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His Darkest Desires: Transforming Him into a Fertile Succubus (eBook)
His Darkest Desires: Transforming Him into a Fertile Succubus is an eBook written by Lily Fey. In this work the character Quinn is transformed into a Succubus, and another, unnamed character is a Succubus as well.
- Title: His Darkest Desires: Transforming Him into a Fertile Succubus
- Author: Lily Fey
- Published By: Feverotica Books
- Length: 28 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B0149JX4CI
- Publishing Date: August 20, 2015
Best friends Quinn and Alan decide to perform a succubus summoning ritual for kicks. Despite their skepticism, strange things begin to happen! Quinn is visited in the night by a sexy supernatural presence that decides to make his darkest desires come true.
When he wakes up the next morning, Quinn discovers that he's slowly transforming into a beautiful woman with a craving for the carnal. Little does he know that he's destined to become a fertile succubus, meant to be used and degraded for all of eternity!
The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on October 4, 2016
Quinn finds that summoning isn’t a joke when succubi are involved. An offer accepted means that Quinn is becoming a succubus, in mind, body and soul. Nightmare or dream, it’s hard to say, but either way, the future is coming.
One of the problems I have with this work is a very simple one. There is a succubus character in the work, she’s very present, she drives the story forwards and is in control of things much of the time. But she’s never named. She’s always referred to as “the succubus” and that gets frustrating very quickly. More so when the erotica comes into play. It’s odd to hear dialogue where a character is referred to as “the succubus” and there are two of them in the room.
I’m not quite sure that the unnamed succubus is stereotypical in her nature. There are some pieces of dialogue and story that seem like it, but then there’s a little bit of compassion in her which manages to avoid that, if barely so. She is a futa succubus, and that isn’t really played up much in the work, mainly because the focus really is on Quinn and his transformation into a succubus.
Quinn’s transformation takes up much of the story, leading to a sex scene, it really isn’t much of a hot flash, at the beginning of it. The latter scene is slightly better, but again it doesn’t have a lot of heat in it. Quinn isn’t physically like the other succubus character, but has some aspects of her within his/her changed form.
That change, when it’s complete, reads well, but then there’s a mental shift in Quinn that’s like flipping a switch and it’s jarring overall. There’s a reasonable explanation for that earlier in the work, but considering his thoughts prior to that moment, the falling to her new form just didn’t work for me.
There is a story here, but it needs more fleshing out. There should be more time spent in Quinn’s transformation and change, but isn’t. The ending is abrupt, odd, and somewhat stereotypical as well. There was promise here, it starts to appear, but then the story rushes towards the sex and the story breaks down. It’s only the whispers of the unnamed succubus to Quinn that keeps things from falling directly into porn scenes and paper thin plot.
Two out of five pitchforks.
Parts of the work were actually quite good. One issue I have comes from how Quinn’s transformation is handled in the story. It’s glossed over somewhat, being pushed below the sex scenes which were more porn than erotica. The other is simply not giving the more experienced, and powerful, succubus a name. That bothers me, over and over again as I read and that took much of the heat from her presence away.
The author released another succubus transformation work and I’ll review that one shortly as well…