Jan 03 2016

A Review of Eve Marshall: One For The Horde by Serene Makepeace

Eve Marshall: One For The Horde by Serene Makepeace

Eve Marshall: One For The Horde by Serene Makepeace

A short while ago I reviewed the first work in the series Eve Marshall by Serene Makepeace. and you can find that review here on the Tale. At the time I noted there was a lot of questions left unanswered, that the main character’s past and that of her missing sister weren’t delved into much as well. I hoped that in the next work there would be some time spent on telling that story, of finding out why things are and who everyone is.

However, that didn’t come in the second work. What makes things a bit harder to take is that there is a real need for the author to proofread and edit their stories, for one, and for the other, a story that only talks about the main character having sex with various supernatural beings becomes a little repetitive quite quickly. Especially if those encounters end in exactly the same way every time.

  • Title: Eve Marshall: One For The Horde
  • Author: Serene Makepeace
  • Length: 24 Pages
  • ASIN: B019RB8PTU
  • Publishing Date: December 23, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

Continuing to fight the good fight, Eve Marshall ventures onwards towards McNelias and her sister. In this installment the succubus has two more steamy encounters with creatures of the night that can only end one way.

Eve continues on her path to answers, but along the way finds herself having to deal with things unexpected and questions unresolved.

As much as the book summary seems to say the overall story progresses in this work, I don’t feel like it does, if at all. The work encompasses two separate events for Eve, one with a gargoyle, the other with zombies. Of the two, I thought the first was better mainly because it was a little different, a bit more time spent on seeing some of Eve’s thoughts. The latter event really doesn’t do anything to drive the series onwards, save for a single line of commentary by Eve at the end.

The focus in this work is the erotica, again the first encounter being the better for the setting, what Eve does, and what happens along the way. The second one just seems like an afterthought, a little bit more written when the first story didn’t quite have enough length to it.

Considering what the main plot of the series seems to be, that of Eve finding her sister, I think there needed to be some time spent in talking about her, perhaps telling of that past, why Eve is doing what she is. There is only a fleeting reference to that issue and then the story turns back to the erotica once more. The erotica itself is somewhat lukewarm, especially the latter story in the work, and it’s a shame really. There was an opportunity to expand on the first story in some really interesting ways, but it didn’t, instead getting away from the story and to the sex as quickly as possible.

One thing that keeps bothering me is that anyone that Eve becomes intimate with has a bad end. It’s becoming a trope for her, there seems to be no other way things can go and that has to do something to her. Whether it does, or not, that’s not explored either and it really should be. I’d like to know what Eve’s thoughts are and how it effects her.

There are a lot of editing mistakes in this work. There are problems with tense, spelling, and so on. There needs to be at least one more editing pass for the sake of making this read better, but that’s just the start. There needs to be some focus on the core plot as well, there needs to be some movement in the series arc. There isn’t here, it’s just a couple of vignettes. Telling more story would be nice to see, because there is one to be told.

Two and a half out of five pitchforks.

The work needs another editing pass, there needs to be more story than just telling of the setting and then rushing into a sex scene. There’s a story here, it’s lurking underneath the erotica, but it’s not finding a way out. Doing so really would help a lot as would changing up what happens to Eve all of the time when she’s being intimate with whomever she’s with.



Jan 02 2016

A Morrigan Pen Sketch YouTube

A YouTube this time of an artist drawing Morrigan Aensland, in pen mind you, and in that I think it’s just amazing to see how they do so…

And if you cannot see this video here on the Tale, please try this link:


Here is the completed artwork, just in case YouTube removes the work as sometimes happens…

Morrigan Pen Sketch by David Patel

Morrigan Pen Sketch by David Patel

I have always said that I adore cute Morrigan Aensland art and this is really so very cute… She almost looks a bit embarrassed to me by her expression and that isn’t something seen often really…

The amazing thing to me about this work is, even speeded up, that there doesn’t seem to be any hesitation in the artist as they create, and considering there really isn’t any room for errors, I think that’s very impressive.

A lovely work of Morrigan and just one that I adore in both its implied complexity and at the same time, simplicity in form and style…



Jan 01 2016

The 2015 Succubi Year in Review

The single thing, at least from my perspective, about 2015 was the ending of things more than the beginning of things that had something to do with Succubi. As such, there aren’t really ten things that are positive points, really it is a mix of things overall for the year.

So, in no particular order, and in whatever way the thoughts came to me, here are my thoughts about Succubi and the year just past, 2015…

  • Lost Girl – Obviously the single thing that marks this year was the ending of Lost Girl. I still feel like the last season was a disappointment for how much didn’t really get any sense of completion when all was said and done. More so, the loss of Kenzi for most of the season, what happened to Trick and Tamsin, didn’t endear the series to me for what happened. What bothered me, more than anything else, was how the series walked away from the core question of who Bo is, to find her own way, and turned the last season towards her father, what he wanted, and what his plans for Bo were. Beyond that, the ending itself was more focused on him than Bo, or the main cast for that matter. If there is a “Lost Girl: The Next Generation” I will give it a chance… but then I doubt we’ll ever see that happen.
  • Dangerously Chloe – I feel like the series has been in a holding pattern for much of the year story-wise. There’s not been a lot of development of Chloe herself, there’s been nothing in the way of really telling a story other than a few little arcs that, by the end, haven’t done anything to progress her story, or really, any of the other main characters. I will say that the Valentine’s Day arc was fun and had some moments that worked, but otherwise? I just would like to see Chloe grow up. She really hasn’t as yet and I’d like to see that.
  • Yes, you know I have to rant over lousy costumes – I can count on the fingers of one hand how many costumes I found in the past year that were, in the smallest of ways, slightly better than the usual awful things I find. Considering there are at least two costume companies that can create reasonably nice looking costumes, other than Devils, I’m not calling them Succubi, because they aren’t, wouldn’t it be possible to create one single costume that I would actually need to have? I’m not expecting better this coming year, but still, hope springs eternal.
  • Sinfest – As much as I have liked that Fuchsia has progressed as a character, Baby Blue hasn’t. Abby has, in a really nice way, but Sapphire hasn’t. There’s a story to be told, but really it hasn’t this past year very much. Considering the past record of the series, I’m sort of expecting things to turn away from any kind of character development and return to a series of commentary over the elections that are coming soon. Still, there might be some side arcs for the Devil Girl characters as a whole, and I hope so. What happens next with Abby I think is going to be interesting. Still, Sapphire is a question mark and I’d like to know more about her.
  • New 2015 Succubi Book Series – There were actually a lot of series that started over the past year which have Succubi as main characters. By my count there were 22 series started, 7 of which never got past the first book in the series. Of the remaining 15, really only six were not stereotypical. I’m hoping for better in a lot of ways for 2016, but I can really only see three of these series started in 2015 that I have any real hope for. Why is it that so many authors see the word “Succubus” and have to immediately write an evil, over the top sexual being? How about using some imagination please?
  • Succubus Short Films – I noticed there were a number of short student films that appeared on YouTube in 2015 that had a Succubus character in them. However, they were mostly horror-themed, didn’t really have a Succubus as much as they had a female character that acted in a less-than Succubus-like fashion. Some where very stereotypically evil, or horrific, but, occasionally, there was a film that had a different take on things that I found to be interesting. Perhaps there will be more of that in 2016.
  • Video Games with Succubi – There were actually a lot of small little games that popped up in 2015, but they were shooter games, or maze games or similar sorts of things. If they came from Asia, they focused on succubi with one thing on their minds, and the games revolved around that one point. The other option were succubi that were really not so much succubi as they were an excuse to have over endowed enemies to fight in the game. I wonder when, if ever, there will be a succubus in a game that isn’t there for the sake of showing off her cleavage?
  • Cosplay – I think this was one of my more positive points in 2015 for the number of Cosplayers that have taken the idea of Succubi and given them a presence. By that I mean there are quite a number of them that have appeared in simply amazing costume, have the look and attitude of Succubi that I personally like to see. It’s nice to see Succubi cosplayed as being powerful, not eye candy.
  • Succubi Stories – With all of the books that have come out in 2015, the ones that are a single story and nothing more, there have been several that were really so very good and I wanted to see more from. Perhaps they will return and surprise me in 2016, but if not, there were a bright spot here and there, even if there were still a lot of short, poorly edited, hot flashes that were not.

That’s nine, and really the tenth is something that is special to me. Perhaps I’ll share that, sometime soon…

And as for my site… A few highlights for the year that Succubus.net had:

  • The Tale has over 1.4 million views in total.
  • The Tale has over 3,100 posts.
  • The SuccuWiki has surpassed well over 20 million views.
  • The SuccuWiki contains over 3,700 articles.
  • The Gallery of the Succubi has over 5,100 images.
  • The Tale and this site had their eighth anniversary in November.

For myself, I hope to write more, to write better. I would like to accomplish one thing that my heart and others have been poking my tail to accomplish… Perhaps it will happen, perhaps it will not… But no matter which does…

I wish you all a Happy 2016… May your coming year be happy and wonderful for you all…



Dec 31 2015

Succubi Image of the Week 415

A somewhat different image for the last Succubi of 2015. I haven’t had a lot of 3D renderings of Succubi on the Tale this year and this time I’m going to share something that I found to be really quite unique and wonderful…

Succubus Demon by Agr1on

Succubus Demon by Agr1on

This work was created by an artist on DeviantArt called Agr1on and you can find the original page with this art on DeviantArt here and this artist’s page is here on that site.

Obviously she doesn’t appear to be a “normal” looking Succubus and I think that works really well here. She does have the most interesting wings, her horns are almost invisible in the glow of light that is touching her hair and, there is, if you look closely, a tail. The design of what I think of as the jewelry she is adorned with is one of the most amazing displays of Succubus clothing that I have seen in quite some time. It teases with what it hides but also tempts quite well as it leaves really very little to the imagination.

The setting works well with her body and the lighting, the reflections in the pool she is rising from add a bit of mystery that works nicely too. Quite the striking image and it certainly is a memorable one to close out 2015.




Dec 30 2015

The model’s expression says everything about this costume

Devil Lady CostumeOnce again I have found a costume where the model’s expression more than gives a clue that it is not the best one they’ve encountered… Not that the first look at the costume wouldn’t have given you that clue and more…

This is called the Devil Lady Costume and it comes with… well actually the description only says that the costume is lycra and nothing more… other than it sells normally for $65 US, but it’s on sale for $34.

I’m going to assume that the costume comes with the horns and not the pitchfork, though really whether they do or not really doesn’t make any difference to the tackiness of this mess.

It’s about as unflatteringly ugly as anything I’ve found this year in costumes and that’s saying something. On top of that the model really isn’t selling this well considering her expression and pose.

No real way to improve it, wouldn’t consider wearing it, and I hope never to see this in person… ever.

We end another year of costumes with a zero…

We can hope that the coming year will average above a one…



Dec 29 2015

A Review of Tale of the Farm by R.K.B. Kirin and K. Bell

Tale of the Farm by R.K.B. Kirin and K. Bell

Tale of the Farm by R.K.B. Kirin and K. Bell

A little while ago I reviewed Tales from the House by R.K.B. Kirin and you can find that review here on the Tale. I rather enjoyed the story and the succubus Selina who was the core of the work was I thought a wonderful character. I had wondered about the possibility of future works, or a series, and quite recently the author published a second work in the series which I will be receiving today. I do think that the title of the series, Shadowlust, is an excellent choice and I hoped that the second work would be as wonderful as the first.

It is the story of:

Caroline is a fan of horror films who finds herself lost on the road and forced to look for help on a dark, creepy farm. The next thing Caroline knows, she is thrown into a shocking, shadowy world more frightening than any movie. She encounters an well-endowed incubus who clearly wants to get know her much more intimately, while a beautiful, ghostly woman and her disarming consort appear claiming they want to help her. But there is a secret that Caroline must learn. One that will change her entire life.

Will Caroline become trapped in a nightmare she cannot escape? Or will she find herself in a sensual dream she never wants to leave?

Caroline finds herself stranded on a farm and has no idea how she got there exactly. An encounter with an Incubus leaves her both frightened and aroused, but at the same time confused. The truth is stranger than fiction, but the reality isn’t. When the answers come, then everything is made clear by an odd couple Caroline encounters, the Incubus that pursues her, and her own desires revealed.

The work is every bit as good as the first work in the series. The characters, and there are a lot more in this work than in the first, speak with their own voices, but Caroline is the centre of the story and everything revolves around her for the most part. There is a secondary storyline which centres on a couple that Caroline comes across in the midst of a rather intimate moment that I enjoyed.

Through this second couple, there’s a fascinating explanation of how things work, why Caroline is where she has come to, and what, as a whole, it all means. Much of that reinforces the prior work in which Selena, the succubus, and I tend to think of as, Mistress of this domain, explained how things worked. I found Wyneleth, who is the supernatural part of this new couple, a complete joy in the story for how she presents herself, her character and how she holds her opinions and thoughts so well. She seems a bit of a foil to Selena, in a way, and where that leads to I think will be interesting to see.

The incubus of this work, Sebastian, is a mystery through most of the story and when his secret is revealed I liked how it fit into what had happened in the work to that point, what Caroline’s reaction was, and where the story went from there. It made sense, it explained a lot of why things happened, but left a few questions loose to be picked up towards the end of the work by other characters as need be.

Sebastian has most of the classical appearance of an Incubus, but his character is not stereotypical, cruel, or strange. It takes some time for the story to get to the point where the truth appears, Caroline confronts this and has to make a choice. I liked the little touches of Sebastian’s Incubus nature that came out in his being with Caroline, and how that was used to heat up the erotic scenes quite nicely.

The balance between story and erotica was well done, there is good heat in the several hot flashes that creep in here and there. There are one or two points where things go a little over the top, but not too much so. Some of the reactions from the other characters as Caroline and Sebastian have their fun are amazingly funny and I adored that part of the story.

The characters are written very well, having a clear voice, the scenes are rich with descriptions, thoughts, and how everything links together is well done. There are a few, very minor spelling and word mistakes, but they are very minor as a whole, and do not take much away, but they are a little stumbles in what otherwise is a strongly told story.

With all that comes in this work, what it describes and lays out, I do look forwards to the next work in the series. Selena’s fleeting appearance adds a nice connection to the prior work, but it also tells of what the future holds. How that works out, where it does, I think can make for many delicious stories to tell.

Four and a half out of five pitchforks.

I think this work is a wonderful followup, it tells a captivating story, but more so, it explains more about this universe, how things work, and why they do so. It feels like more of a complete world, the characters dwelling there with their own lives and stories to tell. I do hope that Selena and her realities do appear again for there are so many more stories to tell.



Dec 29 2015

A Review of Claimed by a Succubus by Naomi Silvera

Claimed by a Succubus by Naomi Silvera

Claimed by a Succubus by Naomi Silvera

I very much dislike stereotypical stories about Succubi. I do not like to read stories where the end result is, sadly, a complete and total destruction of what happened in the work before that point. I’ve never understood what, exactly, is the point in doing such a thing.

To write a story that tries to have some heat in it, to try to create characters that have something interesting in them and then toss that all aside for what seems to be a matter of finding a quick means to end a story doesn’t sit well with me.

It is the story of:

Joey, a college student and talented quarterback from Woodwill University never had a lack of hot women surrounding him. After his game against Summit High he meets a mysterious and beautiful woman named Lisa. Joey is intrigued and decides to have drinks with her.

However, he will soon find out that she’s not human and that his life might be in danger.

Joey has all of the girls he could want being the star quarterback. Lisa appears and he expects things to go his way again, but Lisa has other things in mind for him.

I find it difficult to even call this work a hot flash because, as a whole, there isn’t anything hot in it. The characters are paper thin, the story is fleeting and most of all, the succubus herself is in almost every important way, completely stereotypical. There’s no passion, nothing to give the characters anything that would make the reader care about them.

The entire story leads to the final line in the story which doesn’t offer anything other than the well over used theme of “succubus feeds on unwary human then ends them” trope. The story itself doesn’t hold much within it save some sexual commentary, the occasional flirting and beyond that there’s nothing much to the story because at that point Lisa, the succubus, appears and takes over.

She is very much a predator, and the oddest part of the story is that Joey realizes what she is and makes the most inane comment about something Lisa does, then idly thinks that he should get away from her, but doesn’t. From that point forwards Lisa is, for lack of a better way of putting this, “playing with her food” which is supposed to have some heat in it. But it doesn’t. What follows is a series of comments and statements that try to be sexy and erotic, but fail.

The work has no character development, no heat, nothing really of interest in it and even as the hot flash it is supposed to be it cannot manage to create that heat. Really there is not much in this work to enjoy and that’s disappointing. Little story mixed with little heat doesn’t make for a very good read.

I’ll give this work one out of five pitchforks.

A disappointing ending that was telegraphed from the beginning, characters that really didn’t hold much interest and a story, as a whole, that was only their to lead towards the erotica. There can be better, should be better, but isn’t.