Oct 27 2015

A Review of Succubus Society by Eden Redd

Succubus Society by Eden Redd

Succubus Society by Eden Redd

Last week I reviewed a work by Eden Redd called Rise of the Succubus, and you can find that review here on the Tale.

I was wondering what might come next and where the story would go. It took a little bit of time for the author to come back to these characters and I’m actually quite pleased they did so.

One of the things that can be compromised, if one is not careful, is one’s humanity. It can be so very difficult to keep that piece of yourself intact when so much otherwise is trying to pull you in directions that both unexpected and unknown. Sometimes when you are pushed to your limits, you need to push back. But what if you aren’t sure that you want to… or can?

The story tells of:

Rita is having a difficult time controlling her urges. As she and her fellow succubus, Alina, drive to New York, they do what they can to ease the fire of her demon blood.

But the lust is overpowering and Rita is losing the battle. Once they reach the Society, Alina must meet with others of her kind and decide what will be the best course of action for Rita’s lustful hunger. It may take all of their power to slack her growing thirst.

Alina and Rita have left Rita’s old life behind and are travelling towards her new world. Along the way Rita loses herself to her new needs, discovers something of what she has become, and then needs to make a important choice about her future. Alina shows her the world of the Succubi and Incubi, but is Rita prepared for what that means or will she find herself on the crest of a wave she cannot control?

The most interesting thing about this story is the world building which develops over the course of things. There’s a good deal of time spent with Alina trying to help Rita control herself, her needs and her abilities. Rita is, as a whole, very much on a hair trigger the entire work, needing to feed and being, for the most part, unable to control herself. To have this unfold is good and I think adds a certain amount of conflict and uncertainty towards what Rita is feeling and what she does. In the moments when she is entwined with others, trying to feel the need that is consuming her, there’s still that little piece of her, her humanity, that tells her she should feel regret, feel concern, worry about what she is doing and why.

Beyond Rita’s battles within herself, once she and Alina get to where they are going, the work opens up the hidden universe of the Succubi and Incubi and it was really interesting to me. It isn’t a simple matter of beings like Rita acting like the legends they resemble, having no sense of control. They have a code which they live by and it makes a difference. To see how that works was the missing part of the previous story. The explanations don’t read like an information dump, they fit into the story well. There is a good deal of mind control, some dominance and submissive aspects as well. There’s a quick transformation scene at the end where tails and horns appear that works to build up the tension more before the conclusion comes and I think it was a nice touch to do.

While there is some world building, there are quite a number of moments for Rita, really a series of hot flashes that, overall, work well to show how much need she has inside and how far she has to go to find a measure of control. Some of them are a little over the top, but not terribly so and the more Succubus-like moments I did like very much.

With all of the good in this work, and how far the characters change and develop from the where they were to where things wind up, there is an issue. Similarly to the first work in the series, this work needs another editing pass for several reasons. The main one is simply that some of the dialog, when read out loud, seems stiff, not quite right. There’s an oddity to what is said that gave me pause on several occasions. Mixed in with that comes a fair number of similar sounding words being used in the wrong places and a serious problem with tenses that keeps cropping up.

The thing of it is, honestly, the promise of the first work is built on here in the second work. The work ends on a note that promises Rita and Alina’s futures are going to be very interesting and I want to see where that leads them. The world is built, the plots are set, the troubles and tribulations are quite clear. Rita has made a choice, even if it is one she didn’t have much of one in. She might be at the beginning of her path, and it likely is a long one, but that is what makes things interesting.

I really wish the author had done more editing to the work, to fix some of the word mistakes, to make the dialog a bit less stiff. Overall, in truth, it is a much better work than the first in the series because there’s a good deal of world building, explanation, and a desire in the story to tell what Rita experiences and what that does to her. I really would have liked to give this work a four, possibly a four and a half pitchfork rating… But the flaws just took me out of the story too many times and I really wish it didn’t.

Three and a half out of five pitchforks.

Eden, the author of this work, sent me a note, actually in the midst of my writing this review, that tomorrow. October 28th, 2015, this work will be available on Amazon for free. Please do have a look, consider purchasing the first work in the series as well and, perhaps, like me you’ll be wondering what Alina and Rita are going to be facing next… and what that means.



Oct 26 2015

Belle of the Ball By TeraS

It is a week, more or less, before Halloween … As such there needs to be some Halloween stories, I think … So, let’s start with something that could be Monday-Story-Meets-Wednesday-Costume-of-the-Week …


Belle of the Ball
By TeraS


It really wasn’t the best Halloween costume ever, Belle knew. In truth, she hadn’t really wanted to go out anyway. She was far too old to be trick-or-treating, for one, and, for the other, she really didn’t enjoy going to those sorts of parties.

Those sorts of parties? You know the ones. The ones where it seemed the only point was to get drunk—Belle didn’t drink—or to wind up with someone else in a costume—with her luck, probably someone in a bed-sheet, and that didn’t interest Belle either, because she hadn’t had a lot of luck with her love life.

For that matter, she hadn’t really had a lot of luck with any sort of social life. Though her name was Belle, she knew she wasn’t going to be the belle of the ball by any means. Her main problem was that she didn’t have the looks, or the boobs, for that matter. Her personality was too timid, she being far more comfortable being a wall flower and keeping out of sight.

However, she was pushed and prodded by her friends to join them at what they promised was going to be a tame—though, in that, Belle knew they were really thinking “lame”—party. She had gone to a costume store in the mall and wandered the isles looking for something that she wouldn’t be totally embarrassed to wear, something that wouldn’t make her stand out, and, she hoped, something that wouldn’t make her be laughed at.

But, even after looking through everything there, she hadn’t found a single thing that she could bring herself to wear. Belle saw a clearance bin of various accessories, and, after poking through them all in a last-ditch effort, found a pair of red plastic devil horns, a flimsy looking tail that came with a strap to tie around her waist, and a tiny, pathetic, plastic pitchfork with some feathers on it.

After taking one more good look around the store, she started to make her way towards the cashier, rummaging around in her purse for the twelve dollars and twenty-two cents her costume was going to cost. She wasn’t even going to bother with anything else, intending to wear only her new collection of devilish things and an unflattering dress and running shoes.

At least, that was her plan … until she bumped into someone and all of her costume pieces clattered to the floor.

As Belle knelt down to pick up her things, she didn’t glance at whoever it was, but she did express, in a very apologetic way: “I’m so sorry, this is my fault. I wasn’t paying attention.”

As Belle picked up her things, she noticed that she had bumped into a woman; the red open-toed heels she was wearing made that very clear. Looking a little further upwards, Belle then noticed a pair of shapely calves that led towards some very curvy thighs that were draped by a very tight, very red, dress.

As Belle continued to pick up her things, she stopped looking upwards, turning her attention back towards the costume bits that seemed to be a little more flimsy, a little more trashy looking.

She was just picking up the pitchfork when the woman spoke to her: “I think you weren’t paying a lot of attention when you were looking for your costume, either, sweetie.”

Now while the words might have been a little bit odd, the hot flash that Belle felt tickling up her legs, then between them, then settling into her core was slightly more concerning. She nibbled her lip as she looked upwards once more. The red dress seemed to be almost making love to the woman it was caressing. As her eyes moved up over the woman’s hips, Belle wished that she could be even slightly that shapely. Once her eyes slipped over the woman’s chest, Belle knew that she’d never look anything like her, and so she paused there, not wanting to look further upwards.

A slim hand and arm, covered in red latex, was offered to her: “Up you come now. Let’s have a look at you, hmm?”

When Belle took that hand, her legs felt like mush, her breath caught. She felt herself shiver at the touch, not knowing why this woman had such an effect on her … at least not until Belle stood up and looked into the eyes of the woman. She fell into a pair of so-green eyes surrounded by ebon hair, tanned skin, and lips as red, if not redder, than the dress the woman was wearing. Belle almost missed the two small horns in the woman’s hair, but not the red tail whose heart-shaped tip was hovering over her right shoulder.

Belle was at a loss for words as the woman looked at her, looked into her eyes, looked at her while moving her hands over Belle’s shoulders and arms, looked at her while touching her hips and moving her this way and that before finally stepping back.

Belle did—just barely—manage to hold in the whimper that came at that moment.

She then watched as the woman’s smile became a little less so as she looked at the meager things that Belle considered a costume with a critical eye.

That whimper Belle didn’t manage to hold inside herself.

The woman then took Belle’s hand and led her through the costume shop, past the other customers, both in and out of costume, with determination. Belle expected that they would be bumping into people, but it was like the parting of the Red Sea. The crowds moved out of the way. She was sure some of them bowed, but that couldn’t possibly be.

As they walked, the woman spoke: “If there is one thing I cannot stand, it is all of the poor attempts at costume design there are … especially those pretend to have a clue as to what seductive is. They seem to always get trashy and seductive mixed all up.” She turned her head, and gave Belle a look that made her tremble in hot, wet need: “I think someone needs a lesson in what the difference is, don’t you agree, sweetling?”

Belle’s mind was awash in the thoughts of how she was so turned on at that moment that she’d happily walk around in a string bikini and a collar if she was asked. That thought brought her out of the almost-trance she was in long enough to answer: “I … I don’t know. I’m not either.”

The woman stopped and touched a red-covered hand to Belle’s chin, raising her dull blue eyes to look up into the woman’s so-green pair: “You aren’t trashy, pet, and you shouldn’t be wearing trashy things.”

Belle continued to clutch her assembled costume pieces, feeling very ashamed now of what she had been planning to do: “Sorry …”

The woman smiled, and then Belle found herself being kissed—a long, slow, wet kiss that made her toes curl, her pussy moisten and her nipples ache; a kiss like the ones she’d imagined that the sexy, hot girls got all of the time, and it only made her so needy and wanting to do whatever …

“Tera. But you will call me ‘Mistress’ won’t you, pet?”

The shiver turned into a hot need that settled in Belle’s sex and mind, pushing out all of her concerns about not being good enough. Mistress said she was, and Mistress was never wrong. It was then, in that moment, when Belle realized that they had walked through the store and into the back where the changing rooms were. She continued to clutch the little bits of red that seemed so insignificant next to the red of Mistress, somehow needing them.

Belle didn’t resist as Mistress walked towards one of the larger rooms, guided Belle inside, and then spoke to her again: “Now, you go on and take off those clothes and put on your costume. I don’t want to see you wearing anything else, pet. When you are done, just call for me.”

As the door to the changing room was closed, Belle felt lost, needy, but at the same time she knew that she was going to do exactly as she was told. All of the worry about how she looked, what she thought of herself, were pushed aside for the words of Mistress: “You aren’t trashy.”

Just before the door closed, Belle whispered: “But I only have trashy things.”

Mistress opened the door and smiled: “Trust in me, pet. You won’t disappoint me. I shall make sure of that.”

After the door closed again, Belle stood, looking into the mirror. She looked … ordinary. She felt … not so much so. Yet Mistress said she wouldn’t be disappointed

With a sigh, her clothing went on the bench and, after a slight hesitation, so did her bra and panties. The cheap-looking horns went into her short, sandy blond hair, the poor excuse for a tail wrapped around her waist and, finally, she picked up that sad thing someone decided was a pitchfork and held it in both hands in front of her.

She sighed before calling out: “Ready … Mistress.” Then, several things happened. Belle was looking right into the mirror as they happened, mesmerized by them.

First, her pale blue eyes changed colour. Before, they were unremarkable, ordinary. Now they were deep sea blue, the kind of blue that one could get lost in if they looked into them for too long.

Belle found herself staring into them, being held by them as the second thing happened: she heard a voice. It was her own voice, but sexier, purring, seductive: “We’re not going to disappoint Mistress. We are going to be everything she wants us to be, Belle.”

Belle managed to nod, once, not trusting herself to speak. As she watched, the third thing happened: the red horns in her hair turned a deep brunette colour, then melted into her hair, changing its colour to match them. Her hair then began to lengthen, becoming a wave of rich brunette locks that cascaded along her shoulders, draped down her back, and spilled over her chest, framing her face and bust on either side.

This drew her attention to her breasts, her hands moving to cup them when the third thing happened. She felt a warmth spread through her body, her skin tanning, her body gaining curves, her hips and chest becoming more than they were before. A shiver rolled up from her sex, now bare, like fingers tickling up from her heat, exploring every curve, finally settling around her slim, shapely throat.

Then the fourth something: the slight, simulated, scarlet tail turned golden, drawing itself against Belle’s new form, wandering over her body, tracing over her curves, becoming a gold bandeau that tightly held her now well more than a handful breasts perfectly, a golden loop in the middle holding the two halves together. Another stream of gold curled around her hips, cupping her now needful sex, teasing it, before moving behind, returning to its source at her perky, sexy rear.

For the last something, the pitchfork changed to gold, then some of it dribbled out of Belle’s hand, falling onto her shapely toes. Belle wobbled, slightly, as she found her balance now on a pair of golden heels, higher than the old Belle would have ever considered wearing, if she had ever even considered before. Her voice was wanton, needful as she moaned, gasping as the last of the golden liquid on her skin moved towards her neck: a golden collar formed there, and the thoughts of obeying Mistress cemented themselves in her mind, body and soul. The voice from before was now fully hers as she mewled needfully: “Anything … please … Mistress …”

Pet—she didn’t think of herself as Belle now—continued to mewl in need as she dropped to her knees, needing to obey, needing to serve. When the door opened, Mistress smiled: “Much better, pet. I am so very pleased with you.”

Pet arched her neck, displaying the collar, the ring attached to the front. She licked her lips as Mistress attached her red leash there. Pet melted as Mistress kissed her lips and caressed her cheek: “They will love you, pet. You’ll be the belle of the ball …” The words spoken made her cum, crying out in pleasure, her mind blanking out as she felt Mistress’ touch upon her, felt the promise of being her pleasure for the night.

The following morning, Belle came back to her senses when the morning light came calling through her window. She laid there for a time as flashes of memory came to her.

An amazingly hot brunette … lots of red.

A leash … kneeling … her tongue lapping … so wet … soaking … the orgasms.

Her fingers trailed down under the covers, playing there until a knock at the door startled her. As she scrambled to find something to wear she called out: “Hang on! I’m not decent!”

She paused as she saw Belle in the mirror: sandy blond hair, looking ordinary. She sighed, disappointed. It was only a dream. She hadn’t gone to a party, hadn’t gone to find a costume, hadn’t been found by Mistress … The last thought both confused and bothered Belle, and she didn’t quite know why. She ran to the door, wearing an old T-shirt that was long enough to hide that she was otherwise nude underneath, her bare feet padding on the floor. A quick twist of the door handle … and … and Belle didn’t know what to say next.

There, standing on the other side was … Mistress? Tera? Belle’s thoughts were confused. The woman stood there in a long red jacket, with black jeans, ankle boots, and bandeau top. But no horns or tail, and that just seemed very odd.

Belle didn’t know what to say, and her thoughts were confused, but, somehow, she knew Pet would be clear, Pet would know, Pet would … would …

Tera smiled: “I think you are more than decent, Belle. Did you have a nice time at the party?”

Belle didn’t answer, couldn’t answer. The memories buried in her mind came out in a rush, overwhelming her and leaving her thighs quite damp. She swallowed, carefully: “I … Yes … ummm … Thank you.”

Tera didn’t say anything, and Belle started to close the door, to return to her life as it was, the night of passion, pleasure, and more a memory, possibly a dream.

Just before it closed completely, Tera asked: “Would you like to be that way always?”

Belle thought about her life, who she was, who Tera had made her be, at least for a time. The door remained almost closed for a long time, neither woman saying anything.

Then Belle opened the door: “Would you like to come in, Tera? I’d … like to ask some questions before I make up my mind.”

Tera smiled as she walked past Belle, her tail and horns appearing out of thin air, then her Tail giving Belle a hug around her waist: “Anything you’d like to, Belle, anything at all. Even if all you want is to be the belle of the ball.”

Oct 25 2015

A Review of Lycan Unleashed by Tiffany Allee

Lycan Unleashed by Tiffany Allee

Lycan Unleashed by Tiffany Allee

A review today on the Tale of the third work in a series that I have been reviewing last year. You can find those reviews here and here on the Tale. In the previous two works, Succubi were rather central characters to the plot, but in his work, the Succubus is fleeting in her appearance, though she leaves her mark nonetheless.

Sometimes the decisions we make are not ours to make in the first place. What comes from that can be, in many ways, the real tragedy and the greater desire.

The work tells of:

Detective Astrid Holmes is a sensitive, a human capable of feeling the energy of otherworlders. When she is dispatched to the horrific murder scene of a local vampire, she expects it to be just another day on the job. But when evidence is stolen on her watch, she is removed–not only from the investigation, but from her job as a member of the Chicago police department’s paranormal unit.

Astrid’s only hope of reinstatement lies with her ex co-worker and almost-lover, Lycan Mason Sanderson. But convincing the OWEA agent to let her assist with the investigation isn’t nearly as difficult as staying alive when the murderer realizes that Astrid may hold the key to unlocking his identity.

Fighting to take down a killer could have deadly consequences for Astrid and Mason, but working together puts their already fragile relationship in jeopardy.

Astrid is in a situation that isn’t a good one. She’s deeply involved in a crime. Not just investigating it, but being investigated as well. Things come to a head when the one person she can turn to is the last one she wants to. A little white lie gets her in, but how is she going to get out again in one piece?

This work is one in a series that is set in a world where the supernatural mix with humanity and, of course, things never quite work out smoothly for anyone. Astrid is the focus of this story along with Mason and how their relationship finally, after so many stories before, comes to a point where things move forward and becomes something more for them both. There’s so much good storytelling, universe building and more, which considering the previous works in the series is no surprise.

There is a succubus who is a minor character in the story, her name is Mary and she is married to a vampire, has been for some time. But things go wrong for her in a lot of ways and how her life tangles and then what happens afterwards isn’t really explained in detail, but the results are and in that what happens is very tragic. She is caught between a rock and a hard place and no matter what she does, things don’t go the best way possible.

There are a few nicely hot scenes in the work, all of which are not over the top erotica or written in a way that makes no sense. As a whole, the story really is well told and I enjoyed it very much, but there is minor problem at least for me. The problem is that there isn’t really a good feeling of closure in this work towards the main storyline. There is for the main characters, there is in a lot of other ways, but in one very important way there isn’t and it left me sighing a bit.

The work is, to be clear, not focused on Succubi, the appearance of one is only fleeting, but Mary’s history would be interesting to explore and explain. Actually the entire universe has a lot of stories that are left untold from each work and that means, I hope, there will be more stories coming and more to learn, succubi and otherwise.

A story well told, a mystery unwrapped, two finding their way in the world with all else that goes on around them. Really a good read and I recommend it as much as the other works in the series by far.

I’m giving this work four out of five pitchforks.

The work is well written, tells a really fascinating story, but really don’t provide a “clean” ending in a similar fashion to the other works in the series. That is a function of the main “bad guy” being untouchable after all, but somehow their having their just desserts would have I think made things a bit more satisfying for me. Hoping to see more in the series sometime soon, there are still many stories untold and there are Succubi there that have their stories to tell still…



Oct 25 2015

A Review of Succubus Week: Tuesday by Lisbet Laire

Succubus Week: Tuesday by Lisbet Laire

Succubus Week: Tuesday by Lisbet Laire

A review of the second work in the series called Succubus Week on the Tale today. You can find my review of the first work in this series here. At the time I had hoped for more about Adrienne, her life, her world. Going into this work, my expectations of that unfolding were quite strongly held because I think there’s a really good story to tell.

The thing about using a hook for a story is, at some point you need to actually have the hook mean something. It isn’t enough to have the character need to do something and then forget about it. While it can lead to a lovely hot flash, it does then beg the question as to when the hook will be used… and how the story gets there.

The story tells of:

After an exhausting day at work, Adrienne remembers that it’s her mother’s birthday the next day and rushes to the florist. Her friend, Viola, works there and Adrienne gets more than a bouquet of flowers . . .

Adrienne has had a hell of a day, and she can’t blame it on being Monday… It’s Tuesday. Struggling towards home after fixing a mess that some foolish mermaids left behind, she realizes that tomorrow is her mom’s birthday. Having no clue what to get for her, Adrienne falls back on that old standby… flowers. But what she didn’t expect was to fall into the arms of a lover from her past and where her needs will take her.

I thought who Adrienne is came out much more in this work, mainly because there as some history told, an expression of her own needs, and there was the telling of moments in her past that clearly say that she can, and has, done some things in the past she’s ashamed of, but is doing all she can to make up for it. There’s an aspect of Adrienne that is tired, not just in a physical way, but emotionally as well. To see that bit of vulnerability in her added a lot to her character.

In this work we learn, if only passing, that Adrienne’s mother seems to be close by and that becomes the catalyst to the story as a whole. This drives Adrienne towards a florist and she finds there a friend she hasn’t seen in ages, Viola. I found that there was quite a lot of things told about Viola, and comparing what has been told about Adrienne, it surprised me.

I think in this story we learned just about everything there is to know about Viola, but Adrienne herself still remains an enigma for the most part. I liked Viola, she is a Dryad, and there’s a certain playfully sexy and erotic vibe to her that comes out well in the story. Not to mention her talent with vines and a little bit of bondage that comes out in the erotica when the times comes… as does Adrienne.

The story, and there is a lot of it, I think worked well, told of both characters and kept things interesting as more of the universe they exist in was revealed. The erotica is a wonderfully hot lesbian flash, and I enjoyed the lust, love, and teasing that came out in that.

But the thing is, the story turned towards Viola because Adrienne needed flowers for her mother. That, to me, is a very strong hook, one that I wanted to know more about, but through the course of this story that plot was thrown to the side in the rush to put Adrienne and Voila together. It’s a tease really, a throwaway few lines, but considering who Adrienne is, what she is doing with her life, I really want to know her mother, what their relationship is like, and more.

Setting aside that disappointment, the work overall is a stronger one than the previous work because it was more focused, more to the point. It was about Adrienne, what she is feeling, how her life is being pulled this way and that. But most of all, it told about her needs and, in a way, her fears. Character development is a good thing and there was some to be seen. I hope this continues because I do like this series and I want to see where things go from here. Especially if Adrienne manages to remember the flowers she wanted to get in the first place.

After some lovely erotica, the work comes to a rather abrupt stop, much as the prior work did. I think there needs to be more than a single line to close out all that happened here, if for no other reason than to show that the moments shared between Adrienne and Viola matter more than just Adrienne feeding and sating herself.

Four out of five pitchforks.

A better story, as a whole than the first in the series, even if the pay off of seeing who Adrienne’s mother is didn’t come… even if Adrienne did. Still the ending is very abrupt and after all of the good that just didn’t quite work as it should have.

Wednesday, obviously, is next. Who is Adrienne’s mother and what happens when daughter visits mom on her birthday? It’s something I really want to see. I hope it is all that I want that moment to be too…



Oct 24 2015

An Art in progress YouTube of Succubus Queen: Lilith

A artwork in progress YouTube today on the Tale to share. It is of a character that is named Succubus Queen: Lilith who is described as the mother of Succubi and the wife of Lucifer in this artist OC works. I just think she has an interesting look and she made me ponder something…


And if you cannot see the video here on the Tale, try this link.

The artist also posted the completed artwork on their DeviantArt site, and you can find that page here and the artist’s page is here as well.

The succubus queen : Lilith by irajiack

The succubus queen : Lilith by irajiack

I like this look mainly because she seems, just slightly, understated in her looks and expression and I think that masks her real intentions and purpose. It also, I think, masks her real thoughts and emotions as well. The thing is that Lilith, whatever her form, is not a simple being and in many ways I think this art reflects that very well…



Oct 23 2015

Where exactly is Lost Girl going to put that lucky horseshoe and will it fit?

So the big, stunning, amazing reveal, and yes, I am being very sarcastic, this week on Lost Girl was that Bo is the Pyrippus. In all honestly, that has been telegraphed for some time in the series and when it came out the thing that bothered me the most was the scene itself. Was it really necessary to have Bo staring into the camera and starting to declare that she is the Pyrippus and then cute her off in mid-sentence? That was, as a whole, really formulaic cliffhanging at its worst.

Beyond that, why is it that the writers couldn’t have gone back and read, or at least watched, some prior episodes and made things link together better? The episode felt like it was rushed, for the most part, and in being so, I found myself not really caring about a lot of what was happening. Really that shouldn’t have happened, and save for Tamsin’s situation, the balance of the episode left me cold honestly.

The other thing that I thought about when it was over came to that this might have been what should have been the season finale which would have led into the next season if Lost Girl had been renewed for a sixth one. I think that’s where a lot of the scattered and lost feeling in the episode came from for me. I wonder if there was a lot of other scenes shot for this episode that got moved around in order to make, in some way, this episode connect better to the season finale next week.

To end the episode, as it was, with Bo seemingly in Hades’ control was expected I thought. But as well, I expect that horseshoe is somewhere nearby. Being so, and knowing what it is capable of, I really don’t believe that Bo is under her father’s thumb either. As well, considering all of the buildup with Dyson and the Fae Elders and so on, I don’t really believe that everyone else is doomed. They’ve gotten out in some way, and I kind of expect Vex to appear and make that happen. That brings us to Tamsin, what she is facing, and a thought that seems to be more and more true the last few episodes.

There must be someone on the Lost Girl writing staff that went to the Joss Whedon School of Killing Off Characters Because You Can. I think it has been overdone these last few episodes, having character after character be killed off “just because” and really there’s no other reason for it. Add into that burning down the clubhouse, again, for the sake of some tension which won’t go anywhere or do much of anything.

Of course, then there has to be some kind of justification for Mark’s existence as well in this episode. Having him “decide” to call in the Dark Fae to the meeting was another point where I rolled my eyes and sighed. It amazes me that in that one scene, Dyson said something that was so blatantly out of character, untrue, and so easily refuted. To say that he doesn’t work with the Dark is simply a lie, and in being so that took a lot of the respect that I think Dyson deserves. He has gone from being someone with backbone to a beaten puppy. It is a sad thing to see happen and it really shouldn’t have.

The episode didn’t resonate with me for a lot of reasons, but the main one I think is that there was too much time spent on trying to justify something that was well known and expected. We knew that Hades wanted Bo, has plans for her. Was it really needed to run around the edge of that question for as long as the episode did?

Speaking of Hades, at one point I was rather saddened by how Evony was played in the series, she turning out to be really much better and interesting, if not a real foil to Bo by this episode. Hades on the other hand hasn’t impressed me. There’s too much arrogance mixed with smooth-talking and truths mixed in lies as a whole. Now, that is the point of his character. but honestly there are so many moments when the “ick” factor comes in that his impact is lessened to the point where it becomes meaningless.

The word “meaningless” is something that seems to have cropped into the series in the last few episodes and that’s a sad thing. Knowing there are so many unresolved threads, which will never come to pass, just leaves things unfinished. I feel like, in a lot of ways, that the entire Hades plot is something of a means to divert attention from the rest of the series, the characters and the questions left. I find myself wondering what things would have been like if The Morrigan had been the villain she should have been. I wonder what things would have been like if Bo had been able to actually talk to Aife, to understand, to know.

Sometimes the hardest thing to accept is that what you want to know doesn’t make for good television. But it makes for a good story. It would have been nice to have that in this, the next to last episode.

The fifteenth episode of the fifth season, also episode seventy-six of the Lost Girl TV series was this week. Bo looks for her wild oats, finding instead a horse with no name, and a lousy attitude. Kenzi burns toast and then finds out how smelly unicorns can be. Dyson butts heads with Mark and then tells off a group of Fae when they act like little children. Tamsin deals with Hades being a twit before Hades convinces Bo that remodelling the clubhouse starts with a fire sale and burning her bridges.

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This is the fifteenth review of the fifth season of of Lost Girl. A summary of this episode has been added to the SuccuWiki, but won’t be adding my commentary to the articles there as that is what the Tale is for….

When Bo plays with fire, she finds that sometimes you have to…


Let Them Burn


The episode opens with a recap of the previous episode including: Bo being seen in her coma while Lauren and Dyson comment that Bo’s mind couldn’t accept the trauma of finding Trick and Aife dead in Hades’ condominium. Tamsin telling Lauren that she is having a baby, followed by Lauren telling Dyson that he did not fail Trick, but Dyson only seeing his failure. Kenzi is then seen shaking Bo, trying to make her come out of her coma followed by Bo whispering “He’s gone. Trick’s really gone.” Hades is then seen slitting Vex’s throat, telling him to give Bo a message from him, Vex then falling to the floor, clutching his throat and convulsing.

The episode begins with a trail of fire along pavement that is then shown to lead towards Bo’s home which is on fire. Kenzi (Ksenia Solo), Lauren (Zoie Palmer), Dyson (Kristen Holden-Ried) and Mark (Luke Bilyk) are then seen inside of the building, surrounded by the fire and trapped. As the group stands in the middle of the room they are in, the ceiling begins to collapse around them, making the situation worse. Dyson calls out: “Where’s Bo?”, Kenzi yelling: “She’s supposed to be here!” then calling out for Bo. Lauren offers that Bo must be upstairs and the group rush towards the stairway, finding it full of fire, the walls and ceiling slowly collapsing. Kenzi cries: “I’m not leaving without her!” and attempts to rush up the stairs, but Dyson stops her, telling Kenzi it is far too dangerous. Mark calls out that they need to leave, but the exits have all either collapsed, are full of fire, or otherwise impassable. Kenzi whispers: “What the hell?” looks at the fire and then adds: “He did this.” Lauren tells Kenzi: “We’re completely trapped.” Kenzi tells the others: “Jack did this!” The scene then shifts back outside, the camera moving slowly backwards until Bo (Anna Silk) is seen standing at the foot of the fire trail leading to her home, watching the fires and saying nothing.

Following the opening credits, we return, twentty-hout hours earlier to find Kenzi in Bo’s home, trying to cook and setting off the fire detector. As Kenzi rushes to take what she was cooking out of the toaster oven, she calls out: “Bo? You’re off carbs right?” then using a broom to try to move the smoke away from the fire detector, before using the broom to smash it and turn it off. Kenzi tells Bo: “You just got out of a coma. You should be on a liquid diet anyway.” Bo then enters the room, thanking Kenzi, but adding: “You don’t have to stick around.” Kenzi is shocked and tells Bo: “Dude? Are you kidding me? You just lost Trick and Aife.” Bo replies: “And Jack’s not going to stop. But I don’t want to drag you into this. You left for a very good reason.” Kenzi pointedly tells Bo: “I came back for a very good reason. I went to Spain to get away from the Fae, not from my bestie.” Bo and Kenzi look at each other, then Kenzi continues: “Besides, this crack shack will always be home.” Kenzi then asks Bo what she is planning and Bo replies that she doesn’t know but she does know it involves the Pyrippus. Bo continues: “Mythology says it is Hades’ Hell Horse and I just have to find it.” Kenzi tells Bo: “We gotta find it.” Kenzi rests her head on Bo’s shoulder a moment, then tells Bo she is going to check on Tamsin, commenting: “See if preggo wants some Eggo.” Bo continues to look at some artwork of the Pyrippus as Kenzi leaves the room.

Kenzi is then seen walking up the stairs to Tamsin’s room, covering her face with a towel and calling out: “Hey Tamsin! Better not see any stretch marks dude, you know how baby bumps freak me out Alien-styles.” When Kenzi lowers the towel, she finds Vex (Paul Amos) laying on the floor in a pool of blood, one hand clutching his throat and unresponsive. As Kenzi presses the towel on Vex’s wound, she cries out for Bo and tells Vex: “Okay. Hang on, hang on buddy, hang on.” Bo races upstairs and after seeing what has happened to Vex makes a phone call, but as she waits for it to be answered, Bo looks out the open window in the room and whispers: “Oh Tamsin.”

The scene then moves to a room elsewhere, where Tamsin (Rachel Skarsten) is being held in a similar cage as Hades used when he held Aife prisoner, a baby’s crib being shown outside of the cage, empty. As Tamsin sits on the floor, leaning against one corner of the cage, Hades (Eric Roberts) enters the room and asks: “So… How are we doing this morning?” Tamsin does not look at him as she growls: “Knock me up, lock me up, and now you want to chat?” Hades idly comments: “Oh baby, you look tired. Have you been having trouble sleeping?” Tamsin continues to refuse to look at Hades, answering: “What do you think?” Hades continues: “I think you need to take care of yourself. You’re about to become a momma. Which means you need to learn to put the baby’s needs ahead of your own.” Tamsin then looks at Hades, answering: “So you can raise it to be a demon child? If this baby grows up to be anything like Bo, you’re out of luck. Raising her to be your ‘agent of darkness’ didn’t really pan out did it?” Hades shrugs this off, telling Tamsin: “Well, that’s why I chose a different breed for the mother. Someone that can better serve my needs.” Tamsin looks away and whispers: “I think I’m going to throw up.” Hades taunts: “Morning sickness, huh?” Tamsin growls: “General disgust.” Hades ignores this, continuing: “Well. if it’s alright with you, I’d like to do a biophysical profile, check the amniotic fluid, make sure everything is okay with my baby.” Tamsin stares at Hades, then pulls herself off the floor and warns him: “Last time I checked, this was my body so don’t, for one second, think this baby is yours.” Hades is nonplussed and replies: “Ah… That’s the spunk I love.” Hades then walks away, Tamsin on the edge of tears, she then kicking the bars of her cage in anger.

Lauren (Zoie Palmer), Bo and Kenzi are then seen talking about Vex as he lays in Lauren’s clinic, Lauren explaining: “His vocal cords were severed, but his arteries weren’t cut, it’s the only reason he’s still alive.” Bo rushes up to Vex, demanding to know if Hades had attacked him, Kenzi asking Vex if he knows where Tamsin is. Dyson then appears and asks Vex if Hades took Tamsin. Lauren interrupts them, reminding them all that Vex cannot speak before handing Vex a small writing pad and a marker to write with. When Bo asks who attacked him, Vex writes: “Guess.” Kenzi sighs: “Guess that means Jack.” Dyson comments that Hades must have Tamsin then as well before Bo adds: “She’s all alone with him just like my mother was. Who knows what he’s done to her.” Dyson then turns away, intent on confronting Hades, but Bo reminds Dyson they tried attacking Hades directly and it failed. Dyson insists they cannot leave Tamsin with Hades and Bo tries to make Dyson understand that: “You can’t just walk in there, that’s how people get killed. We have to be smart.” Dyson considers this and then agrees with Bo, turning away as he adds: “But I can’t just sit here.” As Dyson leaves, Vex attempts to use his powers to make Lauren give him more painkillers, but after Lauren tells Vex he can’t “just have it happen”, Vex releases her and Lauren increases the dosage that Vex is getting through his IV, commenting: “Turning me into an enabler.” Kenzi then shows Bo the horseshoe she had received from Zeus and asks Bo if it is the answer. Bo explains: “I don’t know what Jack’s planning, but I think it has something to do with the Pyrippus and I think that horseshoe can control it.” Kenzi suggests: “What you do say we go get this crazy horse?” Bo replies: “We need to come up with a plan.” Kenzi then muses: “Okay. Trick, Aife, Vex, Tamsin. All of Jack’s victims have one thing in common. All roads lead to Bo.” Bo seems not to hear what Kenzi is saying, continuing to comment: “Whatever he is planning… Whatever was his end game, he’s been planning it from the moment I was born.” Lauren wonders: “If that’s true, then who else would know? Who was there at your birth?” Kenzi ponders: “Aife. The nurse…” Bo sighs: “Everyone with answers is dead.” Vex then writes on his pad: “Midwife alive” Bo is shocked, asking how Vex could know that and the next message reads: “Ask Evony”

The scene then moves to an upper class home where a doorman opens the main doors to allow both Kenzi and Bo to enter. Kenzi looks around and comments: “This is where Evony lives now? Damn girl.” As they walk the hallway, Bo tells Kenzi: “Just so you know, she’s really sick. She might not look like her Morrigan self.” Kenzi snaps her fingers: “Her Karma’s a bitch disease. Got it.” Kenzi is then served a drink by a maid, who Kenzi thanks, but Bo kindly refuses. After taking a sip, Kenzi comments: “Fresh mimosas. Respect.” then adds: “Her butler has a butler.” Off in the distance, Evony’s voice is heard: “I would like to thank the Board of Directors who toiled so hard to put together this fundraiser.” Bo and Kenzi enter the room where Evony (Emmanuelle Vaugier) is speaking to see an assembled group of women there. Evony continues to speak, calling out several individual’s names before ending with her thanks for the success of the gathering and adding: “Your support is crucial for finding a cure for this disease.” Bo and Kenzi stare at Evony, amazed at how she appears to be, not seeming to be obviously suffering from her curse, Kenzi commenting: “She doesn’t look all that sick to me.” Bo answering: “No kidding.” Evony then notes Bo and Kenzi there and introduces Bo and Kenzi as “special guests”, adding they are just in time for High Tea. Bo comments to Kenzi: “Tamsin is missing. I don’t exactly have an appetite.” Kenzi reminds Bo they need answers and: “It looks like we’re going to have to high tea to get them.”

After the first commercial break, we return to find Evony walking among the collected women and commenting to Bo and Kenzi: “Being human is a riot, and the gossip? This committee has more drama than a Dark Fae blood feud.” Bo replies: “Your fundraising is impressive.” Evony explains: “I figure if I couldn’t Fae my way out of my disease, I might as well throw money at it. As Committee Chair, I’ve raised over 100 million dollars in 10 days.” Kenzi comments: “Move over Melinda Gates.” Evony then asks what Bo and Kenzi want, assuming they are not there to donate and Bo explains she is looking for the midwife that abducted her, Kenzi adding that Vex told them that Evony knows where she is. Evony smiles as she tells Bo: “Ever since I met you I wanted to kill you.” Bo replies: “Yeah. So I’ve gathered.” Evony continues: “And not just because of your porcelain complexion. When I learned the Unaligned Succubus could suck multiple Chis, I knew I had to keep my eye on you. But when I couldn’t figure out what made you tick, I just wanted you dead.” Kenzi comments: “Good strategy. Decisive.” Evony continues: “What else do you do with a weird mole? You burn it off.” Bo comments: “I always love being compared to a weird mole.” Evony brushes this off as she continues: “Now that I’m human, I’m a lot more lax about the secrets of the Dark Fae.” Bo asks Evony if she knows where Bo’s midwife is and Evony reveals: “Trick saved her from execution years ago. He thought he pulled one over on me. but I took her. Figured she’d come in handy when it came time to taking you down.” Bo sighs: “You knew all this time and you said nothing.” Evony pointedly replies: “I wanted you dead. Why would I tell you anything? But things are different now, funny what being human does to you. You know, I never could figure out why you always chose humans. Now I’m starting to see why.” Evony notices the ring Kenzi is wearing, calling it “nice bling” and Kenzi tells Evony: “Thanks. Trick left it to me.” Evony is silent for a moment, then sadly replies: “I heard. My condolences.” Bo nods in reply, then Evony continues: “If the Light Fae wasn’t enough of a gong show, I can’t imagine what losing the Ash will do and with Hades at large? Forget it.” Bo tells Evony: “Hades got Tamsin pregnant, then he took her.” Evony whispers: “Here we go again.” Evony warns Bo: “Take it from someone that likes to get what she wants. He won’t stop.” Bo again asks Evony where Bo’s midwife is and Evony explains: “She plays with my ponies.” Kenzi asks: “Bo’s midwife is a brony?” Evony continues: “I locked her up at my ranch. Turns out she was great with horses, so I figured, what the hell, let her take care of them. I needed someone to shovel the shit.” Bo asks: “Fae horse ranch?” but Evony does not reply, taking a drink instead.

Returning to Tamsin, she is standing in her prison, staring off into space when something catches her attention. She calls out Hades’ name, and after receiving no answer, attempts to break the lock and chain that is keeping her cell closed. After rattling the bars of her prison, Hades then appears and asks: “What’s all the ruckus?” When asked if she is okay, Tamsin replies: “Sure. Nothing like cage living.” Hades suggests: “Take it easy, can’t be too careful in your condition.” Tamsin answers: “You try not eating for a day.” Hades offhandedly replies: “If you were hungry, all you had to do was ask.” Hades then rolls in a serving cart, offering Tamsin a plate of “scrambled Phoenix eggs” as a meal. Tamsin turns away from the offering, telling Hades: “I think I just lost my appetite.” Hades then presents Tamsin with a fork and the plate, reminding her: “You’re eating for two.” Tamsin pauses, then takes the fork and the plate, retreating back in her cage to try and eat what she has been given, Hades commenting: “Atta girl.”

Dyson and Mark are then seen entering the Dal Riata, which is filling up with floral and other tributes for Trick. The pair look at the assembled tributes, Mark commenting: “The Dal’s been closed since… But the deliveries keep on coming.” Dyson nods: “He was loved by many people.” Mark looks at the bar and sighs that he expects Trick to be standing at the bar. Dyson makes a decision and tells Mark: “If we are going to defeat Hades, we need to gather our strength. I want to call Consilium.” Dyson explains it is a gathering of the most powerful Fae Elders in the world, adding that one had not been called in 1,200 years. Dyson explains to Mark: “In Trick’s lair, in the fireplace, there is a censer. I want you to burn these in it. It will summon the Light Fae Elders.” When Mark asks about the Dark Fae Elders, Dyson explains: “You release a flock of ravens. It’s called a Black Cloud.” When Mark asks where to fine the ravens, Dyson clearly tells Mark to only summon the Light Fae. Mark asks: “Why? Power in numbers right?” Dyson tells Mark: “The Dark have no place at our councils.” Mark questions this, asking what the difference is and Dyson seems confused by the question. When Mark asks how one tells if they are Light or Dark, Dyson’s answer is: “Trust me. You know. Stick with the Light.” Mark sighs as he turns away to perform the task that Dyson asked him to.

The scene then moves to a ranch where Bo and Kenzi drive up in Bo’s car. Getting out of the car, Bo comments: “I can’t believe that Evony hid her all of these years.” Kenzi sighs: “I hope it’s not too late.” As the pair walk around the ranch, Bo sighs: “Okay midwife. What has Evony done with you.” There is a shift in location, seemingly to mean that Bo and Kenzi have been walking for some time, Kenzi asking: “Are we there yet?” After Bo tells Kenzi to hurry up, Kenzi steps in some horse manure and cries out: “No! Not the Choos!” As Kenzi struggles to catch up, Bo comes to a stop and whispers: “I guess weren’t not alone.” There is the distant sound of galloping horses and then six white horses crest a hill, all heading towards Bo. Kenzi sings to herself: “She’ll be driving six white horses when she comes…” All of the horses come to a halt immediately around Bo, all of them looking at her. After a moment, Kenzi calls out quietly: “Um… Bobo? Are we like, Fae horse whispering right now? Should I leave y’all alone?” Bo says nothing, then a woman’s voice calls out: “They’re happy to see you.” When Bo turns around, she comes face to face with Lou Ann (Marie Ward) who bo recognizes as: “Lou Ann Heidegger. You were on Death Row, you’re supposed to be dead.” Kenzi asks: “Are you a ghost?” Lou Ann explains: “Trick saved me from execution. I owe him my life.” Bo whispers: “You’re my midwife?” Lou Ann says nothing and as the scene ends, the three women are seen from above, the six horses standing with them.

After another commercial break, we return to find Bo asking Lou Ann why she did not tell Bo who she was and is told that Trick made Lou Ann promise to say nothing for her own protection, adding: “He made mistakes with his own Daughter. He wanted to make up for it so he hired me to rescue her from the Dark.” Bo is confused over this as Lou Ann continues: “When he found out that Aife was pregnant, he asked me to birth you and take you too. But the day I arrived you had already been born. Aife was sick. She wanted to kill you Bo. So, I took you and hid you among humans.” Bo sighs: “It was Trick… I wish I’d known.” Kenzi tells Bo: “He always had your back.” Lou Ann continues: “He wanted to keep you as far away from the Fae as possible for your own protection.” Then Lou Ann asks Bo why she is there and Bo replies: “I think my father is trying to get me back. I need to find the Pyrippus.” Lou Ann questions this, Kenzi adding: “Hell Horse? Evil Steed? Devil’s Pony?” Bo continues: “It is depicted as a stallion that breaths fire and I know my father has something to do with it.” Kenzi then shows Lou Ann the horseshoe that Bo has possession of, explaining: “We think we can control it with this.” Lou Ann then turns, walking away as she tells them: “Saddle up. We’re going for a ride.”

Tamsin is then seen, still trapped in her cage. Hades enters the room, telling Tamsin he will return and then leaves. As soon as Hades has departed, Tamsin moves to the lock of the cage, using the fork she had been eating with earlier in the episode in an attempt to pick the lock. As she does so, Hades is then seen watching Tamsin attempt to escape from a different point in the room before surprising Tamsin by asking: “Going somewhere?” When Tamsin tells Hades she thought he left, he replies: “I forgot to ask if you needed anything from the outside. But I can see you are trying to stretch your legs.” Tamsin looks at Hades and tells him: “Legs? No. You forgot when you chose a breed that Valkyries like me, we have wings.” Tamsin then attempts to spread her wings, but then is confused when they do not appear. Hades comments: “Darling, you won’t be using those for a while” as it is shown the only thing remaining of Tamsin’s wings are stumps that barely extend past her skin. Tamsin demands to know what Hades did, he replying: “I clipped your wings while you were sleeping. It’s not wise to fly in your condition.” Tamsin whispers: “I know why Aife wanted to kill Bo.” Tamsin holds the fork against her womb as she continues: “If this baby’s evil, maybe I should do the same thing.” Hades is unimpressed, asking if Tamsin really would do such a thing. Tamsin sobs as she looks at Hades, dropping the fork to the floor as she does so, turning away from Hades and curling up in one corner of her cage. She tells Hades: “I’m not gonna let this baby be evil. I’m not going to let this baby serve you.” Hades replies in an amused voice: “I look forward to seeing you try.” Tamsin tells Hades, again, that she will not allow it, but Hades replies: “Tamsin, come on, we both know what will happen when the baby’s born.” Hades then turns and walks away, leaving Tamsin alone and crying.

Bo, Kenzi and Lou Ann are then seen on horseback. When Kenzi asks what the names of their mounts are, Lou Ann replies: “Bo is riding Liamrei. She was once owned by King Arthur.” Lou Ann then tells of the horse she is riding: “And this is Bucephalus. He led Alexander the Fae to victory.” Kenzi asks: “Who did my guy lead to victory?” Lou Ann explains: “That’s Otis. He never had a master, but he’s definitely one of a kind.” There is the sound of Otis passing wind and Kenzi comments: “Of course I get the farty pony.” Bo turns to Lou Ann and asks if they can move faster, Lou Ann telling Bo they are almost to their destination. She continues: “I must warn you, the stallion is wild and extremely dangerous.” When Kenzi asks if it might be the Pyrippus, Bo replies: “We’ll know soon enough.” Bo then asks Lou Ann: “From midwife to rancher, how’d that happen?” Lou Ann explains: “The Morrigan took me from one prison and put me in another. No that it mattered. When I lost my kids, nothing else mattered. Even after Trick rescued me I had nothing to live for. Working with the horses helps, something to love that loves you back. It’s funny. This was meant to be a prison but it saved me. I miss my kids every day, my husband.” Lou Ann then asks if Kenzi is doing alright, adding: “Unicorns are known to be a bit gassy.” Kenzi, in a surprised voice asks: “Hold up. Otis is a unicorn?” Lou Ann explains: “He is a rescue from Scotland. His horn was cut off by poachers. He’s the last one of his kind.” Kenzi is silent for a moment, then giggles: “I can’t believe that I am riding a freakin’ unicorn!” Otis then passes wind again and Kenzi sighs: “Oh god Otis…” The three then approach a stable, coming to a stop just outside of it. Lou Ann points out the stallion who approaches the fence, jumping onto its hind legs, whinnying, and then breathing fire from its snout several times. Kenzi asks: “Is that a horse or a dragon?” Bo looks at the horse and whispers: “It’s the Pyrippus.”

Back at the Dal Riata, a group of Fae Elders are in the midst of an argument about what to do about Hades. One Elder demands they take action, another argues that doing so would reveal the Fae, while another demands they protect themselves. The arguments continue while Mark and Dyson watch from a short distance away. Dyson asks: “What the hell is this?” Mark answers: “A Consilium?” Dyson tells Mark that he was told to gather the Light Fae, but Mark tells Dyson: “We are dealing with Hades.” Dyson tells Mark: These are the most powerful Fae that exist in our world.” Mark laughing asks: “So what are we talking about? A bunch of wizards in bathrobes?” Dyson angrily explains: “With the Light Ash dead and The Morrigan turned human, there’s no one in control here.” Mark tells Dyson: “Trick left us the Dal because it’s a Sanctuary.” Dyson yells at Mark: “Does this look like a Sanctuary?” Mark yells back: “Just because they’re Dark doesn’t mean they can’t help!” Dyson continues: “The divide between the Light and the Dark has always stood for a good reason.” Make sighs: “Of course you’d say that.”

Returning to the ranch, Lou Ann explains to Bo: “We did everything. Isolated him, tried to gain his trust, but no one has been able to break him.” When Bo asks what Lou Ann means, she is told: “Horses are wild by nature, so the one that breaks them gains their loyalty and servitude for life. They need to surrender to be trained properly.” Bo then opens Kenzi’s handbag, removing the horseshoe and approaching the stallion. As she does so, Kenzi tells Bo: “Do you not see the flames coming out of his nose?” but Bo says nothing, continuing to walk towards the stallion.

Bo enters the range, moving closer to the stallion. holding the horseshoe out in front of her and speaking softly to the stallion as she does so. The stallion rears up several times, breathing fire until, when Bo is directly in front of the stallion, the flames are directed at her. However, before they can touch Bo, the horseshoe she is holding deflects the fire away, leaving her untouched. Bo then is able to touch the the snout of the stallion and uses her powers to calm him. As Bo does so, she comments: “You don’t like being in here do you boy? It’s okay. It’s alright.” The stallion calms under Bo’s touch, voice and powers until Bo is able to walk alongside the stallion, raising one of the stallion’s hooves and comparing her horseshoe with it. It is clearly seen that the horseshoe is the incorrect size for the stallion and Bo calls out: “It’s too big!” Kenzi asks if Bo is sure, Bo replying: “He looks exactly like the Pyrippus from the painting. I don’t get it, why doesn’t it fit?” Lou Ann then asks: “Are you sure you are looking for a horse?” When Bo asks what Lou Ann means, she is told: “Horses have often been used in works of art to depict powerful forces of nature.” Bo considers a moment, then replies: “You said you were trying to break this stallion, to gain his loyalty and servitude. That’s what Jack’s been trying to do to me.” Lou Ann tells Bo: “In one of her rants, Aife once said she wanted to kill her baby because someone put something evil inside of it.” Kenzi wonders: “Well, maybe that wasn’t just one of her rants.” Bo whispers: “Does that mean the Pyrippus is…”

After still another commercial break, Bo and Kenzi are seen walking through the ranch together. Bo comments: “So, I’m the Pyrippus. The Pyrippus is… me.” Kenzi tells Bo: “I’m trying, I’m struggling. I’ve known you for what? Five years? Yes, you do have a lustrous mane of hair, but you don’t have a horserace. It’s more… oval.” Bo wonders: “What if when I chi-sucked all of those people to save Lauren from the Lich…” Kenzi continues: “… and super sucked us to save Dyson during your Dawning…” Bo adds: “What if that was the Pyrippus taking over? What if it’s been inside of me all of this time?” Kenzi sighs: “Then Jack has been playing the long game for a long time.” Bo admits: “But I can’t control it Kenzi. I mean, when it happens… I lose myself.” Kenzi replies: “Scary voice, crazy eyes, yeah, I know.” Bo tells Kenzi: “I felt my father taking control of the Pyrippus when the cinvat opened. I don’t want to lose myself again.” Kenzi replies: “I’m not going to let you okay?” Bo comes to a stop and then wonders: “If Jack created the Pyrippus, he needs it. I need to go to him.” Kenzi argues this, but Bo brushes off Kenzi’s concerns explaining: “If he is trying to break my spirit like I’m some kind of wild horse, then I have to help him with the next step.” Kenzi asks what that is and Bo replies: “I surrender.” Kenzi asks Bo to explain exactly what she means and Bo explains: “Jack is not going to stop until he gets what he wants. The Pyrippus. Me.” When Kenzi tells Bo this is not a good idea, Bo continues: “Kenzi, I don’t have a choice.” Bo then gets into her car, Kenzi following a moment later, nothing else being said between them as Bo drives away from the ranch.

Back at the Dal Riata, the Fae Elders are still arguing and fighting among themselves. Dyson tells Mark they need to remove the Dark Fae from the Dal Riata, but Mark tells Dyson: “You could lead the meeting, seeing how they’re already here.” Dyson replies: “It’s not my place.” Mark tells Dyson: “Right. Because you don’t lead. You just serve.” Dyson angrily tells Mark: We don’t work with the Dark!” Mark then asks: “What if I was Dark?” Dyson states: “You’re not.” Mark looks around the room: “Vex was almost killed protecting Tamsin.” Dyson replies: “Vex? For all we know, he could be colluding with Jack.” Mark sighs: “You’ve never trusted him. But I do.” Mark then turns on Dyson, growling: “Unlike you, he’s not a coward!” Dyson angrily tells Mark: “I will let that go because you have no idea what it is like to be responsible for people. I will let that go because you are still a child who runs from his own problems. You haven’t even shifted yet!” Mark says nothing, then walks away from Dyson. Dyson hesitates, thinking about what he said, then follows after Mark who has left the Dal Riata. Dyson calls out Mark’s name, but he does not answer. When Dyson asks Mark to come out, it is revealed that Mark had undergone his first shift which reveals that he is a panther-shifter. Dyson talks to Mark in his shifted state, explaining to him that he needs to shift back into being human, to not allow the animal part of him to take control. Dyson tells Mark what needs to happen, to return to himself and after a short moment of indecision Mark shifts back, curled up on the floor beside Dyson. Dyson helps Mark to his feet, then gives Mark his jacket, smiling and simply saying: “You did it. I thought you’d be a wolf, but you manifested what’s inside of you.” Dyson then tells Mark: “Now you get to choose.” Mark tells Dyson he will not choose, but Dyson tells him: “You have to, we all do.” Mark reminds Dyson: “Bo didn’t.” Dyson bluntly tells Mark: “That’s different.” Mark gives Dyson a hard look, then tells him: “I guess it’s time for me to go.” As Mark walks off, Dyson calls out for him to stop, then tells Mark: “I love you. You’re my son and you will always be my son.” The two then look at each other and nod, together, once.

Bo arrives at Hades’ condominium, alone and calls out for Hades. Tamsin, elsewhere in the condominium hears Bo and screams out Bo’s name. As Bo moves towards Tamsin, Hades comments: “You’re home.” Bo then turns around to find that Hades is standing behind her as Tamsin continues to call out Bo’s name. Hades dismisses Tamsin as: “Don’t worry about Tamsin. She’s emotional, but she’s fine. Hormones.” Bo tells Hades: “I didn’t come for her. I came to see you.” Hades comments: “Last time we spoke, you weren’t very happy with me.” Bo smiles: “Well, I’m here now. To help you.” Hades wonders why he still needs Bo’s help as he as moved onto a new plan, calling it “Plan B. B for Baby.” Tamsin screams out: “Bo! You have to help me! He took my wings!” Hades chuckles at Tamsin’s screams as Bo walks closer to him, telling Hades: “A baby is just… a baby. Not a sure thing and I’m a sure thing.” Hades shrugs: “It may delay my plans but babies have a tendency to grow up and I can wait. Because if I am anything, it’s patient, as you know.” Bo smiles: “You waited a long time for me. But I’m here now.” Hades smirks: “Oh, I’m so glad to hear that.” Bo continues that Hades does not need Tamsin and tells him: “There’s no point for her to die in there.” Hades then reveals to Bo: “It is a little known fact, but Valkyries die in childbirth and Tamsin is no exception.”

Following still another commercial break, Bo tells Hades: “I’m here to do whatever you need me to do.” Hades laughs: “Forgive me if I don’t believe you Bo, but I’m having a hard time following this little act of yours.” Bo insists that she isn’t acting and she explains: “For a long time I’ve been trying to figure out who I really am,where I really came from, what I’m really meant to do and the people I’ve called my family have been lying to me from day one.” Hades replies: “I’m glad to hear you finally say that.” Bo presses on with: “But you’ve been honest with me from the moment I released you from Tartarus.” Hades comments: “I said I would never lie to you.” Bo continues: “I know that now, I know why you did what you did to Trick and Aife. You had to. It was the only way I could see the truth. And the truth is, dad, we have a greater purpose. You’re the only one that I can trust. You’re my family.” Hades smiles: “I’m glad to see that I have earned your trust, but if you want to work with me, there’s something I need you to do.”

Returning to the Dal Riata, the Dark and Light Fae Elders are still fighting among themselves, unable to trust one another to turn against Hades. One Elder suggests that they summon the Jotunn, another calling them the Frost Giants and scoffing at the suggestion. The discussion continues to devolve into a shouting match until Dyson calls out loudly: “I call Sanctuary!” which silences the room. Having the attention of all there, Dyson then tells the Elders: “I called Consilium to forge a peace.” One Elder scoffs at this, calling the Dark Fae “parasites” which angers them further. Dyson shouts: “Enough!” When things calm, slightly, Dyson continues: “The Light and Dark have been on the edge of war for over a thousand years, but we are about to face the greatest foe the Fae have ever fought. Now, more than ever, we must come together.” One Dark Elder asks: “Why do you consider the Light in this manner. Only the Dark can vanquish Hades.” Dyson refutes this by explaining: “Hades is neither Light nor Dark, he transcends both.” Another Dark Elder wonders: “Why should we trust a wolf? Especially one who has been intimate with the unaligned Succubus, Hades’ own daughter?” Dyson nods: “It’s true. Bo is Hades’ daughter. But she is also the Granddaughter of the Blood King.” This causes some confusion, one Elder calling Trick being the Blood King a rumour and nothing more. Dyson replies: “Trick hid his secret well.” Another Elder states: “If Trick was the Blood King, he would have shown his power.” Dyson answers: “That was not his way. He could have killed you all, but instead he chose peace. To him the Dal Riata was a place of Sanctuary. So, as a tribute to the Blood King, I ask you to join me in creating that peace.” There is a long silence, the assembled Fae looking towards themselves and each other before Dyson is asked what they should do. Dyson answers: “We must unite our strength if we are to vanquish Hades.” The first to reply is a Dark Fae Elder who draws a blade and then states: “I offer Naginata.” A Light Fae Elder follows by raising his staff and stating: “And I Kalidanda, Ballast of Death. The weapons are placed upon a table and then the balance of the assembled Fae add their weapons to the offering in silence.

Bo is then seen at home, packing a small bag and zipping it closed. She picks up a gas can and looks around her home before pouring gasoline throughout her home. When she is finished doing so, Bo then sets the timer on her toaster oven, which is filled with rags, before calling Kenzi and telling her: “Kenzi? It’s me. I need you to get everyone and meet me at the clubhouse. Yes. Now. I have a plan. Okay. See you soon.” After Bo hangs up she sighs: “Sorry guys, but it’s better this way.” Bo then picks up her bag and the gas can, taking one last look around her home before walking away.

Dyson, Kenzi, Lauren and Mark are then seen entering Bo’s home, Dyson commenting: “Do you smell that? It’s kerosine.” Lauren calls out Bo’s name, but Bo does not answer. As Kenzi enters, she comments: “She said she had a plan” and as Kenzi says this there is the sound of an explosion as the toaster oven bursts into flames and the fire begins to spread. In moments they are surrounded by the flames, and the opening sequence plays out again. As the group stands in the middle of the room they are in, the ceiling begins to collapse around them, making the situation worse. Dyson calls out: “Where’s Bo?”, Kenzi yelling: “She’s supposed to be here!” then calling out for Bo. Lauren offers that Bo must be upstairs and the group rush towards the stairway, finding it full of fire, the walls and ceiling slowly collapsing. Kenzi cries: “I’m not leaving without her!” and attempts to rush up the stairs, but Dyson stops her, telling Kenzi it is far too dangerous. Mark calls out that they need to leave, but the exits have all either collapsed, are full of fire, or otherwise impassable. Kenzi whispers: “What the hell?” looks at the fire and then adds: “He did this.” Lauren tells Kenzi: “We’re completely trapped.” Kenzi tells the others: “Jack did this!” The scene then shifts back outside, the camera moving slowly backwards until Bo is seen standing at the foot of the fire trail leading to her home, watching the fires and saying nothing. Hades then walks into view and, after watching the fire for a moment, tells Bo: “I know that was very hard for you, but you can still save your friends if you want to. What do you want to do?” Bo is silent, then replies: “Let them burn.”

After the final commercial break, we find Dyson, Kenzi, Lauren and Mark still trapped in the fire. A cross beam begins to collapse onto them, but Dyson steps underneath and supports it, keeping the ceiling from caving in on them. Kenzi and Lauren are seen on the floor, Kenzi insisting: “Bo is up there! We have to get her!” Lauren replies: “No! She’s not here!” and Mark adding: “We need to find a way out of here!” Mark sees Dyson struggling and calls out: “Dad!” Dyson yelling as he continues to hold up the beam: “I can’t let this go! The whole building will come down on us!”

Bo and Hades are seen returning to the condominium where Hades leads Bo towards a throne made of white stone. Bo asks: “What’s this?” Hades replies: “It is for you. Do you like it?” Bo runs her hand along the armrest as she walks beside it, then taking her place there, crossing her leg and looking forwards, then replying: “I love it.” Hades nods: “Good. It’s time for the next phase.” Hades then places his hand over the mark that Bo carries on her chest, causing it to glow brightly, then telling Bo: “I’m going to need your help.” Bo stares forwards, not saying anything as Tamsin’s voice is heard calling Bo’s name, but then turns towards the sound of Tamsin’s voice. Tamsin is seen in her cell, laying on the floor as she sobs: “Bo… Why won’t you help me?” Hades asks Bo: “Does that bother you?” Bo looks forwards once more and replies: “Not at all.” Hades smiles: “Good. Are you ready?” Bo’s eyes turn bright blue and she answers: “I was born ready.” Hades nodding: “That’s my girl.” The final image of the episode is Hades standing behind Bo, at her right shoulder, the two looking out over the city that is visible from the balcony they are perched upon as the episode ends.


Fade to black…


Overall there have been a lot of weak episodes in the series this season and this one is, as a whole, really average, if perhaps slightly better than that. Being that it is the next to last episode I expected more than that.

I expected to be held by the story, what transpired. I wanted to have more of Bo’s past explained, perhaps a focus upon what Hades needed Bo for in the first place. I thought there would be a moment in the episode where all of Bo’s family would come together, to turn to face Hades and in that moment the story would be set for the finale.

There is a moment in the episode were Vex is scribbling on a whiteboard and trying to communicate. I felt like that was a telling moment for this episode, and the series as a whole. The point of the episode kept changing, altering, having no real direction or purpose. It felt very lost and uncertain from the beginning to the end in many ways.

Most of all, and most irritating, was how often Bo went from her core self so often. I don’t really accept that her “other self” is doing so however. More so, and really this is another point at which I wonder about things, is how Kenzi knew all about Bo’s “other self” and over all of this time they never talked about it. Yet, when Kenzi does, Bo sort of brushes it all aside in a single minded focus on Hades above all else.

That’s a problem because Bo’s been seen to be better than that. As there were so many horse references this week, she was being led around by her nose and that just rubbed me the wrong way. While I will accept that she felt she was doing the right thing in going to Hades, and making him believe that she was with him was a good plan, it is full of holes.


Speaking of full of holes, the biggest problem with Mark has been a point to his existence in the series. There’s been no real connection between him and Dyson, the Vex subplot has run into a brick wall and hasn’t gone anywhere. Mark has been whiny, complaining, underfoot and irritating. He’s been, as a whole, taking up screen time and returning very little, at least from my perspective. Now, finally, he shifts and his “inner animal” is a panther. Honestly I was expecting a mouse. Past that, the relationship with Dyson isn’t going anywhere except to continually drive a spike between the two of them. Ego trips aside, and there were a lot of them in this episode, this entire subplot hasn’t amounted to anything.

The beginning of the episode, foreshadowing the ending, I think was wasting about three minutes of screen time that could have been put to better use. As an attention getter, it worked, there’s no question of that, but then we repeat the entire sequence again which then leads to the cliffhanger ending. Another example of wasting time when there was so little left to use. But, nonetheless, the time was spent and in the end it didn’t add anything more than what was revealed.

It never should have been because Vex’s being attacked and that entire subplot alone was more than enough to drive the story forwards. There was a point to it, though if Vex speaks in the next episode I will be throwing popcorn at the television. The point was to give Bo a means to get somewhere in looking for answers, and going to Evony did that.

It’s been a long time since Evony has been confident, strong, and even a little bit evil. She managed to be that, for the time she was in the episode, but there was something else. That moment when she expresses her sorrow for Trick’s death was, for me, a kind of closure to her character. Whether she appears in the finale or not, she left her mark in this episode. She isn’t the same person she was when we first met her and, thinking about that, she’s one of the few that have moved a fair distance from who they were to who they are.

Lauren was fairly non-existent in the episode, almost becoming, in a way, as Trick was for many episodes this season. She was there, but really wasn’t. A voice heard, but amounting to nothing much in the grand scheme of things.

The episode had, as its focus, Tamsin far more than Bo and emotionally that was very true. The moments with Tamsin where many times more powerful than anything that Bo did. There was real pain, suffering, mental anguish and more. The wretched feeling from watching Hades, quite literally, play with Tamsin’s life was just on the edge of being obscene at times. The two plots, being so different in their tone, even when Bo was trying to come to terms with what her father made her to be, were like night and day. Bo didn’t  have, for the most part, any real emotion throughout the episode and that needed to be.

The episode was uneven, sometimes unwatchable, and, sadly, didn’t tell as good as story at should have been.

On to the characters in the episode…

Bo… I wonder where she’s hiding that horseshoe. Beyond that, the almost complete lack of direction was telling. Bo was on the edge of being Boffy again and I’ve seen enough of her.

Dyson…Nothing like having a fight with your son, then trying to bring two sides together. When Dyson was in charge, that was fine. Lost Dyson isn’t.

Kenzi. I’m really happy that Kenzi got a unicorn. I was hoping that would happen in the series at some point. However, she didn’t quite act like the Kenzi we know and love, and that as disappointing. Still, Kenzi. That helped a lot. Line of the week: “Um… Bobo? Are we like, Fae horse whispering right now? Should I leave y’all alone?”

Lauren. Ten seconds of being a doctor followed by ten seconds of dodging burning wreckage. Almost didn’t need to be in the episode.

Tamsin: Possibly, by far, the best I have ever seen her be. Just gripping and powerful. If Tasmin survives and Hades is around, he’s a dead man.

Vex. He plays a good game of hangman. In bed, moaning, and needing meds. I really wish he could have talked because I missed his snark.

Evony. I liked her a lot, mainly for seeing that little spark of the Morrigan of the past. She might be human, but she’s every bit the schemer she’s always been.

Mark. Yay! I’m a panther! Growl! … and otherwise he didn’t do much that Dyson couldn’t have if he wasn’t being such an idiot.

Hades. Slime covered evil with a side order of smirk. I wonder when he’s laying on the floor dead if that smirk lives on?

The Fae Elders were mainly stereotypical, as they usually seem to be. That has gotten old over the course of the series and I really wish that even one of them had half a brain and wasn’t all macho.


My Review of Let Them Burn

Keeping my interest – 3 Pitchforks

Portrayal of a Succubus – 1 Pitchforks

Overall look and feel – 4 Pitchforks

Storyline – 3 Pitchforks

Main Characters – 3 Pitchforks

Mythos – 4 Pitchforks

Overall Rating – 3.0 Pitchforks out of 5



If it wasn’t for Tamsin, I think I would have not really paid as much attention to this episode as I did. Even with the reveal about Bo, the cliffhangers and so on, it just was an episode with not much driving it. It felt like a mash-up of plots, trying to get some points out before the finale. It could have, should have, been better than it was.

Bo wasn’t a Succubus… again. Oh there was some hints of her powers, and the calming of the stallion was cute, but overall, this was lost Bo not finding her way. Again the point of who Bo is gets lost in the chaff of the episode.

I liked the locations, the ranch was nice. That throne that Bo took at the end of the episode was quite interesting as well. The effects of having the clubhouse burn worked well and the scene has some realism to it, save for that ceiling beam that Dyson holds up. That was just a bit too far, as was just how fast the entire place went up in smoke and started to fall apart. Still, Evony’s party setting was good, the Dal was lovely and in that there was some good to be found.

The two main storylines were a contrast. Bo’s was lost, uneven, sometimes not really interesting. Tamsin’s was much more the core of the episode and considering what this episode means to the series, it’s odd that would happen here. The subplots of the Fae gathering, Evony’s charity, and even Mark’s shifting added some to the overall episode, but also they put too much into it as well. It’s a shame that the series didn’t use some of these plots earlier in the series to make more room for what happened in this episode.

Save for Bo learning about herself and Tamsin, what she was facing, there wasn’t much in the way of any real character development and there should have been. Too many of the characters are “lost” and there was supposed to be one Lost Girl. At the end of this episode it seems there is a complete lost Family.

The mythos did develop a lot this time, Tamsin’s fate, Bo’s purpose, Mark’s shifted form. Evony’s state, and even the Fae Elders did something for the episode. Still, there are a lot of gaps, a lot of things revealed that might, or might not, be true. A mixed up answer is still mixed up.

The penultimate episode leaves me not wanting to see do much what comes next as wanting to have gotten something more than what was…


Next Week: Rise

Bo and her allies face the ultimate threat.


I think this makes, by my count, about six or seven “ultimate” threats that Bo has faced over the course of the series. I suppose that word has to be used for the final episode, and so it was here, but really it’s been well overused.

I feel like Bo really never has had a real threat to deal with, and I am including Hades in that. As much “evil” as Hades is, there’s just nothing really about him that I can take as being the right sort of “threat” to put against Bo. Which brings me to a point that I fear the last episode will not give. The entire story of the series was Bo making her own path, and finding out who she was. I never felt, save for the occasional flash of thought that brought that plot to the fore, that she ever really got to a point where she did. She never really found her own way, never really said “this is me”, never really did what she wanted to and most of all, at least for me, she never really showed well that she was a Succubus.

Soon after Lauren “helped” Bo control her needs, the plot line of struggling with being a Succubus, what she did in her past, needing to be careful about what she took from others, whether by purpose or accident, didn’t appear all that often. When it did, it was in passing, never was a major concern for her, and over time the problem of being a Succubus and what that meant was pushed aside for the sake of the Fae of the week, a tangential plot line, or something else that wandered away from the core point of the series.

I miss seeing Bo struggle with her needs, with what she could do if she wasn’t in control. There was less and less “concern” and more and more “boredom” or “normalcy” in her being a Succubus. Now, I accept that it cannot have been the entire focus of the series, but it was a core point. I’ve talked many times about Boffy being more visible than Bo as a Succubus and I don’t expect that to change in the finale.

Really, why should it? There will be a series of fights, battles, some schemes being played out. There will be a focus upon Bo dealing with Hades and then… what comes after that? I can’t really say that I’m expecting a lot of closure, though some would be nice to see. There are a lot of moments that we didn’t get in the series, some that can’t happen now, like Kenzi and Hale being married, Trick being reunited with his Isabeau, some good moments that give us things to be happy about when the series is no more.

But it seems like, especially with this past episode, there’s a distinct effort being made to rip everything apart and leave a mess in the wake of things. Tension is a good thing, and I think some suspense is fine, but there comes a point where a point is needed, a purpose must appear and the story needs to come to a close that, if not giving everyone what they want, it at least leaves us with something to think about.

In truth, this weeks episode was a cliffhanger for a season. There’s no other way to look at it. Next week’s episode I think will be anticlimactic and if it is, that will be a shame as it will be how the series will be remembered.

Close the circle, the series, the stories, the characters, in a way where things make sense, even if things go completely pear-shaped. I can accept a disaster happening to all of the characters we’ve been with for so long for the right reasons.

I don’t have to be happy with what happens. But I do need to have one last good moment of throwing popcorn at the television.

See you on Sunday… and then next Friday for what I hope will be something that was fitting, positive, and more…



Oct 23 2015

A Review of Rise of the Succubus by Eden Redd

Rise of the Succubus by Eden Redd

Rise of the Succubus by Eden Redd

There are very few stories that involve someone being transformed into a Succubus that manage to create a story, a reason, some kind of meaning that isn’t wiped away when things turn towards the erotic.

While the erotica is important, story matters more to me. Sexy, seductive is wonderful, but without the meaning behind that it’s nothing but sex. Having that story matters. Telling that story is more so. And sometimes editing isn’t a bad thing to have as well at times…

  • Title: Rise of the Succubus
  • Author: Eden Redd
  • Length: 30 Pages
  • ASIN: B00QCC4G96
  • Publishing Date: November 28, 2014
  • This work at Amazon.com

The story tells of:

Rita and her three best friends, James, Paul and Bobby move into an old house. They spend the summer working on it before they embark on their first year of college. As they fix up their new home, they discover a strange necklace hidden deep within the house. Soon Rita hears strange whispers. They tell her to do things that she only dreamed about. She fights the temptation but they overpower her with seductive lust. Can she fight the maddening desire? Or will she be an unwilling pawn to the demonic succubus.

Rita and her long time friends move into a house, clean things up, and then they all get quite a bit dirty when Rita gets touched by a Succubus that needs something from her… But offers something Rita wants in return. Where that takes them all is the question to be answered.

The work is a hot flash but with quite a lot of buildup, character and storytelling mixed in. The voices of each of the characters are very clear from the beginning and each has a story to tell about themselves and how they relate, and secretly need, each other. In a lot of ways there is a sweet friendship love story within the erotica and that made the work quite appealing to me. There’s love between the characters even before the Succubus appears and as such there isn’t a sense of harm or moments that feel wrong when the characters become intimate together.

Rita herself is an interesting mix of wanting and needing but also being afraid of herself in many ways. Unlocking herself, who she is, what she desires explores things she’s dreamed about but never thought she could try… or have. There is a lot of character growth as the story unfolds and the Rita at the beginning isn’t the Rita at the end of the story.

That’s due to the whisperings and promises of the Succubus of the work, Alina. For the majority of the story she’s a whisper, a thought, a idea in Rita’s mind and as such she tempts and suggests things to Rita which take her to becoming something more than she is. As the climax of the story comes, so does Alina and when she appears finally she isn’t stereotypical in her nature or form, though she has a tail and horns of course. She’s passion and seduction, but not evil and that fits in well with the story.

The erotic scenes are well written, have a good deal of heat in them, and the passions felt I enjoyed very much. There is a bit of mind control in the erotica, but it isn’t over the top or silly in how it reads or what the characters do. It isn’t so much a story about a Succubus within the erotica, but more of a story where the Succubus is directing the play from off stage until she can join in and reveal the truth.

When that truth comes, it really isn’t a surprise as there are a lot of hints about Rita herself. How Rita is changed by that truth isn’t really dwelled on much, and as a whole it really didn’t need to be, but for myself I would have liked to know more about “Rita after” in who she is, how she’s changed, mentally and physically, and what that means. There are some questions left open which would have been nice to know, but they aren’t sadly.

The work ends on a bittersweet note for me personally in that Rita is forced to make a choice, one that feels like she really didn’t have one, and then the story comes to a close with a promise unfulfilled. It is a bit of a let down after all of the joy and good in the work and I couldn’t help but think the author might have ended the story a bit sooner to avoid the sadness of the ending.

But the ending does point quite strongly towards another work in the series and that I think will be a promising thing based on the story so far. There’s a good mystery that Alina leaves in front of Rita and discovering that would be something to see.

There are a few rough points in the story that another editing pass would help with. Mostly they are odd words in odd places or a tense problem, one or two spelling mistakes, but none of these things are glaring mistakes by any means. Still they took me out of the story and that shouldn’t have happened.

Four pitchforks out of five.

I liked the story as a whole, I liked Rita and Alina, as little as we saw of her, and it was a story that didn’t go in the direction of “all sex and no thought” which mattered more. A little more editing would be nice, but otherwise a nice hot story with promise within it for something more to come.