Oct 20 2015

A Review of Nikki Noshit 2 by Nikki Lacroix

Nikki Noshit 2 by Nikki Lacroix

Nikki Noshit 2 by Nikki Lacroix

A story needs to have purpose. It cannot simply go around and around in circles looking for one, attempting to figure out what it wants to be talking about, what the characters will do, or won’t. It is never a good thing when the story seems to lose focus from the first turn of the page and never finds it by the time the story ends.

Not all stories about incubi need to be erotic, need to have sex scenes. They do need to have more than a fleeting interaction with them that is surrounded by internal monologue that is, quite simply, lost.

  • Title: Nikki Noshit 2
  • Author: Nikki Lacroix
  • Length: 40 Pages
  • Publishing Date: November 21, 2014
  • This work at Amazon.com

This work tells three stories:

Paranormal journalist Nikki Lacroix is back with her first taste of semi-fame after her last article was a success. Nikki Noshit 2 collects three of her best articles.

  • The Cross-dresser, The Cult, and The Mother: Nikki and her occult magician friend, Judah Black infiltrate one of the most powerful cults in North America.
  • Anne Rice Ruined Everything: Nikki is invited to New York City’s premiere underground vampire club, and quickly realizes everything is not as it seems to be.
  • The Incubus of Piertown: Nikki manages to snag and interview with one of Hell’s most devious demons: the seductive Incubus. Will she manage to resist it’s charms or fall victim?

As a whole this collection reads very much like a pulp fiction series of stories. They are short vignettes where the main character, Nikki, goes into the world in her role as a reporter and pokes around the supernatural beings that exist in that world. There is a lot of internal monologue by Nikki, which after a while becomes kind of stale and uninteresting. Nikki has attitude, there’s no doubt that she does and that attitude gets her places that otherwise she’d never get to which works well. I think however that listening to what seems to be at times a monotone of her thoughts takes away from the better, more involved parts of the collection.

In each work, it’s quite clear that the creatures and people that Nikki encounters are meant to be disliked, and it’s not hard to do so when most of them are very stereotypically evil in nature and action. This isn’t a collection of erotica, not by any means, and in truth if it was I think that would take away from the core story more than anything else. The stories are a mix of action/adventure for the most part with the story about the incubus being quite a lot different than the others in this collection.

A fairly strong mind control theme runs through the stories which comes in different varieties. That part of the stories works well and overall I thought the author managed those scenes and moments well. Mixed into this theme is, in one story, control for power, in another, control for horror, and in the last, control for sex. All of those instances read well and there was a good sense of how in each case that control manifested itself.

The last work in the collection has an Incubus, that is never named and really isn’t described all that well, but really that isn’t important to the story. It’s very much a struggle between two wills, each trying to get what they want and seeing where the weakness in the other is. Compared to the other works in the collection, this one is a lot more subtle in nature and I liked that more than the other works. The story doesn’t stray into anything erotic, teasing some reveals about Nikki herself but never really following through on them. It is a “discussion” and nothing more and that’s the problem. Nikki goes after the incubus to write a story and rather than getting much in the way of information or driving a point home, the story devolves. It becomes an internal struggle within Nikki that flashes into outrage before coming to a close and… just ending.

Come to think about it, all of the stories seem to end in a similar fashion. There is some action, some conflict and then, all of a sudden, it all comes to a close with a whimper compared to the rest of the story. While that might work for some, I didn’t feel like at the end of each story that I cared about Nikki all that much and that shouldn’t have been. She doesn’t need to be “Miss Wonderful” as there’s no point to that. But she could have been more than she appears to be. Being angry and forceful isn’t a personality, it’s a mood.

I will admit that I haven’t read any of the other works in the series, and there are a number of them, so as such I came into this work cold and not knowing Nikki’s background or anything else. It might have made a difference if I had, I’m not sure. Still, there has to be something to like about the main character of a series to enjoy and I just couldn’t find that.

I’m giving this work two and a half out of five pitchforks.

I just found this work as a whole… lost… missing something. There really wasn’t much action to the stories, really no character development for Nikki, save for a bit of story about her past when she was with the incubus. Being that the stories really read like old style pulp fiction that could have worked well, but there’s something missing, some life in the story that needs to be there to make it better. That doesn’t mean there needs to be anything erotic added, that wouldn’t help at all. I wish I could put my finger on exactly why the collection didn’t work for me.



Oct 19 2015

The Mirror By TeraS

There is someone for everyone … even those that are always within …


The Mirror
By TeraS


Except in a few times of dire trouble, there is but one way that Tera has ever been able to speak with her Tail: a mirror that her mother gave her so very long ago. To be clear, it is the only way that she remembers actually speaking with her other self. Her tailself sends the occasional message by holding up a sign on a stick, usually at a moment where a comment, even a rather odd one, can defuse things. Sometimes, Tera sees her in a dream, where the two are talking or doing other things, but when she awakes, there’s nothing to remember—for it was a dream, after, all wasn’t it?

But to actually see her other self, to speak with her, to see the look in her eyes, that smile that Tera knows and yet which isn’t quite her own, she needs the mirror. Looking into the mirror, Tera knows that she will see a redhead with black horns and tail that otherwise looks exactly like her.

But she isn’t Tera … not exactly.

Her name is Tail—at least, that is the name that she allows others to know. Her real name is known to only three people in all the universes. One is Tera’s mother; the second, Tera herself; and the third … a man named Baker.

None of them would ever speak her name out loud, not because they fear who Tail is, but rather because they respect that she made a choice. The choice was that who she was is not as important as who she is now and how things came to be.

It is said that those that forget the past are doomed to repeat it. Tail hasn’t forgotten. She knows, remembers, is aware of every single thing she has ever done, both the bad and the good, the moments of ecstasy and of despair, all of the moments that made of the life she once led.

The mirror stands in Tera’s bedroom, as it always has, always will. Tera can see into it, when she passes by, when she is in bed with her Eternal, and from a few other places in the room. The mirror reflects only what Tera sees around herself as well, but slightly different. There are reversed colours: red is black, black is red. There are also some differences that tell of Tail herself, where her thoughts are, what her needs are. Tail is, after all, so much more dominant in her personality than Tera, both because her life’s experience was so fiercely dominant in the past and because of what her goals in the here and now are. The mirror reflects that, sometimes, in the oddest ways when Tera isn’t there to see.

Sometimes, when Tera is not there to see, or hear, there are moments which only the mirror witnesses. Perhaps it is Tail, riding crop in hand, using it to raise the eyes of a particularly naughty pet to look at her and beg for forgiveness. Sometimes she is looking out through the mirror, out of the bedroom window that into Tera’s Realm, the one that can be seen from her own showing the same, if different; for, while Tera is the Queen of the Realm, Tail is the Queen of her own domain in the same way.

Perhaps, in that moment when Tail is looking into the Realm. she wonders what it would be like to be Tera, to not only know of her life, loves, passions, and gifts, but to experience them herself. Perhaps she smiles at the thought, brushing it to the side, sure that such things aren’t meant for someone like her.

But then—and this the mirror cannot really show—she sniffs the air and there is the scent of something. An aroma intrigues her, and she closes her eyes and enjoys the moment. A smile, unlike the one that normally she shows to the world, or even to Tera herself, appears.

She wonders what the fragrance might be, what it could be, but she knows who is responsible for capturing her senses … and more. For there is a secret, a very important one that only one soul in the universe knows: the mirror, isn’t just a mirror, not for the one that somehow found his way into her soul.

For all that the universes knows of Tail—her legend, the things she has been told of doing, the fears that she puts into others by just raising one eyebrow and smirking are legendary, after all—they expect her to be the opposite of Tera: to be aggressively dominant, controlling, demanding. They expect her to never to care about another, for that surely isn’t possible.

They are, of course, wrong.

What cannot be seen from the mirror, is a portal, off to the side, well out of view, that leads to a hallway in a home, quite like and unlike Tera’s own, in the human Realm. It isn’t exactly as quaint as Tera’s own, but then it is another reflection of Tail herself. The scent draws her further, the smirk giving way, ever so slightly, to a smile of expectation.

Turning a corner she sees her Baker in the midst of one of his own passions … other than her, of course. Or perhaps that is misleading. Perhaps it is more accurate to say that Baker’s passion is in helping her to learn there is more to life than she ever really knew.

For her Baker, this was completely normal. Teaching lessons to Tail was a bit of an issue, at first, as they never were quite the sort of thing that was covered in the recipe books … and, of course, Tail had never quite asked to be taught anything. Over time, the lessons were those that the two of them shared. The breaking of bread starts with the baking, of course, and it is in the baking that things are said, often without any words. Their relationship is different from any other in the worlds, and with it comes an understanding that the two of them share, and have shared for a long time now.

Tail finds Baker at work on his dough, and doesn’t say anything for a time, content to just look at him with that slight smirk, slowly turning into a smile. Then she quietly moves towards the counter, something between a nonchalant stroll and a hunter’s prowl, patting the rising dough with one hand and Baker’s hindquarters with the other. He turns and, as always, suggests that she could be of help instead, she replying with another pat—whether of dough or man varies with her mood—simply smiling at the fearlessness he has with her. In a flash, as he has in every lesson since the first (where she definitely did not smile), he pulls her between himself and the counter, standing behind her, wrapping around her, his hands guiding hers in kneading the loaf before them. Both of them end up somewhat flour-covered on the floor after extensive pushing, pulling, and twisting that isn’t limited to food preparation.

She thinks about how it is that they, two beings from two different worlds, different views … just … different … could find themselves in a relationship like this. She thinks, and her smile grows wider, and she licks her lips a bit: her Baker is working on sticky buns this morning. Sticky buns sound like an excellent idea …

The mirror is a mirror, in that the worlds on either side are different, polarized, not quite the same.

The mirror however, is just a portal. Nobody says it is impossible for one soul to find another. In fact, it is all about possible …

Oct 18 2015

A Review of Hell On Heels by Dou7g and Amanda Lash

Hell On Heels by Dou7g and Amanda Lash

Hell On Heels by Dou7g and Amanda Lash

Catching once more with my reviews of the author Dou7g of the series called Succubus Temptations. You can find my reviews of the series here on the Talehere, herehere as well as here and here and also here. The previous five works in the series were reviewed here and here and here and here. The work prior to this one today, can be found here reviewed as well.

Sometimes you have to run from a problem, and sometimes in running you find yourself meeting a bigger one. Decisions then are made, the choices are unclear, and where that takes you, and whether you have a choice, is the question.

The work tells of:

In this installment, things come to a head as Megan the mage, Kendra the red haired succubus and Lorelei the dark elf sorceress run headlong into the vampire Kiki.

Our three lovely talented women find themselves in a place where someone Megan really doesn’t like, Kendra once did, and Lorelei is amused by, calls her home. A bit of a misunderstanding, a deal made and then Helen has to make a choice. Does her accept Kendra’s offer of being a Succubus or not… and what happens after that. and to the friends they left behind?

This work is both an interlude and a quandary. While I do understand why Megan and everyone else left, and why they went where they did, there’s a certain level of confusion that seems to be running through all of them. Being that they all wound up meeting Kiki, the vampire, the one that Megan really has a problem with, there’s great deal of tension that swirls around all of the characters. How they come out of that is interesting and I thought the logic worked, but as for the price, or prices paid, that will be a problem to come.

To this point in the story, the only Succubus was Kendra, but she made an offer to Helen, if she’d be interested in becoming a Succubus, for reasons that, at the time made sense. In this work, that comes to a head and I think the funniest part was reading the parts of the contract she needs to sign. Some of them were, considering who’s thinking of signing up, just too funny. In the aftermath I though things were well told and I liked things as a whole, though I did wish for a bit more told about what Helen looks like, which remained vague. There was some succubus mind-control that I liked however and where that happened, and how it developed was cute too.

I mentioned conflict, and most of the work tells of the characters being in conflict with each other. At times it was less talking to than talking at, and some of the events that unfolded from that weren’t really a surprise. There’s a undercurrent of deal making that comes in conflict with each person’s goals, or need for revenge in some ways. The most telling moments were Megan’s, especially when Kiki appeared, and what Megan intended to do as she isn’t quite the same as she was the last time they met.

It is an adventure, setting up the rescue to come, and as such there’s a little bit of a Mission Impossible feel to this part of the series and I rather liked that. The mix of personalities, both in the ones we know and the new ones that appear, works well. It isn’t just a matter of arguing for the sake of it, or getting into a fight just because. There’s some history involved. Sometimes one forgets what really happened for what they see in the here and now.

The work needs some more editing, there are quite a number of spelling mistakes that I came across. That’s a shame because the story I think tells so much about all of the characters that appear in it. There’s something really good about knowing why they do what they are doing. Better when the reasons start to make sense.

Three and a half out of five pitchforks.

There’s a rescue to be carried out, the boys are in trouble. How that is going to turn out will either be a complete disaster, or a success. Either way, I feel like things are going to change for all of them… Whatever the case, things are different and how they all deal with that could be a problem.



Oct 18 2015

A Review of Succubus: Lusting for a Werewolf and Succubus: Taken by my Boyfriend’s Present by Sinn Lee

Succubus: Lusting for a Werewolf by Sinn Lee

Succubus: Lusting for a Werewolf by Sinn Lee

I am reviewing two works by the author Sinn Lee this time on the Tale as I think they are an interesting comparison of this author’s writing style. The first is Succubus: Lusting for a Werewolf and the second is Succubus: Taken by my Boyfriend’s Present. They are two rather different stories about two very different Succubi.

There are some Succubi that are very dominant and others that are more submissive in nature. The question that comes to each of them can be one of if they see what they want and if they are able to have that.

In the first, being dominant isn’t the answer to everything, but it is the start to something…


  • Title: Succubus: Lusting for a Werewolf
  • Author: Sinn Lee
  • Length: 14 Pages
  • Publishing Date: November 17, 2014
  • This work at Amazon.com

The story tells of:

A succubus is on the search for the perfect mate. Scouring the countryside for an elusive werewolf who seems to be giving the local populace some trouble. After months of searching and waiting, unable to fulfill her deepest desires, the succubus finally catches a hint of the werewolf’s location. Nothing will stand in her way to get what she wants from this primal creature.

The story is told from the perspective of the succubus herself and in doing so there is a lot revealed about her character, her wants and desires. But more importantly, it tells about her need. A need to have sex that actually becomes something that has a flavour. Human sex, according to her, isn’t satisfying, isn’t enough, and so she looks for a werewolf to feed upon.

She is, thankfully, a succubus that doesn’t kill, for the simple reason that doing so would not exactly make things simple for her. She does have a tail and horns, but otherwise seems to be human which is something else that I liked about her. But what really appealed was that she was intelligent, wasn’t the sort to make brash or silly decision and, more interestingly, she had the personality of a huntress looking for her prey.

When she finally finds the werewolf she’s seeking, the story becomes a bit complicated as it’s clear she is trying to direct the werewolf into doing things a certain way, and she tries to assert her dominance over him. But when the werewolf takes that role, she allows it, revels in his power and the ending is hot and suggests that while the werewolf might think he’s in control, the truth is much different.

Regrettably neither the Succubus or the werewolf’s name is revealed, though as a whole that isn’t core to the plot and for that matter in the case of the werewolf, he might not even have a name at that. There isn’t a lot of the power of the Succubus seen, though it is hinted at and suggested quite a lot. She does makes her horns and tail appear at one point when the werewolf is fulfilling her need however.

There is a good bit of heat in this work, though it is a hot flash, a little vignette of a story that tells of an encounter. The story lays out a good path to the encounter and when that arrives, the erotica is well written and I liked those moments as a whole. But it is a short work and with all of the build up at the beginning, once the climax is past and the story comes to a close I wanted more, which the ending hinted at. I think I could see this as being the opening chapter to a story and things going from here… It would work well really.

Three and a half pitchforks out of five.

A good hot flash with the story to back that up, it just needs to be longer or made into a story from here.


Succubus: Taken by my Boyfriend's Present by Sinn Lee

Succubus: Taken by my Boyfriend’s Present by Sinn Lee

The second work is a mix of themes. Discovery, submission and, to a point, entrapment. For some the last of these can go both ways and then some. The question then is, who is in control, why are they, and is it what they wanted or did they want something else in reality? After all, reality is what you make it, and hiding that away can have consequences…


  • Title: Succubus: Taken by my Boyfriend’s Present
  • Author: Sinn Lee
  • Length: 14 Pages
  • Publishing Date: November 20, 2014
  • This work at Amazon.com

The story tells of:

Sandra has kept her succubus blood a secret from everyone. It’s never been a problem, until her boyfriend binds a powerful futanari demoness named Azel, and sends her home as a bodyguard for Sandra. Her boyfriend has no idea about Sandra’s succubus blood, or the fact that Sandra won’t be able to control or subdue the demoness Azel. Sandra will be powerless to the demoness’s naughty intentions for her, as her succubus blood is gradually awoken.

Sandra is, at least, partly a succubus, but she’s managed to keep that hidden from the world and more importantly her boyfriend. Unfortunately Greg, meaning to protect her, binds Azel, a demoness to her. The problem is that the spell is meant for a human… and Sandra isn’t.

Sandra,while having some part of her being a succubus, isn’t really one as a whole. She’s really more human and as such, she has no horns, tail or other succubus features to her. However, over the course of the story her sexual drives are ramped up and as such her needs become very succubus-like. Sandra is, for all intents, ensnared in a trap that Azal springs on her and really there wasn’t a way for her to avoid having her succubus side awakened.

As this happens, it is clear that Sandra had a very submissive personality which Azal, the demoness of the story, plays upon. Once Sandra is transformed, it isn’t just that she undergoes a physical and sexual change, it’s that her personality, her willpower, really a lot of who she is gets buried under a submissive nature that overwhelms everything else she is, or remembers.

Azal isn’t quite a stereotypical demoness and, in a way, she’s more of a succubus than Sandra is in the story. It’s clear that Azal wants Sandra, is willing to use whatever means she needs to in order to make that happen, and if that takes a bit more than Sandra would expect from her, then that’s exactly what she does. Azal is futanari in nature, which means that Sandra’s succubus nature is drawn to both sides of her physical form. But somehow Azal’s dominant nature I think was a bigger draw to capture Sandra and the playing of that theme in the work was really well done.

The work is a hot flash, quite a good one in that it isn’t violent or has a lack of passion in it. There is a need, really in both characters, that is fulfilled in the story and that’s nice to see here. The buildup to the erotica lays out a really interesting back story for Sandra and that isn’t forgotten as the erotica takes over the story, which I thought made it better. Once past the climax and some of the aftermath was told, there still was a hint of things working out in the end for everyone in some shape or form which was nice as well.

There is one very minor mistake in the story where Azel is referred to as being “he” in one sentence, but it’s the only error that tripped me up in the work. Otherwise it is a well written hot flash, but, as is often with this author, the story really reads like the first chapter in a longer story. It would be nice to see this author write something more involved and longer as their worlds and characters are really well done.

Four pitchforks out of five.

An interesting story about dominance and submission and all of the things that go wrong and right. Just wish there was more story than this little flash gave…



Oct 17 2015

An Artist’s Morrigan Aensland WIP YouTube

I’ve noticed that it is, and this really surprises me, actually quite difficult to find many artists that draw or paint using traditional methods. The reasons for that are many and varied, but while that is true, it also makes the appearance of art done with marker, pencil and brush all that more captivating for me. I found a lovely YouTube of an artist named Kitty who shared her process in creating some lovely Morrigan Aensland art this time on the Tale…

If you cannot see this video on the Tale, please try this link:


The artist shared this completed work on their DeviantArt account as well, and you can find that completed image here on their page there. But, in case the image isn’t there any longer, or the Youtube for that matter, here is the completed artwork…


Morrigan Fan Art by Studio Gemblee (Kitty)


I think this art of Morrigan is just adorable… What really makes this art work for me the most is Morrigan’s expression, the look in her eyes and, oddly enough, her eyelashes that just add that bit of flair that i think is so much a part of her character. Gorgeous detail in her wings and outfit and while her body is slightly cartoonish in form, I don’t think it is overdone or looks silly…

Which Morrigan really never should be…



Oct 16 2015

Lost Girl really needs some mothballs and pest repellent…

One of the things that has been nagging at me since Trick’s passing was the fate of the Dal Riata. Now, at least to me, I could see Bo taking it over and it makes sense. Much of that is her unaligned status, but more so, it just would be the right way to bring the series around full circle. We first met Bo when she was tending bar and the last image of the series would be her during the same thing, but not in being alone, but rather being surrounded by family and friends,

There’s symmetry to that and I like that idea. Now, that didn’t happen of course, we have Dyson taking over the bar… wth Mark. This really feels like another slap in the face, and there’s been a lot of those in the past while that have taken a lot of what I liked from the series out of it. I still don’t like Mark, and that goatee thing he’s got now just makes me roll my eyes.

That said, I have to also rant a bit over how this episode connects to the previous one. As most will recall, Bo was not responsive at the end of the previous episode. Then we return in this one to find her still the same, an unknown amount of time having passed. But, better yet, there comes an explanation that Bo’s condition is what it is, because she was bitten by a moth. But that’s not the end of it. Even better, it seems that the moth came from the funeral home where Trick’s body had been, and Bo was bitten there. Still the train wreck of plot continues when Dyson looks at Bo’s clothing to find the clue they need, which he does, and clearly says that the clothing was what Bo wore when Dyson found her. This just is a complete mess and whomever the writer is didn’t even, it seems, look at the previous episode to make a reasonable connection.

I can’t suspend my disbelief when the issue is so large that poking one whole in it blows up the entire episode. Was this on purpose? A need to somehow wrap things together because the episode needed to go in a certain direction? Whatever it was, it was simply awfully done.

Then we come to the entire Wizard of Oz dynamic in this episode. It didn’t work. To be honest, if I wasn’t writing the detailed summaries as I do, I would have fast forwarded through, every time that Bo was being Dorthy. As I see it, this just was well over half an episode wasted on a plot and theme that didn’t add all that much to the series as a whole. However, the balance of the episode, the interactions with Lauren, Dyson, Tamsin and Vex were very good, if at times seeming very forced, that I think that I’ll blame that on the writing.

I have the feeling that Hades has made several major errors in this episode. The first is bringing Kenzi back to Bo. Just by doing that alone, Bo’s determination to overcome him, to protect Kenzi, will mean that Bo will not give up. The second is when he attacked Vex to leave a message as he put it. What was the point of it? It sort of reminds me of Kirk telling Khan that he’s a lousy marksman and he keeps missing the target. In Hades’ case, he keeps missing the point. Ticking off Bo will not, in the end, result in good things for him. At least I hope so.

Lately, it seems that in every episode, at least one character finds a bad end, this week’s being Vex and that brings up a point. Why is it that every series now has to go and kill off so many characters of late in ways that leave a foul taste? I’ve noticed that there’s less people commenting about the series, caring about it of late. There should have been a build up to the series finale and there isn’t. What we are getting feels like a series of disconnected ideas that were found in the back of the series guide that were rejected. There were three additional episodes given. Three chances to actually bring the series tension up, tell the stories of the characters fully, and to give the series a proper direction towards the ending. It didn’t happen.

There’s not much time left. Sadly, the promise given was never played out as it could have been.

The fourteenth episode of the fifth season, also episode seventy-five of the Lost Girl TV series was this week. Bo gets intimate with a moth and then learns there’s no place like home, except when home isn’t the safest place to be. Dyson gets lost along the way, takes a wrong turn and then finds he has a new home. Lauren loses her mind over not having the answers while Tamsin can’t deal with her new body shape well. And Vex finds his way only to find that all paths have some sharp edges.

Lost Girl Logo

This is the fourteenth review of the fifth season of of Lost Girl. A summary of this episode has been added to the SuccuWiki, but won’t be adding my commentary to the articles there as that is what the Tale is for….

When Bo is lost, and wearing pigtails, she has to……


Follow The Yellow Trick Road


The episode opens with a recap of the preceding episode including: Tamsin in the shower, realizing her hair is falling out, then Lauren performing an ultrasound and discovering that Tamsin is pregnant with Hades’ child. Aife escaping from the Fae institution while Trick explains to Bo that Aife had escaped. Bo, Lauren, Tamsin and Dyson at Hades’ cell in the aftermath of Hades’ escape, Dyson noting that first Aife escaped, then Hades did so. Hades and Aife are then seen together, Aife telling Bo that they are back together. Bo then warning Aife whatever her plan is, it is dangerous. Trick then confronting Hades in an attempt to stop him from taking Aife away. Bo then discovering that Hades had killed Aife, Trick about to die as well, then Dyson coming to find Trick and Aife dead, Bo kneeling a their side, not responsive to Dyson’s attempts to get her attention.

The episode begins with Bo (Anna Silk) laying in bed, seemingly having a nightmare, she dressed similarly to Dorthy from the Wizard of Oz, the rest of the world begin seen in shades of grey, Bo’s red checkerboard dress and red bows on her pigtails being the only colours to be seen. Bo then startles awake and looks around the room, seeing no one there. Bo looks around the room in confusion, noticing that the world around her is grey and not understanding why. Bo calls out Tamsin’s name, but there is no reply. Finding her cellphone, Bo attempts to call Lauren, but only Lauren’s voicemail answers. As Bo listens to the voicemail message, she sees herself in a mirror and looks at herself in disbelief, seeing her red checkerboard dress, hair in pigtails and bows, for the first time. After a moment, Bo comments to herself: “I just woke up in a Lucy rerun.”

The scene then changes to an intersection underneath a bridge where a traffic light changes as Bo pulls up in her car. As Bo waits for the traffic to move, she makes another call on her cellphone, this time to Dyson, but the phone rings and he does not pick up. Bo then honks the horn of her car, calling out: “Grey means go!” Getting out of her car, Bo looks into the car in front of her and realizes that it is empty. Bo then checks several other cars in line, and every one of them is abandoned. As she looks around her, Bo comments: “I am so not in Kansas anymore.”

After the opening credits, we return to a closeup image of a memorial for Trick in Bo’s home and moments later Bo is seen to be unconscious in bed, with Lauren (Zoie Palmer) monitoring her vital signs, Dyson (Kristen Holden-Ried) entering with Tamsin (Rachel Skarsten), Dyson telling Lauren that he has barred the windows and doors, explaining that they need to take precautions before they decide on their next move against Hades. When Dyson asks about Bo, Lauren answers: “I’ve run a renal dialysis plus a coma cocktail. She shows complete lack of responsiveness to stimulation.” Tamsin, who is showing advanced signs of her pregnancy asks how long Bo can remain as she is and Lauren explains: “Not very long.” When Lauren postulates what happened, in the aftermath of Trick and Aife’s deaths, Dyson interrupts: “Her mind couldn’t stand the trauma.” Dyson then warns that all of them need to remain on guard against Hades, noting: “he could be anywhere. No one leaves this house alone.” Tamsin replies: “Buddy system. I’ll got Bo.” Dyson answers: “We all got Bo.” Lauren adds: “That’s right. Voices, smells, touch. The more interaction we give her the greater her chance for recovery.” Dyson grimly looks at Bo: “She’ll recover. She has to.” Lauren asks Dyson when he last slept, Dyson answering: “Probably the same time you did.” Dyson then leaves to check over the house again, to be sure all is well, Tamsin reminding him to check the attic as well. After Dyson leaves, Tamsin tells Lauren: “He’s still carrying around Trick’s will.” When she wonders if Dyson has read it, Lauren replies: “Doubtful. He’s still grieving.” Tamsin offer to look after Bo if Lauren wants to leave, but Lauren replies: “Tamsin, you should be resting.” Tamsin explains: “I’m pregnant, not made of glass. Go on. It’ll give you a chance to figure this out.” Lauren sighs that she has had no luck so far as she picks up one of her Fae medical books, then adds that if anything changes with Bo, Tamsin should call for her. After Lauren leaves, Tamsin tells Bo: “You have no idea what I’d kill for a drink right now.”

The scene then shifts to Bo in her mindscape where she is seen punching a vending machine in an attempt to get a soda. Giving up, Bo begins to walk down the street and when she sees an alleyway comments: “The part of the movie when the girl goes down the creepy alley… all alone…” As she turns the corner, someone that looks like Tamsin jumps out and sprays Bo with mace causing her to shriek out loud: “Oh my god, what are you doing?” Not-Tamsin replies: “I’m sorry but aren’t you the one following me in a creepy alley?” Bo asks why not-Tamsin is dressed like a real estate agent and is told: “I could say the same thing about you. Pigtails huh? You’re really leaning out.” When Bo asks if it is Tamsin, she is told: “If you need a property, you need a good person.” and then is handed a card which makes Bo comment: “You’re a real estate developer? You don’t even pay rent!” Bo is told that she has not-Tamsin confused with someone else, and then not-Tamsin introduces herself as “Thomasina” to Bo’s surprise. Bo whispers: “And I’m dreaming.” As Thomasina puts her card away, she comments: “Standing up? I thought only horses did that.” Bo then explains: “I’m asleep and you are downstairs making waffles.” As Bo slaps her cheek, Thomasina replies: “That’s highly unlikely as I am vowed allergic to gluten.” Thomasina then turns to leave, but Bo runs after her, asking if she is dreaming, where everyone in the city is. Thomasina explains: “Well, when the Pyrippus came, the colony cleared out. Which is why I am bulldozing. Everyone needs a legacy.” She then waves her hands at the buildings and explains: “Thomasina towers.” Bo looks at one of the alleyway and sees a mural of a winged horse, commenting: “The Pyrippus? I thought it just represented the Lord of Darkness.” When Bo adds “My father” Thomasina becomes upset and tries to get her mace out once more. Bo stops her, explaining: “No, I don’t know yet, but I know he’s evil. Which is why I need to wake up and get back to my life!” Thomasina ponders: “Well it sounds like you need the Maestro. He knows everything.” Bo asks where she can find him and Thomasina tells Bo: “He’s slightly inaccessible.” Bo then asks for Thomasina’s help but she refuses and starts to walk away. Bo then takes hold of Thomasina’s hand asking: “What if I insist?” and attempting to use her powers, but they have no effect and Thomasina brushes Bo’s hand away. Bo then tells Thomasina that she will help, even if Bo has to force her to, but this only makes Thomasina hit Bo with her purse.

Back in the real world, Bo remains unconscious as Lauren returns to the room where Tamsin is still watching Bo. Lauren gives Tamsin a drink, explaining: “There’s not a lot about Valkyrie pregnancies so I went with old faithful. Folic acid.” Tamsin takes the drink from Lauren and thanks her. Lauren continues: “I will say that Valkyrie pregnancies accelerate much faster.” When Tamsin is silent, Lauren adds: “You can’t ignore it Tamsin.” Tamsin tells Lauren: “Don’t call yourself an it Lauren. You’re a person.” Lauren explains that she doesn’t know how Tamsin is feeling, and Tamsin replies that she doesn’t. Lauren presses on, telling Tamsin: “This won’t take care of itself.” Tamsin whispers: “Neither will Bo. So as much as I appreciate the pep talk, I’d rather you just focus on her. Leave me alone Lauren.” Lauren replies: “I don’t want to leave you alone.” When Tamsin tells Lauren she isn’t asking, Lauren tells her: “Fine. I’ll go. But let me make one thing very clear to you. You will never be alone. Not ever, not with this. Please don’t ignore what happened Tamsin. Please?” Tamsin says nothing, looking away from Lauren until Lauren leaves the room. After Lauren is gone, Tamsin tells Bo: “I have no idea what she is talking about.”

Back in Bo’s mindscape, Thomasina continues down the alleyway with Bo following her, trying to explain: “Just because my father is evil doesn’t mean that I am and what about you Miss Disaster Capitalism? Thomasina replies: “I’m not evil, I’m an opportunist!” Bo points out that Thomasina is alone as well, asking why “everyone left the colony without you. Why?” Thomasina brushes this off explaining: “I didn’t want to go.” Bo wonders: “Or maybe you didn’t have anyone to go with.” Tamsin answers bluntly: “Well, we’re born alone and we die alone.” Bo sighs: “That’s pretty heartless.” Tamsin shrugs: “Heart is overrated.” Bo wonders if Thomasina believes this because someone broke hers. This causes Thomasina to stop and look at Bo, asking how Bo knew that happened, Bo replies: “Let’s just say I’m really good at reading people.” Bo then wonders if the Maestro can help Thomasina as well, but Thomasina insists that she’s fine and doesn’t need to, but then asks Bo how she knew that Thomasina didn’t like being alone. Bo tells her: “Because nobody does. Not all the time.” Bo again asks Thomasina for help but she tells Bo that she cannot because: “You need to follow the red brick road and only ‘the one’ can see it.” Bo replies: “The one? I might be able to help with that.” Thomasina asks: “How are you going to see red?” Bo pauses a moment, then explains: “I’ve seen it before. I just have to remember it.” Bo then mulls to herself: “Okay. Red. Red. Apples are red, cherries are red. Cyndi Lauper’s hair, red.” Bo closes her eyes and thinks to herself: “What else is red?” In the next moment, there are flashing of the events when Bo found Trick and Aife’s bodies, and then the scene shifts to Bo and Thomasina standing in the middle of an open field. Thomasina asks Bo what she saw and Bo replies that she doesn’t know, looking in front of her to a sidewalk in the middle of the field made of bricks. Bo is then confused in how they arrived where they are, before the bricks in front of Bo begin to turn various shades of reed, moving off into the distance, and at a fork in the road, the red reveals the correct way to go is to the right. Bo smiles, telling Thomasina: “It worked” before starting to walk along the path shown to her. As Bo does so, Thomasina touches her stomach, then follows after Bo when she is called, asking Bo: “Are you sure? I don’t see anything.”

Back in the real world, Tamsin is still sitting beside Bo. Tamsin then touches her stomach and stands with a confused look. She calls out for Lauren, telling her that something isn’t right. When Lauren enters, and asks what’s wrong, thinking it is about Bo, Tamsin explains: “It feels like a fish, or an eel.” Lauren touches Tamsin’s baby bump and whispers: “It’s moving.” Tamsin and Lauren both whisper: “Holy shit.” Tamsin looks at Lauren and manages: “I’m having a baby.” Across the room, one of the monitors for Bo begins to sound an alarm, Lauren rushing over to see what it is. Lauren tells Tamsin: “The IV can’t do it alone. She needs to feed.” When Tamsin asks if Bo is becoming weaker, Lauren replies: “If we don’t wake her up soon, Bo’s going to starve to death.”

Following the first commercial break, we return to find Vex (Paul Amos) and Mark (Luke Bilyk) entering Bo’s home, carrying stacks of books. Dyson approaches them and angrily asks: “What part of staying in the clubhouse did you two not understand?” Mark tells Dyson they were not followed and when asked why they risked their lives, Mark explains: “Trick’s books, I thought they could help with Bo.” Vex agrees saying: “Oh yeah. More than once he opened up these bad boys and presto, the answer was there. Very useful.” Dyson unhappily tells them both: “These books were his and they belong in his lair.” Mark tells Dyson: “Not if they can help us. I mean, Trick’s gone but someone needs to step up.” Dyson harshly tells Mark: “And suddenly you can read ancient scripture, is that it?” Mark sighs, tells Dyson: “Forget it.” and walks away. After Mark leaves, Vex tells Dyson: “He’s mourning too you know.” Dyson sighs and answers: “Trick was always better at dealing with him than I am.” Vex tells Dyson: “Well, Trick was better at dealing with everyone better than you.” As Dyson moves to lock and bar the front door, Dyson answers: “It’s probably because he believed in people. Bo more than anyone.” Vex points out: “And you. Listen, it’s none of my business but, not looking at those books isn’t going to change anything Dyson.” Dyson’s only answer is: “I gotta check on Bo” as he leaves.

Back in Bo’s mindscape, Bo and Thomasina are lost in a forest, Thomasina commenting at a series of red markers on the trees around them: “Stupid tree nymphs, they’re always messing with these.” Bo sighs: “Well, that explains the going around in circles, the Blair Witch vibe however…” As they stand in the grove of trees, the word “Pyrippus” is heard being whispered over and over again. Thomasina sighs: “Great. Talking trees” and Bo wonders why she feels like they are being watched. Thomasina replies the she always feels like she is being watched and after making a sly comment about her outfit, Thomasina wonders if they Pyrippus is watching them and when Bo says she has no idea, Thomasina rants: “Great, I’m going to die in the woods with a girl that wears gingham.” Bo sighs: “How did I find a meaner Tamsin?” as someone walks up behind the two of them. When they snap a tree branch, Bo uses Thomasina’s mace and sprays the new arrival with it, he yelling out in surprise. Bo is shocked when she realizes that it seems to be Dyson, but he introduces himself as: “Sargent Major Nosyd of the 67th Division, Operation Pyrippus Watch. Are you aware that you are in a restricted military area?” Bo sighs: “Let me guess, you aren’t Dyson.” Nosyd replies: “Like the vacuum cleaner? No sir. Unfortunately you will have to be prosecuted to the full extent of the law.” Thomasina tells him: “Okay, relax Private Ryan. We didn’t know.” When Bo asks where the rest of his people are, Nosyd explains: “They moved on.” Bo puzzles over this, wondering why one soldier would be left to watch the area, that he has no gun, or supplies, but again, his answer is: “They moved on.” then adding: “I didn’t move with them.” Bo is shocked as she whispers: “You’re a deserter, you’re not protecting this forest, you’re hiding from the Pyrippus.” Nosys admits that Bo is correct and he was too scared to look for the Pyrippus as the rest of his men were, adding: “You have no idea what it is like to be responsible for the safety of the colony.” Bo sighs: “Oh? Really? You don’t think so? You know what? This place is getting on my nerves.” Thomasina replies: “Don’t look at me, everything was fine until Dances with Wolves showed up.” Bo rants: “Everyone here looks like someone they’re not! You’re all afraid of something you don’t even know and the only person that could help me is some mysterious Maestro that no one knows how to get to!” Nosyd tells Bo that he knows the way, or rather that someone that does know the way at least. Before Bo can ask questions, there is a banging noise which confuses her.

Back in the real world, Dyson is tapping his finger as he sits with Bo. After a long moment, Dyson admits: “First I failed Trick. Now I’m failing you. Please Bo, if you can hear me, tell me what I can do. How can I help you? I’ll do anything…”

In Bo’s mindscape, Nosyd continues: “…but I won’t do that. Neither should you, it’s too dangerous.” Thomasina insists that he is lying, but he continues: “I know the Maestro is the keeper of the secrets and sanctuary.” Bo smiles: “Of course! If you’re Tamsin and you’re Dyson then the Maestro’s Trick!” Nosyd tells Bo: “I’m flattered you want my help, but like you said I’m just a deserter. You need someone braver.” Bo tells him that he is right, turns away and tells Thomasina they are leaving. Nosyd calls out: “Wait! You’ll get lost and you can’t catch your own food!” Bo shrugs: “Well, I guess we’ll just starve to death.” Thomasina laughs: “Speak for yourself” then whispers to Nosyd: “I’m going to Donner Party that shit.” Nosyd tells Bo she will not find the Maestro without a guide and Bo agrees, noting that “my sense of smell is terrible” as she and Thomasina turn to leave. Nosyd calls out for them to stop, adding that he will go with them, but only if: “You promise to do it my way.” Bo agrees: “You’re the sergeant.” Nosyd is surprised, asking: “You’ll follow my lead?” Bo smiles: “Trust me when I tell you I’ve been waiting for this day.” Bo offers her hands to both as she asks: “Off to see the Maestro?” As they hold hands, Bo hears Dyson’s voice from the real world, calling to her, but neither Nosyd or Thomasina can hear him. Bo explains: “My friends know that I’m asleep! They can’t wake me up!”

Back in the real world, Dyson continues to call out to Bo, asking her to wake up as Lauren enters the room with some test results which show that Bo has some toxins in her blood that Lauren does not recognize as she has not seen them before and has no idea how to treat Bo for them. Dyson looks at a bag of clothing that Bo wad found unresponsive in earlier and begins to examine them for clues. Lauren tells Dyson: “You know you didn’t fail Trick right?” Dyson replies: “I was his lieutenant Lauren. I should have had his back.” Lauren insists that there was nothing that Dyson could have done but he tells her: “I could have saved him.” The two look at each other for a long moment, then Dyson returns to examining Bo’s clothing until he discovers a small hole cut into the clothing. Dyson comments: “Looks like something bit Bo” and Lauren replies: “This could be the source of our toxins.” Dyson carefully picks up one of Trick’s books and tells Lauren: “Now we just have to figure out where they came from.”

After another commercial break, Dyson is reading from one of Trick’s books and reveals that Bo has been bitten by a Shtriga moth, noting that it: “feeds off pain and suffering, victims of traumatic events.” Vex is surprised, commenting: “She’s been bitten by a bloody moth?” while Lauren explains: “We think we brought it back from the funeral home in Trick’s flowers.” Tamsin comments as she looks at a picture in the book that Dyson is holding: “I’v seen that moth here. I thought it was just because it was musty as hell.” Dyson explains they need to find the moth because only the Shtriga can cure the one it has bitten.” When Tamsin asks how the same moth can are Bo, Dyson reveals: “By spitting Bo’s blood back into her mouth. We just have to wait until it resumes human form.” When Lauren asks how long that could be, Dyson answers: “I don’t know, but it says here that without the Shtriga, Bo will die. We have to find that moth.”

Back in Bo’s mindscape, the three travellers arrive at an elevator in the middle of a field, Nosyd insisting that the scent he has been following leads to it. Bo comments: “An elevator pod in the middle of the forest. Move over Bill and Ted.” Thomasina adds: “Well, if I was a Maestro, I would live in a penthouse too.” Bo whispers: “Penthouse. Dad? Is the Maestro you?” before entering the elevator. After a moment, Nosyd follows, then Thomasina.

Returning to the real world, Lauren is angry at herself as she sighs: “Great. I’ve tried Atropine to stop the poison. No change. Which brings us to steroid cocktails. Or the whim of a moth.” As Lauren works to set up an IV, she continues to rant: “Graduated top of my class, summa cum laude, and I can’t even resolve a simple bug bite! Or do anything at all apparently! Ancient Far cures, spitting moths, when will it end! Why can’t I cure you!” Lauren hits the side of Bo’s bed, crying out to her: “Oh come on Bo! Bo stay with me please! Hold on!”

Once more in Bo’s mindscape, Bo and her companions arrive at the penthouse and exit the elevator, Thomasina in the lead, Bo second and Nosyd third. When Bo comments that she doesn’t like the situation, Nosyd asks why but Bo does not answer, Thomasina calling the place “the bomb” and Nosyd commenting: “I think she means the bong.” As Bo looks around, Nosyd points out: “The is Nepenthe, the Grecian drug of forgetfulness.” Bo says nothing, having another flashback of finding Trick and Aife dead before she whispers: “We should go. If the Maestro lives here, I don’t think I want to meet him.” Bo is then told to stop by what seems to be Lauren, in dreadlocks, holding a gun with a crazed look in her eyes, who adds: “Dude, if you’re here for the kegger, I’m gonna need the secret password.” Not-Lauren continues: “Hey! Nice braids!” before putting the gun in her mouth and pulling the trigger, revealing it to be a water gun, adding: “I love fruit punch. It’s kinda like the wine of punches except I hate wine, unless of course it’s beer. But then it’s not really wine, it’s more beer.” Bo whispers: “Please tell me you’re not the Maestro.” Not-Lauren asks: “Did you want to buy a didgeridoo?” Nosyd then introduces Bo to Lola, who he says: “can guide us to the Maestro.” Lola sighs: “Could. Until I lost the map. Bummer. Do you ever think like, oh shit, I forgot to put my pants on, but then you’re like, no, I didn’t? Cause, you know, there’s on?” Lola walks off as Bo asks Nosyd: “The map’s got to be around here somewhere.” Nosyd tells Bo he’ll look in the kitchen while Bo sighs: “And I’ll take the Earth Mother” as she looks at Lola who is eating brownies. She comments: “People say this stuff isn’t medicinal, but they’re wrong because this brownie is like Joey Lawrence, whoa!” Bo asks Lola if she is sick, and is told: “I have too many thoughts about what I should do.” Bo smiles: “Overanalyzing. I know someone like that.” Lola points at the brownies and explains: “And this stuff makes it all go away!” Bo tells her: “Except it doesn’t make it go away, it just makes things foggy.” Bo then suddenly realizes where the map is, telling Lola: “It’s in your head” which makes Lola panic and tell Bo to “get it out!” Bo tells Lola she has to remember, but Lola tells Bo: “I can’t! I don’t know anything!” Bo tells Lola she can and: “You’re a smart girl!” Lola then wonders: “Hey? How did you get in here?” but Bo presses on, telling her: “Work with me. Admit it, you already have the answer. It’s just not where you normally look, now think!” Lola agrees, closing her eyes and scrunching up her nose in thought for a moment before gasping: “I got it! It’s all…”

Back in the real world, Lauren is holding a book and continues: “… in here. We don’t have to wait for the moth to resume human form to get the spit. We’re gonna fast track its transformation.” When asked by Dyson as to how, Lauren explains: “According to these books, the Shtriga’s transformation into human form can be accelerated.” Tamsin then asks if that is by a magic potion, and Lauren continues: “By an elixir. It’s mainly spices, garlic, but I can inject it.” Tamsin asks Lauren: “Since when do you opt for storybook over science?” and Dyson replies: “I guess there’s a little Trick in all of us.” Tamsin wonders: “So we are going to get this moth lady to hork into Bo’s mouth how exactly?” Lauren shrugs: “We’re going to hold her down until she does it.” Tamsin smiles: “Tammy’s time to shine.” Dyson points out: “We haven’t even caught the thing yet. How do we do that?” Lauren replies: “We lure it. What attracts a moth?” Dyson nods: “I’ll get the flashlights.” Tamsin nods: “I’ll get the guys.”

After still another commercial break, we return to Mark and Vex searching in the attic, Vex commenting: “Trick’s gone, Hades is on a rampage and what are we doing? Moth hunting.” Mark sighs: “I actually can’t believe that Trick’s gone. I mean, what happens to the colony without an Ash?” Vex replies that he doesn’t know, adding: “I never really bought into the Ash thing myself.” Mark comments: “But you bought into The Morrigan.” Vex chuckles: “Yeah, well, Absinthe bottle service, pixie dust off a nymph’s naughty bits… How could I say no? But things change.” Mark wonders: “The man with two faces?” Vex tells him: “You’ve been hanging around Dyson too long, you have. I mean, lemme guess, what’s next? I’m a no good Dark Fae? A traitor? Is that it?” Mark tells Vex he doesn’t know, then ask Vex: “Are you?” Vex sighs: “I haven’t exactly got the face of an angel have I? You wanna know if I am full of regret, is that it?” Mark answers: “If you’ve actually done the things I’ve heard. Guess I just wanna know if you’re sorry.” Vex is silent, then replies: “From the bottom of my rotten, aching, repugnant soul… You wanna know if I’m sorry? With every fibre.” Mark nods: “Let’s get back to the moth hunt.”

Back in Bo’s mindscape, Bo and her companions enter a space full of mirrors, Bo asking Lola if she is sure they are in the right place. There are echoes of voices as Bo calls out “Hello?” before she wonders: “Where is everybody?” Nosyd then asks: “They were right behind us.” A voice then calls out, which is revealed to be Not-Vex, having two faces as he asks: “In the name of the Guardian of the Gate, who dares to see the Maestro without first paying the toll?” Bo comments: “Vex, always the two-face.” Nosyd calls out: “What are you doing to her?” as Bo looks into a mirror, telling him: “It won’t let me look away!” Not-Vex (Who in the subtitles is called Maestro and will be referred to as such from here on) continues: “Ever hear the one about the soul sucking mirror?” Nosyd moves to shatter the mirror holding Bo, but Maestro warns: “I wouldn’t do that if I were you. Broken mirror without the toll, always equals a broken soul.” Nosyd then moves to attack Maestro which then makes his other face speak: “Oh, no, no, no, this isn’t right! Brother is meant to be on the front, not me!” The faces switch, and the first asks: “Where is he! Here wolfie…” Bo then calls out: “Thomasina! I thought we lost you!” Thomasina calls out Bo’s name, then turns to the second face of Maestro and asks: “Please, you must help us, your brother won’t let us pass.” He answers: “I can’t! Brother never listens to me. I’m not supposed to speak to the travellers…” The first face takes over again, warning: “Oh do shut up will you? Always whining. Now, where were we?” Thomasina speaks to Maestro: “I used to be like you, ignoring the voice in the back of my head telling me to listen to my heart.” He replies: “Funny thing heart. I don’t have one.” Thomasina tells him: “But your brother does and he can hear me. He knows that this is wrong.” The first face cries out: “Oh! He’s taking me over!”, but then laughs at his own joke, asking: “You really didn’t think that would work did you?” The faces switch again and the second tells Thomasina: “Please! You must hurry if you want to see your friends! You saw me where I never was, and where I could not be and yet within that very place. my face you often see! Go! Hurry!” Lola whispers: “The toll’s a riddle! He’s showing us who we really are! Nosyd’s brave. Thomasina’s heart is big!” Bo adds: “And Lola, you’re smart. The answer’s right in front of us. It’s a reflection!” The mirrors all shatter, revealing a red curtain in front of Bo, and a pull cord hanging beside her. Bo looks at the cord and comments: “I am seriously ready to meet the man behind the curtain.”

Bo pulls the cord and finds herself entering the Dal Riata, which is empty save for a hooded figure. Bo approaches them and asks: “Trick? You have no idea how long I have been searching for you.” The figure lowers their cowl and it is revealed to be Bo herself who tells her: “I’m glad you came. I’ve been waiting for me.” Bo whispers: “No. How? You’re supposed to be…” Then all of the events of Bo finding Trick and Aife dead come back to Bo, unlike the rest of the episode, in colour. Bo whispers as her other self holds her: “No Trick. Please.” Her other self tells her: “Only when the Master is gone, can you become the Master.” Bo whispers: “But I’m not the Master. I’m lost without him.” Bo’s other self tells her: “Yet, without you Bo, your friends wouldn’t have been able to find what they were looking for. Because of that, I will grant you the one thing you search for. Home. There’s no place like it.” Bo cries: “Except without Trick. I don’t know where that is anymore.”

Back in the real world, Tamsin and Dyson enter the attic, Tamsin commenting: “It’s coming from up here” and Dyson adding: “Someone’s trying to get in through the attic window.” Kenzi (Ksenia Solo) then crawls through the window and asks: “Can someone please explain to me why the whole clubhouse is panic roomed? I broke a heel scaling this thing!” Dyson asks Kenzi what she is doing there and she replies: “Showing up for my BFF in her time of need. I heard about Trick and Aife. I’m sorry I didn’t get here sooner.” Tamsin and Kenzi hug and then Kenzi comments: “Jumping Jehovah’s witnesses. Is that a bonafide baby bump TamTam?” Nothing is said for a moment, then Kenzi continues: “Okay. Cryptic glance, boarded up windows, midnight lantern sing-along. What is going on?” Tamsin answers: “Kenzi we need to tell you something.” Kenzi sighs: “Sentences that start like that never end the way you want them to.” As Kenzi turns away, the moth comes into view and lands on Kenzi’s shoulder. Kenzi then turns back and asks where Bo is. Dyson starts to ask Kenzi not to move, but she interrupts telling him: “What? I have drool face? I slept on the plane.” Tamsin in the meantime walks around Kenzi, holding a tennis racket and tells her: “Don’t move” as she swings the racket at the moth on Kenzi’s shoulder.

Following still another commercial break, Kenzi and Lauren are looking at the moth which is being held under a cake covering tray, Kenzi lamenting as she rubs her shoulder: “I know I had the subterranean death moth on my back, but oh god, did she have to hit me so hard?” Lauren asks: “I still don’t get how you knew to come home now.” Kenzi replies: “Dude. Snail mail?” Kenzi then shows Lauren a letter and explains: “I assumed it was from you.” Lauren is confused, telling Kenzi that she didn’t send any letter, but then sighs: “It’s Jack.” Lauren slaps the letter on the table and exclaims: “Screw it. The moth hasn’t resumed human form and we are running out of time.” Kenzi asks what Lauren is about to do and she replies: “Bo says there is always a third option. Maybe I don’t need it to resume human form to get its blood.” Lauren explains: “It always stores its victim’s blood in its sack. All I have to do is locate the sack.” Kenzi replies: “Remind me to make a sack joke once we save Bo.”

Back in Bo’s mindscape, Bo arrives at her home, commenting: “No place like home.” Bo then calls out Thomasina, Nosyd and Lola’s names, but none of them reply. Bo then turns around to find Kenzi standing there, dressed in a white dress, but her appearance is slightly horrific. Bo asks: “Kenzi. Oh please tell me it’s you.” Not-Kenzi replies: “Bobo” as the the two move towards each other and embrace, Bo adding: “There’s no place like home. Oh, Kenz…”

In the real world, Lauren uses a syringe to squirt the spit and blood she took from the moth into Bo’s mouth as Kenzi, Dyson and Tamsin look on. When Lauren finishes, Tamsin asks: “How long will it take?” Lauren replies: “The blood extract should neutralize the poison almost immediately.” Bo then begins to convulse violently, Lauren not being about to explain why Bo is doing so, one possibility being that the moth is transforming within Bo.

In Bo’s mindscape, Not-Kenzi starts to twitch and shake before stepping back from Bo, her shaking becoming as violent as Bo’s in the real world. Not-Kenzi then looks at Bo before flying through the air over her, going out of view before returning back where she was originally standing, this time dressed in black. Not-Kenzi then rushes around the room, almost too quickly to follow before stopping in front of Bo and growling: “Kiss me Boby.”

In the real world, Bo’s convulsions are wild, Lauren telling everyone: “We’re losing her!” Dyson suggests: “Maybe it’s not just physical. She has to want to accept the Shtriga’s cure.” Dyson tells Bo to accept, as Kenzi crawls on top of Bo and tells her: “Okay Bo honey, it’s me, K-Star. You have to accept it, you have to want to come home.” Lauren also begins telling Bo to accept, as does Tamsin as well.

In Bo’s mindscape, she whispers: “Oh hell no” just as Not-Kenzi moves to attack Bo. There is a short fight which ends with Bo laying on the floor, Non-Kenzi on top of her in the same way as the real Kenzi is in the real world. As Not-Kenzi stares at Bo, Bo asks: “What do you want from me?” Not-Kenzi tells her: “Accept it Bo.” Bo refuses, and then Not-Kenzi opens her mouth to reveal that her tongue is black and covered in slime. Bo continues to struggle against Not-Kenzi as she moves her lips closer to Bo’s, but then, faintly, Kenzi’s voice can be heard telling Bo to accept it.

In the real world, Kenzi is pleading with Bo: “You have to want to come home! You have to accept it Bo! You have to wanna come home! Listen to me!” Lauren’s voice is heard as in Bo’s mindscape, Not-Kenzi’s lips touch Bo’s, telling Bo to accept it as well. As Not-Kenzi and Bo kiss, there is a burst of white light and then Bo is laying on the floor alone. Kenzi’s voice telling her: “You have to accept it Bo.” As Bo lays on the floor, the sound of a horse snorting is heard. Bo sits up to see Not-Kenzi standing beside a white horse, the two of them looking at Bo. Bo asks: “Are you the Pyrippus? I always thought you were bad.” Not-Kenzi, now dressed in white, and looking as she normally does explains: “You were bad until you found your way. The Pyrippus is the same, you possess the key” then showing Bo the horseshoe that he had received. Not-Kenzi continues: “The power’s in the one who holds the reigns. Go home Bo. Find the Pyrippus.” Bo whispers: “Trick’s gone and I can’t fight my father without him. I don’t have the answers.” Not-Kenzi explains: “The answers will come.” which makes Bo ask: “When will they come?” Lauren’s voice comes, warning that they are losing Bo and Dyson tells Bo to hang on as Not-Kenzi continues: “You must find them yourself. You know where to look. You are the one that holds the key. Accept it Bo. You have to accept it.” Not-Kenzi places the horseshoe in Bo’s hand and then tells her: “Or all will perish.” Bo cries: “Not without him. Kenzi, no.” Not-Kenzi steps back, whispering: “Goodbye Bo.” Bo closes her eyes and whispers: “Goodbye Trick” as the world around her turns to white.

In the real world, Bo opens her eyes to see Kenzi on top of her with Lauren, Tamsin and Dyson standing close by. Kenzi whispers: “Bobo. Bobo… are you awake?” Lauren asks: “Bo, can you hear me?” Dyson whispers: “I think she’s in shock.” Tamsin smiles and asks: “Hey girl, you had us so scared. Can you say something… please?” Bo sits up, not saying a word, and then, looking at Dyson whispers: “He’s gone. Trick’s really gone.”, shaking and crying as she does so.

Following the final commercial break, Bo, Kenzi, Dyson, Lauren, Tamsin, Vex and Mark are gathered together in front of Trick’s memorial in Bo’s home. Dyson picks up a scroll, explaining to Bo: “It’s Trick’s will. I didn’t want to open it until you were… You don’t have to do this now if you don’t want to.” Bo replies: “No. I want to.” Dyson hands the scroll to Bo, who opens it and begins to read, Dyson opening a chest at the same time. Bo reads: “To those I hold dear, it is with great pleasure, that I, Fitzpatrick McCorrigan, member of Clan Finarvin, leave the following: To Kenzi – the ring of Yggdrasil. This ring will grant you freedom from claiming, allowing you constant passage between the Fae and human worlds.” Dyson gives Kenzi the ring, she holds the ring in her hand and whispers: “Oh… Trick…” Bo continues: “To Lauren, my tomes of the Occult. There is a happy marriage between science and magic. I hope you find it one day. To Tamsin, eternal wanderer, perennially without habitat. I leave the blanket of Skeemotah; woven from the sky. As long as we are under the stars, we are home.” Tamsin is given the blanket by Dyson and she clutches it tightly to her chest. Bo continues onwards: “Vex, he left you something too. The compass of Nirad. You have found your light in the dark. Here’s hoping that your path remains true.” Vex gingerly takes the compass from Dyson, without words and stares at it silently. Bo continues: “To my lieutenant Dyson, to you and Mark, I leave my beloved bar, the Dal Riata. A place of sanctuary in dark times. There is no man more able to provide this service. You are my son Dyson, now and forever. Please show Mark the way.” Dyson says nothing, only looking away from Bo in silence while Mark sits on the other side of the room from Dyson, his thoughts his own. Bo continues: “And last, but not least, my Isabeau. I leave you my heart, and my eternal gratitude for what you have given me. My granddaughter. It is with deep pride that I look at the woman you’ve become: honourable, kind, strong.” Bo begins to cry as Kenzi moves to comfort her, asking Bo if she should read on. Bo hands Kenzi the will and she continues: “Life is not about finding your path, it is about creating one. Please don’t forget…” Bo whispers: “You are my blood too. Always and forever.” With that, the will is read, there being nothing more said. Bo then offers her hand to Kenzi, who takes Tamsin’s, who takes Mark’s, who takes Lauren’s, who takes Dyson’s, who takes Vex’s and finally, Vex holds Bo’s hand, the family together, joined. the last image of the scene being that of Trick’s picture in his memorial, smiling, the words “In loving memory” written below.

The final scene of the episode begins with Vex looking for Tamsin, carrying the blanket of Skeemotah. As he enters the attic, he finds that the attic window is open and he kneels down to look out it. As she does so, Hades appears and comments: “The dark Mesmer. Trick gives you a compass and suddenly you are on the straight and narrow. Shame. You might have been useful, still could.” Vex turns and attempts to use his powers against Hades, but they have no effect, Hades touching Vex’s outstretched hand and putting an end to his power. As Hades pulls Vex close to him, Vex tells Hades: “I don’t play that way anymore. I finally found a team that will accept me.” Hades growls: “Then I’d like you to give your team a message for me.” Vex chuckles: “Lemme just get my memo pad.” Hades smiles: “I think this one’s pretty self explanatory.” before taking a blade to Vex’s neck and slitting his throat, blood seeping out of the cut as Vex falls to the floor and Hades walks away. The final image is of Vex clutching at his throat, bleeding out, and convulsing as the episode ends.


Fade to black…


As a whole, the majority of this episode I didn’t care for at all. While that isn’t really reflected in the  score I’ll give later on, it just didn’t sit right with me in so many ways. As a whole, this might be the most blatant example of a plot disconnect I have ever seen in the series to date and that’s saying something.

I cannot understand, no matter how much I try, how that moth got into the storyline and for what reason other than to be the Fae-of-the-week. There wan’t a good reason for it to be there, didn’t need to happen and with all else that was going on around Bo’s coma, it just added a distraction that did not need to be there. Save for Non-Kenzi, which I will admit was interesting, if a bit shiver inducing at times. Zombie Kenzi I didn’t care for, though the sort of vampiric look she had at one moment did, sort of, work overall.

The Wizard of Oz theme, which was the core of the episode I know, didn’t have any attraction for me at all. As such, I, for the most part, find myself ignoring it, or perhaps more accurately, trying to forget it as much as possible. It felt like a waste of time, regardless of the small insights to the characters of the series, which, by the way, we already knew about. There wasn’t anything new told about anyone in Bo’s mindscape and if this was when she figured out the personality quirks of them, Bo hasn’t been paying attention for as long as she knows them.

The telling parts of the episode really revolved around Trick’s will, Vex’s truth, and the coming together of the Family as I like to think of them as. It was connecting them in a way that lends itself to what has to come next, that being a final confrontation with Hades.

Some of Trick’s will made me cry, and in that I thought that Trick’s voice was clear in saying what needed to be said to each character. The gift for Kenzi made sense, interestingly, that ring tells of the world tree. I wonder if Kenzi can do more than move between the Fae and Human worlds and if that will have some kind of meaning in the final episode. Tamsin’s gift didn’t quite have the same impact, and I was sort of hoping for something related to Tamsin’s past more than it was. Vex’s gift was more ironic than anything else, though it did cement his redemption to being more than who he was before. With regards to Dyson and Mark, I would have been slightly happier to have Dyson own the Dal Riata alone, or with Bo than having Mark mixed into things. Mark isn’t a long term character, more window dressing than anything else and giving him part of such a cherished thing seems… wrong. But as much as I felt that Bo received something important to her soul from trick, knowing that she is loved, not was, that didn’t feel like it was the right thing that Trick would have done.

I think the better choice would have been to give Bo something a little more personal. Something from her grandmother, perhaps Trick’s lair. Some wealth to help her be in a better place than she is. Something more than a “love you” and goodbye. While Bo might not have been cheated out of anything, I feel like there’s another part of that will that wasn’t said, or glossed over or something. Trick meant something to Bo and vice versa. The short words spoken don’t really say as much as I think there should be.

To be clear, the scene was well done, emotional, and powerful in its own right. Each of the characters was dealing with their grief in their own ways. Each reacted in the way that seemed to be right for how they were dealing with Trick’s loss. There was a connection, a moment, when rather than just being friends, being there, they came together in a way that promised something more as a whole. It’s those moments in the series, few and far between, that are the most powerful and this was a moment when it had to be so.

Looking over the season, I don’t feel there is another moment that has the same impact by any means. As much pain as there is being shared, there’s a determined look among them, that there will be a reckoning to come, whatever that may be and whatever that may cost. I think it does set down the tone of the final two episodes, as it should.

It was somewhat difficult to watch Tamsin through the episode, mainly in that the strong character she is was pushed down, belittled and I didn’t feel like that needed to be at the beginning of the episode. There was but a single moment when the Tamsin seen so often, having a smile and an attitude that just said ‘I can do this’ was seen. Her situation isn’t a good one, and she does need to deal with it, or try to, but in how she keeps going in circles that didn’t.

The same can be said about Lauren, especially in the moment when she belittled herself, her abilities and ranted. It didn’t quite work, felt out of character and out of place. Lauren in the past wouldn’t have lost her mind and lost control, she would have kept looking until she found the answer. What’s more confusing is that Lauren has, often, used Trick’s library and the books of the Fae to find solutions, so why was it so hard to do so this time? What changed to make Lauren not want to trust in the knowledge around her until, finally, she turned back towards her strengths and past, doing the right thing?

Vex I think had the most telling moments of all of the characters. He had to face up to what he did, atone for that, and admit that he didn’t just want to change, or needed to. He did change. He made a choice to be better than he was. It wasn’t just Mark asking the question, it was mote of the universe making Vex take that last step and get on a new path for himself. Being in Trick’s will, being given what he was. and the effect that had on him seemed to bring him that last distance to being part of Bo’s family in more than name, but in spirit. What happened at the end of the episode was, to be sure, the reckoning for all that he had done in the past. But it isn’t likely to be the end of the story. There seems to be more to come, and in that I look forwards to Vex being there to snark away till the end.

Kenzi’s appearance was odd, not just in that how she appeared, but more in what it meant and why. Really there needed to be a way to have the family together, but Hades didn’t need to be the one to do so. Why couldn’t Lauren or Dyson, or Tamsin, or Vex, just call Kenzi and tell her what’s happened and to get back home? That would have been more satisfying than just blaming it on Hades. Kenzi would have come in a heartbeat, so why not use something that makes sense instead of something that feels contrived?

This all comes to the moment of having the Family, joined. In their grief, their need, and their hopes the emotions mattered, fit, and held to the moment. There’s a feeling of one alone is supported by many. To finding the means not to just survive, or win, but rather to remain true to what the Family represents. The trust in each other.

On to the characters in the episode…

Bo… Sleeping Beauty with pigtails and a blanket. Bo in her mindscape was lost, much of the time, was aware that it wasn’t real and in being so there just was a sense of going through the motions at times. Possibly the most emotionally powerful Bo has ever been seen was reading Trick’s will and I would have liked to see more.

Dyson…Lost puppy that has been kicked a lot. It took the entire episode for Dyson to get some backbone and make decisions. He’s been doing this a lot of late and it is getting tiresome. Dyson the Barkeep will be something to see.

Kenzi. Bo owes her a new pair of shoes. It was wonderful to see her, to get some of the Kenzi snark and comments that have been missing for so long this season. Seeing her at Bo’s right hand when Trick’s will was read was the right thing at the right moment. Needs more Kenzi. Kenzi line of the week: “Remind me to make a sack joke once we save Bo.”

Lauren. Lost and getting more lost by the moment. Lauren’s attitude didn’t fit who she is, what she is capable of. There was too much self-doubt and loss that seemed to build up into making things force Lauren into seeking other answers. But that’s not new. New is seeing Lauren accept who she is even if she does think too much.

Tamsin: Lost lamb, crying out loud. Moping around Tamsin isn’t interesting. When she has some of her spark that was wonderful. It’s a bit sad to say that fantasy Tamsin was more interesting than the real one, but she was in this episode.

Vex. A choice made, an answer given. Better than he was, and should be given the moment to shine in that new purpose. There are stories untold, tell them.

Mark. Hate the goatee, not liking him much more than I ever have and as for owning part of the Dal Riata? Perhaps he’ll be the next to get poked by Hades to send a message.

Hades. Slice, slice, walk away. Other than shock value, nothing of worth.

Considering that the episode was only of the main characters, save for Mark and to an extent, Hades, I expected more of the episode than there was. It isn’t the worst thing in the series. It’s just slightly disappointing in how much time was spent “elsewhere” and not “in the moment.”


My Review of Follow The Yellow Trick Road

Keeping my interest – 3 Pitchforks

Portrayal of a Succubus – 1 Pitchforks

Overall look and feel – 4 Pitchforks

Storyline – 4 Pitchforks

Main Characters – 5 Pitchforks

Mythos – 3 Pitchforks

Overall Rating – 3.3 Pitchforks out of 5


I can’t say that this was the most gripping of episodes, mainly because the Wizard of Oz scenes just were flat as a whole. It was hard to keep interested in a series of moments where nothing new was said, and what was, just kept being told over and over again. Outside of Bo’s mental world, that was interesting, told a needed story, and mattered. But otherwise there was just so much wasted time on something that didn’t bring much to the fore save for the final few moments when Bo learned something useful.

Nothing of Bo being a Succubus this week, other than Lauren mentioning that she had to feed soon or Bo would perish. After the previous episode it would have been nice to see more of Bo being a Succubus. There’s been a lack of that for a long time now and I don’t expect it to be any better.

Bo’s home, being able to see more of it again, was nice and I liked that. There was a lot of effort made to make Bo’s mindscape not just look different, but act differently, and that did work for the most part. Really the issue isn’t the set pieces, but the words said and the plot driving things onwards. The moth was really well done and there were some really interesting clothing choices. I especially liked Kenzi’s look when she appeared.

The main storyline of Bo’s mindscape was decent enough, though it didn’t hole my interest much. The story of what those around Bo were facing was much more so, the telling of Trick’s will was the most powerful thing, and Vex’s subplot mattered to the end. Overall very good, but needing to have less “Wizard” and more “Reality.”

Taken as a whole, the characters turned a corner in their lives, one that will have effects on them for always. Allowing for the mindscape versions, there was something in that which did have some meaning, even if it was hard to stay interested in. I liked that each character, save for Bo, had to make a real choice and follow through on it, especially Vex.  Bo’s situation wasn’t so much of making a decision as it was to see the truth and accept it. She’s been fighting that for all of the series at various points and this was another one of those moments. But in the end, there was the raw emotion that told everything about every member of the Family and that was wonderful.

The series mythos didn’t grow much, the moth was the Fae-of-the-week and didn’t amount to much. There was a lost opportunity to show Trick’s funeral, like Hale’s was. It would be nice to see a wake for Trick at some point. Seeing Tamsin’s pregnancy changing so rapidly was telling and added a lot to her kind. But there wasn’t much else to be told and then things learned in Bo’s mindscape, save for the little warnings about the future, didn’t amount to a lot either.

A bit of a disappointment after the strong preceding episode and it should have been as strong to lead towards the finale…



Next Week: Let Them Burn

Bo is forced to make a difficult decision.


Since when hasn’t Bo been made to make hard choices? This is yet another example of someone writing a summary that tells nothing, but takes up space doing so. The summary could say more than this without giving anything away, but, no. No, we have an idiotic summary that if someone was looking through the television listings and come across this would just keep on going.

That all said, then the question is, what’s coming next? Bo has been told what she needs to do, and if there’s any hope at all that the final episode doesn’t turn into a completely unwatchable mess, there will be some progress, a point, and possibly some minor resolutions as well. But given how uneven things have been, that feeling like a forlorn hope at times.

There was more than enough telegraphing about what likely will come in the next episode, horseshoes and all, that it isn’t so much a surprise as to what Bo will do as it will be to who will be appearing in the episode. I want to see what things were like for Bo as a child form another perspective, which I think might happen considering that a character that appeared in the first season seems to be coming back for this episode. If that’s true, then if nothing else at least one statement by Hades will be seen to be either true or false.

As much as I loved to see Kenzi in the last episode, it felt forced, not true to character and if that continues through the last two episodes, then what really was the core of the show will be gone. It shouldn’t be. Kenzi should be part of the coming episode, and the finale. But there’s the feeling of her “being” and not “acting”. By that I mean that Kenzi seems to no longer be important to Bo, to matter as much as she did. That’s the larger shame here.

After this wasted episode, there are two left. One to set up the finale, one to end the series. The set up is next, which needs to, if not be stunning in what the plot tells and where the story goes, then at the least offer some closure to some of the characters.

I don’t believe that Vex is gone. Call it something of a redemption for him to come perhaps. But not just Vex is the problem, there’s Evony, Aife, Trick. So many good strong characters taken away. In each case, the losses were as bad as what happened to Hale. So many unresolved stories untold. Perhaps, sadly, that will become what the legacy of this second part of the season will be. Unresolved plots, characters and meaning.

But the single more telling point is all of the time wasted of late. So much time spent on things that didn’t matter, won’t matter and never will. Adding characters, at the very last moment mind you, that don’t make sense, don’t connect with the main ones and don’t, in the end, come to mean anything.

The focus in the last two episodes needs to be Bo and her true Family. Tell that story, reveal what needs to be said, give that a chance to happen. It should not be about anything else. I hope there is in the coming episode a moment when I learn answers to the questions that have been with the series from the beginning.

I think the popcorn machine will make it though two more episodes…



Oct 16 2015

A Review of Hellfire Desire by Velma Lock

Hellfire Desire by Velma Lock

Hellfire Desire by Velma Lock

It is always good when there is story that builds towards erotica. I like to know something about the characters, what drives them, what makes them who they are. It’s interesting to see how they come into being able to, for example, summon a Succubus, how the dots take someone from one place in the world to another world where the impossible is everyday.

One thing that isn’t really touched on, and it is an interesting thought, is what can be asked in payment for the pleasures of a Succubus or, more accurately, what might be the trade if a soul isn’t involved and what that could mean.

  • Title: Hellfire Desire
  • Author: Velma Lock
  • Length: 25 Pages
  • Publishing Date: November 18, 2014
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells about:

Harley feels out of options and isn’t sure what to do with herself after loosing another job. On a whim she purchases a scroll which contains a spell that is said to make all of her desires come true. What she summons is a succubus with a pocket full of gold and some desires of her own. She’s ready to pay up if Harley can keep up. Is Harley up for this new challenge and can she handle getting filled in new ways beyond anything she’s ever experienced before?

Harley finds herself in the middle of nowhere and summoning something to make her desires real. To her surprise she summons a Succubus who gives Harley what she wants and at the same time gets what she wants as well.

At the beginning of the story, Harley is a bit difficult to like, or rather understand fully. It’s her personality, her “don’t really care” attitude that is concerning and if that continued through the entire story that would have been a problem. Thankfully there is some character development, some growth, and as the story winds its way towards summoning the Succubus, Harley tells a lot about herself.

The telling of that story, how Harley gets to the point where she’s in the middle of a forest summoning a Succubus has some ups and downs, but there is quite a lot of humour in the telling and I liked that. Her reactions feel real to who she is and when the Succubus appears, that’s when Harley knows she has a problem… the question is, of course, what the Succubus wants from Harley and how will she get that.

The Succubus, who’s name is never revealed, herself is blue, which seems to becoming a more active vision of what a Succubus is of late and I don’t mind that very much when it isn’t overstated. But she is more “stereotypically” devilish, hooves and all, which I do mind. As a whole she is very dominant, controlling, and at times there is a little bit of succubus mind control involved in the work as well. She gives pleasure to Harley, but as well she takes pleasures from Harley in a few different ways, one of which involves a slight physical transformation.

While her description is somewhat stereotypical, she really isn’t. She doesn’t want Harley’s soul, really what she wants is the pleasure, and in during so the succubus has what she wants from the “transaction” and “pays” for that, also making sure that Harley will be coming to see her again… in a lot of different ways. She has an interesting personality which is hinted at, but very soon the story turns towards being a hot flash and the story moves to the side for that.

The work past the setting up of the events that summon the Succubus are, as a whole, a fairly good hot flash piece of erotica which touches on several different themes. There is a bit of transformation, a bit of mind control, and it all works well with the author’s writing style. It is a bit more than simply a quick “get the main character off in a hurry” encounter, and as such it is more interesting as a result. There’s a hint of a D/s relationship beginning, the Succubus in control of that by far, but it is very slight and isn’t the core of the erotica.

While the author’s writing is very good and I liked the story as a whole, the work needs one more editing pass for some rather silly little errors in the story that tripped me up. They were mainly descriptions in the story where “eyes” would have worked better than “eye” considering that the character had two of them in the story. They aren’t terribly bad errors, but I noticed them and as such they pulled me out of the story when I shouldn’t have been.

The work is short, sadly, and it ends on a note which really demands a continuation. Harley is a unique character and I’d like to see her again. The Succubus is as well, but she needs a name honestly for all that happened in this story between her and Harley.

Four out of five pitchforks.

A good hot piece of erotica with an interesting main character and a Succubus that, if she didn’t have hooves, I would have liked a lot more than I did. One more editing pass would have been good to overcome a few small errors, and perhaps there should be a part two to tell about what happened the next time the Succubus appeared in Harley’s life.