A Review of Taken by the Incubus and His Tentacles by June Harper

Taken by the Incubus and His Tentacles by June Harper

Taken by the Incubus and His Tentacles by June Harper

I wonder sometimes if it is too much to ask that writers have someone edit their stories before they publish them. I mean, you write something and then what makes you not have things checked? Is it because you wrote an erotica work? You don’t have anyone you could trust to read your work and edit? Maybe it’s the thought of just getting your story out so that you can make a little money on it?

Whatever the reason and why ever this happens, with the advent of self-publishing this is really starting to become a problem… Seriously.

  • Title: Taken by the Incubus and His Tentacles
  • Author: June Harper
  • Length: 23 Pages
  • ASIN: B00MG31OXQ
  • Publishing Date: August 4, 2014
  • This work at Amazon.com


The work is described as:

A midnight intruder…

Ava is on the right track for life: The summer before her senior year in college she lands the internship of her dreams! It’s perfect, from the hot location in the city to her inspirational new boss. On the plane ride over, however, she meets an eccentric old woman who gives her a necklace with some interesting properties.

One night, Ava drops the necklace and shatters it, releasing the mysterious substance within. After that, some strange things start happening, from gusts of wind that knock her off her feet to slimy, wet tentacles that come from the darkness and violate her every hole and crevice! Ava is terrified, but has nowhere to go. Should she flee her NYC apartment for the safety of her hometown in Texas? Or should she stick it out and tolerate the nightly invasions for the sake of her dream job?

Ava travels to New York to her dream job for the summer, along the way meeting an old woman who gives her a necklace. Ava breaks it and then something odd begins to happen.

As a whole the summary suggests that the oddities, the incubus, is central to the story and that much of the work focuses on that. But that isn’t true in this case. There is substantially more time spent on Ava’s travel, finding her apartment, meeting her boss, and they spending time together than with the incubus of the title of the book. In truth it isn’t even clear if he is an incubus, there really aren’t any clear signs that he is, and as such that is a bit disappointing. His name is never revealed either for that matter.

There really isn’t all that much in the way of erotica in this work, really there is one short scene the didn’t do anything for me at all. It had some incubus-like qualities, but overall what happens just didn’t have much heat in it. The scene plays out in the last five or so pages of the work and at the very end it simply comes to an abrupt stop, the incubus vanishes and the story comes to a close.

As a whole the work would make for a good opening chapter, or really the basis of three chapters, of a longer work, but in this case, how the story plays out just seemed to be a series of loosely connected scenes that eventually ended with a very short hot flash piece. The thing is that the buildup to the incubus appearing really set the stage for a story, one that has two characters with their own quirks and they are described really well. But going from “ordinary” to “something weird is going on” happens so abruptly that it feels out of place with the rest of the work.

I think that drawing out things, playing on the sense of something being off, eventually leading towards the incubus appearing after Ava had been teased or dreamed of things would have been more interesting and the final encounter would have worked better. As it is, the incubus just isn’t interesting enough when compared to Ava and the other main character, or really any of the minor ones.

I’ll give this work two out of five pitchforks.

All kinds of story being told, and really if it was the beginning of a novel it would hook you into the story well. But in this case, it takes up the vast majority of the story really leaving only a very short passage for the erotica that is quick, blunt, and really didn’t have all that much heat in it.




    • avatar
    • James on August 11, 2015 at 10:02 pm

    First, about “Talk,” as their seems to be no place to comment there. It means something to Your Majesty, which is why there is such feeling and beauty in the words, and it means other things to many of us who get to read it. I know it means something wonderful to me. Thank you.

    As for the story: there was erotica even back when everything was published in hard copies by people who owned presses and had to invest money in the project on behalf of the author. The issue is one of professionalism, of craftsmanship. The fact that anybody can have access to the resources to e-publish leads to the mistaken notion that no craft, no skill, no attention to detail is required. That is a mistaken notion, and Your Majesty provides a public service in warning us away from these thefts.

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    • TeraS on August 16, 2015 at 7:42 pm


    And in Talk… The truth is one that you only know my heart… Thank you…

    As for my ‘service’… Well… There must be penance at some point I suppose…



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