There are those stories in which things seem… lost. A lot of that can be explained by events happening in a dream-like state to the main character sometimes. In other cases the plot is hard to find, or to follow. Then there are those stories in which the final few pages tell of something completely aside to the main story unfolding which means something, but is not explained.
Stories having these problems are difficult to read at times. More so when the work ends and the only thought that one comes away with is… why? What was the point? And, mots of all, why was it so confused when it didn’t have to be?
- Title: In Her Dreams
- Author: J.E. Keep and M. Keep
- Length: 47 Pages
- B013XCTQB0 (Reissue)
- Publishing Date: September 24, 2013 (Original), August 13, 2015 (Reissue)
- This work at Amazon.com
The work tells the story of:
Rita feels invisible. She’s a plus-size secretary in a job surrounded by white walls and monotony. Every day is the same until she dreams of the perfect…demon?
The exciting and unreal incubus offers her sweet surrender and affection. He makes all of the pain go away. For the first time in so long she feels loved and desired, and quickly she finds she can think of nothing else. Nothing but her new Incubus Master.
Every night he touches her in new ways, teaching her new and forbidden pleasure as he dominates her. He teases her with his passion and experience, but in the end, will she surrender everything to be with him?
Rita’s life is miserable in just about every way one could imagine. A demon appears in the night and takes her breath away, leading to her submitting to his demands. But at what cost and why is a question to be answered.
Going from the summary alone, what comes in this story doesn’t match up well. The work reads very much like a dream sequence most of the time, being confused and uneven at many places. There’s a disconnect with Rita as this happens which makes the work harder to read. She seems to lose focus with her reality over time, which makes some sense considering she’s supposedly with an Incubus, or other dream demon.
While that story unfolds there is the slightest hint of something else going on around Rita and others, but that isn’t really delved into much through most of the work. In truth, that plot thread is mentioned once or twice, but why it is, what it matters, never comes out fully. Once the climax comes, that underlying thread is touched on again. But I cannot understand why it is in the work in the first place.
The work ends on a revelation which makes no sense with the rest of the story, doesn’t have a purpose with regards to Rita’s actions, or that of Anton, the supposed demon of the work. It feels very much like a tease towards a horror/action movie plot in a way, one that’s been done many times before and not all that well really most of the time.
But before the work gets to the end, and the confusion with it, the story in-between is a mix of submissive domination, in an over the top and nasty way. It wasn’t erotic to me, didn’t have much heat in it, and, again, looking at the summary, I expected more than what came out in the story.
The incubus himself, Anton, wasn’t much of an incubus, save that he wanted Rita to submit to him in a sexual way. He acted somewhat stereotypically in that, which I didn’t care for very much either. It’s not quite clear what he wants. exactly, again the dream-like storytelling makes it hard to find the motivations of the characters. When the ending does comes, even then it’s not clear what the motivations were either.
As such, the work didn’t seem to have a direction, a focus, a reason for the story to move in the direction it did. The ending just seemed to be there for shock value, in all ways, and it just left nothing to enjoy.
One pitchfork out of five.
A confusing work with an ending that left more questions in its wake than should have been. The author might well have stopped the story about one page before they did and leave out the last couple of paragraphs.
The work might have made a little more sense in that context.