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Jan 16 2018

A Review of The Succ: Enslaved by the Futa Succubus by Alison Osias

The Succ: Enslaved by the Futa Succubus by Alison Osias

The Succ: Enslaved by the Futa Succubus by Alison Osias

More and more often of late, stories about succubi are turning towards them being futa in nature. That can work, if there is a story to tell, if the characters are more than their own needs. But much of the time there’s a fixation on the futa theme that pushes all else into the background.

That’s a real problem, at least for me, because what’s left is generally a story in which one character dominates, the other serves as there is much fluid being sprayed about. It just isn’t interesting to me, especially when the author gives a hint of something wider to be told, then passes over that plot for the sake of some lukewarm domination.

  • Title: The Succ: Enslaved by the Futa Succubus
  • Author: Alison Osias
  • Published By: Amazon Digital Services
  • Length: 18 Pages
  • Format: eBook
  • ASIN: B0792SHCH2
  • Publishing Date: January 16, 2018
  • This work in Kindle Format at Amazon.com

The work tells of:

Nova may have agreed to more than she realized when she signed a contract of servitude with a succubus. Cleaning and preparing meals for the beautiful temptress seemed easy enough, but the futa she-demon would soon find a more suitable use for her.

Nova is the slave of a succubus who wishes for something more, desires her Mistress, and craves her in an unending way. But there are things to be done and Mistress isn’t pleased with her today. Perhaps, in time, she might be and then Nova could have what she so desires.

The work is told from Nova’s perspective and as such there’s really very little of Atli, the succubus of the work, being present. It’s a telling of a part of Nova’s day and how things unfold coupled with an almost constant theme of Nova reflections on Atli’s futa aspects and how much she needs to serve. It’s somewhat rote in how that unfolds, there’s a fair bit of story and plot that winds up being collared in those thoughts and not much else.

Overall, there’s actually very little told about Nova and Atli, their background being glossed over much of the time. Atli herself is, overall, a stereotypically written dominant succubus who uses Nova any way she wishes to. This leads to a scattered series of erotic vignettes which have little heat and overall didn’t work for me in many different ways.

Atli’s character seems to be focused on being dominant, of ordering Nova about and then using her whenever she wishes. It reads rather blandly and, overall, that’s the problem with this work. There’s little emotional context, neither character really gained my attention and when Nova “served” the story went cold for me.

While the work is written as an erotic hot flash, overall that heat was muted, the domination aspect was at a level which, personally, I do not enjoy, and having so very little in the way of Atli appearing as a succubus made the work border on not really being a succubus story.

The work could use another editing pass, mainly for tense issues and the occasional points at which the dialogue just doesn’t read well. Beyond that, more time spent in telling Nova’ past, talking about how she came to be with Atli beyond a single paragraph really would add a lot to the work. Atli also needs to be more present, more a full character than just a need for Nova. There’s a reason she is, which makes some sense, but it’s not fleshed out well.

The story and plot was pushed aside too often for the bits of erotica that tries to get heat. But there’s no heat without meaning. Given that both main characters are thinly written, the heat is forces to overcome the lack of character. Erotica without story isn’t really erotica and with more story, this could have been so much better.

Two out of five pitchforks.

The work is less about a succubus than it is about one of those that serve her. That in itself seems like an interesting plot, but it doesn’t really manage to come together well. There’s too much “worship” of a specific body part and not nearly enough development of the characters, their world or much else.

Nova’s story is really not explored and being so, the telling of Atli’s story gets set to the wayside. There’s something missing between the almost erotica and the almost characters themselves that really needed to be explored more. There’s a story here which starts at the first encounter of Nova and Atli, then moves onwards.

That has to be more than just a fixation for Nova that’s never ending.

 

Tera

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