There are some stories about succubi that can be odd, silly and a lot of fun.
That’s rather refreshing overall and it’s a nice diversion from many more serious works. It is still important however that the story flows well and the characters themselves are allowed to tell the story in the best way possible. A review then of a cute and fun succubus story which has a lot going for it, but misses something in the editing.
- Title: I Married a Succubus from Beaverton
- Author: Solomon G
- Published By: Amazon Digital Services
- Length: 46 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B09CNWRQFK
- Publishing Date: August 14, 2021
- This work in Kindle Format at Amazon.com
The work tells of:
This erotic fantasy showcases the hijinks and adventures a young man experiences with his new wife, who just happens to be a demon powered by sex.
Marrying a succubus like Sharon makes for an interesting relationship. But there’s really nothing to prepare oneself for the times when the reality of a succubus takes over the reality of mortals. Still there’s nothing that love can’t over come can it?
The work is a slightly odd mixture of sitcom and adventure with a bit of erotica along the way. There’s a lot to like in the story, the characters are interesting in their own ways which helps to keep the story moving forward. At times there are some points where the story turns in directions that I wish had been explored further but they weren’t. Sharon, the succubus of the story, suffers a bit for that along the way.
Sharon is not at all stereotypical, though there are moments in the story where things could have gone that way and didn’t. She’s a gentle soul with her own mind and choices. It’s actually quite delightful how she deals with mortal friends finding out about her succubus nature and trying to accommodate them. There’s quite a bit of transformation scenes with her as well which tell something of her abilities and nature too. Overall Sharon is delightfully fun and I rather liked that a lot.
The problem with the work however is the editing. the dialogue reads a bit oddly, the story doesn’t quite flow smoothly from one moment to the next. I dearly wish the author had made another editing pass to clean the story up more and make this a better read than it is.
Three and a half out of five pitchforks.
Cute and fun, Sharon is delightful in her nature. A bit more editing would be nice to make the story and dialogue flow better. But otherwise this is just a fun succubus story that I did enjoy.