Apr 05 2016

A Review of the Satiating The Succubus series by Jennifer Coomes

Satiating The Succubus: First Feeding by Jennifer Coomes

Satiating The Succubus: First Feeding by Jennifer Coomes

A review of a series that was abandoned at the very moment when a larger story seemed to be about to be told. That, of course, is rather irritating for many reasons overall, but the major one is simply that the story really was interesting and different.

Telling a story about a succubus leads naturally to the question of how they manage to feed. In this series, I have to admit that the author came up with what I think is the most unique method possible to do so.

While i liked the story and the concept, there is one thing I really didn’t like. It might be a good idea that the author pick one spelling of their name to use and stick with it. It is Jennifer Coomes or Jennifer Combs? While it really doesn’t matter to the story itself, trying to find more works by this author if they can’t use the same time twice is a problem and it shouldn’t be.

The first work in the series is:

  • Title: Satiating The Succubus: First Feeding
  • Author: Jennifer Coomes
  • Length: 16 Pages
  • ASIN: B010YT1E10
  • Publishing Date: July 4, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

Amy’s not sure what’s happening to her. She hungers for sex constantly, and the first guy she sleeps with ends up dead! She eventually learns what’s going on: she’s a succubus, and needs to “feed” by having sex! Every time she feeds, though, she gets stronger, hotter, and hungrier. She gets a job working as a nurse at a hospital, and starts sleeping with the coma patients to feed her desires. This first book follows her discovery of her powers, what they mean, and a couple of sexy encounters with buff guys (some of whom don’t quite know what’s going on…).

Amy tells the story of her life from her first awakening as a succubus, through her high school life and then into learning to be a nurse. Along the way she learns what she is capable of, how much it scares her, and what happens when she loses control. Something unexpected happens and then her life gets more complicated, and for a succubus, that’s never a good thing.

One of the things that gave me pause was how the story was told from Amy’s perspective. She refers to herself often as a succubus, then explains, almost casually, that she read about it on the internet, but that doesn’t explain how she learned her powers. Learning by mistake would be a real problem and that doesn’t seem to be what happens, but it isn’t explained.

As Amy’s story is told from her perspective, that makes for both some very hot and very odd moments overall. Her perspective when she is feeding, what she sees in the minds of the others, how she shapes their thoughts and desires, altering their reality is really very well done. It was a nice touch that her powers, as they grow, make her wings appear and shift her eyes to black.

There isn’t really a complete succubus transformation, though the more Amy feeds, the more her overall looks change and when she doesn’t, she returns to her normal looks. That then brings in an interesting subplot through her high school years, but also in how her “other self” as she refers to it, pushes Amy to take more and more. However, there is such a thing as her conscience saying no, save for a very much Lost Girl-ish encounter at the beginning of the work, and otherwise a few “bad” men being taken in a rather ugly way at one point.

Still, that does show Amy still has some humanity in her. At least until she starts her nursing career and then discovers a new way to feed. This is the part of the work that I thought was really very unique and something I had never really considered. Amy feeds on coma patients to survive. That becomes a doubled-edged sword eventually, but in spite that, the author’s solution was perfect in many ways.

Not the least of which is that Amy’s powers allow her to slip into the dreams of the patients, which then leads to some very hot succubus mind control and reality shifting within the dreams themselves. That is written very well and held my attention quite well.

The overall plot is a bit scattered, not really finding a footing until the last third of the work which then drives Amy to an encounter which then leads into the second work in the series. There’s no focus to things overall, Amy going from feed to feed, taking from one after another, sometimes having a very uncaring attitude, sometimes not. She’s a scattered character, without focus for much of the story.

While she talks about learning about her powers, there’s really nothing told of her doing so. Over each feeding, she is better and better at it, but seems to be on her own trying to find her way. The second work in the series seems to suggest this isn’t true however, so that is confusing.

Amy’s character is written strongly, but she seems to be missing some bits and pieces of her personality that really didn’t come out in the story. The time spent in telling about her past, what she has been through, her mistakes and so on, is well done and kept me in the story throughout. Even when things turned confusing, even a bit odd, that wasn’t enough to really pull me out of the story.

It is short however, and considering all of the moments in Amy’s life that were skimmed over, I found myself wishing the author had split this work into three parts and written at least as much as this one for each of them. There needs to be more world building here than there is, considering this is a series. There’s a lot going on here, there’s a lot of promise, but rushing through the details means that things are missed and they are here which speaks towards the next work in the series where the author needed them badly.

Three and a half out of five pitchforks.

Well written, the succubus erotica was very hot, the dreamscapes and mind control worked very well. There are some missing points along the way, some aspects of Amy’s learning about her powers, how they work that weren’t explored and if felt like something was left out of the story to be revealed later. A very good opening to the series, it offered a lot to think about along with the erotica and I liked that. I just wish there was more to read than there is.

Satiating the Succubus: Alex's Awakening by Jennifer Coomes

Satiating the Succubus: Alex’s Awakening by Jennifer Coomes

To an extent, some of that was in the next work in the series, but barely so.

The second work took things from the other main character’s perspective, that being Alex, the last man that Amy feeds from in the prior work. It tells his story, what happens to him as a result of what Alex did, and the dangers that begin to form, both to himself and to his family… and to Amy.

But like the first work in the series, there’s a lot unsaid, there’s a massive cliffhanger at the end that’s never resolved as well. The other thing that bothered me is that the book summary really is a bit misleading.

The second work is:

  • Title: Satiating the Succubus: Alex’s Awakening
  • Author: Jennifer Coomes
  • Length: 20 Pages
  • ASIN: B011HEY7S8
  • Publishing Date: July 12, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

Alexander Simmons ends up in a life-changing accident, and finds himself comatose for two months. He’s awoken by a succubus attempting to drain his life essence, but finds himself instead invigorated by her. He tries to retrace the steps that brought him to this point, and finds himself in some sticky situations.

Alex tells the story of his encounter with his sister, how that led to him being in a coma, and then waking to find a succubus feeding on him. But things don’t end there, and when he returns to his sister, things are very different.

The work is told from Alex’s perspective, which is interesting and quite a lot different from Amy’s in the prior work. There are hints that something is odd about Alex, a moment with his sister that is rather awkward and leads to Alex being in a coma. The work is split into three parts, the before, the encounter with Amy, and then the after when Alex goes to see his sister and things take a rather darker turn.

The main erotica in the work is Amy’s feeding on Alex, his dreamscape that leans very much into a BDSM bit of prose that is a little odd, a little off, but reads with some heat. The better part is the “feeling” that Alex has as Amy has her way with him in the real world, how those feelings come to him overall.

The story gets very odd when Alex wakes up, his exit from the hospital makes no sense at all, and the work lost me at that point. Once past that, Alex goes directly to his sister, confronts her, and then they have their tryst. In the midst of that, Alex becomes, it seems, an incubus, his sister suffers for that, and then the story rushes to a close.

It’s that last two pages that I have the real issue with. Alex is far too calm, too uncaring for what happened to his sister. It’s like he’s known he’s been an incubus for some time now, but prior to that moment, he showed no sign of it. That just was confusing.

Then, to make things more odd, something is mentioned about Amy seeing others about Alex and that doesn’t make a lot of sense either. She never spoke of them before, never suggested that there was others of her kind to talk to. All of a sudden there is, there is a “prophecy” for them and the then story crashes to an ending.

The work isn’t as good as the first work for the simple reason that there’s not a real hook to Alex. His story has something to tell, but that’s mixed into other things, other thoughts, and by the time the erotica comes, that story is buried and can’t be found.

Three out of five pitchforks.

I didn’t particularly like the ending, Alex’s almost shrugging off of what happened. The ending also left a major plot point dropped into the series that had never been mentioned before. If the series had continued, that wouldn’t be so bad, but there’s not been anything after this and so the series is left unfinished and incomplete.

It’s a shame because the series seemed to be on the verge of getting to a larger story, explaining more about Amy’s past, the world of the succubi and incubi, and what it all means to Amy and Alex. Stories never to be told it seems and that’s a shame all things considered…




Apr 04 2016

Never Need To Be By TeraS

A story today with a bit of a hidden meaning, or perhaps that meaning will be one that really isn’t so hidden for those that know. Sometimes there are things that need to be said, but then they can also be the things that …


Never Need To Be
By TeraS


There are moments when Tera can be indecisive. They are rare, and most would never notice them when they happen. Still, they do, and she is quite aware of them within her own thoughts.

The problem on this particular day wasn’t one where the universe hung on her next choice. No, it was a very simple question that, normally, might have a simple answer. However, nothing for Tera ever really was simple, even if the outcome only was a result of her believing that point. This day mattered very much to her … to her dear friends on the other side of the fence, the koi pond marking the edges of where their worlds met … to her and her Eternal, for reasons that never really could be put into words, but then never really needed to be.

She had spent a very long time thinking.

Trinkets and gifts weren’t right. They didn’t express her love. Recalling a certain decorative plate she had given before, she smiled at what her Eternal had told her about that moment, the gasp of surprise, the look of amazement.

A card, no matter how lovely the words, couldn’t say what needed to. Oh, she had sent many cards in the past, but she knew just how awful her handwriting was—more so when she kept having to stop, wipe away tears and then continue writing. The thought did make that smile turn bemused. A queen with terrible handwriting: such an impossible thing, of course … but Tera was never an ordinary queen.

Flowers? Well, she had given them before, a particularly lovely rose bush once. Looking out her kitchen window, Tera could just make it out over the fence, the red blooms and green leaves just beginning to sprout, marking the arrival of spring where they resided now. Those thoughts made her smile become a thoughtful one.

She looked towards the home across the way, her fingernails tapping a beat upon the countertop in rhythm with her considerations for some time. Finally she made up her mind and turned away from the window.

A short time later, or not so short—time was an illusion, after all—a woman with ebon hair wearing a red sweater and blue jeans, made her way along a certain sidewalk towards a certain home in the garden of which a certain rose bush grew. Her heels clicked lightly upon the cobblestone walk, a moment later and she knocked lightly upon the door. She wondered if she looked right, if she had managed to look right, to simply be herself in the ways that matter most. After a time her thoughts had come to wondering if they were home when she heard the turning of a doorknob.

The door opened, a soul she knew through their love shone brightly there. A smile greeted her: “Hello.”

Tera smiled: “Hi.” For the first time in ages, the Queen of the Succubi fidgeted before she continued, while the lady in the doorway waited patiently: “I was trying to figure out something today.”

There was a moment … it wasn’t really an awkward one, more of a sudden realization of who
the guest was, and the surprise that she was standing on the doorstep.

She tugged at her hair: “I’ve sent flowers, cards, gifts before. I couldn’t figure out what would be right. There didn’t seem to be anything that really said the right thing, in the right way.” She shrugged slightly: “So that leaves … me. I just wanted to say … Happy birthday.”

The answer was a hug as Tera was pulled into a warm embrace, crying softly in the moment for all this meant to her. For the longest time, there were no words said; there really didn’t need to be any. But then the moment passed, the lady insisting that Tera come in, tears and all, for she was being silly.

Hours passed, the two talking, tea being shared, the occasional bit of laughter drifting from the porch where they rested together, looking out over the garden, where the rose bush was starting to bloom. The visiting queen was tracing a fingertip over the rim of her cup when she admitted something to her hostess during a pause in their time together: “I don’t say the words enough … what you mean to us. I know I need to say them.”

Her neighbor answered: “There never needs to be.”

It is a simple truth, one that transcends all else. The love of a family shared never needs to be explained, never needs to be said. When one knows, one simply does.

And so the words never need to be said, for they live within the souls of those we touch and love.

The words never need to be said, but, on that birthday, on that doorstep, in smiles and hugs, they were. And Tera went home quite sure it was she who received the gift.

Apr 03 2016

A Review of Infernal Desires by Prudence Sinclaire

Infernal Desires by Prudence Sinclaire

Infernal Desires by Prudence Sinclaire

There are some works I review which, sadly, no longer can be found. It’s more the shame when the story is actually quite interesting, is written well, and tells a story that is different in its own way. This particular work is from several years in the past, but like all works about the Succubi and the Incubi, it too deserves its moment of recognition.

There comes a time when a young succubus has ‘the talk’ with her mother. She learns about what she is, what she can do, and about what it’s like to taste a soul. But even after having the talk, that doesn’t mean that she’s going to be able to control herself, her powers or that of those around her…

The work tells the story of:

Victoria had never been so embarrassed as the night she almost ate her boyfriend’s soul. After a quick talk with her mother, Vicki learns she’s a succubus who’s just come into her powers. As Vicki struggles to control her newfound abilities, will she remain true to her human intentions or will she give in to her demonic lust?

Vicki finds herself having a problem. She has a boyfriend, but almost took his soul. Her mother has explained that she’s a succubus, and Vicki is one as well. The problem comes in that Vicki can’t control her powers and there are a lot of people wanting a piece of her. Life’s hard when you are a succubus after all.

This is really a cute and fun work that has a slightly different take on being a Succubus that I did rather like. The work focuses on Vicki, what she experiences, and all that comes with her succubus powers coming into being. There’s a touch of mind control here and there, some nicely hot scenes of erotica as well. But what’s more interesting is Vicki’s reaction to everything that she experiences and, most of all, the talk she has with her mother.

We never see Vicki’s mother, though we learn she is a nurse, has a very open idea about sexuality. Oh, and she is a succubus as well. There is a little bit of “evil” in one of her comments, but that’s pushed aside by Vicki’s humanity that comes through in spite of what her emerging powers make happen. Really there’s very little said or told about Vicki’s mother and that’s a bit of a shame as I would have liked to know more about her, Vicki’s father and so on. It’s a bit of an open mystery, only teased at, and it would have been nice for that to develop further.

While there is story and plot, to an extent, the majority of the work focuses on Vicki encountering, and then suffering her way through some sexual situations which then eventually climax in her having a threesome with her boyfriend and a roommate. While she does get pushed to the edge, in more than one way, she doesn’t turn ‘evil’ but rather she’s more of a sex dream in a way. I liked that, and hearing her thoughts as things developed, how her new needs as a succubus became more and more pronounced was very hot. I thought the description of seeing a soul was quite unique, and more so what Vicki’s reaction was when she finally had but a taste of one.

The work closes with Vicki wondering what she can do with her powers next in the aftermath of being “charged up” but the work closed on that point, not going any further and leaving the rest to the reader’s imagination. As such, the work is very short and that’s a shame.

There’s several good ideas here, some interesting characters, and Vicki herself being the most interesting of all. The work clearly leads towards another book, but that never came to be. The work was removed from Amazon, the story lost, and it shouldn’t have been. There’s promise here, and it should have unfolded.

Three and a half out of five pitchforks.

A cute and fun little piece of succubus erotica. A little mind control, a little fun, and a story that sadly never continued onwards. It’s a shame because Vicki is really quite likeable, and to see what happens in the after, as she becomes more sure of herself and her powers, would have been very interesting to see.



Apr 03 2016

A Review of World’s Shyest Succubus 1: Awakening by Taylor Knobb

World's Shyest Succubus 1: Awakening by Taylor Knobb

World’s Shyest Succubus 1: Awakening by Taylor Knobb

A review of the first work in a new series called Philos University by Taylor Knobb for which I find myself rather amused, bemused and taken by the main character and her innocence.

The theme of an innocent, or if you will, pure soul being transformed into a succubus isn’t uncommon. What is uncommon is keeping that soul true to themselves in spite of all that happens to them. It’s not an easy thing to do when the obvious route would be to make them sex crazed after all.

The world around you can be draped in shadows. A mystery simply because of how you were brought up into it. When temptation strikes, one can find themselves covered by it. The larger question then becomes how one learns their new world, and what they do with that knowledge.

  • Title: World’s Shyest Succubus 1: Awakening
  • Author: Taylor Knobb
  • Length: 17 Pages
  • ASIN: B01DJLFQ64
  • Publishing Date: March 27, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

It tells the story of:

Adina is a quiet, shy, and above all good girl. So one night when she’s heading home from a church service and is caught in what seems to be a blast of magical power that starts to change her, she doesn’t know what to do. The changes start immediately, with a new sort of hunger that threatens to turn her world on its head. She needs something that she’s never needed before, something that makes her turn hungry, lustful eyes upon her roommate Kelly…and something that might help Kelly turn those same desires on Adina!

Adina is, if nothing else, a good innocent girl. She’s shy and really doesn’t know much about the world outside of her cloistered community. Encountering something that she should have known better than to get involved with, Adina discovers her body is changing and her needs are becoming more… physical. Something’s happening and when her roommate comes a little too close, Adina discovers things she’s never experienced before.

The main focus in Adina trying to deal with a very slow transformation into what seems to be a succubus. The majority of the changes in this work are physical, not quite over the top, but certainly starting her on the path to becoming a succubus nonetheless. Mixed into that is a tentative creeping of a turning of her viewpoint from innocence about just about everything to a singular focus upon sex and sexuality, much of which is her own discoveries about the things that “bad girl” must like in her mind.

Adina is, to a point at the beginning, almost too close to a stereotypical good girl and there were points at which I winced at how clueless she was. In the context of her character it made sense, but even so the slightly overwrought moments of discovery made me wonder if she’d ever seen her own body all things considered. When her mental landscape begins to shift, and it is very nice in how subtle that is at first, it brought about quite a lot of character development. Adina doesn’t go from innocent to sex craving mindless being as has happens so often before. There’s still that innocence in her, a good soul that sees she’s doing something “wrong” and needs to make up for that.

It’s this focus in the story that grounds it and makes it more than an excuse for Adina to crawl into bed with her roommate. There are two scenes that focus on erotica, one is some self-pleasuring which was lovely and hot, the other is Adina and her roommate loosing themselves in Adina’s powers which has some succubus mind control mixed in with some heated erotica that was lovely and I liked both quite a lot.

The work is short, there’s a skimming over about how Adina it transformed, which I hope will get better explained, and there is a need for perhaps a bit less of Adina being singularly thinking about sex and her reactions over it, which happens almost every page in the latter part of the work.

The story is well told, I like Adina very much and because I do, there’s a worry about this series that I hope the author can avoid. I really wouldn’t like for Adina to be lose within the succubus when she fully appears. More so, I really don’t want her to turn stereotypical, and if she has hooves I will not be thrilled at all. The story has a purpose, a voice in Adina, that has to remain throughout otherwise this is just a means for writing her into constant sex scenes without meaning. That would be the real shame of all.

There are a few odd word choices for actions that Adina takes here and there which are a bit confusing, but that well may be just a choice the author made. Otherwise Adina is a captivating character, the story has purpose, plot and direction. The erotica is not over the top and when the little first hints of Adina becoming a succubus peek out, there’s a delicious duality in her inner thoughts, what she does, and how that all unfolds and the aftermath that Adina has to deal with.

A cute story about an innocent beginning to figure out that something isn’t quite right, but having no idea as to why. Really a unique take on this particular them which I enjoyed. However it is short, really needs to be fleshed out more and perhaps more time needs to be spent in Adina facing her changes a bit more rationally rather than being just completely out of touch with what is going on.

Four out of five pitchforks.

There’s quite a number of mysteries here to unravel, many of which I think will be interesting. There is however a danger of the work turning Adina into something she isn’t, a caricature of her innocent self. I really don’t want to see her lose who she is for the sake of an ongoing series in which she just goes from sex scene to sex scene and nothing more. I feel like that isn’t likely, but it is a trap that is far too easy to fall into. The next work in the series is titled “Playing Doctor” and that concerns me. I dearly hope I am wrong for the promise I see in Adina herself.



Apr 02 2016

Drawing a cute anime Succubus YouTube

I found, for me, one of the more interesting from the perspective of an artist creating their artwork, YouTubes sometime ago. I like this video mainly because the process of creating is where the soul of art comes from…

And in case the video can’t be seen on the Tale, please try this link:


While the video is a little bit small, here is the completed art in case YouTube makes it vanish as happens from time to time…

Succubus Sketch by Aria Rayes

Succubus Sketch by Aria Rayes

The most important thing really about anime Succubi is that they are cute, have a little bit of sexy innocence, and, of course, that expression that seems to say they have no idea why the boys around them are having nose bleeds.

I do love this character very much, the cuteness is the best part and in being so cute that gives her a lot of personality. Lovely expression, I like the pose, and while her tail is a bit different, it does work for her quite well I think.

I wonder what her name could be…



Apr 01 2016

A Review of Idle Hands by Alana Church

Idle Hands by Alana Church

Idle Hands by Alana Church

A review today of the first work in a new series called The Succubus by Alana Church, a series that I think has quite a lot of promise, story and more. It’s a very difficult thing to start a series, to set up the who, what and where which eventually, as the series progresses, gets to the why.

To do so needs a group of characters who are the focus. They tell the story through who they are, what they desire, and how each of their lives come into contact with one another. Sometimes all that takes is a strong willed woman, her long forgotten desires, and a succubus in need. When that combination works well, all else comes into play.

The work tells the story of:

Althea was an immortal succubus, dedicated to a life of sexual pleasure. She lived her life on her own terms, caring little for others. However, one fateful day she was torn out of her own body by a deranged mortal. Forced to take shelter in the nearest woman, how will she regain her power and her body?

Rachel Wainwright was a successful attorney, but one with a troubled home life. Separated from her husband, fighting with her children, her life was cold and sterile. When her long-forgotten sexuality returns to her, how will it affect her, and those around her?

Althea now shares Rachel’s body and her mind. To return to her own form, she must take power from Rachel’s pleasure. And to do that, she must find work for her Idle Hands.

Althea is having a really bad day. It’s not enough that a mere mortal has harmed her, it’s not just that she had to take up residence in a mortal woman to survive. No, the real problem is that she can’t get out of the mess she’s in without the mortal’s help. It’s going to be a long road, filled with peril, strife, loss and more. Neither of them will be the same, and in the end, perhaps both will learn something about themselves that they didn’t expect before.

The work is interesting in many aspects, not the least of which is how Rachel, the main character of the series, sees her world at the beginning, how that changes over time through Althea’s presence, and what that drives the story towards by the end. There’s a thoughtful, gradual change in Rachel, not just physically, but mentally and emotionally. How Althea does so, the way Rachel’s thoughts move from being a bit cold and focused, to being something more seductive, passionate, and emotional, made a real difference.

Althea’s path through the story is somewhat “behind the scenes” but there’s a good, logical reason for that, it makes complete sense, and there’s nothing strange or off putting about it. There has been thought given to what could Althea do, how could she influence Rachel, and what comes with her doing so. This core plot has a grounding in this first work, it lays out a path through which the series can follow, and in doing so allows for some erotic moments that work quite well as Rachel succumbs to Althea’s needs.

The erotic undertones don’t overcome the story, which I liked very much. There is a bit of self-pleasure, which was delicious, there’s a seduction scene that was very hot, very well written and I enjoyed. While there are but a few erotic moments to focus on, Althea’s influence on Rachel, those little whispers of ideas, thoughts and suggestions that pop in and out of the story are hot and teasing in what they promise. That is quite a talent to have as a writer and it is done here exceptionally well. The double entendres are amusing, the moments of scattered sexual thoughts made me smile. They are little punctuations in the story that make it more alive, more passionate, and more seductive.

The writing is lovely, there’s nothing that takes the story away, leaves it without direction or purpose. The erotica mixes well, not being silly or over the top. Each character, from Althea and Rachel through Rachel’s family, have their own personalities, thoughts, needs and goals. There’s a story for each of them and I feel that seeing how Althea’s presence touches each will make things more complicated, but also for a more fully realized story overall.

As the work progressed, there were quite a few moments when I had questions, thoughts and pondered over things that one character or another did. Rachel’s office scene with another character made me wonder about something and what that might mean going forwards. Rachel’s son and daughter have quite a few issues to work though, many with their parents, and I look forward to seeing what happens there. Most of all, the singular question of what Althea’s overall plan is, what happens to Rachel along the way is the largest question of all.

I would have liked to have seen a bit more told about Althea herself, though really that couldn’t happen, all things considered, because of her situation. There’s just something about her that I can’t quite put my finger on. She’s not stereotypical, I’m hoping that she remains so, and I think the author has a goal for her that is every bit as important as what happens to Rachel. The other thing that I would have liked to see more of would be a little more time spent before Rachel seduced another character. I felt like there is something missing just before that point that would explain what happened.

I highly recommend this work for the characters, the depth of the plot, the time taken to tell each of the main characters’ stories. This opening work doesn’t focus mainly on the erotica, the erotica is used to push the story forwards intelligently, which I really quite enjoyed. I have high hopes and expectations overall and I believe this series will be one of my continuing favourites to follow throughout.

Four and a half out of five pitchforks.

Althea has a “home”, it’s in need of a bit of tender loving care that only a succubus can give. I think that’s the most captivating part here and I look forward to what comes next…



Apr 01 2016

A Review of Turned in to a Girl! by B.J. Sackrider

Turned in to a Girl! by B.J. Sackrider

Turned in to a Girl! by B.J. Sackrider

I believe that every book should be given a chance. Sometimes I can be pleasantly surprised, sometimes I wind up shaking my head and, rarely, I read something and wonder if there is anyway to get back the time I wasted in reading.

Today is, of course, April Fool’s and I have the feeling that this work is very apt. There should be something in a book called a story. There should be something in a work called character. Most of all, if there is supposed to be a Succubus in the work, there had best be one.

Otherwise… Why list it as having one in the first place?

  • Title:Turned in to a Girl!
  • Author: B.J. Sackrider
  • Length: 36 Pages
  • Publishing Date: April 25, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

It is the story of:

When Max finally decides to explore the woods behind his new house, he meets a mysterious woman with magical powers… Gender Swapping Powers. But the woman has a darker side…

What will Max do when he starts to grow breasts and the bulge in his pants disappears? Will his new horny body be able to resist the woman’s evil temptations? Or will he give in to her devilish ways…

I really can’t give a reasonable summary of this story because, as a whole, the story is scattered, wildly uneven, and even when it comes to the erotica, there’s nothing there that creates any heat at all.

The story goes off in all sorts of directions, many of which make no sense at all. There’s nothing in the characters to like nothing in the story to hold onto, and most of all… if there is a Succubus in this work, and there is supposed to be, she’s hardly a succubus by any means.

The only thing I will say with regards to the “succubus” in this work is that… well… There is the barest hint that she is once. The problem is that with how scattered the story is, how hard it is to read, it’s difficult to get anything out of the work save for a great deal of confusion.

It’s been a while, but…

Zero pitchforks out of five.

If the work has a Succubus, she’s hard to find. If the work has a story, that’s even harder. Poor writing does that and there isn’t anything of note that can help.