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The Succubus Wore Green: Book One: The Journey (eBook)
|The Succubus Wore Green: Book One: The Journey|
The Succubus Wore Green: Book One: The Journey eBook Cover, written by
Benzi T. McKelly
|Author(s)||Benzi T. McKelly|
|Series||The Succubus Wore Green|
|Publisher||Benzi T. McKelly|
|Publication date||March 13, 2015|
|Followed by||The Succubus Wore Green: Book Two: Emerald City|
The Succubus Wore Green: Book One: The Journey is an eBook written by Benzi T. McKelly. It is the first work in the Succubus Wore Green series by this author. In this work the character Atalya is a Succubus.
- Title: The Succubus Wore Green: Book One: The Journey
- Author: Benzi T. McKelly
- Published By: Benzi T. McKelly
- Length: 64 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B00UP43MFG
- Publishing Date: March 13, 2015
Other Works in this Series on SuccuWiki
A young demon slave to a gorgeous, charismatic succubus tells of their harrowing journey to Earth, her inner struggles with her dark past, a series of incredible transformations, and the beginning of a mission to change human society forever.
The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on February 7, 2016
Benzitae is the slave of the succubus known as Atalya and she is charged with telling her Mistress’ story. Along the way comes an angel, a problem, a world to conquer and a reality that is far too familiar to Benzitae in a lot of uncomfortable ways.
The work shows a lot of promise in that there is quite a lot of world building, the characters are full of life, thought, and passions. There is heart and soul in each of them, in their own ways, and that makes for the most interesting plots and events to unfold. Along with the story there is quite a lot of themes such as futa, some dominance, and a bit of slightly over the top erotica, but it isn’t really out of place with the themes and story as a whole.
The erotica does, on occasion, run a bit wild, and at times it need not have, but overall that didn’t overcome the book’s core plot. In the plot itself comes a lot of mysteries that begin, or are hinted at, but little else is told. Benzitae herself is a bit of an enigma, and as she remembers why she came to be where she is, that has a somewhat uncomfortable feel to it. There are moments which are in the middle of being light-hearted and then Benzitae remembers something and it falls apart. There is a purpose to this, but here it’s just distracting at times.
Atalya is, as a succubus, quite different in her physical nature and her overall character. She is futa in nature, is quite different in appearance as a succubus, and in that she is different, but in a unique way. I thought her personality was a little forced, mainly in how she related to Benzitae, and while there is a connection, even love at times, between them, it sometimes didn’t quite work as well as I had hoped.
The oddest part of this work is how often the two main characters turn, in the midst of the story, and comment about the reader, mentioning them, or rather alluding to them in a way. It is distracting in that the story was flowing well to that point, it goes off the rails for a moment, and then continues on, but for that moment one is drawn from the story and then it takes quite some time to be immersed in it again.
That all said, the story itself I really liked because it is different, it shows a lot of thought and most of all it gives an opportunity for a succubus to be more than “just a succubus” which I do like to see. But along with that comes so many questions and mysteries which bodes well for the series to come.
I’ll give this work four out of five pitchforks.
A good start, good characters, and there seems to be real care given to the story. I just wish it was a bit more consistent in the storytelling and the way the characters speak in, and outside of, the story itself.