Jul 10 2015

A Review of The Succubus and her Girl by Jamie White

The Succubus and her Girl by Jamie White

The Succubus and her Girl by Jamie White

Some stories about Succubi, and Lilith in particular, are told in such a way that the main character of the story is taught a lesson. Sometimes that lesson is one about themselves, sometimes it’s about what they have done. Many times it is about seeking revenge or transforming them into a tool for Lilith or her Succubi to use.

The hardest thing about telling a story like that is to avoid falling into a stereotypical story about domination and control that focuses on the erotica and leaves the story to fend for itself. That becomes a larger issue when the character at the centre of the story isn’t someone that you can find an emotional connection with.

  • Title: The Succubus and her Girl
  • Author: Jamie White
  • Length: 24 Pages
  • Publishing Date: September 22, 2014
  • This work at Amazon.com


The work tells the story of:

Mason loves causing trouble wherever he goes as the quintessential bad boy. So when he goes into the Succubus Special, he figures he’ll do more of the same. The bartender, Lilith, invites him to the back room.

But as it turns out, it’s a trap of Lilith, who is a juicy, hot succubus! Once Mason becomes Michelle, it’s time for Lilith to work her magic–and the way she does it is unlike any woman before!

Mason is a real pain in the ass for any and all women he meets, gets involved with, or has anything to do with. After being thrown out of a club he finds himself in another where the women want all of him and after a time they get all of him. He discovers that he is at the mercy of Lilith who gets what she wants from him and then changes him into something that she can use.

The beginning of the story, when Mason is introduced, just about made me stop reading the story because he is completely unlikeable and then some. He is that kind of character because one expects to have something happen to him that will make him change or make that change for him. Call it a sort of universal means to giving someone a lesson they will never forget.

When the story turns to the appearance of Lilith and her Succubi, there are some really very well written scenes that come from that. Of course Mason’s attitude gets in the way of things, and he doesn’t see the obvious clues in front of him, but, again, that’s how the story is meant to unfold. There is a bit of erotic moments in this part of the work, but then the “horror” aspect appears and Mason is taken to be at the mercy of Lilith.

Lilith isn’t quite stereotypical, there are some interesting character traits that I liked. What was more interesting was that the other Succubi were quite different and more interesting than Lilith herself was at times. Overall, the Succubi in this story, Lilith included, had some familiar aspects in their character, but the place they were in, how they acted there, and what they did to draw Mason to them was just different enough that I thought it was really well done.

Lilith transforms him, gives him a choice, and with a bit of persuasion, Mason is Michelle and then Lilith uses her as she sees fit in as many ways as possible, giving him what can only be described as a taste of his own attitude and actions. Those scenes were not what I would call erotic, more brutal and monster erotica, which didn’t do a lot for me. While the story leading up to those moments had some interest, and the ending offered a path for the story to take going forwards, the problem was Mason once again.

The beginning of the story never really leaves his character, there seems not to be any real development in him at all, and when the story ends, he is basically right back where he started, but not quite the same person. I think that was the most disappointing part of the story, that nothing really changed in the end and all that has changed is that he has Lilith to answer to which as a whole seems to be somewhat stereotypically so.

The work runs hot and cold as a result, leaving me wanting for more in the way of story that overcomes the character of Mason and gives more about Lilith herself. What little is told about Lilith is just enough to say there’s more about her and her world than we see, but then the story turns back to the erotica and that story gets buried in that.

I’m giving this work three out of five pitchforks.

There is promise in this work, but when the main character is instantly disliked from the first page that is a hard thing to overcome. More about Lilith and her Succubi would have been nice to balance out the harshness of Mason overall and that would have helped my enjoyment of this work by far…



Jul 09 2015

Succubi Image of the Week 390

If I can find an image of one of the Succubi where her tail is being expressive, that just gives me a lovely smile. I found such a work of art for this week’s Succubi. Her tail makes me smile, but the entire image is just wonderfully fun too…

Devil by Evulchibi

Devil by Evulchibi

This art, called Devil, but in my mind I call it Hot Stuff, is by Evulchibi. I found this work here on DeviantArt and you can find this artist’s page here.

I love this work in so many ways really… Her tail is simply adorable, seeming to have just the right comment to make over what’s happening here. I like that she looks human, save for her horns, which aren’t too large, and her tail, which gives her more presence than if she was not quite so human in appearance. A simple bikini just is the right look, and her expression framed by her hair just seems to say “I’m completely hot… come over here and I’ll show you!”

I will also admit, because it is very obvious, that the one thing that I adore most of all is that she does, in a lot of ways, remind me of the Succubi me…

And she’s always hot stuff you know…



Jul 08 2015

Not sure about Evil Twin, more like Trashy Twin

My Evil Twin Devil CostumeOnce again the costume designers have amazed me. Well, perhaps amazed is the wrong thing to say. Let’s say shocked, irritated, and just a little bit, made me roll my eyes. Trashy it appears is equal to evil. From a seduction point of view that does make some sense.

I wonder why it is so hard to make a costume look sexy instead of trashy?

This is called the My Evil Twin Devil Costume, which is possibly one of the worst costume names I have seen in some time.

The costume comes with the red sequin dress, which has the tail in the image as well. And this is where the costume goes wrong in my eyes. The hemline is removable. When you do, it becomes a cape, and the real appearance of the dress, being short, is revealed. The costume also comes with the sequin devil horns, but not the shoes, or the pitchfork.

It sells for about $50 US at most sites on the internet.

One of the things that bothers me about this dress is that the sequins are only on the front of the dress. They seem to be like a panel of sequins that are stitched onto the actual dress, which looks lousy. Either sequin the entire dress or none of it, don’t try to skimp please? Make up your mind and create a nice looking dress. If the entire dress was sequinned, I actually think it would look okay as a minidress. But like this is just falls apart.

The “cape” is a waste of fabric, this isn’t a vampire after all. The tail needs some work, it looks much too cheap and that is a problem. The horns aren’t bad and, again, a full sequinned dress and those horns would look really nice, sequinned shoes as well obviously, but like this it just doesn’t quite work.

I’ll give this two out of five pitchforks.

You would be better off buying a sequinned dress, heels, and the horns alone. Then at least you would look more seductively evil and not evilly trashy…




Jul 07 2015

A Review of Taken by Her Mechanic by Tori Kiss

Taken by Her Mechanic by Tori Kiss

Taken by Her Mechanic by Tori Kiss

Some time ago I reviewed a work by an author that I thought had quite a lot of promise. It told the story of a Succubus encountering her one unexpectedly. You can find that review on the Tale here. Imagine my surprise when a work with a similar title, published under a different author’s name, appeared. Could it be the same story? Could it possibly? The answer to that question is, very much, yes.

Could I hope that the author had improved the story? Added to it? Done something more than they had in the original work?

The answer to that question is… sort of.

  • Title: Taken by Her Mechanic
  • Author: Tori Kiss
  • Length: 15 Pages
  • ASIN: B00C6QF0RO
  • Publishing Date: April 3, 2013
  • This work at Amazon.com


The work tells of:

She’s a succubus who needs her fix. Only a man can fill her with the power she needs.

She finds him. He’s a mechanic. Or… is he something more? This succubus is about to find out.


When reading this version of the original story, there isn’t any changes to the plot, the characters or anything substantial. I will note that the author did edit a lot of the errors in spelling and grammar that I noticed, which does improve the story.

As I noted in my original review, there is story to be savoured, there are two characters that play off each other so very well that the attraction between them is perfectly written. The situation is a little forced at the beginning, but once the faltering start is past then the real story and the heat arrive.

Agjalel, the Succubus of this story, amazingly enough, has a tail. It’s not exactly what I expected it to be, but I did find it a rather unique take on the Succubi. I also thought that the mythos around her was well done and I wanted to know more about Lovers and the world they live in. While that was what caught me and held me in the story, it also was how perfectly Succubus-like Agjalel acted, what she discovered about herself and then Vincent added much more to that pleasure.

We really don’t learn a lot about Vincent, and to me that’s a shame because so many ideas, hints, and suggestions about who and what he is appear in the work. When the climax of the story comes, for both of them, what could have happened, and I expected the ending to be a sad one for all that was hinted at, thankfully did not. But the ending came too soon.

The writing is wonderful, emotional, and draws you into the story. I found myself wanting the hopes of Agjalel about Vincent to be true, But it wasn’t only that. What really made this story work for me is that there is the connection between the two, the choice that Agjalel must make, and what that really means. But then the story ends and… and I was left wanting for more. Regretfully that never came from this author, only this reissue of the story and that, honestly, is a sad thing.

I’ll give this work four out of five pitchforks.

There is more to tell about Agjalel and Vincent. A lot more. It is a shame that promise, that heat, ends where it does.



Jul 07 2015

A Review of Begone, Demon Conjured by Unnatural Lusts! by Tasha Starr

Begone, Demon Conjured by Unnatural Lusts! by Tasha Starr

Begone, Demon Conjured by Unnatural Lusts! by Tasha Starr

An incubus-themed work for review this time on the Tale. Sometimes I wonder about the book summaries that authors create. On occasion they aren’t exactly… correct. By that I mean one reads the summary, expects one thing as a result, but then something completely different unfolds.

That’s not always a bad thing, sometimes it makes the ending more surprising, better, acceptable. But then comes the question of why exactly the work is so short and ends on a cliffhanger when it easily could have continued onwards, if only a bit further, for some truths to be revealed?

  • Title: Begone, Demon Conjured by Unnatural Lusts!
  • Author: Tasha Starr
  • Length: 12 Pages
  • ASIN: B00XWW3D84
  • Publishing Date: May 18, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

A creature intent on ravishing me in the night stalks my house and arouses my passions. I remain unsure whether experiencing him will be the end of me or the beginning of ecstasy. The demonic Incubus himself has a secret plan as well. Why has he not yet forced himself on me, as is in his power? I search for answers, even as I futilely attempt to resist the allure of this creature of the night. What will I have to undertake to finally find resolution–and release!

Haunted by a demon, the reasons way not known, a woman tries to find answers and when she does, makes a fateful decision. In doing so, the incubus finds himself both summoned and trapped and she taken and held. But which is which?

The work is written in the first person, which does work, if feeling a bit out of sorts at times. That’s more in how the main character, who is never named, deals with the events she is in the midst of, but also in how so much of her thoughts and plans are half-hidden away. During the story, she is told that she is being visited by an incubus and of its plans, but really her reaction simply happens and there’s no real sense to that in the moment. As the story unfolds, eventually coming to the conclusion, her actions, and admissions, just didn’t quite fit with the rest of what she did, felt, and thought.

The incubus isn’t named as well, and remains as much as mystery as the main character herself. He speaks little, hides himself, and when he does appear, there isn’t much in the way of a connection between him and the main character. There’s just something odd about him, and even when why, and what, he intends to do is known in the story, it doesn’t really make a difference overall.

There is very little erotica in this work, mainly at the end, and a bit of an interlude at the beginning. There is a story, and really, when the twist comes at the end, I found myself sighing a little and wondering why the author ended the work where they did. The final page, what it reveals about the incubus and the main character, sets up quite an interesting story to take forwards from that point.

I can see many possibilities here, some of which I think could be really delicious if used. But with this being such a short work, there needs to be more development, more meaning to be found going forwards. There’s a mystery here, in a lot of ways, that is just touched upon, but isn’t really taken anywhere. I really wish it had been, that the work was at least twice as long as it is, and that more time was spent to learn about the characters and who they are.

There is really very little dialogue, this mainly being monologue more than anything else. When words are spoken, they are a little bit… odd. Speaking some of that out loud the words don’t come out as being smooth or “right”. There’s an oddity in them.

As the basis, or outline, of a longer work, this has promise, but as a story, even a short one, if needs to be more than it is. The framework is there, there is story to be told. There are two characters which can be interesting, but don’t come out fully before the climax comes, in more than one way, and the work comes to a close.

I’ll give this work three out of five pitchforks.

There is something here, it simply didn’t come out to play.



Jul 06 2015

Meaning By TeraS

It’s been a week for me, mostly suffering from this simply amazing cold that has afflicted me. The worst part being that I haven’t had the time to gather my thoughts, to manage something, to have an idea in my mind that I want to write something about.

Now I know, really, that there will be better times ahead, when I will be able to think clearly, to write the things that want to be. Perhaps even once in a while I might even find that little bit of sexy inside that seems to be adrift sometimes.

I think that, more than anything else, is what bothers me. It’s feeling like I have … misplaced … something. I haven’t lost it; I have moments where I have some really lovely and delicious thoughts. My heart reminds me that my ability to write something, anything really, is a moment where there goodness can grow from the words, from the story, from the ideas within, goodness that can add up to something.

So, while this is short, perhaps we can all find some …


By TeraS


There is a place where, quite simply, no one ever goes … well, almost no one.

That isn’t because it is off limits, out of reach, or even simply guarded so that one couldn’t enter. No, the reason, quite simply, is that there is but one of the Realm that knows about it, but one who knows how to get there, and but one who takes the time needed.

Oh, she could just will herself there, arriving there in an instant, but that isn’t something she has ever really considered doing.

Her travels begin at her front door, where she makes sure to hug her Eternal before she leaves. Not because she will not return; it simply is because that is their way, and it was the thing she did when she first found the place. She walks through the Realm, seeing the comings and goings, occasionally pausing to chat with those around her, because that is part of who she is: she always has the time for others more than herself.

Eventually, she comes to the edge of the forests to the north and looks upwards. There, far off in the distance, are the mountains that mark the edge of the Realm, the clouds enveloping the tops, hiding them from view. They seem so far away, days upon days of travel.

As she did that first time she looked at them, she wonders what is up there, what she could see from there, and, after some reflection, she takes that first step on the path that leads in the direction she wishes to go. Time passes—how much matters little—and she keeps on, stopping here and there to look at the life around her, marvel, and be thankful for all that is there to be seen.

At some point—and even to this very day, she isn’t exactly sure how it happens—the mountains come into view as the path opens up in front of her, the canopy of the forest giving way to the sight of the sheer rock walls of the mountains, the seeming barrier to her and her intentions. Coming to the base of the mountains she remembers how, that first time, she had stared at them, almost willing them to give into her, but of course they didn’t. She remembers what her mother had told her, so long ago, that nothing worth doing is easy.

And it wasn’t.

She could have given up, many times, on her journey. But that thought never occurred to her. She was then, and always, quite the stubborn Queen and, if the world wouldn’t cooperate, then she simply would have to make do.

And so she did.

The sun was setting and the footing was becoming quite dangerous when she finally paused there, somewhere up in the mountains, close to the edge of the clouds, but not quite being there. It was frustrating of course, being so close to her goal and yet so far from it. She found a place to rest, upon a small outcropping, and dangled her legs into space as she looked upward into the clouds. She looked at them for the longest time, wondering what was above, what she might see if she would continue on, to see what the clouds held away from her eyes.

But then, she looked towards her home and Realm. From where she was, she could see everything and everyone there, the flickering lights of the streets, homes, and more. At least, at the time, she thought that it was lights. But she knew better now.

It took some time for her to realize just what she was looking at.

It wasn’t the Realm, the streets, the buildings.

It was the Realm, those she loved, and those that loved her in return.

That was when she realized that what was above her, the “What if …”, wasn’t as important as that which she had, knew, and cherished always. With a smile, she turned back then, making her way back home.

She had returned to that same place many times since then. But each time she brought a piece of the Realm with her: a flower once, a small photograph another time, bits and pieces of the world that she cherished, those she loved. Little by little, she was making a little place there, high above, where she shared this special part of herself, and of her world, with them.

After each time she visited, looked upon the Realm, and felt inside what mattered the most, she left the spot behind, left all of the memories there, to be held among the unyielding stone of the mountains in a place that no one else would ever really know. But, in the times between her visits, it wasn’t quite the same place that she knew. She had taken a small part of herself there, yes, a small part of her family there, a small part of those she loved there, little bits and pieces that meant the world to her. These bits and pieces, however, were really just icons—pieces that pointed to what Tera loved. In the midst of the twilight of the evening, the spirits held in that place took form, looking out over the place they called home as well; but they were different without her love there.

Tera never really understood why it was that there seemed to be light showing her the way down, the way home, the way to where everyone she loved was waiting for her to return. The meaning of the light she saw in all that mattered to her was that her light had shined, given, and lit the way. It was simply her own light begin returned to her.

And in that comes the meaning of one life and one soul, one who brings meaning to so much more …

Jul 05 2015

A Review of The Price of Changing by Abigail Pierce

The Price of Changing by Abigail Pierce

The Price of Changing by Abigail Pierce

One of the themes that is booming more popular of late is to combine Succubi and Incubi with other, wider fetishes. Notably among these are stories where a character is, or is transformed, into a futa or some description.

Overall this usually leads to a work that has a lot of sex it in, not much in the way of story, and when that happens I really don’t care for stories like that much. However, sometimes there is a single line of text which catches my attention and I wonder if the story will do something with it. And then there are times when I wonder what was the point of the Incubus being in the story in the first place?

  • Title: The Price of Changing
  • Author: Abigail Pierce
  • Length: 16 Pages
  • ASIN: B010W8KH84
  • Publishing Date: July 2, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

Erica always wanted a cock. So when an Incubus offers to give her one, of course she accepts!

However, there is a price to be paid, if she wants the cock to remain permanently: she needs to fuck both a man and a woman with her new cock.

Her new dick is irresistible, though, so it is easier than she thought.

Erica has always had one dream. An incubus appears, gives her what she wants, and then puts her on a quest to keep it. Erica finds her dream, as reality, is everything she wanted and more.

Overall this work is primarily one about futas, transformation, a bit of mind control and a series of short hot flashes. There really isn’t a lot of story, the work almost immediately dives into erotica, though it does break things up with a little bit of story here and there.

There is an incubus to be found, making a couple of appearances, but overall he is a means to Erica’s transformation and putting her on a quest. Beyond that, there is not all that much known about him, least of which is his name. However, and this is the part that I found interesting, he does note that succubi and incubi, at least in this universe, do not take souls and I did like that part of his character.

But there wasn’t really much else about him to be told. His entire appearance in the work comes to perhaps two pages, if that. So I’m not sure what the point was for him to be in the work, save for bringing the story into focus. After that, the incubus isn’t part of the story again until a very short appearance at the end.

The rest of the work is Erica learning what her new abilities are, using them on two people in her office, and enjoying that. The erotica itself is a bit bland at times, I did like the mind control aspect, but overall it was just two very quick encounters that ended about as quickly as they started.

The writing is a little plain, it certainly needs an editing for the mistakes that cropped up in it. For example calling a character “miss Rye” instead of “Miss Rye” for one. There are some spelling mistakes, the dialog is very odd and stilted at times and it just made for a very difficult to read piece of erotica.

The work is more erotica than story, and it needed to have more of a balance overall. It is short, which is a problem, but even so the questions sit there by the end of the story unanswered. The main one being… why? Why did the incubus do this? What does he get out of it and why Erica?

The ending itself was disappointing in that it was a bit rote, a little expected, and as such that didn’t sit right with me. There’s a story in this somewhere, but it didn’t come out as much as the characters did.

I’ll give this two pitchforks out of five.

Not an incubus story, not really, the futa is a bit expected and with the writing not carrying the work, that makes for a difficult read with little heat to enjoy.