Aug 09 2015

A Review of Heartbreaker: Part Two by Guava

Heartbreaker: Part Two by Guava

Heartbreaker: Part Two by Guava

The next work in a series that I reviewed earlier this year about a rather dominant succubus named Cherry. You can find the first review here on the Tale where I noted some issues I had with the work and some of my thoughts about it.

I hoped there would be a part two, and in that part I wanted to see the promise that Cherry showed come out fully and the author take advantage of her personality, powers, and character most of all. I was rather pleased when came to the end of part two…

  • Title: Heartbreaker: Part Two
  • Author:  Guava
  • Length: 14 Pages
  • ASIN: B00OMFFC98
  • Publishing Date: October 17, 2014
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The story continues the tale of:

Cherry, the beautiful young succubus, has taken an unsuspecting man captive. The more she teases him without release, the greater her supernatural power grows, and the more helpless he becomes against her.

Cherry has her prey at her mercy and does everything to control him, stoke his fires, and, with some luck, give her not just the feeding she needs but the sex she craves. But sometimes the choices made aren’t always the best ones when you go a little too far.

Thankfully this work is much better than the first was. Cherry is a more focused character, there’s more of her personality, power and needs shown that I thought added to her more than they did in the first work. Her dominance over Kevin, her prey, is very clear and she uses that power to bring him over and over again to the edge, but never allows him past that point. It is a bit cruel at times, but there is a powerful heat in the words of his and her reactions to what happens through most of the story.

The work is a bit more than a hot flash, there are some hot mind control moments that work really well and Cherry’s succubus powers come out in the story really well, their description is told in a way that adds a lot of heat to an already heated series of erotic scenes. There is one moment, and really I found it telling when it happened, when Cherry is asked a question and for the one and only time in the work she doesn’t quite know how to respond or what to say. In that moment there was a hint of, let’s call it humanity, in her and that made me like her a lot more than I did before.

While the erotica is amazing, and the story of Cherry controlling Kevin, bending him to her will, and making him do really anything and everything to make her orgasm and more, there’s a point in the story that I just felt was out of place. In all of the teasing and drawing out of Kevin’s need… Cherry goes out shopping. This just took a lot of the heat from the story away and, as far as I was concerned, didn’t add anything to the main plot at all. It did set up I am sure another another story about Cherry, but it just caused a break in the story that took a while to overcome when she returned to Kevin.

The ended also left something to be desired as well in that how the work ends is abrupt, sudden, and almost seemed half thought out. This might well be in order to allow Kevin’s story to continue, but really it didn’t quite work for me and I could think of several other ways it could have ended that were better than it did.

There is a bit a suspension of reality needed when reading this work in what happens to Kevin in that some of the things that he is forced to go through by Cherry are… not exactly what you might call “possible.” Hand-waving that they happen because of Cherry’s powers is one thing, and that does work to a point, but it’s a bit over the top. Not in a bad way, it’s very hot as I have said, but a little less “wild” and a bit more “dominance” might have read better as a whole.

A very hot flash of erotica, the author has improved quite a lot from the first work about Cherry and especially in that there aren’t any real errors in the story itself. By taking more care in this work I think the author is creating a very good series about a succubus that interests me and I will be looking for book three when it comes out.

Four pitchforks out of five.

Much better overall in many ways. Better writing, hotter erotica, some well thought-out mind control aspects to the story that I enjoyed very much. I expect there will be a part three to Cherry’s story and in that, I think, there might be some problems coming in her direction. I think that will a very interesting story to read…



Aug 08 2015

A bit of Succubus art on YouTube

Back to some lovely Succubus art on YouTube today on the Tale… I think this particular Succubus is rather interesting and certainly she is eye catching as well…

And if the YouTube does not play on the Tale, please try this link:

And, as always, an image of the completed art, in case YouTube removes the video:

Succubus by Soul Fisher

Succubus by Soul Fisher

This art is the work of an artist on YouTube called Soul Fisher and I think it is a mix of two opposing things about Succubi. The first is that they are, obviously, sexual beings, but the other is the question of what they are to the one viewing them.

The most interesting part of that latter question for me in this art is that her wings seem to be almost angel-like in quality and, as a whole, that’s something that doesn’t appear often with Succubi…

She does make me wonder about her name, her past, and what it is that she is smiling about exactly… A story to wonder about sometime I suppose…



Aug 07 2015

A Review of the Darkfallen series by Leona D. Reish

Darkfallen: Taking Jacob by Leona D. Reish

Darkfallen: Taking Jacob by Leona D. Reish

A review today of a series of works by the author Leona D. Reish which are interconnected by a succubus character who is, in a lot of ways, quite interesting, unique, and displays some powers that, for a succubus, are not expected. With all of that, the stories turn in unexpected directions, ideas, and developments that I found quite unique…

The wants within oneself are the gateways for others to use as they see fit. But at the same time, if those wants lead to transformations, then the gateway is but a passage to what becomes oneself anew…

It is the story of:

hilst the world works to forget what happened to the underground prison island of Sarandin Isle, it’s demonic host remains. Whilst tales are set in motion beyond its reach, the inhabitants of the depths do not stand idle. From Warden to opportunist thief and simple explorer, many find themselves fall prey to its grasp and drawn down, beyond where the light shines.

The series has several main characters who are the focus of the works, each encountering in their own way the succubus called Kynthia. For each of those that come into contact with her, she plays upon their deepest unspoken desires, ensnaring them into her web, and then transforming them in ways that reflect upon what they wish to be, have, or succumb to.

The series runs through quite a number of various themes, succubus mind control and domination for one, slime, futa, gender transformations, expansion, mind control, and with each overall theme Kynthia is in control of what happens. She’s more involved in some of the stories, but appears in all of them to taunt, tease, suggest and, on occasion, direct what happens.

Kynthia herself is a bit of a mystery in that there’s not a lot told about who she is, what she wants, and so on. It is made clear that she enjoys transforming others, really it is the core of her personality, but beyond that there’s more focus spent on those around Kynthia than herself. Of all of the works, really the first and fourth had more of Kynthia involved with things, the middle works she’s there, but in passing really, not actually being more than a narrator in a way.

The transformations, both physically and mentally that the characters undergo are well written and when there is erotica involved with that, the heat does not overcome the story itself and I liked that quite a lot. There isn’t a sudden change, or a snap of fingers and all is done. There’s a process which is told, experienced and felt for each character.

The work does, on occasion, run a bit towards some slightly over the top moments, bordering on being a little too much and breaking the overall mood of the works, but, thankfully, doesn’t quite go over the line and holds onto the plot and characters throughout. There is a good deal of character development in each work, the universe of the series grows with each and that I found to be refreshing. The works do need to be read in order, really the first and fourth are intimately connected with the middle two works bringing in new characters along the way.

The series tells a strong story, Kynthia makes the series move through the twists, turns, transformations and submissions of the characters quite well. There’s lots of detail, well told and each work builds upon the previous one, which, for me, is important because the actions of the past have consequences and they return often.

The only part that bothers me a bit is that Kynthia herself doesn’t really change through the series. Her personality, her mood, the way she acts, doesn’t change over the course of the series. She seems to be a constant, never changing, save for in the first work where she takes something from Jacob which stays with her through the series. I didn’t feel that bode well for her character and I wanted to see her change, even if only a little. Being static over all that she does in the series didn’t quite work for me. I’m not expecting her to change who she is, because really she’s quite the evil thing so far as succubi go. But I’d like to see more of her “plans” than her “doing” from time to time.

I’ll give the series as a whole four out of five pitchforks.

As this is an ongoing series, I expect there will be more works in the series to come and that Kynthia will be at the centre of things making everyone dance to her tune. I think with all that the author has developed in this universe, how strong the characters are and the force that Kynthia is within the works, there is still more stories to tell here.

Perhaps, at some point,Kynthia herself might learn something as well as that I think would be the most interesting thing of all…



Aug 07 2015

A Review of Star of My Heart written by K T Fair

Star of My Heart written by K T Fair

Star of My Heart written by K T Fair

A review of the first work in a series that I think has a very interesting premise to who the Succubus of the series sees herself as and what she has decided that matters to her. She’s intelligent, she has a soul… in a way… and most importantly, she gives a darn about others. But something in this particular work bothers me a lot.

Some subject matter makes me cringe, and honestly in some cases that isn’t because of the story, or the characters, it’s about the question of my personal comfort zone and in this case, regrettably for the rest of the work I really liked, that took quite a lot of that away…

  • Title: Star of My Heart
  • Author: K T Fair
  • Length: 34 Pages
  • Publishing Date: August 11, 2014
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The work is described as:

My name is Jezebel, but I’m not your typical succubus.

Oh, I am a demon who seduces men in order to drain their life away. I’m also immortal, gorgeous, and amazing fun at parties — at least until the end. I’m all of those things, but I also have something that no other succubus has.

A conscience.

And let me tell you, in my line of work, that’s not an added benefit.

Jezebel is a Succubus that has been around for a very long time. But as time has gone on she’s discovered that taking the souls of the innocent haunts her and in ways that she can never forget or forgive herself for. But there are those in the world that are dark, evil, and their actions make taking their souls a lot easier… even if some of them just deserve to die.

I like Jezebel very much… She has a few quirks mind you. Some I like, she has no hooves and notes that she prefers things that way, and she has a tail that is a bit too dangerous a thing to be playing with when a Succubus gets a bit horny. She has the most interesting personality and as the story is told from her perceptions, that gives a lot of moments where that personality really comes out and tells a lot about her. She isn’t, not really, evil, and that made her a lot more interesting to me in that she made a choice and she abides by it. She is tempted, on occasion, to break the promise she made to herself, but her will is strong and that made her such an interesting Succubus in my thoughts.

Through the course of the story the life that she leads, the single friend that she has, matters to her and in that friend there’s something important for her in that relationship. When she is forced into doing something to look after that friend, to protect her, that changes things and that story is one that needs to be told in the next part of the series I hope.

She does find some dark souls that she can take and not feel guilty about, but in one case, and it makes up the core of this story and reflects on the title as well, it’s a subject that I found hard to read about, even though it was fiction. What she was forced to do, and what happens through that action just made me very uncomfortable and while I understand that is was important to the story and fits in with her decisions of the past, I just didn’t like the last part of the work as much as I did the rest.

There really isn’t very much erotica in this work and for the most part I don’t think it hurts the work but rather improves it very much. It also gives more of a chance for Jezebel’s story to be told and that made the work a more solid piece of writing. The story is told well, there is meaning to the words and I really did feel for her when the story was over. But, and I regret this, her decision to become someone else in order to have revenge, or justice, depending on your point of view, just was very creepy and unsettling.

The ending is a slight cliffhanger, and it obviously leads into the next work in the series which I really want to read. I just hope that where Jezebel is at the end of this work isn’t where she is for too long in the next one. Her character and drive is better than that and there are so many plots left to be explored. Those are the things that I want to see unfold and I think they will.

I’ll give this work three and a half pitchforks out of five.

I like Jezebel, I like her a lot. But the story turns in a direction that I really was uncomfortable with. I hope the next part of her story gets away from where it ended really quickly because if it stays there too long I don’t think I’ll be able to continue.



Aug 06 2015

Succubi Image of the Week 394

Not all Succubi have to be drawn as being overtly sexual beings I think. They don’t have to show off a lot of skin, flaunt themselves or something more than that. It isn’t always about putting sexuality out in the open that is attractive. Many times what is more attractive is looking… nice.

Having a look, a style that says, yes, I am one of the Succubi… want a hug? Because Succubi hugs are the best you know…

Succubus by 夏目亜沙都

Succubus by 夏目亜沙都


I found this work originally on Pixiv, and you can find the page on that site with this art here.While she does have a sort of Morrigan Aensland vibe going on, what I really like is her outfit. It’s just a really nice looking style and combination that isn’t really over the top or blatantly sexual… and it works.

There’s this neat casual look she has that fits with her expression, the colour of her wings and hair and the little hearts fluttering around her just add that little bit more to her cuteness by far. Perhaps she’s, in a way, a kind of Succubus princess that doesn’t like being too formal or too over the top… Kind of reminds me of a certain Queen of the Succubi in a way… I wonder who?

Cute, lovely, and just a wonderful member of the Succubi that I do love so very much…



Aug 05 2015

If there is a Diva that wears this costume I don’t believe it

Diva Devil CostumeI thought that last week’s costume was fairly awful, but this week’s costume I think surpasses that. There is that saying about wearing a potato sack if all else fails and somehow this costume reminds me of that in a lot of ways.

This is called the Deva Devil Costume and it comes with the awful dress and the uneven horns. The shoes are not included, not that they would help any, and it sells for $75 US.

This simply looks trashy, it isn’t flattering at all, and as a whole the cartoonish look just makes me roll my eyes and cringe in disbelief. There’s not a bit of seduction in this costume, and sexy is so far away from this you would need a telescope to find it. No, I’m mistaken. Not even the Hubble could find the sexy in this. Sexy just doesn’t exist in the universe this monster of a costume came from.

What really amazes me is the ad copy on this costume which claims it is “extremely sexy” and that it is “red hot” as well. Perhaps the latter is referring to the churning of my stomach as I look at this mess.

As seems to be the normal state of affairs when it comes to looking at costumes of late, there is nothing I like about this. There’s nothing to be done to make it better. And there is no possible way this would be something I would even consider in my worst nightmares… and I have had a lot of those I can tell you.

Still another zero out of five pitchforks.

Moving on. Quickly.



Aug 04 2015

A Review of Redneck Succubus: Revenge: Served Hot and Sexy with a Side of Deadly by Beatrice Evenmorne

Redneck Succubus: Revenge: Served Hot and Sexy with a Side of Deadly by Beatrice Evenmorne

Redneck Succubus: Revenge: Served Hot and Sexy with a Side of Deadly by Beatrice Evenmorne

A review of the opening work in a new series that has the main character being transformed into being a succubus and what happens from there. It is, really, an interesting idea where this story starts from and who the main character is. However I think the author really needed to think about the title of the work, because honestly it is about the longest title that I have seen in quite some time. Beyond that, the work needs more direction and focus to make what it promises turn out to be more than what it turns out to be.

Revenge is, in many ways, what one makes of it, The thing about that is, sometimes when you have what you want, things turn towards more than revenge. They turn towards changing who you are for all of the wrong reasons.

  • Title: Redneck Succubus: Revenge: Served Hot and Sexy with a Side of Deadly
  • Author: Beatrice Evenmorne
  • Length: 20 Pages
  • ASIN: B01226R1MO
  • Publishing Date: July 19, 2015
  • This work at

The work tells the story of:

Krissy “been done wrong” by Larry, and the last thing you ever want to do is get a country girl mad at you. She already broke off a little piece of revenge when she told everyone about his micro tool, but she wants more, she just doesn’t know how. Fortunately for her, a figurine is about to change her into an irresistibly sexy, deadly, demonic revenge machine. Her first order of the business after obtaining her new busty, curvy body? Find the woman that lured away her man and give her the best, and last, sex she’ll ever have.

Krissy is a little miffed when she finds out  that her boyfriend went and slept around with someone else. A chance encounter with a curse changes her and when she discovers what she can do, there are a lot of people that will be paying for what they have done to her.

The work is told from Krissy’s point of view and that, as a whole, makes is very clear that she is, for lack of a better phrase “backwoods trailer trash” in the most stereotypical way. In fact, just about every single possible stereotypical backwoods theme came out in the story, along with all of the accents, mannerisms and more. While this does lend itself to giving Krissy some personality, it also makes the work rather hard to read at times.

Most of the story passes in somewhat of a blur, the point being to get Krissy to the point where she becomes a succubus, in one of the more unique ways that I have read in some time mind you. Once past that, and she is changed, she puts two and two together, comes up with the conclusion she is a succubus now, for some reason, and then goes off to see the woman that was having fun with her boyfriend. Things unfold, there is some futa themes and then the work comes to an abrupt close before Krissy moves on to have more fun with those that have “wronged her.”

The story seems to just be in a hurry from the first to the last, not dwelling much on telling about Krissy and the others except in quick little descriptions. The transformation scene is a bit odd because, the way Krissy tells it, she experiences everything, then can’t remember it, so how is it that she tells about it? This is written in first-person, so how does that work exactly? Also, how is it that she knows she is a succubus? The means of her transformation isn’t exactly clear on that, but, considering how she was before it happened, it does make some sense in a way.

Because of the internal monologue from Krissy, the work is a little hard to read at times because there’s so much put into the accent of her internal voice that things get muddled up, sometimes unclear. The erotic scenes aren’t exactly erotic either in that they just don’t have a lot of heat in them, for one thing. The other is that after Krissy has her power, then she’s completely focused on revenge, so the erotica is glossed over in order to get to the revenge she is looking for.

To be clear, really none of the characters, save for Krissy, are that interesting, being they are rather thinly written and don’t have much to do save for being the focus of Krissy’s ire. However they do serve as a focal point for the rest of the story at least.

Krissy as a succubus is not really seductive, though she does become sexier. She doesn’t have, at least so far, anything obviously succubus-like about her as yet, though I expect in the next work that will happen. There is a question left unanswered, though hinted at in the title and a comment by Krissy which, for me, also turns the story a bit dark in a lot of ways.

That’s a shame because the Krissy of before isn’t quite the Krissy of after. While there’s not a lot to like, at least in the beginning she had some promise and could have been developed into something more than she was. That just didn’t happen and that is the problem here.

One and a half pitchforks out of five.

I’m hoping that the next work in the series, if it appears, takes Krissy from being stereotypical towards something a lot more interesting. There is a real chance to do that, to make something of her rather than “just” what she has become.

It would be better than the start I think.