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My Forbidden Submission (eBook)
|My Forbidden Submission|
My Forbidden Submission eBook Cover,
written by Deana Michaels
|Publication date||August 10, 2014|
|Preceded by||My Submissive Desire|
My Forbidden Submission is an eBook written by Deana Michaels. It is the first work in the Taboo series by this author. In this work one of the main characters is a Succubus. The work was also released as My Submissive Desire with the relationship between the two main characters altered, but the balance of the story remaining the same.
- Title: My Forbidden Submission
- Author: Deana Michaels
- Published By: Naughty Ladies Publications
- Length: 17 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B00MLNX3B2
- Publishing Date: August 10, 2014
Other Works in this Series on SuccuWiki
Rachel is going out on a trip with Jeff. They had been close for years, but Rachel's passion for him was forbidden. But her taboo lust called out, summoning a place where all desires can be acted upon and realized: The Naughty Succubus Cafe.
When the Succubus asks Rachel what she wants, the young woman spills the beans, blurting out her forbidden love for the hunky Jeff and her desires to be completely his, submitting to whatever wants or lusts burned within his handsome frame. In the Naughty Succubus Cafe, all desires can be experience no matter how taboo.
The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on April 28, 2015
Lindsey has a secret that she has never been able to tell her husband Ryan. But a strange coffee shop, an expresso or two, and the knowing look of the devilish barista will change all of that for them both.
Lindsey and Ryan are two very interesting characters. The work is told from Lindsay’s perspective and with that comes her secret need to be dominated by her husband, to call him her Master, and to be submissive to him. What Ryan wants isn’t really told of at the beginning of the work and isn’t touched on until the succubus of the story has worked her magic upon the two.
The succubus herself is wonderfully sensual, powerful, and the way she looks into Lindsey, drawing out her wants and desires is just perfect and I loved every moment of that. But we never learn her name, how she got there, and how exactly everything she does unfolds as it does. She watches the couple as they fall under her spell, makes some suggestions, and enjoys the display before she vanishes into the ether, taking the coffee shop with her.
The succubus is the door that opens into the erotica of the story which is very much a D/s story with a bit of bondage wrapped up into it. It is at times a bit harsh, somewhat uncomfortable, and perhaps a bit cruel at least to my personal tastes. I don’t like the idea of harming another or treating them poorly and that does unfold in this story to a large extent. However, it is also clear that for the couple in this story, Lindsey and Ryan, it is what they want to make their lives better and more enjoyable. I that context, in that light, it works very well, the passions are strong and they each find fulfillment in what happens.
The work is billed as being the first in a series about this coffee shop and this succubus that seems to be the owner of it and that fascinates me quite a lot. There is a lot of good storytelling that can come from this and I hope that the author does continue this series. I would however like the succubus to have a name and perhaps be a little more involved than she is somehow. Passion and joy isn’t a spectator sport for succubi and she needs to be a bit more of a power in the story overall.
Written well, the character voices are strong and clear, the scenes are told well and overall the work is passionate and erotic in its own way. For some the erotica will be what they desire, for others not, but as a story, it all holds together really well.
I’m giving this work three out of five pitchforks.
I’d like to see a part two in which we learn more about the succubus, if she is one and she seems to be, her magical coffee shop, and most importantly, what her name is. There really is a lot I like about her and perhaps the next work can be less about the crop and more about the feather instead.
A small postscript to this review, one that does disappoint me about this work. Soon after this work was published, it was reissued as My Forbidden Submission under a new author name and with the entire story exactly as it was released originally save that the two main characters names have been changed and their relationship is no longer husband and wife but rather what is a step-sister/brother relationship. There are no other changes to the story, the themes, the events of the work. It is simply a cut and paste alteration of the original released work and that, truly, disappointed me.
As such, I have to lower my rating for the second work. One out of five pitchforks. The author would have been better served to use the same setting and write a new story instead of using a pale photocopy. I’m not changing my review of the original, I still think that was well done and original. I just cannot accept the second as anything else but being lazy.