A Review of Succubus by Joyce Melbourne

Succubus by Joyce Melbourne

Succubus by Joyce Melbourne

The one thing I cannot enjoy is a work that takes a stereotypical view of the idea of Succubi and does nothing with them. Yes there can be some erotic moments, yes there can be some part of the Succubus that might be interesting. But the problem is when the story follows a path which as been well told before and really doesn’t take things in a new direction but rather ends the story on a note that simply wrecks any enjoyment that might have been.

Why it is that so many authors need to show Succubi as being nothing more than monstrous things when they can offer more than that if they just take a little risk and move away from the everyday into the extraordinary?

  • Title:  Succubus
  • Author:  Joyce Melbourne
  • Length: 12 Pages
  • Publishing Date: October 19, 2014
  • This work at Amazon.com


The work is described as:

A woman is seduced by a succubus; a being in a female form, who drains her of both her sexual, and life energy.

Avery finds herself haunted by the touch of a woman in her dreams and as her dreams become her life, her life ebbs away piece by piece until only the touch is left and nothing more.

Avery seems, from the beginning of the story, a very interesting character and at the beginning that’s more than enough to hook me into the story. The problem is that when the succubus appears Avery becomes… less. She’s less intelligent, less focused, less alive as a whole. While much of that is the effect of the succubus upon her, it does take away so much of the character quirkiness that was present and replaces it with a dull personality for the most part of the story.

That’s a shame because I think the story would have been more interesting if Avery would have a clear mind and be able to, if not completely resist the call of the succubus, then at least be able to respond to the help she is offered by the one person in the story that she should have listened to. Instead she pushes them away.

As well, that action doesn’t feel right for the one she refuses as, considering the relationship they had, they should have done more than they did. They turned into an afterthought, almost a red herring in a way, and that just bothered me. Perhaps not all stories have to end on a positive note, but in this case I think that would have helped this story a lot considering where it ends.

The succubus is, save for her being interested in Avery, a fairly stereotypical succubus with but a single purpose in her thoughts as the story progresses. As the time that Avery spends with her goes on, the succubus turns from being something erotic into something more monstrous which climaxes at the end of the work as a scene that just took away anything and everything that had been accomplished in the story to that point. There was hints of something different, but it didn’t arrive. There was a moment when the story could have turned towards something more positive and hopeful, but it didn’t go that way.

The story is described as being erotica, but I really didn’t see a lot of heat. The story was confused at times, though that was a reflection of Avery’s own confusion. When there was some erotic passages between Avery and the succubus they were slightly glossed over and the heat was something that didn’t burn as hot as it could have. When the final scene came, I really didn’t see anything erotic there, as all it did was make me sigh in frustration as the story came to a close.

In short, I just didn’t find that I enjoyed this work as much as I wanted to. It was lacking focus, a great deal of heat, and the stereotypical actions of the succubus just didn’t do anything for me. Even when Avery had a slight clue about what was going on, instead of taking the story in that direction, it is tossed aside for a bit more time between the succubus and Avery, but not before Avery is chastised for asking a question that, to me, should have been answered if for no other reason than in the setting it was asked, it should have been.

I’ll give this work one and half pitchforks out of five.

Stereotypical succubi I just cannot find interesting at all. Erotica with pain and suffering doesn’t do much for me either. To have a story that offers such a good plot and characters come to the end that it does really doesn’t do the story justice and that’s the greatest shame of all…




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    • James on August 14, 2015 at 9:06 pm

    It seems to me that the author is, in a way, to be commended for creating a situation–here is the woman, here is what an encounter with this succubus will do to the woman– and being absolutely faithful to that situation, playing it out and, from Your Majesty’s description, portraying it authentically and vividly. The problem is that, from a dramatic level, this was a trap; it turns out that absolute evil is, in the end, rather dull, and playing this out consistently got a dull result.

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    • TeraS on August 16, 2015 at 7:46 pm

    Perhaps that is the singular problem of all…


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