Aug 04 2015

A Review of Redneck Succubus: Revenge: Served Hot and Sexy with a Side of Deadly by Beatrice Evenmorne

Redneck Succubus: Revenge: Served Hot and Sexy with a Side of Deadly by Beatrice Evenmorne

Redneck Succubus: Revenge: Served Hot and Sexy with a Side of Deadly by Beatrice Evenmorne

A review of the opening work in a new series that has the main character being transformed into being a succubus and what happens from there. It is, really, an interesting idea where this story starts from and who the main character is. However I think the author really needed to think about the title of the work, because honestly it is about the longest title that I have seen in quite some time. Beyond that, the work needs more direction and focus to make what it promises turn out to be more than what it turns out to be.

Revenge is, in many ways, what one makes of it, The thing about that is, sometimes when you have what you want, things turn towards more than revenge. They turn towards changing who you are for all of the wrong reasons.

  • Title: Redneck Succubus: Revenge: Served Hot and Sexy with a Side of Deadly
  • Author: Beatrice Evenmorne
  • Length: 20 Pages
  • ASIN: B01226R1MO
  • Publishing Date: July 19, 2015
  • This work at

The work tells the story of:

Krissy “been done wrong” by Larry, and the last thing you ever want to do is get a country girl mad at you. She already broke off a little piece of revenge when she told everyone about his micro tool, but she wants more, she just doesn’t know how. Fortunately for her, a figurine is about to change her into an irresistibly sexy, deadly, demonic revenge machine. Her first order of the business after obtaining her new busty, curvy body? Find the woman that lured away her man and give her the best, and last, sex she’ll ever have.

Krissy is a little miffed when she finds out  that her boyfriend went and slept around with someone else. A chance encounter with a curse changes her and when she discovers what she can do, there are a lot of people that will be paying for what they have done to her.

The work is told from Krissy’s point of view and that, as a whole, makes is very clear that she is, for lack of a better phrase “backwoods trailer trash” in the most stereotypical way. In fact, just about every single possible stereotypical backwoods theme came out in the story, along with all of the accents, mannerisms and more. While this does lend itself to giving Krissy some personality, it also makes the work rather hard to read at times.

Most of the story passes in somewhat of a blur, the point being to get Krissy to the point where she becomes a succubus, in one of the more unique ways that I have read in some time mind you. Once past that, and she is changed, she puts two and two together, comes up with the conclusion she is a succubus now, for some reason, and then goes off to see the woman that was having fun with her boyfriend. Things unfold, there is some futa themes and then the work comes to an abrupt close before Krissy moves on to have more fun with those that have “wronged her.”

The story seems to just be in a hurry from the first to the last, not dwelling much on telling about Krissy and the others except in quick little descriptions. The transformation scene is a bit odd because, the way Krissy tells it, she experiences everything, then can’t remember it, so how is it that she tells about it? This is written in first-person, so how does that work exactly? Also, how is it that she knows she is a succubus? The means of her transformation isn’t exactly clear on that, but, considering how she was before it happened, it does make some sense in a way.

Because of the internal monologue from Krissy, the work is a little hard to read at times because there’s so much put into the accent of her internal voice that things get muddled up, sometimes unclear. The erotic scenes aren’t exactly erotic either in that they just don’t have a lot of heat in them, for one thing. The other is that after Krissy has her power, then she’s completely focused on revenge, so the erotica is glossed over in order to get to the revenge she is looking for.

To be clear, really none of the characters, save for Krissy, are that interesting, being they are rather thinly written and don’t have much to do save for being the focus of Krissy’s ire. However they do serve as a focal point for the rest of the story at least.

Krissy as a succubus is not really seductive, though she does become sexier. She doesn’t have, at least so far, anything obviously succubus-like about her as yet, though I expect in the next work that will happen. There is a question left unanswered, though hinted at in the title and a comment by Krissy which, for me, also turns the story a bit dark in a lot of ways.

That’s a shame because the Krissy of before isn’t quite the Krissy of after. While there’s not a lot to like, at least in the beginning she had some promise and could have been developed into something more than she was. That just didn’t happen and that is the problem here.

One and a half pitchforks out of five.

I’m hoping that the next work in the series, if it appears, takes Krissy from being stereotypical towards something a lot more interesting. There is a real chance to do that, to make something of her rather than “just” what she has become.

It would be better than the start I think.



Aug 04 2015

A Review of My Gay Incubus by Mal Rhinehardt

My Gay Incubus by Mal Rhinehardt

My Gay Incubus by Mal Rhinehardt

Life can be, a lot of the time really, something that beats you down, makes you wonder why things are as they are, and most of all, question yourself, your choices and more. Sometimes in order to survive, we draw away into our dreams and find what comfort we can in them.

But what happens when the dream world and the real world meet in an unexpected way? What makes that connection? More importantly, what do you give up to have something you need?

  • Title: My Gay Incubus
  • Author: Mal Rhinehardt
  • Length: 13 Pages
  • Publishing Date: July 31, 2014
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It is the story of:

Stan’s been laid off from work and life isn’t going his way. But every night, he looks forward to going to bed so that he can have another vigorous encounter with the mysterious demon who visits his dreams. The dreams are always intense and heated. He can’t enough. But one day, the dreams become real as the demon shows up at his door, ready for more.

Stan’s life has, in short, gone to hell of late. Nothing is going right and he struggles to make it through the day. The only solace he finds is in his dreams in which he encounters an Incubus. One morning his dreams become real, but then the question is what does he give up for them?

The one thing that seems to be a constant theme throughout this work is that overriding loss that Stan suffers more than anything else. Quite a lot of the story takes up his past, the situation he is in, and just how much pain and suffering he goes through everyday.

While this is a hot flash in that the majority of the work revolves around Stan and the incubus being intimate with each other, there’s really not a lot of plot otherwise to tie things together. The writing is very good and the scenes are told well, but there’s something missing as the story progresses that, for me, leaves it lacking.

One of those things is the simple fact that the name of the incubus is never revealed. Stan is given a way to find out, and he seems to take it, but at the end, we still never know. As well there is the problem of what happens between them both, what is Stan’s future that isn’t touched on. The work ends on questions that never really are answered.

A hot flash doesn’t need to tell everything, but it helps to have closure to the work at least. It’s also good to name the characters and not leave them question marks. As well having all of Stan’s troubles being so much of the story as a whole takes away from the romance/erotica. I don’t expect every story to end on a positive note, but I also don’t expect a story to have so much hurt within the story that it takes away from any joy that the characters might have.

There’s also the question of what the motives of the incubus are. There’s a line in the story, really it is a throw away line more than anything else, but it brings up the question of whether Stan is the “one” or just “one of many”. That particular question is left open, but I found myself pondering it as the story came to its climax.

The ending at least gives Stan something that he desires, but the questions left just make that ending something that didn’t turn out to be what it could have been.

I’ll give this work two and a half out of five pitchforks.

There was too much dwelling on Stan’s situation, how bad things are. That tended to haunt the rest of the story and when the ending came there were questions left unanswered, not the least of which being the name of the incubus himself.



Aug 03 2015

Rainfall By TeraS

The Queen of the Succubi is in a pensive mood of late. As I wrote this piece, a massive thunderstorm that come over, and the sounds that came brought this story along with them …


By TeraS


There are times when the Realm reflects the mood of the Queen herself. Most of the time, really almost all of the time, there is sun above, fine weather, the sort of day when all is right with the world. It seems to offer a hint, in some way, that Tera’s joy in being with others, helping them, sharing herself with them, is being reflected in the warm embrace that the weather gives to those within its lands.

The summer is, as a whole, quite long, and that allows for the joys of being on the beach, the twining of sundry tails, and, of course, all of the fun and games that those of the Realm, and those that know the way in, are able to enjoy. The entire season is warm and pleasant, and the evenings are even more so when even more intimate moments come in the heat of the night.

Then comes the fall. A time of fuzzy sweaters—red, of course, for Tera herself. Perhaps a bit more seductive than the bare skin of the summer, the fall brings enticing teases of what awaits when couples finish with the day, of leaves turning a most particular shade of red that seems to be an echo of the Queen’s own tail, and of retiring to cuddle with some hot chocolate. Autumn also brings the part of the year when the Queen’s powers are at their peak: her hair a bit more ebony, her tail and horns a bit more red, the glimmer in her so-green eyes just that much more captivating. And then comes the Grand Ball of the Realm, where all are welcome to share in the moment when the worlds are closest together, when the joys of a touch, a caress, a kiss, a moan, and a cry of ecstasy are at their peak. It is a time where the Queen joyfully gives of her all, wishing only that there is the joy of the moment for all around her to be shared and captured, bringing inspiration for all.

Following the heat of that moment within the cooler weather of the fall comes the winter, the time of year when the life of the Realm rests. A blanket of snow covers everything, allowing for the Realm to gather the energies of life which sustain. For those of the Realm, there is much time spent being bundled up as they go from place to place, of course. Eventually, all the succubi and incubi are lucky enough to have a certain knitter make them a special tail cozy, there are moans, followed by a race to their Eternals, beloveds, lovers, and so on to have that most needed of itches scratched in just the right way. Besides this, there are evenings spent by the fire, sipping hot chocolate—almost always in the nude, of course. The homes are warm and, as the evening is long, and something simply must be done to pass the time, the windows tend to get fogged over quite quickly, though no one really seems to mind that very much.

For the Queen herself, the winter brings time to consider, to mull over things as she is wont to do. However, as she was gifted with a rather special tail cozy and an attentive Eternal, she rarely finds herself not being occupied in the most passionate and captivating ways. While her Realm sleeps soundly throughout her passions shared, Tera herself rests in-between the moments which serve to rekindle her joys and love to be shared as always with all.

Then spring comes, the Realm waking up once more from the sleep of winter: the first shoots of new life springing from the ground and the sun peeking out from the clouds as they thin away, slowly, over time. As the cold gives way to the warmth returning, there also come the rains. The rain falls here and there, as it does, not caring for where exactly it does so. It brings with it the waters that quench thirst, make the life of the Realm blossom, and more. For some, the rains are seen as being a bother sometimes: a picnic brought to a close too soon, a dash for cover at the last moment. They look out from underneath an umbrella, or an awning, or from indoors to see the rain fall and await the time when the sun returns once more.

For the Queen, the rains reflect two sides of her. Sometimes, when the rains are fiercely falling, the thunder sounds, and the lightning flashes, it is the reflection of her mood at that moment, perhaps a reflection of her remembering something from her past that makes her wistful, or sad. Another time it might be some pain in the tail she is dealing with that is getting to her. Most of the time this tends to be some bureaucrat or other duty that she doesn’t particularly care for, but accepts … in her own way. Though some of these visitors remember to bring an umbrella with them, as it always seems to rain just as they leave her presence, and Tera always seems to softly giggle in amusement as the clouds open on them.

But there are other times, when the rain is falling in a soft mist, drifting from the skies above, when things are different. In these moments, the rain is pleasant, almost soothing as it drifts upon the Realm and those there. Somewhere in the Realm, on these days, someone looking at the right time can find the Queen out in the rain, watching it fall from above. She stands there, holding a red umbrella, waiting. That in itself wouldn’t be odd, almost normal: red jacket, black top, and so on; all quite normal. At least until she lowers the umbrella and, in the split second between being protected by it and her clothing being dampened, she stands there bare to the rains which continue to fall. The mists coat her skin, adding a sheen to her body, the light making that glow a bit more than what one might expect.

Her hair dampens slightly, draping against the skin of her back, over her curves, hiding her form—just slightly, but not too much so. Her horns glint as the rain continues, as does her tail. As her skin gains just a bit more sheen and slickness from the rains, the occasional rivulet of rain collects into a stream that travels down her chest, over her curves. That stream might dip into her navel, tickle over a hip, and then cascade along her thighs. If there is a bit of wind, her body cools, just slightly, goosebumps sparkling over her skin, and, as they do, she licks the moisture from her lips leaving the most interesting smile behind as she enjoys the moment.

In this moment, it is more obvious to those who look that she is connected to the life around her. She feels the joys, the anticipation of the summer to come with its heat, the fall with its power, the winter with its contentment. But over all of this comes the spring and the promise it brings. She tilts her head back, to feel the rains caressing her cheeks, a soft kiss to remind her that she is the promise of her Realm in all things. She embodies and ignites the joy, passion, love, desire, seduction and ecstasy.

The rain may fall at other times, certainly. But, in this moment, she knows that the rain does not simply fall. It uplifts her. It gives her hope for all.

And her hope, like rainfall, sustains all of the souls that she has touched, will touch, and has been touched by, and all the souls those souls touch. Her hope gives life to all creation.

Aug 02 2015

A Review of My Teacher the Futa Succubus by Sasha Scott

My Teacher the Futa Succubus by Sasha Scott

My Teacher the Futa Succubus by Sasha Scott

There are some stories which are rather hard to read as a whole. That sometimes is the writing, the tone, occasionally it is all of the spelling mistakes. Sometimes it is trying to read a work where it feels like the story was translated from another language and badly so.

But then there are stories where it seems like someone read a manga, wrote out the dialog and tried to piece it all together using translation software. At that point the story just is completely unreadable.

  • Title: My Teacher the Futa Succubus
  • Author: Sasha Scott
  • Length: 25 Pages
  • ASIN: B0135H2T1W
  • Publishing Date: July 31, 2015
  • This work at

It is the story of:

Yuki has an incredible crush on his teacher, Miss Britton. However, when he confesses to her he finds out her secret, she’s actually a futa. And little does he know she has another secret too, she’s actually a succubus.

An issue presents itself as Miss Britton prefers girls to boys, but she has just the solution when she warps Yuki’s feminine male body into that of a full fledged woman, signalling the start of a new life filled with debauchery.

Yuki is attracted to his teacher and then discovers she is a succubus, falling to her powers. But Miss Britton doesn’t like boys, changes Yuki to suit her needs, and then… things happen.

I know that’s not a really good summary of this work, but in truth that reflects how poorly this work is written, edited, and presented. I found it incredibly difficult to read, at times actually painful to try to understand what was happening. The work reads, very much, like it was written in Japanese, as a manga book, then dropped into Google translate before being published with no editing, spellchecking, or the most basic of touchups to make it read better and make some kind of sense.

One example of how hard this work is to read can be found in this single paragraph:

He wiggled closer until he was pressed opposite her, nervously squirming around against the front of her desk. She slowly rose upwards, rising up above the small asian boy. Her hands grasped down across his face, freezing him in shock. She drew down, closer and closer, her hot breaths stroking over his features. Her piercing glance stirred into his eyes.

It’s just awful honestly. The entire work reads like this, spelling mistakes, punctuation errors and so on.The grammar is poor, the story is barely there beneath the writing. The characters are hard to understand, what they are doing is as well. There’s such a disconnection between what the author is trying to say and what is written on the page.

Miss Britton is a succubus, at least she claims to be one, and yes, she seems to be, but then there’s really nothing else told about her, other than she likes girls rather than boys and is a futa. There’s a gender change scene that makes little sense, and then the story falls into a sex scene, which isn’t at all erotic.

The entire work needs a lot of assistance just to be clear in what happens within it. As much as I try to find the good in the works that I review, in this one I just cannot manage to do that. The author would be well advised to completely rewrite this, clean up the dialog, make the story sensical, and, at the least, fix all of the spelling and grammar errors. All this work manages to do is make me shake my head in disbelief. If this wasn’t a Kindle Unlimited I would have felt cheated in having to pay for this work.

Zero pitchforks out of five.

This is just such a painful thing to read by far. A lot of editing, spelling correction, and rewriting to make the characters sound like characters and not a mishmash of strung together phrases would be a good place to start.

Aug 02 2015

A Review of Misty Shalimar – Modern Day Succubus – Cowgirl Up! by Pamela Parkman

Misty Shalimar - Modern Day Succubus - Cowgirl Up! by Pamela Parkman

Misty Shalimar – Modern Day Succubus – Cowgirl Up! by Pamela Parkman

It has been quite some time since there has been a work about Misty Shalimar, who appeared in a work that I reviewed back in January 2013. At the time I had some very high praise for the story and Misty herself I thought was a really good Succubus character.

A second work appeared last year and while Misty has returned… The story itself is missing something. It doesn’t quite read the same nor does it have quite the same style as the first work did.

That’s not to say that work isn’t interesting, for it is, but compared to the first… It needs some help in a few places.

  • Title: Misty Shalimar – Modern Day Succubus – Cowgirl Up!
  • Author: Pamela Parkman
  • Length: 30 Pages
  • ASIN: B00L8FWN06
  • Publishing Date: June 23, 2014
  • This work at

The story tells the tale of:

Young Misty and The Professor go for a short vacation to a cowboy town in Northern Arizona. Misty almost lets herself go too far with a local after riding a bull stirs her inner juices. The young cowboy’s life is saved when a local thug decides he wants to take Misty for the ride of her life.

Three years have passed since Misty became a succubus and in that time she and the Professor have been roaming around America looking for those that deserve Misty’s personal kind of justice. They take a break in a small town in the middle of nowhere and Misty is attracted to someone that interests her. However someone else decides that Misty shouldn’t have ignored him and things take a turn that she didn’t expect… or want.

Misty is every bit the interesting, funny, and smart character that she was in the first work. She’s a bit older, perhaps a little more jaded about what has happened to her, but that can be chalked up to character growth and she seems to have done a lot of that in the time between stories about her. But in spite of all that she has been through, she’s still someone that that knows the difference between right and wrong and does everything she can to remember that.

The story doesn’t get Misty into any really hot erotic situations, though there are a few moments when she gets all worked up that I thought were really funny and cute at the same time. It’s more a story of the things that she has to deal with now that she is, after all, to others, a really sexy woman that they want to “get to know better.” This sets up a really unique moment of Misty riding a mechanical bull with a hidden secret that Misty isn’t going to soon forget. But it also puts her in the situation of being held captive by someone and then trying to find a way out. It’s during this part of the story that many questions about what she’ll do and what might happen come up. The way the work ends isn’t all that much of a surprise, considering Misty’s view of things and I’m glad that it wasn’t stereotypical, which it could have been very easily.

Many quirky, interesting, and at times, amusing characters dot the story, and it has the same humour that the first work had. The Professor is a source of much of that, as he was in the first book, and really I was smiling through the story when he appeared. It’s clear that Misty has picked up a lot of his mannerisms and humour as well which also makes the story better for that happening.

As much as I loved the first work in this series, the second just leaves something to be desired. The one thing that this work needs, more than anything else is a good editing. There are errors from the first page to the last and that took a lot of the enjoyment I had in finding another story about Misty away. They aren’t glaring errors or omissions by any means, but they just brought me to a halt every time I came across them and that shouldn’t have happened considering the work as a whole.

As such while it is a cute and fun story that I really liked, I just didn’t find I liked it as much as the first book. That’s a shame because the promise is there, and it comes very close to how much I enjoyed the first work in the series.

I’ll give this work three and a half pitchforks out of five.

There are just too many tense, word and punctuation errors that bothered me. Misty isn’t quite the same character as well, which is a shame really. I think too much time has passed between the author writing the first work and this one. Perhaps they will see a way to write another story about Misty in a shorter period of time…



Aug 01 2015

A cute Morrigan Aensland speed painting YouTube

Another interesting little YouTube of an artist creating some lovely Morrigan Aensland art this time on the Tale.

And if you cannot see the video here on the Tale, please try this link:

As well, here is the finished artwork in case YouTube deletes the video for whatever reason:

Morrigan Aensland by The Ink Monster

Morrigan Aensland by The Ink Monster

The artist calls themselves The Ink Monster and you can find the original page where this art is displayed here on Tumblr.

Really this is just a lovely work of art, especially like Morrigan’s eyes and smile most of all. Her expression is bordering on bemusement I think. Considering that’s one of my favourite expression, it’s rather obvious why I like this art so much…



Jul 31 2015

A Review of Magic and Metaphors by Dou7g and Amanda Lash

Magic and Metaphors by Dou7g and Amanda Lash

Magic and Metaphors by Dou7g and Amanda Lash

Catching up with my reviews of the works of the author Dou7g in the series called Succubus Temptations. You can find my reviews of the series here on the Talehere, herehere as well as here and here and also here. The previous two works in the series were reviewed here and here as well.

One of the things that really isn’t explored in a lot of series is how things work, especially when it comes to magic. That is a shame really because having the right teachers, and incentive, can make for a very cute and hot little lesson on its own…

The work tells of:

This is the next installment after Demons and Diplomacy. The two sides have reached a truce and Megan and Kendra attempt to help Amy learn magic.

The summary is a bit short, and I think it’s more like: “A truce keeps our heroes, and others, from coming to blows. In the meantime, Amy tries to learn magic, but doesn’t get anywhere until Megan and Kendra give her a ;tongue-lashing; to loosen her up… and everyone knows it.”

Another cute and funny piece of the series, focusing on Amy, who wants to be helpful and to be so is trying to find her way to the magic within her. Lorelei cannot seem to help her do so, but when Megan appears, and manages to get somewhere, more than just how to do magic is revealed. A lot about Megan herself, what she thinks about what she has done, how she feels about Edmond, and Amy’s attentions to him, also comes into play. This does expand Megan’s character a lot and I enjoyed that very much.

Kendra then appears, and the three become very close and personal in the lessons taught which marks the return of a little hot flash between the three that’s fun and sexy in many ways. Mixed into the erotica is a neat explanation of how magic works, and I couldn’t help but smile as Amy was taught her lessons.

There’s also some development in Edmund and Magus, telling about their thoughts, how they are dealing with what is happening, that I liked as well. Quite a lot of plot setup happens outside of the magic users having their fun and it’s an interesting contrast between the two threads in the story.

The work climaxes in more than one way, for several characters, but the last few pages allow the appearance of a twist in the plot that foretells some problems for our heroes. What happens to Magus in those pages is, honestly, some of the funniest passages in the work so far and just goes to show how literally some people can be.

A lovely pause between the conflicts and challenges our heroes face, some lovely character development and some light hearted erotica all make this wonderful. I think the turning of focus towards two characters who are new breathes life into things, makes the work stronger, and refocuses the series well.

Four out of five pitchforks.

There are storms on the horizon, how our heroes address them will be interesting to see…