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Lustful Rhythm (eBook)
Lustful Rhythm eBook Cover,
written by CG Dante
|Publisher||Amazon Digital Services|
|Publication date||February 16, 2016|
Lustful Rhythm is an eBook written by CG Dante. In this work the character Lucy is a Succubus.
- Title: Lustful Rhythm
- Author: CG Dante
- Published By: Amazon Digital Services
- Length: 18 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B01BVQCFR2
- Publishing Date: February 16, 2016
Lucy and Aeden are demons, she is a Succubus who has wings, a tail and red glowing eyes. He is a Mami Wata a snake demon that can change into a larger than man snake. She's a stripper at a night club and he's got his hands in organized crime. They make an odd couple but the sex is steamy and they definitely want to get it on.
The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on August 21, 2016
Lucy arrives where she works as a stripper to find someone waiting for her. Some teasing leads to something more for both of them, and where things go from there is a question on its own.
Overall I did not enjoy this work at all. The writing needs a lot of work, mainly in how the narration is told. It makes no sense to speak in the third person tense, then the first, then as a narrator, within a single paragraph. This happens almost constantly, which is jarring, but also it simply draws any heat from the story, leaves nothing but confusion, and only serves to tear whatever core plot there is to ashes.
I’m not so sure there is a plot in that sense either, really the work moves almost immediately into Lucy seducing Aeden, how that unfolds, and just continually comes back to them having sex in all sorts of different ways.
There’s actually very little of Lucy being a succubus, though she does show her wings and tail once, her red eyes twice, and admits to being one as well. But there’s no seduction, no being a succubus. Lucy seems focused on sex every bit as much as Aeden is and being so there’s nothing to tell about the characters, no growth in them, and at the end of the story there’s no difference save for a comment between them.
But even that was hard to figure out for the constant changes in how the story was told. The writing is uneven, the story isn’t much better than writing out a porn scene. There’s no heat, no passion. But there can’t be when in every paragraph the tone changes. It’s a shame because there is a hint that Lucy might have another story to tell, but it never comes out, isn’t played out and fades away within moments of Lucy first grinding herself on Aeden.
Zero pitchforks out of five.
The work needs a serious editing, a decision on either first, third, or a narrative storyline. There needs to be more than just Lucy and Aeden winding up in bed together for no other reason than to do so. This is not much more than porn, it isn’t erotica, and it doesn’t have heat. But there is a small glimmer of something interesting in Lucy herself. It’s a shame that the surrounding story couldn’t manage to tell that story for the rush to the sex.