May 11 2016

This costume should be tossed into Hellfire…

Hellfire Devil Halloween CostumeOnce again the possible has happened, by now I know that there will always be a awful costume to cringe at and, sometimes, the level of cringing will be astronomical in nature. According to the blurb with this costume: “You’ll look hotter than hell this Halloween when you’re wearing this alluring devil fancy dress costume.” I doubt it. Very much.

This is called the Hellfire Devil Halloween Costume and it comes with the dress, that apparently has an attached tail,  the black garters with red bows and the horns. The most disliked of all pitchforks is not included, nor are the boots, or the fishnet stockings and it sells for $53 US.

Trashy is putting it lightly I think. Actually that could be seen as a compliment as the only other description I can think of is slutty, and really that should never be.

Nothing that I like, nothing that I would want, and most of all…

To who exactly would the look “hotter than hell” in the first place? What universe do they live in where something this awful could be seen as being sexy, or desired?

Completely awful.

Zero pitchforks out of five.

Never mind stay away… Run.



May 10 2016

A Review of One Night Sand by Natalie Severine and Eric Severine

One Night Sand by Natalie Severine and Eric Severine

One Night Sand by Natalie Severine and Eric Severine

The seventh review of the ongoing series called Lily Quinn written by Natalie and Eric Severine this time on the Tale. You can find my first review here, the second herethe third herethe fourth here, and the fifth review ere. The review of the prior work to this one can be found here on the Tale as well.

One of the things that I have been going on about for some time is that Lily is more than her sexuality. She’s smart, she’s thoughtful, and woe to anyone that doubts how intelligent she is. But overall that part of her has been set to the side for her more physical reactions to problems. In this work however, Lily has to think and doing so, this work stands out amongst all of the works in the series so far for me.

There are many riddles in Egypt, the Sphinx isn’t the one being that has them. But facing the riddle is only part of the problem as is the answer. The real riddle is what you do when you have the answer and what does it mean?

It tells the story of:

For eight years, I’ve hunted any monster that the College is willing to pay me for. They’ve pitted me against vampires, werewolves, fairy thieves, and even had me arrest a pair of their own rogue wizards. After all of that, it seems that I’ve finally earned a bit of trust.

The College has a problem. A mummy named Ptah has managed to secure a stranglehold on real quicksilver, a rare alchemical reagent. I don’t do magic, but that’s exactly why they called me – wizards aren’t welcome in Egypt.

So the High Magus is sending me in. First I need to get permission from the djinni to enter their lands and then try to negotiate with an immortal alchemist on behalf of the entire Merlinic order for a resource no longer obtainable anywhere else on Earth.

No pressure.

But I have some ideas on how to get them on my side. I can be very persuasive…

It’s taken a very long time for Lily to gain some measure of respect from the College and in the moment that she has that respect it seems they need something from her. A mission they need Lily for leads to a promise from one and a threat from another. Given that Lily has no idea what she is getting into exactly, the surprises come quickly. At least Lily will see to it that someone does before she extracts what she’s come for.

The most interesting thing about this work comes from the fact that Lily is forced to use her mind and think her way out of situations rather than fighting her way out. Throughout the series, it’s been shown that Lily, when she’s all “sexed up” is a match for just about anything and anyone. But what doesn’t come out so well has been just how smart Lily is. So many around her cannot see past her being a succubus, or thinking about how great it would be to have sex with her. Occasionally the series has turned, if slightly so, towards that theme, but tended to fall back upon Lily fighting her way out or telling of another of Lily’s erotic moments.

While that has established Lily’s personality, there’s also the aspect of her that cares about Max, her best friend, the part of her that needs, almost desperately so, to learn about her real past. There’s so much about Lily that is more than her sexuality, and the most telling part of that is her sense of right and wrong. This theme takes of a lot of this work in the series and it opened a lot of plots and revelations about Lily herself that have been in the shadows before.

The erotica isn’t forgotten, not by any means, but overall there’s a better balance between the erotica and the story telling in this work. It’s almost split evenly and, at least for me, that made a tremendous difference. The story leads into the erotica and vice versa, meaning that there are reasons for what Lily does and why she entwines herself with two characters in this work.

Of the two, the first encounter with a Djinn, was the hotter of the pair by far. But more than the sex, the heat, there’s a good deal of information revealed about the succubi in this universe, who controls them. A single line that offers the possibility of Lily having to deal with a serious problem at some point. At the same time, a promise given offers some really interesting possibilities, and I find myself wondering about that more than anything else in this work.

The second character Lily encounters, a mummy, was quite surprising in a lot of ways, but at the same time was immensely unlikable, which was the point. How Lily deals with them, the aftermath of doing so, was inspired and it showed just how smart Lily really is, but also, just how compassionate she is. The two parts of Lily combined are far more than just her sexuality and it was amazing to see how her mind worked, the answers she found and the riddle she solved.

Beyond the main plot, the opening chapter revealed a lot more about the College, those in charge of it, and more importantly, there’s a shifting of how others see Lily. Whether that is for good or bad is hard to say from what was revealed however. Nonetheless, Lily having a little more understanding, a little more knowledge is a very good thing and it brings up the question of what happens if, possibly, Lily discovers she can wield magic. Where that takes things would be something special.

Max, Lily’s best friend appears for a time at the beginning of the work and there’s been something added to their relationship that I think is, in a way, a bit of a red herring. It might lead to something, but somehow I still feel like Lily and Max are meant to be together and I hope that aspect of their relationship grows soon. The pages are turning, time is passing, and developing their private lives more would be good.

The most enjoyable part of the series so far in so many ways. The real Lily, the one that everyone overlooks, has her day. The series overall plot might not have moved much, but for seeing Lily think instead of act was well worth the pause in the overall series here.

Five out of five pitchforks.

Finally we see Lily using her mind as much as her body in order to figure out an answer to the puzzle she faces. The lack of fighting makes this work, at least so far, my favourite of the series because Lily does not fully rely on her sexuality as a succubus. She’s far more than a sexy body that everyone wants, she’s a soul that is something more.

This more than anything else needs to come out more in the series and I hope it does. There’s a huge mystery surrounding Lily and it seems she’s getting the pieces together to figure it all out. When she does so I wonder what the fallout will be and what it all means to Lily.

That, after all, is the riddle isn’t it?



May 10 2016

A Review of Submitting to the Alpha Demon by Demona Lust

Submitting to the Alpha Demon by Demona Lust

Submitting to the Alpha Demon by Demona Lust

There are some works which I have a difficult time reading. The problem mainly comes to how the story is told, the disconnect I have with the characters and, more often than not, erotica that just has no heat in it to speak of.

Dialog is a difficult thing to write, because when it is written in the wrong way, the words are stumbled over and it hurts the story as a whole. When the characters themselves are stumbling as well, then it is very hard to keep things interesting.

  • Title: Submitting to the Alpha Demon
  • Author: Demona Lust
  • Length: 24 Pages
  • ASIN: B017K3ZZC2
  • Publishing Date: November 3, 2015
  • This work at

It tells the story of:

A Demon, an Angel and a Priest walk into a church… Wilson, a man of the cloth, must confront Demos, a demon from the underworld and Jeremiah, a soon-to-be fallen angel in this battle of good versus evil. Both want his soul but only one can have it. Will the priest give in to the Demon’s power and allow his carnal desires to consume him. Or will the Angel be able to save his soul from the devil?

Wilson finds himself confronted by a demon, more of an Incubus, that wants him, and an angel who also wants him. A crisis of faith moves towards something else which tells a story of them all.

The idea of this work, the theme suggested, I thought had quite a lot of promise to it, but there were many difficulties for the work to overcome that I don’t think it managed to deal with. The first of these is the internal monologue of Wilson, the main character. It is uneven, reads oddly, and there are a lot of disconnects, odd sentence structure and overall in being so that makes it quite difficult to read.

The dialog as well has the same difficulties. It reads strangely, having no real inflection, purpose or tone. It reads too stiff and formal, there’s no real emotion behind the words most of the time and being so when the erotica comes into play, and that continues throughout, it’s difficult to find any heat in the moment.

The erotica itself leaves a lot to be desires, there’s no real passion or heat in it, reading much like an adult film in many ways and I think the same can be said for the story as a whole. It isn’t so much erotica as it is an adult film which means the story is by rote and then the erotica seems to follow the same path. There’s heart missing in the story and that needed to be there.

The beginning of the work is abrupt and confused, as is the ending, and that doesn’t help as well. The work needs a good deal of editing to bring some life to all of the characters, to give them each a clear voice. There needs to be a connection, at the moment, there isn’t one to speak of.

Two out of five pitchforks.

The work needs a serious rewrite to bring some life into the dialog and the characters. There’s something missing throughout that leaves things flat and uninteresting right through the erotica as much as the story itself. The concept is intriguing, but the telling of the story doesn’t measure up to what the promise could have been.



May 09 2016

Share By TeraS

Yesterday was Mothers’ Day … Those that know me are aware that this day, along with another, are the hardest days of the year for me—especially this year. I’ve written some very sad things about this day, how it affects me, the loss, the pain, the moments when I … want to know … but I’ll never really know. The thing is, however, the reality doesn’t have to be the story. I can try to tell a story in which there are moments which aren’t so sad, so painful to remember. I can try to express them and …


By TeraS


A long time ago, well before Tera came to be, long before there was a pair of so-green eyes, a red tail, and horns, and that bemused smile she always has …

… there was another who had much of the same.

A long time ago, well before Keith came to be, long before there was a pair of deep blue eyes, a red tail, and horns, and that particular chuckle he has …

… there was another who had much of the same.

The two were from completely different worlds. Their backgrounds, family, nothing about them crossed over, save for one singular point in time and space: their friendship—but that’s another story of another time and place.

One was blonde, with the most interesting smile. The other was brunette, with the tendency to keep twirling a finger in her hair as she mused.

The blonde was reading, as she was wont to do, and just enjoying this moment in time. The brunette, also on the park bench, was less interested in the book, more in the cup of tea she was holding.

Taking a sip of the tea, the brunette mused to herself: “So, tell me. Have you thought about what your kids will be like?”

“Sometimes. What makes you ask, anyway?”

Looking at her tea, she shrugged: “Just was thinking today about what it would be like. What they’d be like.”


She continued to sip at her tea: “Well, I think I’ll have to read the leaves and see what the future holds.”

The reply began with the rolling of eyes: “You know, you love being mysterious. You pop up when I least expect it …”

“Oh come on, you love it when I do that.”

“I still want to know how you keep managing it.”

The answer was a zipping of lips and a bemused smile.

“Fine … I still think you’re studying to be a magician or something. I mean, you’ve never really said what your major is, or what your classes are over in that college of yours.”

“Same thing as in yours: teachers giving us dirty looks while we look innocent.”

“You have never been innocent.”

Another sip of tea: “Well, I can fake it well.”

Turning the page, she continued to read and her companion on the bench continued to sip at her tea.

“I’d like a daughter.”

“You’d make a great mom.”

“Not half as good as you.”

A bit of laughter: “Oh, I’ll be terrible. I’m … well, let’s call it overbearing.”

“Remind you of anyone?”

The closing of the book was accompanied with: “You’re strong-willed. That means your daughter will be a huge pain in your ass. I’ll bet you’re looking forwards to years of chasing the boys away from her.”

“I have my ways to be sure they’ll … behave around her.”

“You’re talking about that pitchfork from the family farm, aren’t you?”

The laughter was telling, more so when the two shared a hug and didn’t manage to spill the tea.

“What about you?”

“A boy; actually, I’d like a few of them. A daughter would be nice too.”


“You know, you really have to stop that. How is it that you know there’s something else to be said, anyway?”

More tea sipped: “I know you.”

“And I know you, too.”

Shrugging, the reader admitted: “It’s unlikely I’ll ever have a son or daughter. The doctors tell me it’s impossible. It’s a dream, that’s all. But who knows? A mouse might run over the bedsheets, scare me, and something might happen.”

The one sipping the tea regarded her for a long time: “Or … something.”

“There you go again, all mysterious and oogie boogie and stuff. You aren’t going to get me to go to one of those wild parties, missy.”

“I’m shocked! I would never make you wedge yourself into a pair of hot pants and spend an evening at the coffee house listening to poets that are trying to get into your pants.” She took another sip, then added: “Besides, you do that on your own. I have absolutely no influence on you.” She almost lost her hold on the styrofoam cup when the book was slapped against her shoulder.

“You are so full of it.”

Rubbing her shoulder, she sighed: “Oh … probably. Still, what’s the harm in trying?”

“Trying what?”

She put the cup down: “The doctors aren’t always right. They don’t know everything. It’s your life. You want kids? Then keep trying.”

“Sure. And sometime the stars will align, the impossible will happen.”

“They just might, you know.”

Changing the subject, the brunette asked: “Have you thought of a name for her?”


“I like. She’ll be something special.”

“What about you?”

“I’m not going to …”

“You are. What’s the name of your first son going to be?”

“I … I’ve always liked ‘Keith.’ Seems like a good name.”

“He’s your son. It will be.”


A wave of a hand before it picked up the cup again and she looked inside: “You’ll have a kid. Probably a few of them. You’ll see them grow up, raise families, and make you proud of them.”

“And you?”

She took a longer look: “The leaves say I’ll know her, love her, and be with her always.”

“They don’t say that! You’re making that up.”

“No, really they do say that.”

“Let me see.”

She handed the cup over and the brunette looked at the bottom of the cup.

“All I see is a mishmash of leaves and the dregs of tea into which you have put far too much sugar again, you dummy.”

“I happen to like sugar … a lot of it.”

Musing, she answered: “Too much of it.”

“So, what do you see?”

Swirling the cup around a bit, there was no answer for a time.


“I see a raven-haired girl who likes red. I see a cute looking brunette guy with her. I see the two of them in love, holding onto what their mothers taught them.”

“Sounds … nice.”

“It does.”

The cup was placed to the side.

“’Tera,’ huh?”

“Yep. ‘Keith,’ huh?”

“Uh-huh. You never know what can happen.”

“No. Really, you can’t.”

The brunette picked up her book and stood up: “Same time tomorrow? I have a class to get to.”

The blonde did, as well: “Sure. You have a good day and I’ll call you later.”

From far away, someone watching would see two teenagers embrace then go off in opposite directions. If the light was just right, one might see the brunette being followed by three small sparkles of light. If the light was just right, one might see the blonde being followed by one small sparkle of light as well.

The moment shared, the future to become, and the joy therein shared.

The future still to be.

May 08 2016

A Review of The Naughty Succubus: Part 1: The First Meeting by Becca Lusk

The Naughty Succubus: Part 1: The First Meeting by Becca Lusk

The Naughty Succubus: Part 1: The First Meeting by Becca Lusk

A review of a newly begun series by Becca Lusk called The Naughty Succubus this time on the Tale. I’ve often said that there are some story ideas that have something about them that I find interesting, but then the editing, or the dialogue, or sometimes the erotica takes away a lot of that.

The question of who someone really is cannot be explained by what they look like on the outside. It’s more important to know their souls and who other than a succubus would know them best of all? But when the reveal comes, what does it mean and where does it take the one who’s life isn’t really their own?

  • Title: The Naughty Succubus: Part 1: The First Meeting
  • Author: Becca Lusk
  • Length: 26 Pages
  • ASIN: B01F2XND8K
  • Publishing Date: May 2, 2016
  • This work at

The story tells of:

Trip Taylor was a ravishingly handsome young man. The only problem – he was a bit of a loner and had time talking to women. When Trip gets depressed to the point of being completely morose, he meets a mysterious stranger. She captivates him, and he realizes that he loses all grip on reality when he is with her. But who is she? What’s her name? He doesn’t know, she only tells him what to call her. She seems to know him from before, but where did he meet her? Will she ravish him? Will anything be left of him after she is done?

Trip goes out for a night with his friends and then, before long, gives up to go home. Along the way, an encounter with a seductress turns into something unexpected, or it is really? Reality blurs sometimes and in the midst of being seduced, the seducer uncovers the truth that Trip never knew before.

Overall the work tells of the main character’s life, his lack of luck at finding love and then encountering a succubus named Krys who has her way with him and in doing so quite a lot of mystery is created about Trip, the main character, and Krys, who seems to know him intimately.

There isn’t a lot told about Krys in the story really other than her appearance, both in their first encounter and then when she reveals her true form. There’s nothing about her past, what she wants, nor how she comes to know of Trip. It is mainly setting up the series in asking the question of Krys and who Trip really is.

This is a little bit of a surprise as by the end of the work, everything we seem to know about Trip is brought into question. The ending suggests that Krys knows something more, there’s a reason why she’s appeared to Trip now and the last lines of the work end in a cliff hanger that seems to suggest that story, when it is told, will be a complicated thing by far.

Krys seduces Trip in a wonderful way, mainly told from Trip’s perspective, and overall I liked her attitude, personality, and her eventual reveal as a succubus works well for her. There’s a hint of succubus mind control, a bit of a transformation aspect as well. Much of the erotic heat in Krys having her way with Trip is very hot and I enjoyed most of that.

However, there are a few moments in the erotica which have things occur that were slightly cringe worthy, most in how things happened, and how really odd and, for the most part, impossible, some of the moments were. That’s not to say there wasn’t heat, there was, but reading through those moments brought me to a sudden stop as I tried to imagine what was happening and I just couldn’t suspend reality long enough to make that work for me.

The work needs more editing, mainly to correct several points at which odd words creep into the story. For example: “he saw her beautiful feel wearing high heel shoes.” This happens a number of times and it creates a bit of a stumble in the story. As well, some of the dialogue reads odd, stiff, almost robotic in a way. There’s a lack of emotional context sometimes that needs to be there and isn’t. As well, some of the narrative reads oddly, moving from one tense to another, having some clunky sentence structure as well.

There is a story here, it’s interesting and seeing what comes next interests me. I just would have liked a little more editing to make the story come out better, to leave some of the unimportant details out and build on the ones that mattered.

Three out of five pitchforks.

The work needs another editing pass for the spelling mistakes, the somewhat wooden dialogue as well. Beyond that, some of the erotica was a bit too far over the top, even for a succubus to manage and the story lost me for a while in the midst of that. Still there is a mystery, actually several of them, to be told and that’s what interests me the most. Hopefully the next work in the series will expand on that and leave some of the questionable erotica to the side for the moment.



May 08 2016

A Review of Case of the Missing Succubus by Gerald Costlow

Case of the Missing Succubus by Gerald Costlow

Case of the Missing Succubus by Gerald Costlow

I do enjoy works in which the joy the author has in writing comes out clearly in the characters, the story, and the world they are creating. The thing kept in mind is making the characters tell the story, not the story tell the characters. By allowing them to “be” the story that places a certain set of things that must happen into play.

The main character needs to have something that keeps you in the story, there must be a mystery, an event, something of meaning to follow through on. But most of all, in the case of a work that is the foundation of a series, you must tell of the universe and its rules, but also of the past and what that means. It isn’t a simple thing to do, but when it is done well, it is an amazing read.

The story tells of:

Rose, the Witch of the Woods and High Priestess, is called upon by the Dean of White College to solve a murder mystery, find a missing girl, and get things under control before someone else winds up dead.

Her assistant, a shape-shifting coyote named Keyotie, relishes his reputation as the Trickster and greatly enjoys the company of females. But he also possesses a sharp nose and a certain talent for solving puzzles.

When they discover the missing girl is not human and other things are not exactly as they appear, their quest gets even more complicated.

Rose returns to the place where her life truly began. A place where magic is real, learned and held for each student. A pair of Succubi seem to have murdered, one of them is missing and the other tells nothing. But the real mystery is the world outside of the gates and the humans that they see everyday. Not all things are as they seem and not all of the problems to be solved are the ones made by magic alone.

Rose is a legend of her time, and a legend of the College she attended. Called by her teachers in need, she finds herself pulled in many directions by them, but also by the Goddess she represents. Nonetheless, Rose is not helpless. She is smart, she is powerful and she has a duty. It’s good to see a character like her, who doesn’t need help, is more than capable and can look after herself. But it is also good to see how she and Keyotie interact through the work.

Their relationship is complex, their pasts are murky and intertwined as well. But there is a respect, an understanding, and along the way the tension isn’t a sexual one, which so many authors would move towards, but rather two wills and personalities coming at a problem from their own perspectives and trying to solve it.

That problem is the Succubi twins named Holly and Molly, who I just adored. They aren’t stereotypical, they are not evil and I especially liked that they are the creation of the Goddess, for a purpose meant to battle evil in her world. Seeing how they are seen by others, in how they are misunderstood, held, and, sadly, brought to harm and threat, is somewhat sad to see. But how they deal with it, what they do to prove they are worthy of being in the College, that they deserved to be there, how they manage it. That story is every bit as important and powerful as that of Rose herself.

This is not a work of erotica, nor would any sort of erotica really have made any sense. It is a mystery at its core and unraveling that is an amazing ride that Rose, and the reader, are taken through. The writing is solid, the world has rules and history, and the characters from Rose to everyone else has a voice, a past, and a need that comes out well as the story is told.

As much as I adored this work, the ending was, I think, a bit rushed in how things came to a close. Not so much the explanation but the mulling over of the events by Keyotie at the end. They leave some interesting questions that I would have liked to have seen explored, not to mention to know more about both of the twins and not just the one that was seen through most of the story. Nonetheless, a wonderful work and well enjoyed.

Four and a half out of five pitchforks.

Well written, amazing characters, a view of Succubi that I think works well, and means something. The truth found is more than what is found and the future might be just as murky for Rose and Keyotie both. But that is what makes this so interesting and captivating…



May 07 2016

So that’s a Summoner’s War Succubus

I have never played the game Summoner’s War, but I am aware that there is a Succubus in the game and what she looks like. As there really isn’t a lot of good images of her, I was interested when I came across a YouTube that someone made of her…


If you cannot see the video here on the Tale, please try this link:

And here is a screenshot of the Summoner’s War Succubus herself.

Summoner's War Succubus

There’s a bit of an echo of Morrigan Aensland in her obviously. Those wings are unmistakably Morrigan and the style of her clothing is slightly more revealing than Morrigan’s is.

I find myself pondering someone finding a costume like this for Halloween, putting it on and being transformed for Halloween night to look like this…

There could be a story in that…