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My Life as a Succubus Demon: Part 2 (eBook)
|My Life as a Succubus Demon:|
My Life as a Succubus Demon: Part 2 eBook Cover, written by M.G. Bubbles
|Publisher||Amazon Digital Services|
|Publication date||November 18, 2015|
|Preceded by||My Life as a Succubus Demon: Part 1|
My Life as a Succubus Demon: Part 1 is an eBook written by M.G. Bubbles. In this work the character Rose is a Succubus.
- Title: My Life as a Succubus Demon: Part 2
- Author: M.G. Bubbles
- Published By: Amazon Digital Services
- Length: 117 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B01880ZOP4
- Publishing Date: November 18, 2015
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I woke up sleeping next to the enemy, or so I thought he was. The name is Rose and I have found out I am a Succubus. That's right, a full blown man eating demon (literally). I have to find away to put my life together and figure out the truth from the lie. If that doesn't already complicate my life, finding out my other secret will.
The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on December 16, 2016
If Rose’s life wasn’t complicated enough, having someone mess with her mind takes things up a little bit more. A deal struck, or so it seems, and Rose finds herself at odds with a Goddess. Then Rose has to meet her lost lost family. Being a succubus, she fears that won’t go well. It’s not herself that Rose has to be concerned about, it’s those that want her, desire her or are jealous of her.
The series follows Rose as she discovers she is a succubus, that mythical beings are real, and she is part of that world. The single thing about Rose through much of the work is an attitude that just doesn’t quite get what’s going on and doesn’t find her way to solutions. Part of that is circumstance, but much of the time, it’s Rose’s own character that trips her up.
As the story progresses, what Rose is capable of, as a succubus, gets defined better. She starts to come to terms with herself in the face of many around her seeing her as being “evil” or “slutty”. It’s an almost constant barrage of emotions towards Rose. Nonetheless, she holds her own, gets even with some, and pushes back. Her strength is there, but as well there’s flaws that are exploited with Rose and that’s where the story gets interesting.
Not everything goes right, many things go wrong of course. There is betrayal, battles, loss and more. There’s a hint of mind control, among other powers, but it’s not really focused on clearly. Things tend to happen at breakneck speed for Rose and those around her. Some of the scenes with Rose discovering her powers I thought were really well done, but they were somewhat fleeting.
As Rose’s backstory comes out, it’s complex and varied, needing a lot of time spent to straighten it all out. But that doesn’t happen well. There are a few points where time is taken to tell that part of the story, but things turn quickly and the gains are tossed aside for moving onto the next crisis in the work, and there are a lot of those.
Beyond Rose’s story itself, the overall plot, which revolves around, and within, a family’s battle within itself, I thought was a little too complicated. The author seemed to have to jump in and out of things, bring in characters for a scene, then make them disappear too often. There are quite a number of secondary characters in the series, some of which only appear once. Others are more important, but as well they seem to be pulled in and out of events almost at a whim.
While the characters are interesting, and the plots are as well, there’s a single problem with this series that takes away much of the promise. The work is very difficult to read for all of the mistakes that crop up. Every page has issues. Words that are simply wrong, misspelled, incorrect. Some of the sentence structure is nonsensical.
I can’t honestly say this work was even edited. There’s far too many problems left in the writing. It’s a shame because the core idea is good, Rose has some promise, and the series seemed to be moving towards a goal, even if that might be a little murky. It’s disappointing when an author has a really good idea, but doesn’t take the time to clarify their story and make it was it should be.
Two out of five pitchforks.
The editing takes away so much from what otherwise should be a four pitchfork rating. This series has a complicated plot, characters that have depth and if the editing allowed it, that would make for an amazing series. But it can’t be for how terrible the words on the page read. So many simple mistakes that could have been corrected by even a basic editing.
What’s a bit more disappointing is that this series did not continue to a third work. The second ends on a cliffhanger, it’s obviously meant to continue, but as of this review that never happened. Being so, the series leaves so much unanswered, so many characters in limbo. I like the characters, I think the story is a good one.
But the editing? That leaves so much to be desired.