A Succubus does not need to be the core of a story really. Sometimes she’s on the edges of the story, a means to push the story, characters, and so on towards a conclusion.
A Succubus does need to be something more than stereotypical or a “blink and you’ll miss her” type of character. Even more so when the title of the work suggests she is more than that, but really isn’t…
- Title: Kiss of the Succubus
- Author: Lyra K
- Publishing Date: September 3, 2013
- Length: 11 Pages
- ASIN: B00EZB5FTG
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The work tells about:
The adventures of Sir Landis the chaste as he falls into the clutches of the (only slightly) wicked sorceress, Helia. Transformed by forbidden magic into her own personal lesbian fantasy lover, Landis is forced to serve and protect her if he ever wants to go back to being a man.
I am of two minds about this work. I do like it, to a point. The dialog is witty, the main characters really play off each other well. There are some really cute and silly moments that made me laugh too. For a short, and it is quite short, story, it turns out to be something more than I expected.
However, the Succubus is.. well barely there in more than one way. It is a fleeting moment when she appears and then… isn’t there. It is disappointing because her physical presence is something different and interesting but there isn’t anything told about her… Save that she feeds on the desires of Helia and Landis that is. I can’t really call her stereotypical either as her actions and effects on the main characters aren’t quite the usual. I’m not sure I liked her, but I didn’t dislike her either…
The story seemed to be trying to find its way for much of the time, but when it did settle on one theme and move onwards with it, it became really quite good and I enjoyed it. Helia is… well… different, but in a good way and as the beginning of a series of stories about her it makes for some thoughts really about her. The same is true of Landis as well. Really neither of their histories are touched on, nor really is the path going forwards either.
It is, in the end, a hot flash erotica-wise. There is a little bit of fun and games, a bit stronger things as well. The erotica isn’t anything that might be construed as being “hard core” in nature and considering the characters I felt like it was the best way to approach those moments.
I think that there are some scenes missing from the work somehow. There is a disconnect between the transformation of Landis and the meeting with the Succubus that makes that passage… odd. I’m not sure why exactly…
I’m giving this work three out of five pitchforks.
The story really isn’t about the Succubus, it is about Helia and Landis. The author really should have picked a better title…