A Review of Nature of Seduction 1 and 2 written by Stacie Heald

Nature of Seduction by Stacie Heald

Nature of Seduction by Stacie Heald

Sometimes free books that are available on Smashwords can have some very interesting concepts in them. They have can characters with depth, a story that has twists and turns in it, and more. The thing is that even with the best of stories, and this happens far too often really, poor editing can hurt things very much.

It’s a shame when that happens. Especially when the Succubus on the story is something especially interesting as the story unfolds.

  • Title: Nature of Seduction 1 and 2
  • Author: Stacie Heald
  • Title: Nature of Seduction
  • Length: 44 Pages
  • ISBN: 9781301755769
  • Publishing Date: February 14, 2013
  • This work at Smashwords.com
  • Title: Nature of Seduction: Part 2
  • Length: 36 Pages
  • ISBN: 9781301120598
  • Publishing Date: February 14, 2013
  • This work at Smashwords.com

/the works tell the story of:

Ariel is an erotic dancer from a small town who gets her rocks off on seducing men in every way possible. For most of her adult life she has thought that her good looks were to thank for her success in the exotic dancing business. She is always in control and has never been in love because of her mind set on men. Ariel could take a guy down to his knees and get anything she wanted from him, but she never was fully satisfied with what they offered her in return. She still would be left with a hunger inside that she didn’t know how to feed. What Ariel didnt expect to find was a man, Adam Everett, who could seduce her instead, and once she understands why…. her whole life will change.

The second tells of:

Ariel, an exotic dancer who is coping with her family history of witchcraft and Succubus’ that she recently found out about, has found that life has changed a drastic amount and she is more on fire now than ever. Her new found gifts have taken over her mind and she wont let anyone stand in her way of getting what she wants and what she needs. She thinks she is in control, but it’s the beast inside that controls her. She doesn’t know if her lover boy, Adam, can keep with the beast that tears her apart from the inside out. A strange new man comes into her life and it seems like the beast inside of her wants to do more than get to know him.

Ariel is a dancer and she has a power over those around her. She can tempt them, and to a point make them do whatever she wants. But she discovers that it isn’t just her personality, or her body that does it. She’s a Succubus, at least partly, and a witch. And that leads to all sorts of problems for her.

Ariel herself is interesting in that there’s a battle going on within her between the need she has and any hope she has of if not controlling, then at least managing it. It’s very clear that she really has no control over herself in the first work and things get worse as the story goes on.

Then Adam arrives and he is, to be blunt, chauvinistic to the extreme. He uses his abilities to control Ariel in many ways and that brings new stresses to her and her life. As the story continues on, Adam’s attitude really tended to become grating and just became, as a whole, too… animalistic for my tastes.

While I had some issues with various minor characters, as a whole the story had a purpose and a direction to go in. There were some hot erotic moments that told a story, there is some introspective moments and as well a touch of action that characters take. There is a lot of promise in the work as a whole. But in spite of how good the characters are and the story as a whole is, there are several problems with it.

The editing of these works leaves a lot to be desires I regret. There are a lot of tense errors, spelling mistakes and wrong word usage that I found extremely distracting. As well, the dialog felt wooden and unemotional at times. I felt as if the core of the story was buried underneath too many flaws that a serious editing could have taken care of.

Those flaws, for me at least, did nothing to help the story and that should not have happened. While I understand these are free books and a professional editing wasn’t possible, I would have expected the author to take a few more passes over their writing and tighten up their prose accordingly. More the shame they did not.

Two out of five pitchforks.

Honestly both works need a serious editing. There’s so many tense problems, the conversations feel so stilted, and that takes away from the works as a whole. Now, nothing has come after these two works that I have been able to find and that’s a shame as the story is very good and it’s going places.

It just needs a firm hand on the steering wheel to guide it towards the destination.



    • avatar
    • James on March 29, 2015 at 2:26 pm

    I must admit that, when the phrase “gets her rocks off” is in the first sentence of a story synopsis, I am highly unlikely to read the story.

    That being said, I tend to give more latitude on editing to free stories, as the author is not taking my money to produce sub-standard product. Still, I wonder why someone would take so little pride in her work as to allow it to appear at less than its best.

    • avatar
    • TeraS on March 29, 2015 at 10:03 pm

    Oh… that is something to ponder over isn’t it?


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