last week I mentioned that the costume I was looking at seemed… familiar. I thought that I had seen it before, just a bit differently presented. Well, I found yet another version of this costume and my view of it seems to be going downhill even faster…

Devil Dress with Sequins

This time, the site selling this costume decided to use an even more vague and random name to describe it. This is called the Devil Dress with Sequins and it comes with the red gown with that sort-of flame black sequin design, a pair of devil horns and the pitchfork the model is holding.

It does not include the shoes or anything else and it sells for $99.95 US, but there are some discount sales on which means that this costume can be bought for less than $85 US.

I’ll have to admit that I kind of like the dress, not the lousy flame pattern though, don’t care for the pitchfork yet again, and the horns do nothing for me once again.

What really makes this a train wreck I think is the look that the model has and the expression on her. If this is supposed to make the costume look sexier or more appealing…

It isn’t working, even if I like the shoes.

It brings me to a thought which is, why do pictures like this, with the look this model has, make it to publication in the first place?

I’ll bet there is another image of her were she is smiling and has a more comfortable pose that helps in the sexy…

Setting that aside, it bothers me that this design is being recycled yet again… and again… and again… ad nauseum… What’s more bothersome is that they keep using that same ugly black flame pattern on the dress, the same lousy pitchfork and the same set of horns.

Yes there are some variations in style, yes the looks change a bit, but in the end there isn’t all that much difference.

So, in spite of all of that, this is probably the one combination that I can just barely accept, the model’s look having nothing to do with that.

One single pitchfork out of five.

In a pinch I’d wear the dress and the shoes, but my own pitchfork and horns…

I wouldn’t like it, but I could manage it… barely.



Jul 02 2013

Desires 84

When the erotic moments… come… they do so in a special way I think…


Desires – Beginnings

By BStyles and Tera S

Part Twenty


She didn’t resist as he raised her hand and then kissed the palm. She did shiver at the kiss in surprise though. It was like a kiss of warmth and rightness that she hadn’t known before. She gave a little moan at the feeling and a light blush rose on her neck. She loosened her touch and watched him turn to face her.

Tera smiled as he looked into her eyes. Then she closed her eyes and allowed him to touch as he wished. As his fingertips brushed over her horns she sighed happily in the feeling. He made a soft rub against the very tip of her right horn and then drew his finger down the length. As his finger rubbed against the base of her horn where it met her skin she gasped in surprise. Then she couldn’t help but nuzzle herself into his touch. It was like nothing her mind could remember having felt before. A quiver of pleasure passed through her horns into her mind and then began to wash through her. She felt her body heat up, the thrill of that moment making her tail flex and twist in the air behind her.

Then his hand moved towards her tail and she froze for a second. As his fingers slid across the length of it, she gasped and moaned in the pleasure. She opened her eyes and regarded him. With a bare whisper she said, “Slide your fingers along the length to the base Martin…. Please?” As he did so, a broad smile passed across her lips. He paused when his fingers were so close to touching her bum and underneath the base of her tail. She nibbled her lip and said, “More? Please?”


I still believe to this day that I could have done this better…




Jul 01 2013

The Realm’s Canada Day…

It is Canada Day, July 1st, today and as has been tradition for the last five years here on the Tale that the Poet Laureate of the Realm, my Heart, has added a new stanza to a Realmized version of O Canada…

And I thank him for the giggle and the smile…



O Canada!
No Realm, but one nice land!
True patriot love in succubi command.
With playful hearts and glowing eyes,
quite mischievous and free,
above our bangs our horns shall rise,
O Canada, for thee.
Gorgeous and glad, glorious and free,
O Canada, we swisch our tails for thee.
O Canada, we swisch our tails for thee.

Incubi, too,
stand proud, tall, and erect
(watching their mates results in great effect)!
Their tails reach out to wrap around
the beauties whom they see,
arousal in each sight and sound
sets their libidos free!
He touches her, Eternal-ly!
Make Canada the Realm and set it free!!
Make Canada the Realm and set it free!!

In Canada
we try not too make spills,
and, in the Realm, we first break stiff men’s wills.
We don’t approve of making mess
that’s not necessary.
With huggles we get more success
(what fireworks we’ll see!).
We’ll tie and rub to set you free;
send Canada upon a lustful spree!!
Send Canada upon a lustful spree!!

Come closer, dears;
our scents are in the air.
You’ll be seduced, and we’ll not leave our chair!
Your Queen is neat. Ours has her beat
in sexuality.
Both Will and Kate will feel so great
once they stop in for tea
(or Diet Coke). Just watch and see.
O Canada, we’ll rev your royalty!!
O Canada, we’ll rev your royalty!!

Will Canada
hang on to all its dough
while other lands have economic woe?
Those succubis have tempting eyes.
One look, we think of sex!
Not one pays out; one stare, one pout,
she instantly collects.
Their bonds bring sweet maturity.
Oh, Canada, cum into solvency!
Oh, Canada, cum into solvency!


In Canada
state secrets do not leak.
No Snowdens here
to dig them up, then speak;
but succubi, were they to try,
would get them in a blink.
It’s no surprise; the coolest spies
melt, babbling, at a wink.
With one soft kiss, they’d take a knee,
and, Canada, they’d give the Realm your key!
O Canada, they’d give the Realm your key!





Happy Canada Day to all!