There are some questions and mysteries that are left untold and unexplored when it comes to telling a story. This is especially true in short tales where the story can gloss over how things came to be for the sake of getting to how things are. If done well, that can work for the most part. It still however doesn’t add to the characters themselves and that can be a shame.
A story in which a character is possessed by what seems to be a succubus, and becomes a futa as well, could have told of how that happened and really should have. If nothing else, that mystery would explain so much about why things are as they are.
- Title: The Devil’s Toys
- Author: Mara Birch
- Published By: Amazon Digital Services
- Length: 18 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B0B45J87TJ
- Publishing Date: June 14, 2022
- This work in Kindle Format at Amazon.com
The work tells of:
Madison and Grace are close friends who have known each other since they were children. Inez, Madison’s former neighbor and friend, attends the same college as them but has started keeping more to herself lately. When she stops showing up for class and vanishes one day, Madison and Grace are more than concerned.
Inez hasn’t been herself for a while now, and they fear the worst. So, doing what good friends typically do, Madison and Grace decide to search for her. But maybe it’s best they left things well enough alone—because some people’s demons are more than just metaphorical …
Something is very odd about Inez and her friends aren’t sure what that is. A mystery is very hard to resist but curiosity has done bad things to more than cats. Inez isn’t herself anymore and what remains has plans of its own.
The work tells a story centred on possession, futa transformation, dominance and control with hints of a succubus possessing one of the characters. It’s a bit violent, very harsh at times as well, overall being more about Inez’s friends falling to the demon that is possessing her.
The story is told from the perspective of Madison and as such there’s no real means for explaining what happened to Inez except for describing her physical changes and the succubus’ personality and what she does in the story. This leaves the question of how Inez was possessed never to be explored and it also doesn’t provide a means to tell what the succubus wants other than to have her way with Madison and Grace.
The succubus, who is never named, but uses Inez’s name, is very much physically a succubus, perhaps it’s more accurate to call her a demon for the most part. She is very centred on sexual control, her futa nature a means to that. Her personality is harsh, edging towards brutal at times and that is reflected on the erotica as that unfolds.
The erotica didn’t have a lot of heat for the most part, mainly as Inez forces the others in the story to submit to her and have her way with them. How that happens just didn’t have heat I thought, even if some of the BDSM themes worked at least from a character perspective. There’s a bit of a mind control theme as well, again somewhat fleetingly, but it didn’t have heat either.
I think, overall, that the work really could have used more of a glimpse of what happened to Inez. Did she want to be possessed? If so, why? Who is the succubus and what, if any, are her plans? I’d have liked more to the story than just the futa sex alone and I think there’s a lot of ways that could have happened. But it’s interesting as a story idea, the characters as well. There is a lot to build on and really should be.
Three pitchforks out of five.
There’s something of a succubus flavour to this work, but overall it’s more about dominance and futa themes. That said, there’s a lot that wasn’t explored, not the least of which is who possesses Inez, how that happened, and what they want beyond the story. That would be interesting to see explored and perhaps sometime it might be.