A review of the second work in the World’s Shyest Succubus series by Taylor Knobb. You can find my first review of the series here in which I had some high hopes overall and how much I adored the main character.
The thing about creating a series is that there needs to be some kind of framework or setting to make things make sense. A character that acts oddly, without explanation, can cause issues with understanding the plot, the world, and what’s going on.
Confusion is never a good thing. A character knowing more than they let on, and why, makes for a lot of confusion and can derail a story.
- Title: World’s Shyest Succubus 2: Playing Doctor
- Author: Taylor Knobb
- Length: 21 Pages
- ASIN: B01E4DQV2E
- Publishing Date: April 10, 2016
- This work at Amazon.com
It tells the story of:
Adina has had a rough day. First she got caught in an explosion of some sort of weird energy, and then she and her roommate did unspeakable things…things that felt so good, but that were so wrong. Adina has an appointment to see a doctor, though, and she’s sure that he can help her work out what the heck is going on. She’s sure that it’s not going to matter that he’s tall and handsome, with a slender, tight body…or that the hunger that drove her into her roommate’s bed seems to be coming back, stronger than ever! Life is hard for a shy succubus.
Adina goes to see the campus doctor about what’s happening to her and in doing so finds her new needs and desires getting the better of her. But something is going on and Adina is stuck in the middle of it whether she likes it, sometimes, or not.
Adina continues to transform, becoming more and more ensnared by her new needs and now understanding why things are happening. There’s a real crisis of conscious in this work, and that added some depth to Adina’s character that I liked very much. She isn’t just falling into being a succubus, she’s fighting, struggling, but even so, her needs overcome her and when she arrives at her doctor’s appointment, that needs takes over.
The scene that comes has some good heat, a bit more succubus mental control, and a bit more of a transformation for Adina when the moment is over. The erotica is a hot flash, actually one scene edging towards being so, the other fully so.
Following this, the doctor directs Adina to see another character to learn what’s going on with her and it is that point in the story where it lost me. The doctor seems to know what’s going on, that there are many more women effected is clearly shown. But what I can’t quite understand is if magic is something known and part of this world or not. There was no mention of it prior to the new character’s appearance, who explains something of what’s going on, but again, there’s little context to put that into understandable terms.
Nathan, who is the new character that seems to know what’s going on, is a mystery, having a personality that is simply grating, and overall isn’t at all likeable. That seems to be a real problem as he appears to be a focal point of the series going forwards and not liking him, for me, is an issue. As well, there appears to be a number of other women that have been effected, one of which, who if she is what she seems to be, a gorgon, can only lead towards some real completions.
Adding this twist to the series is interesting, but I’m hoping that the series doesn’t run off in multiple directions as a result. The series has Adina at the core of it, and jumping from character to character, mythologic being to being, can only weaken the series overall.
I still like Adina, I like her being real to herself. But I can see that she’s changing, possibly not for the better. Keeping Adina’s personality intact will be a challenge, the next work in the series seems to suggest that she will not be. How that is handled, if Adina falls over the edge, will at least for me, tell me quite a lot about how well this author can tell a story and if he can avoid making Adina a stereotypical succubus.
Three out of five pitchforks.
Suddenly having a character appear that seems to know what’s going on, then having the problem for Adina effecting so many is one thing. Not explanation why things are as they are is a problem. More so, there’s a problem when another character seems to be on the way to becoming a deadly threat. One that can cause no end of problems for every one around her. How the author gets around that issue will be interesting.
Adina is changing, she knows what she is, thankfully not a stereotypical succubus. There’s hope in the story remaining cute, interesting, and more. I hope so.