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Jun 05 2016

A Review of The Naughty Succubus Part 3: Revelations of Sin by Becca Lusk

The Naughty Succubus Part 3: Revelations of Sin by Becca Lusk

The Naughty Succubus Part 3: Revelations of Sin by Becca Lusk

A review of the third work in The Naughty Succubus series by Becca Lusk today on the Tale. I reviewed the first work a short time ago and then the second as well. There’s something about this series that I find captivating, but sometimes the story can’t quite get past the editing that it so dearly has been needing. While the second work improved on this, and the first was reissued with some changes, I hoped the third work would mark a shift to a clearer focus on story and character.

The past matters. If one cannot remember it, then one is, in the end, doomed to repeat it. But what if the past is the present and all you need to do is see past your nose to what’s in front of you. Sometimes that takes more than a pair of glasses to manage.

  • Title: The Naughty Succubus Part 3: Revelations of Sin
  • Author: Becca Lusk
  • Length: 40 Pages
  • ASIN: B01G42BKS8
  • Publishing Date: May 23, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

The story tells of:

Krys, our beautiful and HOT succubus is saddened that Trip does not remember her. Trip is wondering what he was supposed to remember when can barely think, let alone walk after Krys had her way with him over the weekend. She tells him to call her – or whatever it is that passes for calling amongst the dwellers of the netherworld – but doesn’t tell her how.

So what does Krys do? She enlists her hot and sultry friend to go talk some sense into Trip. And what does he do when he sees her? Well, you’ll just have to read and find out, won’t you? In the midst of all this, angels and demons descend (and ascend) for what’s shaping up to be one of the most sinful epics ever to span the multi-verse.

 

Krys has a problem. One, Trip doesn’t remember her. Two, she’s got two angels that don’t particularly like her and three, as much as she doesn’t like it, she’s had to ask for help. Still, there is hope and the past doesn’t have to repeat itself… hopefully.

This part of the series manages to create some very interesting history for Krys and in doing so provides some new plot threads to be explored. Not all of the answers are given, really it is a case of more questions to be wondered about and that works well.

Krys doesn’t really stagnate as a character here and that’s a bit of a challenge considering that she’s not really involved in the core plot very much, really being to the side of it. However she drives much of the other characters in being tangentially involved which leads to some amazingly funny scenes and dialogue.

Trip’s plot arc towards revealing his mystery doesn’t move very far as well, in truth it becomes far more complex. Much of the story follows Trip’s day and how odd it becomes. Overall, the moments becomes a little bit silly at times, which works well, and when push comes to shove, or rather Trip gets into a situation where the erotica of the work appears, it’s quite cute and fits into the overall story without feeling strange or odd. The erotica is a hot flash which has a fair bit of heat within it. I thought it was told well, Trip’s actions and then confusion were interesting and I wonder what comes of that.

Besides Krys, another succubi appears, named Valandra and the chemistry between the two of them results in possibly the singularly most laughter providing scene between two succubi that I have read in quite some time. I’m looking forwards to learning more about her, she’s unique and I liked that about her.

While the plot, the story and the characters remain very good and I enjoy them very much, the author needs to pay more attention to their editing. While it is better than the prior work, some of the dialogue is odd, the occasional scene is a little confusing and a bit more care in telling, rather than showing, the story might be the solution.

Three and a half out of five pitchforks.

The work needs some editing, mostly from the perspective of dialogue. Overall the storytelling is getting better, but as there is a mystery to develop, jumping around the point of things is making the story a bit scattered. Perhaps a little push is needed to make things settle.

Perhaps that might be through the slightly mischievous red tailed Queen of the Succubi Tera herself? Let’s see what the next part of the story reveals. I think it will be interesting…

 

Tera

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