A few weeks ago I reviewed the first work in a series by Veronica Sloan. You can find my first review of that work here on the Tale. In that review I noted that I didn’t really see much in the story save tor it being mainly focused on porn-like sex scenes and the occasional shadow of mind control and a little bit of teenage horror film shock now and again.
The author released a second work in the series, and as a whole my opinion on things as a whole hasn’t changed very much. It’s still mainly porn, the characters are paper-thin and the story isn’t really interesting. Save for the ending which, if the author happens to take a certain path going forwards, could be something interesting. But all else, as in the first work, there’s something lacking here as well.
- Title: Seduced by the Sex Demon! 2
- Author: Veronica Sloan
- Length: 28 Pages
- IBSN: 9781370369836
- Publishing Date: August 24, 2016
- This work in Various Formats at Smashwords.com
The work tells the story of:
Jeffrey Corven used to be a spineless sap of a man, until his wife summoned a sex demon and turned him into a force of nature! Now devilishly horny and with the power to control the minds of men and women, Jeff is on a quest to screw everyone he can get his hands on. Only Tanya, his wife’s daughter, sees through his seduction, but even she isn’t immune to his blasphemous charms. Can she send him back to Hell before succumbing to the lust inside her?
Jeff isn’t Jeff anymore. A demon’s taken over his life and is doing anything he wants to. Along the way, among all of the wreckage left in his wake, Tanya sees that something’s very wrong. There might be a way to stop this, but the price might be more than Tanya ever expected.
Much like the first work in the series, there’s not really a lot of plot outside of the incubus having his way and causing as much sex to happen between characters as possible. There’s little in the way of developing the characters, there’s a fleeting glimpse of a larger, more interesting story, but it never comes out well.
Like in the first work, there isn’t so much erotica as there is quite a lot of over the top porn scenes which delve into some taboo subjects along the way. The dialogue is a bit odd and uninteresting, but more than that, seemingly there’s no story to hold everything together well.
That said, when Tanya, eventually, confronts the incubus, there is a story, she is a strong character and there is some kind of point to the story. There’s some explanation, Tanya needs to make a choice and it’s not an easy one to make. That all in itself could have done a lot for the story, but the incubus keeps gloating and that takes much of the drama out of things.
The conclusion of the series was, for me, a bit of a let down, it wasn’t unexpected. I found myself wondering if there could have been a better ending than what came. Personally I can think of a better one which offers a way for the series to continue. Not so much in a possession themed work, but a transformational one.
Still, the story didn’t engage me, the characters didn’t develop or learn very much. The story was barely there, the sex wasn’t erotica, it was porn level sex. I think there’s a good idea to be found, but being all sex and little story doesn’t make things work as well as they could, and should have.
Two pitchforks out of five.
There comes a point in telling a story where sex scene after scene doesn’t tell the story. It pushes things aside and leaves much untold. If, by chance, the author continues this series into a part three, there’s a story about Tanya that needs to be told. The ending offers it, but the question is whether or not that story actually tells a story or is just a means for more porn and not erotica.