A Review of Succubus: The First Encounter by Careem Mayfield

Succubus: The First Encounter by Careem Mayfield

Succubus: The First Encounter by Careem Mayfield


The single problem that keeps cropping up in many works I review is the issue of editing. It’s a shame when an interesting story lacks direction, the language is a bit off or perhaps more concerning, the words don’t fit the actions of the characters overall.

Perhaps in the midst of all of that there’s a story which is captivating and leads towards something.

  • Title: Succubus: The First Encounter
  • Author: Careem Mayfield
  • Published By: Amazon Digital Services
  • Length: 174 Pages
  • Format: eBook
  • ASIN: B09J584ZM2
  • Publishing Date: October 10, 2021
  • This work in Kindle Format at Amazon.com

The work tells of:

Being a handsome, young man and a man of pleasure; Isaiah’s job description is a young, male escort, until Isaiah meets the girl of his dreams, Kattahlina, who appears to be a vestal, salaciously riding Isaiah’s soul to her next destination. For Isaiah, life takes a sudden turn for the worst when, his female clients start to end up dead after having visited them for a session. The enigma sets in and the question becomes, who is killing Isaiah’s clients? While being investigated by two detectives, Harthorne and Flamingo, the three of them team up with a gypsy, to solve the enigma of murders and bring the mendacious Kattahlina out of Isaiah’s soul. Meticulously, the two detectives, Isaiah and the gypsy, Lou-Bell, must hurry and make chaste of Isaiah’s soul because it lays perrill.

Isaiah is young as desired by many as he lives his life. An encounter with Kattahlina brings him into contact with a dangerous spirit who needs him and jealousy holds him. Some paths lead to pain, others to loss and he well many find the loss of everything isn’t worth the cost.

The work is a mystery with some erotic moments around the edges that push the story and the charactrers towards the climax. It’s somewhat confusing at times, but overall the conflicts and challenges that Isaiah deals with are quite the telling read.

The succubus of the work, Kattahlina, isn’t in the story as much as I’d have liked her to be. The story dances around her, but she’s more of a thought than physically part of the story as a whole. Considering her nature, that does make sense and works well overall.

The work needs some editing however. It reads odd at times, the author seems to be groping for descriptive words, some words aren’t right and there are moments when the narration and the dialogue just reads somehow oddly.

Three out of five pitchforks.

It’s a bit odd of a story, it isn’t really overall a succubus one either, even as Kattahlina hints at what she is and what she can do. Scattered at times, a bit of a difficult read at times because of the editing, it offers something to consider, but it wasn’t really all it could be.

Tera

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