Back in November of last year I reviewed the first work in a series by Ros Allaway called Futa Secrets which had a succubus as one of the main characters. You can find that review here, for those that are interested in my thoughts then.
I wasn’t sure what to expect in the second work, hoping for the best at least, and more to be surprised at what might happen. The second work took a turn that I didn’t expect, brought in a new character who turned things a bit on their side and made the story a lot more complicated for the main character.
Sometimes you have what you want, but then it might be taken away from you. What can you do about that, and if you manage to succeed, then what happens next?
- Title: Futa Secrets: Taming my Succubus Roommate’s Demon Boss
- Author: Ros Allaway
- Length: 21 Pages
- ASIN: B012B9GVUK
- Publishing Date: July 21, 2015
- This work at Amazon.com
The story tells of:
After she found out her roommate was a succubus, Carly’s life has been pretty damn good. She makes rent, doesn’t hate her job, and having a sexy demon as a friend-with-benefits doesn’t hurt. But, like most things in life, her relationship with Lia comes with some complications.
What can a girl do when she finds herself pulled into weird, demonic pyramid schemes? What’s the cost of keeping the status quo that includes hot, hard sex with a curvy devil? Will Carly even be able to keep her cool when Lia’s sexy ex-boss comes to collect?
But Carly’s got some big surprises up her sleeve. She’s ready to go down deep in that rabbit hole, especially if it means keeping her friend happy.
Carly has been enjoying her life with Lia, finding that having a succubus for a roommate isn’t a bad thing when she’s cute, they really like each other, and are getting along well. Oh, and the sex is just amazing, which for a futa is a good thing and a succubus a better one. However there are bumps in the road when Lia’s ex-boss appears and Carly has to deal with a challenge from him. Where that leads to is something neither of them really expected.
The second work in the series does, in a lot of ways, expand Carly as a character, developing her quite a lot more than in the first work. Lia isn’t quite so much so, really only appearing for a few pages at the beginning in the shower with Carly, and then at the end when the story is done. But there are a few little hints about Lia’s quirks, which I thought were quite nice to see.
As Carly is the focus of the work, there’s a lot of development told about her life, what she thinks, and what has happened since she and Lia became an item. But then August appears, and Carly gets into some situations that prove she isn’t a pushover.
August is described as Lia’s ex-boss, but that isn’t the whole story by any means. He’s also described as a succubus, which he isn’t, and proves that when see his true form. He’s an incubus, quite clearly, and that bothered me to a point, but I’ll get back to that. As a character he comes into the story with quite the personality and focus which isn’t told in rote, but rather unfolds as an important part of the mythos in this series and, more importantly, explains quite a lot about what has been happening to Lia and Carly.
There are two bits of erotica in the work, the one at the beginning with Lia and Carly that is very quick and to the point, serving mainly to tell how things are in the current time and set up their relationship to a point. The longer passage is between Carly and August which is a contest of domination between the two of them that takes most of the work to unfold. Both have heat in their own ways, though I thought the latter was slightly confusing and scattered by the time the climax arrives.
The work ends on a note which offers some interesting paths for the series to take going forwards. There’s really a lot of promise in that, both quite serious and as well quite funny too. Carly leads a complicated life and that seems to be continuing at the end of the story which is good.
There are problems however, The work needs a serious editing for all of the mistakes that I came across. For example using “its” instead of “it’s” quite a lot. Also, it isn’t good form to leave a characters name as a placeholder like: [coworker]. This is just sloppy and takes away so much from what otherwise is an interesting story with interesting characters. I’ll also add that August, being referred to as a succubus, even though he is male, is a stumbling point as well. More care taken with telling the story, making it read better, would be helpful as well. There’s more than a hot flash here, there is the character development to prove that, and it needs to come out more.
I’ll give this two pitchforks out of five.
The author needs to go over this work again, fix the mistakes, clean things up, and then I think it would be at least equal to the first work in the series, if not slightly better. There seems to be a part three to come, I hope the author takes more care before releasing that work.