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The Demon Shaft
|The Demon Shaft|
The Demon Shaft eBook Cover, written by Mackey Dun
|Publication date||June 11, 2010|
The Demon Shaft is an eBook written by Mackey Dun. In this work a Succubus appears as one of the main characters and attempts to make the other character of the story, named Sandee, submit to her.
- Title: The Demon Shaft
- Author: Mackey Dun
- Published By: Excessica Books
- Length: 3,600 Words
- Format: eBook
- IBSN: 9781609823269
- Publishing Date: June 11, 2010
She has the confidence, the walk, the desire, and all the curves to snare the job. The stunning ball of fire has everything going for her today. All Sandee has to do is step into the elevator, get to the 27th floor, and that job is as good as hers. Unfortunately for Sandee, the elevator holds a few scorching surprises that might derail her interview, and her carefully laid out life, forever.
The following review was first published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale
I was intrigued by the book summary and decided to read this story. For the most part it's a hot story about a Succubus that captures her prey in an elevator. The descriptions of what the "victim" in the story feels are quite interesting and, occasionally, very hot. The transgender aspects of the story come into play about halfway through the story, and are not over the top in nature, but are quite specific and to the point in their effects on Sandee.
But here is the one part of the story that does bother me to an extent. Over and over again Sandee is told to submit to the Succubus, and in doing so, she would become the plaything of the Succubus. But Sandee never actually submits to the Succubus in the story, by saying so. Nonetheless, the Succubus continues to act as if Sandee has submitted to being the Succubus' pet. And that bothered me from the point where she was told to submit to the end of the story.
I have the oddest feeling that there is part of this story missing for that reason, which is a shame I think. The act of submission isn't, at least to me, actual submission and, considering we are talking about a Succubus, I think that she would make quite sure that there was no way for Sandee to escape her. The way the story is written, it's like she has an escape clause. A Succubus would not allow Sandee to have such a thing.
Three out of five pitchforks.
Just one plot hole, but to me that makes a difference.
- This work in Various Formats at Smashwords.com - No Longer Available