Mar 28 2017

A Review of the Dark Rhythms series by Magi Silverwolf

Melody's Seduction: Acceso by Magi Silverwolf

Melody’s Seduction: Acceso by Magi Silverwolf

From time to time I post reviews of stories that appeared years ago. I do so mainly because in most cases the works were never reviewed in the first place. It’s a shame that there’s so little reviewers of erotica. Another shame is when a series starts, is terribly short, offers something interesting and then abruptly ends leaving nothing but questions behind.

Exploring erotica takes heat, of course, but it also takes the moments along the way to tell the stories of the characters, why they make the choices they do, and the world they live in. But trying to do all of that in a rush never works well.

A review then of a very short and rushed pair of works that offered something interesting, but never did anything with it beyond some flash and heat.

The first work is:

  • Title: Melody’s Seduction: Acceso
  • Author: Magi Silverwolf
  • Published By: Amazon Digital Services
  • Length: 14 Pages
  • Format: eBook
  • ASIN: B00K7CLNHK
  • Publishing Date: May 7, 2014
  • This work in Kindle Format at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

It was one night of undeniable passion between two strangers. He didn’t just seduce her–he consumed her.

The second work, which you can find here on Amazon, tells the story of:

The fire between them crackles with continued heat. What started as a one-night-stand has turned into a tag-of-war. He is a hunter and she makes delicious prey.

A story of the needs of two, the seduction of one, and the conflict when a third discovers what has happened. Melody isn’t sure why she’s enthralled by Mikhael, but the questions are drowned out by the heat that consumes her while Mikhael cannot resist the heat that burns him in return.

The series, two works in total, is a part of very short erotic hot flashes that seem to be in a rush to get to the heat and leave what’s otherwise a lot of complex plots and ideas dangling behind. It’s not completely clear if Mikhael is an incubus, though how the story reads, it’s highly likely. In the same way, Melody seems to be human, but there’s something else going that’s shaded in the background, but not explored.

That said, the heat in the erotic moments, the seduction that builds towards the encounter is really well done. There’s a lot of need, craving and more in both characters which pushes the story onwards at breakneck speeds and that’s the problem. As both works in the series are so short, there’s not enough time to tease, to entwine them both together as much as I’d liked them to be. It’s not a cold and meaningless encounter, both Mikhael and Melody have the connection, the desire to be together, but there’s no attempt to really get into the background and meaning of this.

Mikhael is a mystery throughout the story, there’s a bit of a smug attitude around him which at times didn’t do anything for me. Melody’s life is a lot more fleshed out, both her in character, her life, what she does away otherwise. But again, there’s something missing about her. It’s like there’s something more to be told, but the proof of that never develops and is only hinted at.

The works are much too short, there’s little time to develop the characters and when yet another is added to the mix, she’s there as a threat, clearly so, but then is gone in a flash. The work needs to be edited more to create more story than what’s given. There is a story here and if there’d ever been a series further developed, it would have been quite a read. But it wasn’t, we’re left with a pair of teases and little to hold onto.

Two out of five pitchforks.

The series didn’t go any further than these two short works and then nothing more came from it. That’s a shame because there something interesting about Melody, Mikhael and others, but there’s not a moment to really get anywhere with the characters beyond the seduction and the erotica.

The hints about Mikhael, that there’s something else going on with Melody, would have been fascinating to see told more of, but never will be it seems. That all said, there’s just not a lot here beyond a well told seduction, a flash of heat and then a mystery never brought further, which is a shame.

 

Tera

Mar 27 2017

Snowfall By TeraS

I find myself in something of a writer’s block, not able to get things the way I’d like them to be. There are some parts of the Realm that I have been meaning to explore, some tales I have been hoping to tell. Still, even a short story can have something to say, like how, sometimes, we just need to watch some …

 

Snowfall
By TeraS

 

Sometimes the winters are cold.

Sometimes the nights are so very long.

Sometimes, just sometimes, there’s nothing else but the snow.

Sometimes, the snow falls, the flakes of white going about their paths until they are grounded, becoming one with all of the snowflakes that had come before and those that would come to be.

Sometimes one Eternal knows there’s something that’s not right with one’s Eternal.

She stands by the doorway, looking within the room. She sees the pictures of the past, the moments shared, loved, known. The pain of the past winter still hurts, still leaves a mark within her soul that she can’t shake away … not that she really wants to.

He stands by the bay window of their home, looking out at the yard, covered in the snows of the winter that has been. If the prior seasons had been dark, the winter this year was especially so. Mortality is the most terrible of things to confront, more so when that mortality comes in the form of losing one’s mother. That pain remains, not ebbing away, not becoming less. It is a deep cut within, one that won’t ever fully heal … not that he really wants it to.

Outside, the winds blow, throwing about the flurry of white crystals that continued to fall.

She comes closer, knowing the pain that he still feels, the ache that cannot find its way free from within. She is his Eternal after all; there is no hiding away the pain. No wan smile, soft chuckle, or shrug can possibly overcome the truth she knows. He covers it up well, of course, for her sake if not for his own, his own cascade of frozen, luxurious white sheets to drift over the aches and pains, tears and sobs, to muffle away the self-recriminations, the feeling of not being good enough, of not doing enough. There are too many nots and too few dids from what he can see.

Around them both, the snows continued to fall.

He knows she is there, that she worries about him, worries that the pain has gone on too long, worries about the doubts he has pressing within. Like the snows that blanket the pathway to their home, he’d like to shovel them all to the side, pile them up, out of the way, and make a path. But it has been a long winter, the snow is so very deep and doing so seems impossible. So instead of starting, instead of dealing with what’s blocking the path, he just lets things pile on, more and more, just waiting.

All the while, the snow continues to fall.

They are the rulers of the Realm, some would say, not understanding fully. Others might call them a couple, again not seeing the truth. Fewer still would call them lovers, only seeing the barest hint of the love they have for each other. They could do most anything, save the one thing they both wanted, the one thing they wished more than anything could be, but never was.

From far above, the snows continued to fall.

The small, unremarkable home found itself awash in the white snow, the roof covered, the walls turned an off-white, but still blanketed in the powder that came calling. There was sadness within, a guest in the home now for longer than it needed to be. But in spite of the cold, the dark, the ache, and the loss, there was warmth. Nothing can bury the flames of two Eternals; no loss can truly take away the love of family given, held, and shared.

The room wasn’t a barrier between them. Her footfalls were muffled by the carpet beneath them both—a few short steps, in one sense. The crossing through the depths of all that had befallen them both, however, was a greater barrier. He continued to look out the window, thinking about what he’d say to her, how he’d try to comfort her and set his own pains aside. In the same way, she thought about how she’d put her own pain aside, support him, not be concerned about the drifts of loss that surrounded her. But that would mean the plowing away of a barrier between them once more.

There’d been enough of snowfall.

Spooning with him, she looked over his shoulder. For a time, they didn’t say a word. There wasn’t any need to. He knew her, she knew him. The past year had come heavy, the burdens more than either alone could manage, but, together, they did. He looked away from the snowfall when her arms wrapped about his waist, twining her fingers together. Her scent—cherries—wrapped around them both, a reminder of what lurked beneath the snows that hid so much life around them.

Gradually, they saw less and less snow fall.

He squeezed her hand lightly: “It’s going to be a good spring … isn’t it?”

Her tail twined with his own: “Yes, it will.”

Outside, the snows no longer fell.

He turned away from the snow, letting it lie were it was, knowing that, in time, the warmth of spring would come and take the cold away. There would be, he knew, many more moments to be. Yet the first ones were the hardest, and there were many more to come.

The fallen snow lay in wait.

The sun peeked through the clouds above, the light making the snow sparkle and shimmer. The two Eternals turned back to watch as a beam of light broke through the clouds. Their home was bathed in the light from above.

It was a reminder that love never leaves, it is for always.

It was a reminder that in the love of a mother, shared with her family, will be for always.

It was a reminder that there will not always be a snowfall.

Mar 26 2017

A Review of Fortuna by Julie Law

Fortuna by Julie Law

Fortuna by Julie Law

Relationships within stories matter, they help to drive the plot, give depth to the characters themselves. Not all relationships have love, some are very dark and troubled. In the same way, the past of a character can shape them, whether they know of that or not. It’s the telling of that past, how it links to the relationships that brings life to a story overall.

A review then of the first work in the Futa Academy series by Julie Law in which knowing one is a succubus isn’t the answer, it’s the question that leaves many paths open. Not the least of which is, in the end, not what am I, but rather who matters the most.

The work tells the story of:

Despite being one of the newest academies of magic, Fortuna commanded respect and its opulence made it a very attractive prospect for any promising student. Gretchen didn’t care about it, she wasn’t there by choice, but she found that escaping from the grasp of Fortuna’s staff was almost impossible.

It gave her a unique chance. She had been on the run since her parents were killed, living on the streets, fleeing from town to town, trying to avoid those her paranoia said were out to get her. Fortuna could be her home, her fellow students her friends and protectors, but there was something more to it all. Someone wanted her there, someone who knew what she was, and it made her afraid.

She was one of the last succubus on the planet, and unfortunately there would be many who would want her to disappear …

Gretchen knows she’s a succubus, but what she doesn’t know is why there’s so much interest in her from a place called Fortuna. Upon arriving in her new home she discovers three truths: She’s more than she realized, her life is in danger, but most of all, there’s someone that loves her. For a succubus, finding love is impossible, but then Gretchen isn’t just a succubus after all.

The work is the introduction to a new series which, at least from the title, suggests here will be a lot of futa themes in the series. Interestingly, there’s not that much actual futa erotica, save for one scene at the end of the work. That actually allows for the time to set up Gretchen as a character, introduce those around her, and start several plot and character arcs. The setting is a mix of steampunk and magic that has a flavor of its own, setting up a unique universe in doing so. There wasn’t as much detail in that as I’d like, but the little hints of things were delightful and I’ll hope for more world building in the future to come.

Gretchen, the main character of this work, is a succubus, but one with a human form. She’s thoughtful, but brash, eager and yet afraid. Her past hasn’t been the easiest of things, and there’s a lot about herself that she doesn’t know. It’s that mystery that comes into play in the latter part of the work and drives the climax onward. There’s also a moral code to her choices, she’s not evil and that makes her more attractive as a succubus, both in how she acts, but more importantly, the relationships that form as the story goes on. One particular one, with a certain blonde student, just make me smile from the first moment and every time they were together.

There is another succubus in the work, Selena, who has a pivotal role. She’s very much an experienced succubus, holding a lot of power in being so. She’s seductive, plays with emotions, wants and needs so very easily. But she’s a bit too evil for the sake of being so, bordering on the edge of being a stereotypical succubus. At first it seemed like she wasn’t going to be, but her actions to draw the story to its climax just disappointed me. It’s too “evil for being evil” and I don’t think it worked. That said, her appearance and forcing Gretchen to her climax felt rushed. At some moments I thought that parts were missing and that bothered me.

There’s really only one scene of erotica which shifts from a female dominant tone through conflict before there’s a resolution of sorts. As that happens, Gretchen’s truth is explained, if in a rush, and it answers some of the questions, but leaves so many more to be told. There’s more teasing and seduction for the most part until Gretchen is pushed into revealing her futa form, but that happens in a way that isn’t out of character or feels wrong with the story told. It makes sense, isn’t crass or over the top. It just simple feels right, considering who is with Gretchen when that happens.

The conclusion seems too fast, considering all that came before. I’d have liked more time for Gretchen to settle what she’s learned, but more importantly, reveled in what she’s found with another. That fills a void, but there are more to be settled and that’s going to be a very complicated thing to solve.

Captivating characters, a complex plot that holds a lot of promise, but the little nagging editing issues here and there need to be dealt with. That said, this work, and I expect the series going forwards will hold a place in my heart because of Gretchen and her new found love. It’s a story that makes me smile and reflect on a certain red tail and a certain blonde angel who’s story seems so very familiar here.

Four out of five pitchforks.

I adore Gretchen and I do look forward to seeing was comes next in this series. I’m going to hope that the focus will remain on her for the most part as there are a lot of questions to be explored about her. I’ll also hope that Selena doesn’t turn out to be as stereotypical as she has begun to be, for that would be a disappointment.

But most of all, the story of Gretchen and her lover is very dear to me. If nothing else, holding onto the palatable joy in their relationship and what it means I think will be the core of this work and bring about something wonderful.

 

Tera

Mar 26 2017

A Review of Incubus: A Jacoby Ash Creature Feature is by M. R. Stover

Incubus: A Jacoby Ash Creature Feature is by M. R. Stover

Incubus: A Jacoby Ash Creature Feature is by M. R. Stover

The one sort of story that I have the most issues with are those in which the summary offers something interesting and then the story doesn’t deliver on that. A work can be described in a way to make it very appealing, but then having the story be a handful of pages with scattered thoughts, no direction, no character development doesn’t work. More so when the story just reads as being close to an encounter in a role playing game that’s being summarized and put to paper.

A story that begins with a battle is one thing. A story that never really develops the characters, tells a cohesive tale is another. But then, what can one expect in a work of five pages in length?

  • Title: Incubus: A Jacoby Ash Creature Feature
  • Author: M. R. Stover
  • Published By: Amazon Digital Services
  • Length: 5 Pages
  • Format: eBook
  • ASIN: B01MAX5B2S
  • Publishing Date: October 14, 2016
  • This work in Kindle Format at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

The Incubus, Xaphan has defied the order of Hell by enslaving a human woman’s mind and body as his own personal sex doll. By doing so he violated the Balance of Nature that all things stand upon. Join Jacoby Ash, Hell’s own Hitman as he hunts Xaphan from Earth to Hell. Fighting Demons, Succubi and facing other dangers.

The book summary is rather misleading as a whole. It explains the background of what’s going on, but it doesn’t really tell what happens in the work itself. A better summary might be: A incubus and a demon battle, one loses, they go to hell and the fight continues.

There’s no appearance of succubi in this work, the incubus, Xaphan has one or two lines of dialogue that add up to nothing character-wise. There’s no character development, there’s no explanation about any of the characters that appear. The work only focuses on a short, violent and confusing battle which ends in a way that makes little sense before turning into another battle and moving onwards.

Really, that’s the core of this work. One demon against a number of others, using various weapons, making the occasion snarky comment and then fighting on. That’s not much of a story as a whole. It’s less than a scene, less than a moment. Really the fighting is told in summary, with some highlights of pain and grunting before the next punch is thrown or weapon used. As odd as it seems, there was more told about the weapons than the characters here, which says something I think.

The work is far too short, it has no purpose or direction. The characters are thin, not developed nor is anything explained. This isn’t so much a story as it is a piece of role-play and one that didn’t interest me at all. The author would be well to rewrite the entire work, expand on what’s going on, actually use their summary as an outline and write to that. That could make things interesting, but what’s given otherwise isn’t.

Zero pitchforks out of five.

The work is a pamphlet at best, the story is thin, there’s little direction. The story summary offers far more than what this work delivers and that’s a shame. But it’s more a shame that the reader is dumped into a story with no idea of who the main character is, what is going on or why. There’s just so little comprehension to be found. A summary is good to tell something about a story, but leaving that summary to carry what otherwise is a confusing tale isn’t going to work.

 

Tera

Mar 25 2017

An interesting Morrigan Aensland Tribute YouTube

Another of the many Morrigan Aensland tributes that I find on YouTube from time to time today. While the music isn’t what I think fits with Morrigan, it kind of sounds like something in a strip club and I can’t see Morrigan being in one, but that’s my opinion. Still, there is one image that I liked nonetheless.

 

If you can’t see this video on the Tale, please try this link:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F7KP5GWBb9U

And, as I normally do, here is the one image of Morrigan that I think was the best one in the video…

Morrigan Aensland YouTube Screenshot

This isn’t the best quality by far, but overall I like the muted tones, Morrigan’s pose, and how she isn’t overplaying her body’s curves so much. Just a really nice and focused piece of art and I liked that a lot.

The odd thing about this video is that not all of the images are of Morrigan, there are some other characters cosplaying as Morrigan, even a Disney princess is there as well which was… odd.

Perhaps that’s an idea for a video… Art of characters trying to be Morrigan?

 

Tera

Mar 24 2017

A Review of To Feed A Succubus by De’Vaughn Brathwaite

To Feed A Succubus by De'Vaughn Brathwaite

To Feed A Succubus by De’Vaughn Brathwaite

The thing about hot flashes that involve Succubi is, of course, that they usually involved not a lot of plot, little in the way of character development for the sake of having the succubus do things to the other character or characters.

That can mean falling into a story with no real drive save the sex, no real personalities save the sex… In other words, the story is all about the sex and nothing more. But adding a little quirk to the characters, making them be more than sex toys, or a Succubus’ meal, goes a long way to making a hot flash something more.

The work tells the story of:

In what was supposed to be another boring day for you, you are visited by a creature most beautiful and mysterious, and she intends to spend her night with you…

A young man daydreams about his perfect girlfriend and attracts a Succubus looking for a snack. Desiree thinks he looks delicious and what comes next will be quite satisfying for her.

This work is a hot flash for the most part, though there is a good deal of character development for the main character and as well for Desiree, the Succubus of the story. There’s background, a reason for the two characters to meet and Desiree’s delight in finding her “snack” has a lot of teasing humour that gave her character some needed depth, making her more than a sex toy which happens too often.

The erotica takes some time to develop, Desiree plays with him, teasing, seducing and as a whole being a delightfully naughty Succubus character. Her powers, her needs are explored and as that happens there’s a running commentary by her that, at many points, I couldn’t help but giggle over.

There are issues however in this work. it is a hot flash, which is a shame really as there’s something about Desiree that demands a longer story about her. Beyond that, telling more about her “snack”, his fantasies at the beginning of the story, really asks that Desiree do all of the things he’s been dreaming of. The idea of the two of them playing Dungeons and Dragons is really delightful to me. That could be amazingly hot and delicious as a story.

The author did spend time telling something of both characters, but once the erotica begins that gets pushed aside and when the story is over, there’s a hint that something more could happen, but doesn’t. The ending is very quick, to the point and after all else that was a bit disappointing.

Most of all this work needs a serious editing pass. There are issues with tense, a number of spelling mistakes as well get in the way of the heat and storytelling. The dialogue needs some work. Speaking Desiree’s dialogue out loud sounds like she’s almost talking like a recording at some points, going through the motions. More heat in her words, and his, would be a good thing.

Still, I liked Desiree in that she’s not evil, not cruel. She’s fulfilling a fantasy and she’s really very good at doing so. While the story holds things together, there needs to be more heat, more erotica than porn scene here and there. Again, there’s promise here, but it doesn’t develop as much as I think it could have. I found myself wishing the author had taken the time to tell more about them both.

Three out of five pitchforks.

A hot flash that manages a little character development and a little plot along the way. The work needs another editing pass to make it better, but there’s promise here if the author would take this from a hot flash into a larger story. Desiree is interesting, if a bit odd as a succubus. But she’s also not stereotypical, she isn’t evil, or seems to be, and I liked that most of all.

 

Tera

Mar 24 2017

A Review of Seduced by a Succubus by Lucille Grey

Seduced by a Succubus by Lucille Grey

Seduced by a Succubus by Lucille Grey

The thing about a work in which there is a succubus character, is that leaving that character as a shadow, an incomplete thought as a whole, takes away a number of opportunities for storytelling. It’s not really enough for the character to speak a few short sentences and not much more. It’s more bothersome when their focus is on sex with another character, but there’s never a moment to peer beneath her form into who they are underneath.

It’s telling half a story, one side of a conversation, and leaving all else unsaid. Summing up their reasoning for their actions in a single sentence at the end of the story is, overall, really disappointing.

The work tells the story of:

Shy college freshman, Cody, isn’t expecting anything exciting to happen his first year at school.

It comes as a total shock when he meets the ethereally gorgeous and mysteriously sexy Lily. He’s totally smitten, and will do anything to please her…little does Cody know, Lily is a sneaky, sultry succubus preying on horny college boys and feeding off of their sexual energies.

Cody’s life has begun anew. A new town, a college to explore offers a chance to find the unexpected. Encountering Lily, he finds himself needing to be with her, allowing her to do as she wishes. But with that comes the feeling of losing something important to Lily and Lily wants it all.

The work is an erotic hot flash surrounded by quite a lot of character building for Cody, the focus of the story. As such, there’s a lot told about his past, his hopes and the day to day minutia of being at college. At times this tends to get into a lot of detail which bogged things down quite a lot. At the same time, once he encounters Lily, Cody seems to be sleepwalking through the story, losing much of what made him interesting and devolving things towards the erotica involving Lily.

That erotica, overall, has some heat, but it’s a bit glossed over. Some of the scenes are dream-like, some clearly point out that Lily is a succubus, and others just are very rushed in how thing unfold. The climax, in many cases, loses much of the heat created for the sake of ending the scene and moving onwards to the next awkward moment or the next encounter with Lily.

Lily, the succubus of this work, is a mystery. There’s little told about her form, she speaks in clipped tone and phrases as well. She’s not developed as a character, popping in and out of the story just long enough to ensnare Cody, pull him into a sexual encounter with her, and then vanish into thin air. That’s a shame because there are three points at which there seems to be some story to be told about her, but they don’t go anywhere. One example of this seems to be a roommate of Lily’s appears at the start of the work, but never returns. It leaves the question of who she is, if she’s real or a succubus or something more.

Questions about about Lily, save of course that she delights in entwining herself with Cody, pleasing him and then taking what she needs. That’s the problem with this work in that Cody’s development as a character is strong enough to make the reader care about him, but for Lily, there’s nothing to hold onto. There’s no past, no present, no moments between her appearances to show something more about her. It’s a lost chance to tell more of a story, to give life to her character beyond “just a succubus” which seems to be the overall tone.

There are a few small word errors and one or two spelling mistakes, but that didn’t take anything away from the story. What did was the lukewarm erotic scenes, the hints of story not followed and the loss of telling more about Lily as a character. By the end of the work, it felt like there was something important missing.

The ending was, sadly, completely expected and was telegraphed from the beginning. Beyond that, the ending itself was abrupt and offhanded in how things came to a close. Summing up Lily with a single sentence to end the story didn’t do anything for me, nor did it really explain anything about her. It did offer a path towards another story, but even then that’s done really half-heartedly.

Two and a half out of five pitchforks.

There’s really no character development of Lily, either as a character or for that matter a succubus. The hints she is a succubus are rather oblique and if the book title, or summary for that matter, didn’t expressly say she was a succubus, it would be easy to overlook some of the hints given.

As such, Lily is a mystery from beginning to end, there are some dangling plots left unresolved as well. There’s a very easy path forwards towards another work, which might be more focused on Lily, who she is, where she came from and so on. The work doesn’t focus on sex scenes exclusively, but while Cody’s character is explored, Lily, the other half, never has her due.

 

Tera

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