Feb 12 2017

A Review of A Succubus for Valentine’s by Zayna Noble

A Succubus for Valentine's by Zayna Noble

A Succubus for Valentine’s by Zayna Noble

I’ve reviewed several works by Zayna Noble, and this review will be of the third work in the series called A Succubus for the Holidays. You can find my reviews of the prior two works in the series here and here on the Tale.  I’ve had several issues with this series, and in this, the third work, those issues really get in the way of telling the story, but beyond that, there’s a bigger problem. That’s one of offering plots and then dumping them for the sake of moving onto the erotica, which is a shame.

Following the review of the third work, I will be reviewing the series as a whole as well, and I have a number of thoughts about that too.

The work tells of:

It’s been a few months since Neil transformed himself into an Incubus, a demon of lust and sex. The newly transformed demon and his succubus girlfriend, Bianca, have been keeping warm with their new routine. Sex for breakfast and sex for dinner, and again for dessert!

However, coping with their permanent change has taken a toll on their bodies. They still have to disguise themselves in front of their friends. As the month wears on, they determine it’s time to come out of their demonic closet. While there are mixed reactions, one friend has a recommendation: Celebrate Valentine’s Day without sex!

Taking the challenge to heart, Neil and Bianca set out to get each other a thoughtful gift that couldn’t possibly be used for something naughty. Though with their new demonic instincts, what will they find, and how will they twist it?

It’s Valentine’s Day and it’s time for Neil and Bianca to come clean with their friends and reveal the truth. They hope for the best, as much as they can, but being an incubus and a succubus can cause problems. Sex is wonderful, but then it can’t be everything can it?

The story is more of a reflection upon what’s happened to Neil and Bianca with a little bit of angst from their friends and the attempt at trying to come up with a Valentine’s Day that isn’t all about sex. It sounds like a good outline, and at times there are some points where it well could be. However there are problems.

The story rushes from one moment to the next, really never pausing long for anything to develop or some expansion on the characters, both major and minor. There’s one scene of conflict that offers something, and it could have been a real change overall, but it vanishes as quickly as it started, leaving really nothing but some questions that were never answered.

At the same time, there’s more focus on Neil and Bianca being entwined with each other and having sex in every way possible. The scenes tend towards making them both caricatures of themselves, bordering on being almost stereotypical sex crazed beings. There is some intimacy, but it doesn’t last long before the pair are immersed in what can really only be described as porn movie level erotica.

The work is very short as well, which doesn’t allow for the hints of side-plots to go anywhere at all. The intimacy which appeared in the prior works between Neil and Bianca is but a flash here, seeming to say that their personalities have been deeply changed by becoming what they are now. It’s a bit telling that even in what seems to e a normal conversation, the pair can’t help but have wild sex together.

The work needs to slow down, to tell the story before going off and plunging into the erotica. That alone would have made this a much better read on its own. More so, the story sort of falls to a stop at the end, not really seeming to have a point, or purpose when the tale is done. There’s something lacking in the telling, the characters and the work overall. That, I think, comes to just not having Bianca and Neil be who they are and not the beings of sex they’ve become.

Three out of five pitchforks.

The work goes by in a rush, there are so many plots left dangling and that disappointed me the most. It’s a shame, honestly, because there’s story here to be told, but it gets lost in just having Neil and Bianca having sex almost constantly. That’s not interesting overall and what could have been interesting turns out to be fleeting and lost well before the story closes.

For the series as a whole, the author needs to develop their characters and the stories more. Given that, there’s something good here, but it can’t be seen for the overwhelming levels of porn level erotica that have taken over things.

It’s very much a mixed bag of story telling. The single most constant thing is all of the characters dropped in, then lost. There are many of them who are, honestly, a lot more interesting than Neil and Bianca at times, especially when they both turn into characters are are just slightly more than sex demons.

That’s a real problem for me because in the moments before the transformations, both are amazingly interesting, have personality and meaning. Following their becoming an incubus and a succubus, there’s just something missing within each of them which then remains throughout all else. It’s like a chuck on their character is just removed and it doesn’t work for me.

Beyond that issue, the stories go past in a rush, the third work more so than the others. Sex alone, no matter how well told, as a story gets boring really quickly. This didn’t need to happen really as there are so many minor characters that pop in and out who could have been part of a larger story adding depth to the series overall.

I’d like to see more of Neil and Bianca, but something beyond them in the bedroom all of the time, or finding new ways to satisfy their urges. There’s more to them than the sex, it was there at the beginning and once Neil bemoans this. I feel like that’s something that could be explored. Collected as a single work, the flaws in the series are that much more present and that just takes away quite a lot from what otherwise I think could have been something really interesting.

But the sex gets in the way.

For the series overall, I’ll give it three out of five pitchforks.

There is a story here, but it can’t breathe for the rush in the storytelling and the focus upon the main characters being entwined together. That could have worked, but sadly it really didn’t all that well.



Feb 12 2017

A Review of Call Girl From Hell by Aya Ocean

Call Girl From Hell by Aya Ocean

Call Girl From Hell by Aya Ocean

Last year about this time I reviewed a work called My Secy Succubus Girlfriend by Aya Ocean and you can find that review here. I thought the author told a wonderful story then and I was quite pleased to see they had written another story about a succubus. While not quite the same, I found it to be as wonderful as the prior work and it surprised me wonderfully.

The tail of a succubus has many different talents. A talented succubus with a talented tail is a many seductive thing. But one should never forget that when a succubus is working, there is a price to be paid. The question is, always, how dear that will be.

The work tells the story of:

Jim has a long-standing rivalry with his business buddies. Armed with a fat bonus and surrounded by gorgeous monster girls, he soon finds himself seduced by the exotic queen of them all, a Succubus escort named Shar. Little does he know, Shar’s services come with a Hell of a price. Poor Jim was hoping for something more meaningful, he didn’t expect to be so thoroughly dominated during his paid-for ‘girlfriend experience’.

Jim finds himself in the arms and tail of a succubus named Shar. But Jim isn’t like all of the others that Shar has been an escort to. He asks for something more, something that Shar didn’t quite expect. Their time together brings to Jim a truth that only Shar could tell him. The cost of that, however, isn’t at all what Shar being a succubus would make one believe.

The story tells of a whirlwind weekend in which Jim, the main character, finds himself in the tender care of Shar. That by itself is an interesting plot which of course leads to several lovely hot flashes of erotica. The scenes are not overwhelming, they don’t take over the story. They are there to add some spice to the arrangement between Jim and Shar, and I though that worked really well.

Shar is a wonderfully complex character as a succubus. I especially found captivating the abilities of her tail, one of which I’ve never seen before but makes perfect sense when you think about it. Shar is funny, smart, talented and most of all she doesn’t take fools lightly. Jim’s request from her seems a simple one, but really it pushes at Shar and over time the dynamic between the characters shifts. It did make sense, it wasn’t unexpected, and how Shar made things turn towards her was really well done and it felt right for her character.

If there’s one thing that’s lacking, that comes to so very little being revealed about Shar herself. She’s a mystery, who she is, what she wants and needs is a bit murky being hidden behind her escort persona. It’s perfectly reasonable, after all the encounter is a job after all, but that left I felt so much character to be explored that wasn’t. I’d love to see who she really is. To that point, a comment from Jim towards the end of the work gave me pause to wonder.

The writing is very good, though one more editing pass would have corrected a few missing apostrophes. The characters have strong voices, the main ones especially, but the minor characters aren’t cardboard, they have purpose and that adds depth to the story. I just really wish there was more told about Shar. There’s a really good story to be told about how she came to be where she is. I hope that might come someday.

Four and a half out of five pitchforks.

For a new use of a tail that I hadn’t considered, for Shar, a wonderful character, a delightful succubus. For a story that is wonderfully told. But needing more about Shar herself, who she is, and most of all, what would make her happy.

There’s a line at the very end of this work that I wish would push the author towards another work with Shar. It would be, in all honesty, a perfect resolution to both Jim and Shar’s tale.



Feb 11 2017

A neat little Succubus Speedpainting YouTube…

I do love cute succubus art and I found a lovely speed painting YouTube of an artist creating a succubus character that is most certainly that to share today on the Tale…

And if you cannot see this video here on the Tale, please try this link.

As always, in case YouTube deletes things, here is a screenshot of the art as well…

Succubus by hC iraPbiG

Succubus by hC iraPbiG

I think she’s an interesting character, though the knife is a bit confusing to me. After all, being a succubus, she really wouldn’t need a knife to disarm someone…

Unless she’s Australian of course…

And there’s a story idea to ponder isn’t it?



Feb 10 2017

A Review of Making Love by Aidan Wayne

Making Love by Aidan Wayne

Making Love by Aidan Wayne

It is February and as such quite a lot of Valentine’s Day themed stories are appearing. a number of them having either, or both, succubi and incubi as characters in the works. Over the next few review days I’ll be reviewing a small number of these works, some of which are funny, others are sexy and there are some that are just delightful.

Succubi are not supposed to be able to find love, so many believe. However, in the search for something more than they are, the idea of love isn’t an impossibility. It’s a possibility. One that calls out, asks to be heard, and sometimes, making what seems impossible, so very much so.

The work tells the story of:

Carla the cupid is an excellent shot, but her chemistry is so bad that most of her matches don’t last. Her dream is to shoot a True Love pair, but until her scores improve, she’s relegated to the Puppy Love division of Aphrodite Agency.

Leeta, a succubus, is looking for a True Love match. Which is highly unusual, as most succubi are aromantic. But Aphrodite Agency — her only hope — turns her away because the receptionist can’t believe she’s not just looking for an easy meal.

Carla agrees to take Leeta’s case on freelance. She figures it’s a win-win: Carla gets to put a succubus’s True Love match on her résumé, and Leeta gets to find her True Love! Except as Carla tries to find a match for Leeta, she finds herself maybe . . . relieved when the matches don’t end well. And Leeta seems to be getting pickier and pickier. Things will never work out until Carla learns enough about chemistry to figure out who’s truly best for Leeta, and until Leeta can admit what — or who — she truly wants.

Carla is trying her best, trying to be the cupid she believes she can be. But there’s a few things getting in her way and that’s starting to wear upon her. But when Leeta appears, looking for love, and then being told there’s no such thing as love for succubi, Carla takes it upon herself to help Leeta find that love, even if that puts her role as a cupid on the line. But then, she’d do anything for love, even that of a succubus.

The work is a story of romance, self-discovery and the realization that sometimes what you need is right in front of you, you only need to accept that it is real. It isn’t erotica, there’s no entanglement with the two main characters in the work. There are wonderfully intimate moments, which as they flow into the characters, give life to them both. The mixture of innocence in both is achingly warm, but sad at times as well. While the story is told from Carla’s perspective, there are flashes of Leeta’s internal struggle to come to terms with herself, with figuring out what love is, what it means to her, and why the need is so dearly strong.

Leeta is a very strong personality, quite clear in her needs and thoughts. At times that does build a wall between herself and other characters, but then in the context of the story, what she deals with everyday, and what she wants, forces that upon her. The insights of her fears, her search for something more is quite telling. Beyond that, Leeta’s decision to be more than “just a succubus” and turning herself away from the easy path to something far more difficult, but infinitely more rewarding held my attention.

Carla is, in so many ways, a delight, but at the same time some of her more innocently lost, but trying to help, moments, took the story off into possibly more self-incriminations than self-understanding and I really wish there’d been more growth to Carla by the end of things. That’s not to say she didn’t become so much more than she was, it’s more that her hesitations remain. In time I’d expect her to be more sure of herself, to know, fully, what it meant to be a cupid than she did.

The universe itself is amazing, the little details dropped in at times really begged for stories to be told, but remained teases. I’d love to see more in this universe, more of Carla and Leeta as well, but then there are two other cupids who, honestly, I think needed to be explored more as they both seemed to have their own stories to tell.

The writing is wonderful, Carla’s emotions are so very strong, Leeta’s personality shines throughout. But most of all, it’s the slow discovery of who they both want, coming to terms with that, through the highs and lows, that brings out the best here. If there’s one thing that didn’t quite work for me it was the moments when Carla’s self-doubts seemed to overcome all else. I think that sometimes the time spent on that fear took a lot from her.

But the little flaws don’t take away from the story, in many cases they add needed depth and with this being a romance, that matters. Romance told well is a wonderful thing, and this work tells that story wonderfully. A joy to read, characters that are captivating, and in the end, a revelation that felt right.

Four and a half out of five pitchforks.

A lovely and sweet romantic story that’s so dearly innocent in so many ways. Leeta is a wonderfully deep character, Carla is a dear in her need to help, to love and the two combined are a wonderful story of love in all of the forms it can be.

I’d love to see what comes next for both Leeta and Carla, how their world, their lives and love changes and becomes all they deserve. It’s so rare to have a succubus story in which there’s actually very little in the way of sex, but so much focus on the delights of intimacy. The difference, always, matters when one discovers love.



Feb 10 2017

A Review of Perdition by the Dashboard Light: A Succubus Seduction Tale by Lucian Carter

Perdition by the Dashboard Light: A Succubus Seduction Tale by Lucian Carter

Perdition by the Dashboard Light: A Succubus Seduction Tale by Lucian Carter

There are certain endings that give me pause. In the case of stories with either succubi or incubi, there’s a tendency to add a twist at the end, something to add a bit of shock value. It’s very rare that works, overall it’s a bit of a waste of effort. If the characters cannot support the story, if the author feels that adding a little jarring moment will make the story more, I really don’t think that it does.

There are many different kinds of temptation. One’s own selfish temptation can bring about more than was expected. But temptation is a two-way street and you need to look both ways.

  • Title: Perdition by the Dashboard Light: A Succubus Seduction Tale
  • Author: Lucian Carter
  • Length: 19 Pages
  • Format: eBook
  • ASIN: B01KGAVR78
  • Publishing Date: August 14, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

What could be hotter than a Succubus? What would you do if she offered to fulfill your fantasies? And, if you knew her making you cum would mean she claims your soul, would you walk away? Would you try to hold out? Or would you give yourself willingly?

A wish brings temptation in the form of a succubus to a man. How far will he fall into her clutches and will he even care when she gives him everything he wants and more?

The work is, at its core, a hot flash that doesn’t quite make it to being erotica than it does creating what reads and is acted out as a female domination porn movie scene. The characters are one dimensional, the plot only cares about getting to the sex scene and moving on as quickly as possible.

Delilah, the succubus of the work, reads a bit odd, a little strange. She claims to be a succubus, is very clear about what will happen if she gets what she wants. The seduction is a little thin, really she takes control and bends the main character to her will quickly. It’s unclear who she is beyond being a succubus, her focus being on making the main character submit to her tender mercies and beyond.

There is a twist ending and at least for me that really took a lot out of the story overall. I didn’t see the point when all that came before made it quite clear what would happen. The added shock value didn’t really add anything, mostly it dampened what heat there was. The author might have been better served by ending the story two paragraphs before they did.

The characters are thin, almost one-dimensional, Delilah is less a succubus than she is a tease and a manipulator of desire. The main character is a shadow with no real form or purpose. As a whole this is a quick hot flash that makes some heat, but doesn’t have a story beyond that of sucking Delilah’s prey into her clutches.

There’s more here, certainly telling more about Delilah herself would be a good place to start. Her entire character seems more of a charade and finding her beneath that might be the better story to tell.

Two and a half out of five pitchforks.

It’s more porn movie than it is erotica as a whole with an ending that is shamelessly expected and almost stereotypically so. As a hot flash there’s something here, but beyond that the story left a lot behind that could have amounted to something more than just the ending that it is.



Feb 09 2017

Succubi Image of the Week 473

A rather striking image for the Succubi of the Week and I think it’s quite interesting both in the name of the Succubus herself, but also in how she is drawn. There’s a balance between “action” and “seduction” I think that can be difficult to manage well. When it can be, the character that appears can be amazing…

Heroes Reborn - Succubus Sue by toorugenshin

Heroes Reborn – Succubus Sue by toorugenshin

This character is called Succubus Sue and is the creation of the artist Toorugenshin on DeviantArt. You can find the original page on DeviantArt with this work here and this artist’s page can be found here as well.

I really couldn’t find anything about what I think is a game called ‘Heroes Reborn’ but this artist created quite a number of pieces of art which revolve around a fantasy theme, and this one of Succubus Sue is among them.

Gorgeous, wonderful detail by far. Her expression is piercing, strong and I particularly like her eyes most of all. There’s just something in them that expresses she is no pushover, and you encounter her at your peril. The question of course is whether you fight or succumb to her in a moment.

Her overall look is obviously meant to tempt and reveal enough to be distracting which, of course, means she has quite the advantage. Even so I like the sword she carries, it reminds me of a soul sword, and that whip might be less of a weapon and more of an instrument of pleasure, all things considered.

A delicious succubus in form, poise and her power most of all…



Feb 08 2017

Red horns with this costume might help a little, but not much

Spider DressThere are many times when looking at all of the lousy costumes I find brings me to a point where, in all seriousness, it becomes obvious that the best thing to do is to pluck a pair of horns from my collection, a sexy dress and leave things at that. That’s not to say there aren’t some costume dresses that might be something to think about… but that’s usually all that happens…

This is called the Spider Dress and it simply is the dress itself which is made of velvet and Terylene. It sells for about $50 US.

This was advertised as being a “devil” dress, among other things, but with that cowl this is more something for a vampire costume than anything else, not to mention the expression on this model which makes me cringe a bit.

It’s not a terrible choice, but it isn’t really a good one either I think. Most of all that cowl bothers me and i would have to get rid of that somehow. Beyond that, as I said, it isn’t totally horrid, but it comes close.

The dress just seems to look cheap here and there, and it need not be. Lose the cowl, get rid of the puffy shoulder pads and give the overall look some texture at least. Something to make this more than a dress that frames one’s legs, no matter how good they might look…

Two pitchforks out of five.

I have a much nicer leather mini dress… or the latex one… or…