Feb 07 2016

A Review of The Succubus Wore Green series by Benzi T. McKelly

The Succubus Wore Green: Book One: The Journey by Benzi T. McKelly

The Succubus Wore Green: Book One: The Journey by Benzi T. McKelly

A short Succubus story for review today on the Tale. It is a rare thing when within the pages of a story the characters break the fourth wall and talk directly to the reader. Sometimes that works, sometimes it’s odd, and when it is odd, it can really hurt what otherwise can be the most amazing of stories.

It is a difficult thing to create a world, make a story begin there, and then move off from there into a story that is, on many points, very much about a fish out of water… Or rather a Succubus trying to come to terms with the world of today… and then change it.

The first work in the series is:

  • Title: The Succubus Wore Green: Book One: The Journey
  • Author: Benzi T. McKelly
  • Length: 64 Pages
  • ASIN: B00UP43MFG
  • Publishing Date: March 13, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

A young demon slave to a gorgeous, charismatic succubus tells of their harrowing journey to Earth, her inner struggles with her dark past, a series of incredible transformations, and the beginning of a mission to change human society forever.

Benzitae is the slave of the succubus known as Atalya and she is charged with telling her Mistress’ story. Along the way comes an angel, a problem, a world to conquer and a reality that is far too familiar to Benzitae in a lot of uncomfortable ways.

The work shows a lot of promise in that there is quite a lot of world building, the characters are full of life, thought, and passions. There is heart and soul in each of them, in their own ways, and that makes for the most interesting plots and events to unfold. Along with the story there is quite a lot of themes such as futa, some dominance, and a bit of slightly over the top erotica, but it isn’t really out of place with the themes and story as a whole.

The erotica does, on occasion, run a bit wild, and at times it need not have, but overall that didn’t overcome the book’s core plot. In the plot itself comes a lot of mysteries that begin, or are hinted at, but little else is told. Benzitae herself is a bit of an enigma, and as she remembers why she came to be where she is, that has a somewhat uncomfortable feel to it. There are moments which are in the middle of being light-hearted and then Benzitae remembers something and it falls apart. There is a purpose to this, but here it’s just distracting at times.

Atalya is, as a succubus, quite different in her physical nature and her overall character. She is futa in nature, is quite different in appearance as a succubus, and in that she is different, but in a unique way. I thought her personality was a little forced, mainly in how she related to Benzitae, and while there is a connection, even love at times, between them, it sometimes didn’t quite work as well as I had hoped.

The oddest part of this work is how often the two main characters turn, in the midst of the story, and comment about the reader, mentioning them, or rather alluding to them in a way. It is distracting in that the story was flowing well to that point, it goes off the rails for a moment, and then continues on, but for that moment one is drawn from the story and then it takes quite some time to be immersed in it again.

That all said, the story itself I really liked because it is different, it shows a lot of thought and most of all it gives an opportunity for a succubus to be more than “just a succubus” which I do like to see. But along with that comes so many questions and mysteries which bodes well for the series to come.

I’ll give this work four out of five pitchforks.

A good start, good characters, and there seems to be real care given to the story. I just wish it was a bit more consistent in the storytelling and the way the characters speak in, and outside of, the story itself.

The Succubus Wore Green: Book Two: Emerald City by Benzi T. McKelly

The Succubus Wore Green: Book Two: Emerald City by Benzi T. McKelly

The next work in the series continues the story of Atalya onwards, telling more about her, her slave and the plans and goals they need to have unfold. But along with that comes still more questions and things to ponder.

Most of all, the problems are the ones of the mind, the memories within and just what happens when what you remember isn’t what you wanted to. But then, sometimes, you discover that the world is shades of grey and it is up to you which shades are yours.

The second work is:

  • Title: The Succubus Wore Green: Book Two: Emerald City
  • Author: Benzi T. McKelly
  • Length: 60 Pages
  • ASIN: B00VF7KMAK
  • Publishing Date: March 29, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

Benzi and her succubus Mistress, Atalya, have settled in Seattle, hoping to turn their luxurious apartment building into an upscale brothel and a recruiting ground for potential demons. But as they discover their first new allies, Atalya’s unique condition suddenly locks her into an intense cycle of mindless pleasure. With her Mistress sidelined, Benzi is forced to push forward on their mission in completely uncharted waters. Inexperienced and still struggling with her dark past life, Benzi finds herself in places she never wanted to be…or never could have imagined.

Benzi has to deal with a series of problems on her own when her Mistress is unavailable. It’s not the easiest of things to do, but there are rewards, things to learn, and, sometimes, the rewards are not only the ones physically, but the ones that matter most within oneself.

If the first work in the series didn’t quite be all that it could be, the second most certainly is. While Atalya is only fleetingly in this work, she has an impact, but as well, she gives Benzi something very special. Her trust. It is a hard time for Benzi, many difficult things happen to her, but the thing is that, in being that she must think, act, and more on her own, the strength of her character comes through clearly and it is amazing.

There is a little side comment about a certain television series with a succubus hero, at one point, which makes Benzi’s name even more amusing that it was before. But the thing is, she is very much like her better known namesake in a lot of ways. There’s more to her, and that comes out in this story and I liked that a lot.

There is also the appearance of another succubus named Iris in this work, and her story, that of her soulmate and what happens to them both registered very strongly for me. It tells that there’s more to think about in this series than the erotica, the more sexual moments, even the points at which there is a lot of dominance and submission going on. There’s a theme of love and affection, for one, but also there is a theme of redemption for all and I really liked the tone of that. Not all see that, or have it, but it is there, in all its forms and I adored that.

There is a touch of erotica, but it is far less than the first work and I think that made the work better overall. There is humour, some of which made me laugh out loud, there is compassion, love and lust, but it doesn’t overpower the story.

Lots of cute and fun moments, the method that comes about to get two angels and a succubus out on the town for a bit was simply inspired and I give the author full points for the idea, but you’ll have to read this work to find out what that is.

The writing is better, there is less talking to the reader and that made the story flow better and kept me within the work more fully. The dialog is better, the story is tighten and the work has a point and a goal which it accomplishes quite well.

I’ll give this work four and a half out of five pitchforks.

I really liked the second work more because it was a story, a good story and it held me throughout. Overall the series showed a lot of promise and I was hoping for there to be more. But that hasn’t happened as of this review and that’s a shame.

I like succubi that aren’t the usual and if they happen to be intelligent enough to see better things, including love and affection, then I am all for that.

 

Tera

Feb 06 2016

Lilith Aensland has a Tribute YouTube… and she has a tail in it.

I found another of the rare Lilith Aensland tribute YouTubes a little bit ago and while the music really does not work for me… There’s one image that does. I’ve wondered, many times, what Lilith or her sister Morrigan would look like with a heart shaped tail… I think I have an answer…

And if you cannot see the video on the Tale, please try this link:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PhvM0tO4mpE

And, as always with videos like this, the one image that caught my attention…

Lilith Aensland Tail

I like this, I like it a lot, and it’s that tail Lilith has in this art of her that makes me ponder and wonder… I do think that it’s the one thing that both Lilith and Morrigan are missing as a whole and I’m not quite sure why they never had one in the first place…

But at least I have an idea now…

 

Tera

Feb 05 2016

A Review of Drilled By A Demon by Kimberley Tracey

Drilled By A Demon by Kimberley Tracey

Drilled By A Demon by Kimberley Tracey

There are the occasional works about succubi that seem to have a problem in deciding what, exactly, the succubus herself is. Most attempt to make her dominate in some manner, which I prefer, but then in trying to be as dominant as possible they take the character into being more cruel than seductive and that, for me, is a problem.

It’s more so when the character is interesting, has something to them that is a little different, a bit unique, but then falls towards being a stereotype of a long overused kind of Domme.

The work tells the story of:

Peter decides to visit a lady of the night, but things take a dramatic turn of events.

The summary is a bit short, and really it needs to be something more than it is. Peter’s love life isn’t what he wanted, nor is it really anything of a love life any more. A card directs him into the arms of Lucinda. A Domme with horns, a tail, and a means to give Peter what he wants, but as well that she will get what she needs as well.

The beginning of the work shows a lot of promise in that Peter is interesting, has a history, and an explanation for why he is where he finds himself. When he comes face to face with Lucinda, it is clear that she isn’t quite human, but that is well hidden away until the moment when the story turns towards the erotica.

In that moment, Lucinda’s horns and tail appear and Peter finds himself at her mercy. The work spends most of the story in the heat of the erotica, which has a very dominant theme to it. The beginning of that dominance by Lucinda is where I have the problem. She is a succubus, it is quite clear that she is, and in being so she uses her powers to control him, play him, and bring him to heel. That in itself is hot, but before that happens she abuses Peter and it just took the heat out of the story for me.

When the story turned back into Lucinda being a succubus and taking control by being one, that brought the heat back, but it took some time for things to develop again and bring me back fully into the story. It’s a shame because Lucinda’s character, her mannerisms, her voice and so on are really unique and I liked that about her. I didn’t quite understand why the abuse needed to happen as it wasn’t quite made clear why that needed to be.

I have to assume that Peter went to Lucinda because she advertised as being a Domme and catering to a specific kink, which would be all well and good if that was explained. All that comes of the why is a business card, vaguely mentioned and nothing more. If that was better explained then I think I could have gotten past the harsher aspects of the work better and liked it as a whole more.

Lucinda is the bigger mystery here in that she remains exactly that. A mystery, a question, something to ponder. The story vanishes as the erotica begins and I wish that hadn’t happened. There was a good start, a lot of story starting to be told, but then it just left and was never gotten back to save for one or two vague mentions about that.

The erotic aspects of the work are written well, there is some lovely succubus mind control and dominance that I enjoyed. A few minor spelling mistakes and two sentences that made no sense  at all outside of the erotic passages were a little disappointing as well.

I’ll give this work three out of five pitchforks.

Lucinda is interesting and it would have been nice to know more about her, her past, something to make her a bit more than she was here. But really the story wasn’t the point, the erotica was.

 

Tera

Feb 05 2016

A Review of In Too Deep by Natalie Severine and Eric Severine

In Too Deep by Natalie Severine and Eric Severine

In Too Deep by Natalie Severine and Eric Severine

The fourth review of the ongoing series called Lily Quinn written by Natalie and Eric Severine this time on the Tale. You can find the first review here, the second review here, and the third here on the Tale if you’d like to know my frustrations and amusement with the series so far.

It’s been an ongoing wish of mine that something would be told of Lily’s past in this series. Lily as a character is wonderful, the stories have their moments, but there’s just never been enough told about Lily before she become who she is in the here and now. And using a title that leaves a song from Genesis that I can’t get out of my mind while reading doesn’t help me much either.

There are shadows in the past that haunt us, even if we don’t admit to them. Sometimes we have to confront our past to move on with our lives. Even if in doing so we need to give up a little piece of ourself.

It tells the story of:

My name is Lily Quinn and I’m the best monster hunter in the city. The College of wizards pays me a lot of money to track down and deal with the supernatural dangers that infest the mortal world. But I wasn’t always as good at it as I am now. My first job was Adähr, a nix who likes to steal from humans and flaunt his powers.

He’s the one who got away.

Now Adähr’s back. He’s being chased by Remy Saville, a French bounty hunter who’s been after the water spirit for years and is determined to finally finish the job. Remy’s handsome and experienced, but there’s no way I’m letting him or anyone else beat me to the nix this time. Adähr’s mine.

So let the games begin. I’m going to play dirty.

Lily’s past comes out of the shadows, and the water, to remind her of the first time she tried to claim a bounty and how it all went wrong, and so very right for her. Her past comes calling, Lily does as well, over and over again, but at some point you have to go and make a decision. Sometimes the best things have been with you for ages, you just need to be able to see who they are and what they mean to you.

What I particularly liked about this work was a very long and detailed scene between Lily and Max in which Lily tells of her early days as a bounty hunter and what happened to her. It gives a lot of insight to her character, who she is, and why her attitude became what it has. Along with that, there is, finally, a real indication of how Lily sees Max, what he means to her, and what the future might hold and I do hope the series explores this more than it has. Max and Lily have chemistry, more than just what the two of them do in bed, and elsewhere, together and that needs to be told more.

Like the other works in the series, Lily winds up having several erotic encounters and I did find how Adähr’s powers worked, what they could do to Lily and how she reacted to them hot in their own ways. But the thing of it was Lily wasn’t really Lily through the encounter and that bothers me quite a lot. It’s one thing to be pushed over the edge, but honestly, Lily has been through more, experienced more, and how she loses herself didn’t quite ring true for me when the scene was playing out and in the aftermath.

Besides Adähr, there is a French wizard who plays Lily as well as Adähr does, Again, this makes some sense, but really the erotica wasn’t half as interesting and hot as the wordplay and turning of phrases which unfolded, never mind Lily’s own seductiveness coming out to play in a delicious way.

But like the other works in this series, it feels like there’s too much focus on the erotica and not quite enough spent on the story and plot. There was mention of an ongoing plot thread, but it didn’t go anywhere. There was discussion about Lily, about Cambions, and then it falls to the wayside. Along with this, the little sparkles of plot about magic and whether or not Lily is capable of using magic is teased and then dropped like a hot potato.

This is really the singular problem I have with the series. There is so much depth in the plot and story, in Lily’s character and those around her, especially Max, and it really isn’t used to the best I feel. I realize that the author notes that the series is mainly about the erotica, but erotica alone cannot stand up by itself. Perhaps a little less time spent on the erotica and more told about Lily herself, the real Lily, the Lily that is more than she seems to be, is what is missing.

Three and a half out of five pitchforks.

Learning something about Lily’s past, some of what drives her really makes a difference for me overall. The erotica was hot, but there comes a point when the Lily we’ve come to know in the series turns into a Lily that I couldn’t really like very much.

There is such a thing as being true to oneself and the next work in the series I hope has some reflections upon that. Max is Lily’s best friend and that is another part of Lily’s past and the series, that needs to be explored in Max’s Long Night which is the next work in the series.

 

Tera

Feb 04 2016

Succubi Image of the Week 420

Some Morrigan Aensland art this time for the Succubi Image of the Week on the Tale… Occasionally I find art of Morrigan where she is drawn a bit younger. Perhaps not quite the same physical age as Lilith, but nonetheless it is quite the interesting look for her…

Morrigan Aensland by Ultramarine

Morrigan Aensland by Ultramarine

This art of Morrigan is by an artist on Pixiv called Ultramarine and you can find the original page there with this art here.

I think this is quite the portrayal of Morrigan in that she looks like she’s in her mid-20s instead of her normal, slightly older look. Now, that might well be the artist’s style, but still, it’s quite a different look for her body shape and in that comes a slimmer look that I really like.

She’s also not quite so over endowed compared with her body shape and I think that’s a really good thing…

Lovely expression, pose, her hair is amazing, and I just love the flair that the artist has added to this work. It brings out a lot of detail, which I always like, and just makes Morrigan look amazing…

 

Tera

Feb 03 2016

Claiming to be a Sexy Devil Costume doesn’t mean it is

Sexy Devil CostumeThere are three words that are used to excess when it comes to costumes. They are “Sexy”, “Devil” and “Costume”. Not necessarily in that order, but they do appear. The thing is, it is a rare costume that actually should use those three words and as such it’s more likely that something very tacky or ugly is attempting to masquerade as being something more than it is.

This is called, surprisingly, the Sexy Devil Costume and it comes with the really amazingly ugly dress and that’s all. No horns or pitchfork or shoes. The rather sickly looking piece of fabric can be found for less than $20 US at many sites on the web.

I think there is a bit of dishonesty in what is being sold here as since all you are buying is the red dress, how is it that this costume can be really called a Devil costume in the first place?

If at least the horns were included I could accept that what they were selling was some half-hearted attempt at a Devil costume. But in this case that simply isn’t true.

This is a prime example of something being left over in a warehouse somewhere and being put on sale with a description that is bait for the search engines to latch onto.

I would hope that whomever would even think about buying this, and it wouldn’t be me I can promise you, that they would read the description which is in very small print and is hidden away underneath a button. If one didn’t then what arrives will be quite the surprise…

Still another zero out of five pitchforks.

Just a sad costume by far…

 

Tera

Feb 02 2016

A Review of Succubus Crisis by Dou7g and Amanda Lash

Succubus Crisis by Dou7g and Amanda Lash

Succubus Crisis by Dou7g and Amanda Lash

It’s been a little while since a certain redhead succubus, her “trainee”, a rather pointedly blunt Ogre, a smitten mage, her almost lover and the rest visited… well, not really Gilligan’s Island, but sometimes the laughter made me wonder.

I was quite thrilled to see that the series has begun anew with a little bit more focus upon the succubi of the series and a particular problem that Kendra, the redhead succubus of the story, has. And coming along for the ride are all of the things that I enjoyed in the first series, the characters I love and more.

  • Title: Succubus Crisis
  • Author: Dou7g and Amanda Lash
  • Length: 30 Pages
  • ASIN: B01BA26Z8W
  • Publishing Date: January 29, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

This series continues the adventures of the characters from the series “Succubus Temptations” collected in “Succubus Journey”.

In this first installment of the new series the beautiful red haired succubus Kendra and her apprentice Helen try to recruit a supervillain assassin named Poison to kill her boss and set her free. To test him they make him fight Phil the ogre. He agrees because he’s always wanted to fight an ogre.

Kendra and Helen are on a quest and it isn’t quite the usual one. A wisecracking villain, his slightly dysfunctional wife and friend are asked to come along for a ride, and not just in bed either. But first there’s a little matter of a test, and Phil the Ogre is marking the results.

I’ve always loved the humour in the prior series and in this new one there’s no question that it has returned with all of the little in-jokes, witticisms, and silliness that I dearly love. From the start the undertone is there, quite clearly, and being so that makes what otherwise could have been some very dry moments in the work be filled with that little spark that I have always found.

Kendra and Helen have changed, but it is a very slight change really. The awkwardness that was present when they were last seen, mainly from Helen just becoming a succubus, isn’t quite as present and as such there’s a lovely interplay between the two that I couldn’t help but smile over. I like that there has been some growth between the last series and this one and I do wonder what has happened and how that will be explored.

The work mainly focuses upon Kendra and Helen on their quest and their encounter with a certain super villain that is as quick with their wit as Kendra and Helen are. The dynamic between them is really interesting and when the villain, who really doesn’t strike me as being “evil” so much as “looking to cause mischief” brings in his “partners”, then there comes a moment when I couldn’t stop laughing. Shoes are so very important you know.

A joy to read, the story itself offers a really good hook to follow what comes next. There are a few little spelling mistakes, nothing really terrible really. The characters’ voices are perfect, the ones we know well are every bit as wonderful as I remember, and the new ones introduced have their own style and personalities to share.

I hope that the “real problem”, when they appear, is as interesting a character as I hope they are. To learn about Kendra’s past along the way will be something i have been wondering about as well. The promise in this first work offers much and I think I shan’t be disappointed.

Four out of five pitchforks.

I really enjoyed the humour, the characters and really the ever-so smart storytelling that I have missed for some time now. I’m looking forwards to where this takes all of the characters, what the future holds, and who Kendra will be working her powers of persuasion upon next.

I can hardly wait…

 

Tera

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