There are some stories that offer a lot in the characters and the events of the story, but can’t quite give enough to what’s offered simply because the work is so dearly short. In many cases there’s characters that are delightfully naughty in their being succubi, but there’s just not enough time to get to know them, and the story, well enough.
A review then of a work in which there’s a lot to like, the succubus is so very atypical, and the situation suggests something quite different to tell. The problem, however, is that it’s so dearly short and that’s disappointing.
- Title: Lilith’s Daughter
- Author: Zoe DeNoir
- Published By: Amazon Digital Services
- Length: 7 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B0B39QT1LS
- Publishing Date: June 5, 2022
- This work in Kindle Format at Amazon.com
The work tells of:
Alexander wasn’t very good with women. So he tried a spell he’d found online from an ancient grimoire for summoning a succubus. He didn’t really expect it to work. But it did. Unfortunately for Alexander his succubus had her own ideas about their new relationship and Alexander’s place within it.
Alexander wishes to have a lover to call his own, and perhaps in summoning a succubus, he will have that eternally. But Nyx isn’t quite what he expected, she has her own desires, and whether Alexander likes it or not, he will find himself caught forever.
The work is described as being erotic horror, but really it isn’t. I’m more inclined to call it a work of succubus dominance wrapped in a tease and the needs of a submissive man. There’s no scenes of horror, there’s actually a very erotic taste to what happens when Nyx appears and it works well to play on Alexander and ensnare him.
Nyx, overall, feels like a soft dominatrix, she’s not really a stereotypically evil succubus either. She does however toy with Alexander’s submissiveness, to draw him to give her what she desires. There’s a hint of very subtle mind control or manipulation which works well.
The erotic heat simmers, both characters dance around their own desires until the climax and the truth of what Alexander agreed to comes to the fore. Even then it’s not evil, meanly suggestive in how things come to a close.
The real problem here is that the story is so very short, something I refer to as a pamphlet. Honestly this didn’t have to happen. Nyx offers a lot, as does Alexander in telling more of a story. Taking what this work gives, it could easily be divided into four chapters and have the dance between them go longer, the fall of Alexander to Nyx be more consuming. Perhaps most interesting, the story could tell an involved tale of Nyx training her new submissive and seeing where that leads.
Three and a half out of five pitchforks.
Considering the characters, there’s a lot of story that could have happened. Nyx is interesting. Alexander is very much a submissive and it would have been a story to tell hoeing their relationship progress further. There’s just this sense of there being so much more story to tell, but it wasn’t. I hope the author will revisit this work. think where things could continue to, and see about telling more.