Dec 27 2015

A Review of Incubus by Aiden Darke

Incubus by Aiden Darke

Incubus by Aiden Darke

There are some works that have characters that are interesting, have a past, and of course, their own secrets. It’s interesting to read and discover what they are, why they are, and, in the end, what drives them as characters in the story. But in doing so, the story cannot rush from moment to moment, event to event, and not allow some kind of resolution to develop.

Taking care to tell a story, no matter how wonderful the erotica is, matters. It comes in the words, the characters, and, in the end, the editing. If that cannot all come together, then the work isn’t all is should have been. Which is why I cannot understand a book with flaws in it can have a five star rating when it has enough issues to not make that really true.

  • Title: Incubus
  • Author: Aiden Darke
  • Length: 39 Pages
  • ASIN: B019M469KE
  • Publishing Date: December 19, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells about:

Carrie leaves her career in academia when she falls under the spell of the mysterious Marcus. Soon she discovers he is an Incubus, a sex demon. But Marcus has his own problems when a Succubus, a female of his kind, moves into his territory. Marcus must draw on all Carrie’s energy and sexuality to save himself and the entire city.

Carrie encounters Marcus who enthrals her and draws her into his word. There are passions, needs, wants and desires to fulfill. But there are also questions, dangers and a voice from the past that brings terror. The discovery of what Carrie wasn’t aware of before leads to a choice, not only for her, but all around her as well.

Marcus is the Incubus of the work, and the story mainly revolves around him, his world, and how he draws Carrie into it. While that part of the story works well, there is some lovely heat in the story telling, there is some well done mind control aspects that I think worked, the story moved at breakneck speed for the most part, leaving really little or no time to understand what was happening to Carrie, or what Marcus wanted from her exactly. He isn’t a stereotypical incubus, thankfully, but at the same time there was, as a whole, a disconnection between himself and the events around him. At least until Kara came into the story.

Kara, the Succubus of the work is, sadly, extremely stereotypical in her actions, attitude, and personality. There really wan’t must to like about her, save for some of the moments when her powers were used. There was actually more heat in those scenes at times than there was with Marcus, if for only the reason that while she didn’t really care about humanity, she at least had more of a physical and emotional connection at times. Even if that turned into something cold and harsh in the end.

Eventually there is a conflict between Kara and Marcus which offered a lot of hints and questions, but didn’t follow through on them. Besides their connection, which I was surprised at, there came a comment about the last time they met and what happened then. Knowing that, the two still confronted each other and in doing so the story became confused in where they were, what was happening. I didn’t see the point of the shift, nor why it would matter at all, all things considered. Again, the scene was rushed and while that did fit the situation, as events unfolded, more and more questions came that didn’t have a resolution.

The work does have a good balance between the erotica and the story, but the speed at which some of the scenes came and went didn’t leave a lot of time for characters to develop or tell their stories and that’s a shame because so many other characters appear with stories to tell and they are limited to a few short comments, or actions, before the story moved onwards.

The work needs another editing pass to slow the story somewhat. Allow the characters to tell, think, express what is happening, then continue on. Allowing the story to catch its breath before rushing to the next climax would have, I think, made for a better read. Beyond this, the author has a few points where a choice of word was incorrect. There is also one point where Marcus is called Maximus, which seems to be an error. But the most frustrating mistake comes in the last pages of the work when Marcus tells a character to leave, a female character, and she is described as a he. It took away what otherwise had tension and meaning, leaving me confused for a moment and I shouldn’t have been.

The way the work ends suggests that there is to be another work to come and if there is, then I hope the author will take some time to tell Marcus’ story, but Kara’s as well. There’s something important there needing to be told. Passing over that for the sake of the current moment I think would not do justice to the characters, their past, or who they are.

I felt like the story was too rushed at times and being so there came some moments of confusion which brought me out of the story on occasion. There were also some moments when statements and actions didn’t connect well. Kara being so sadly stereotypical in her nature was a disappointment, Marcus being a cypher throughout the work and not really telling his story was a shame as well. So many questions unanswered and when the ending arrived, it was far too short, confused, and left me wanting.

Three and a half out of five pitchforks.

The heat is very good, the hints of mind control through Marcus and Kara are really well done. But there’s a lot of confusion in the story, some scenes don’t make a lot of sense. Most of all, the work needs another editing pass, to slow down the events a bit, and to correct the mistakes. Given all that, if there is a part two, I will read it and see if the questions are explained as they need to be.

 

Tera

Dec 26 2015

A cute Morrigan Aensland Art WIP YouTube

A lovely YouTube of an artist creating some Morrigan Aensland art today on the Tale… I so do love cute Morrigan… and she’s so very cute here…

And if you cannot see the video here on the Tale, please try this link.

As always, in case YouTube makes the video vanish, here’s a screenshot of the art as well…

Morrigan Aensland by AshleyZombie

Morrigan Aensland by AshleyZombie

This art was created by AshleyZombie, and you can find the completed artwork on their Tumblr page here.

The most wonderful thing about this art is Morrigan’s eyes. They are something that a lot of artist’s don’t put a lot into or seem to overlook that the eyes are the window to the soul. Here I think they stand out amazingly well, add so much to Morrigan’s expression and really are the focus of the work for me overall.

The detail in Morrigan’s hair, her clothing and skin tone and her wings are just amazing. As the last image of Morrigan for the year, I think this is a wonderful note to end upon…

 

Tera

Dec 25 2015

Tera’s 2015 Christmas Manip – Randi The Red Tailed Succubi

The thing about taking a song and turning it… Succubish… Is that sometimes it is very easy and sometimes it appeared to be at first, but then the complexities get amazingly difficult to overcome. I though that using Rudi’s song for Randi wouldn’t be too difficult…

With the help of my heart… It is more than I expected things to be…

Randi The Red Tailed Succubi by TeraS and JHB

Randi The Red Tailed Succubi by TeraS and JHB

 

The song, which I think is cute and fun is…

Randi the Red Tailed Succubi

Randi the randy red-tail
wore a very shiny top,
and she was quite voracious;
never knew quite when to stop.

All of hot Randi’s playmates
knew she didn’t seem quite right.
Still, they enjoyed how Randi
made them moan straight through the night.

Then one snowy Christmas Eve,
underneath her tree,
Randi heard a royal voice growl,
“Think you can keep up with me?”

They played twelve days and evenings,
cumming through it all, and yet
Randi was still quite randy.
Would you like to be her pet?

A Happy Christmas to all… Whether Naughty or Nice… I hope your wishes come true…

Tera

Dec 24 2015

Succubi Image of the Week 414

A fun and cute image of a Succubus for this week’s image of the week… Cute and fun Succubi are some of my favourite kind and this particular one, in a lot of ways, makes me smile…

Succubus by Gigaaa

Succubus by Gigaaa

This work is by an artist on DeviantArt called Gigaaa and you can find the original page on DeviantArt with this work here and this artist’s page can be found here as well.

According to the artist’s notes, this Succubus can be found in the Summoner’s War game, and within the game, she looks like this:

Summoners War Succubus

Summoners War Succubus

Between the game version and the creation of this artist, I have to say that I like the artist’s version better in a lot of ways. She looks a bit more… real… I suppose is the best way to put it. As well, the artist made her look a bit more mature and I do prefer that look more.

Her outfit is quite interesting, really rather unique, very happy that she has a tail, and as much as I am usually not thrilled with head wings, or any wings for that matter, I think as a whole the look suites her well. Lovely hair style and colour, amazing eyes as well, they really draw your attention to them and just a wonderful shade of green.

A beautiful piece of Succubi art…

 

Tera

Dec 23 2015

Devil Costumes don’t get much worse than this…

Devil Woman Carnival CostumeTacky is the nemesis of all Devil costumes. It can take the worst costume and push it into the realm of disastrous. Which brings up a question. Why is it that costume designers find it is necessary to label, in big shiny letters, what the costume is suppose to be “saying”?

Probably I think it’s because they know the costume cannot say it… No matter how hard one looks.

This… thing… is called the Devil Woman Carnival Costume and it comes with the top, pants, gloves and horns. The pitchfork, shoes and stockings are not included, not that they make any difference at all. The amazing thing is that this awful mess sells for the amazing price of $125 US.

No, I am not joking. This entire thing, model’s expression included, is so far into trashy that it might create a black hole. That might not be a bad thing actually considering, but before it vanishes, we have to deal with looking at a costume upon which, written over one’s bust, is the word… hot.

It wasn’t enough to make a costume that looks trashy. It wasn’t enough to add fringe to it that makes that worse. It wasn’t enough to add armlets with fringes to bump the trashiness to new heights…

No, now we have to add the word “hot” to a costume that is anything but “hot” and in doing so make the woman that wears it, and I feel sorry for any that have, do, or are considering, be anything but hot.

A complete miss which gets worse for the addition of a single word in shiny letters…

Zero pitchforks out of five.

I cannot believe that someone thought this was a good idea…

 

Tera

Dec 22 2015

A Review of Succubus Week: Thursday by Lisbet Laire

Succubus Week: Thursday by Lisbet Laire

Succubus Week: Thursday by Lisbet Laire

A review of the fourth work, technically the fifth, as there was a collection released before this week came out, in the series called Succubus Week on the Tale today. You can find my review of the first work in this series here, the second work in the series here, and the third work was reviewed here on the Tale.

There comes a point in a series where things seem to be almost rote in how they transpire. It is a very hard thing to overcome, it can cause a story to seem like it has been told, in some form, once before. That said, there can be a single moment in a work which finally offers the promise that, yes, a question that has been hanging over the entire series might be answered. Even if that won’t happen for some time as yet.

  • Title: Succubus Week: Thursday
  • Author: Lisbet Laire
  • Length: 20 Pages
  • ASIN: B019L8KV32
  • Publishing Date: December 19, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

It’s been a long day for Adrienne, a centuries old succubus. The hunt for a murderer using their paranormal powers to kill humans has been a drain on both her patience and her powers. Forced to spend hours on the train to try and hunt out the killer she is desperate to find some way to vent her frustrations. Going to the gym seems like an ideal plan, work out a little on the treadmills, get some muscle tone on the weights, be seduced by someone in the sauna. They’re all good ways to reduce your stress.

Adrienne gets to work staking out the scene of a crime and finds that doing so is as boring as watching paint dry. At the end of the day, she decides to go and exercise which brings her to encounter a lovely lass who promises to work her up.

The thing about this work is that there’s a certain feeling of deja vu that happens to Adrienne, what she does during her day, and, eventually, the erotica that comes into play in the latter half of the work. It feels very much like a boring, repetitive day where nothing happens of note, time passes slowly and nothing comes to fruition. Now, much of that is simply from the events that happen around Adrienne, which make perfect sense all things considered.

One of the things that the series has been good at is starting to describe the supernatural world that Adrienne lives in, the place she works at, and what her like is like. But the detail in that hasn’t really gone anywhere, remaining somewhat vague at times. There are hints about things, the idea of a greater world to explore, but the work doesn’t sink into that, remaining close to Adrienne. There are a few moments when it is explored, slightly more, but it only serves to offer more questions and not a lot in the way of answers.

As for the erotica, there’s a certain familiarity in how that comes about in the work, what Adrienne does, and were things wind up. It feels a little formulaic in that the heat, the expressions of lust, the needs that both Adrienne and her lover have, all feel like the series has been down this path before.

Being that Adrienne is a succubus, it would be nice to see her be a little bit different in her approach, her actions, even, if only a bit, how she expresses herself. There’s a hint of that when Adrienne first encounters her partner in the gym, told in her voice, and I really wanted to see more of that because it was different and interesting.

The core plot of the series, the mystery, moves slightly, but it isn’t resolved, nor did I expect it to. What I didn’t expect was the return of a thread that was mentioned, forgotten, commented on, and then lost. This work lays out, quite clearly, that come Saturday, Adrienne will be seeing her mother and I personally cannot wait for that to unfold.

As much as the series has talked about Adrienne’s world of work, it really hasn’t talked about who she is, what her past is, and why she has made the choices that she has. It is, at least to me, vital that this be explored and giving an indication that this will, finally, happen, gives me some hope that the following works in the series will do so.

While the writing is as well done as ever, and the work tells of a thought out and fleshed out plot, there seemed to be a bit of something lost in this work compared to the others in the series. No amount of heat in a hot flash can really overcome a story that has been sleepwalking to get to that point.

Three out of five pitchforks.

This work felt, at least in the erotica, as if it has happened before in the series. Perhaps that needs to be spiced up a bit, changed slightly, something.

Still, the promise that Adrienne will go to see her mother on Saturday does make me smile, and that, more than anything else, is what I look forwards to in the series. Because it will, at last, really explore who Adrienne is and not what she is.

 

Tera

Dec 22 2015

A Review of Incubus: A New Adult Paranormal Romance by Alexis Darlington

Incubus: A New Adult Paranormal Romance by Alexis Darlington

Incubus: A New Adult Paranormal Romance by Alexis Darlington

A review this time of a work that appears in a rather long series of works. It has an incubus as one of the characters, which is a good start, but it is what has been called here many times a pamphlet in length and as such it’s disappointing.

Sometimes a hot flash is a hot flash. Sometimes the hot flash is not one. This time… it really doesn’t get the chance to even strike the match.

  • Title: Incubus: A New Adult Paranormal Romance
  • Author: Alexis Darlington
  • Length: 5 Pages
  • ASIN: B00VND8F1E
  • Publishing Date: April 3, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells about:

The blonde heroine finds herself worshiping the creature she set out into the caves to find, the incubus. She throws herself into full submission to his every whim, desire, need, and pleasure. All thoughts of previous experiences are removed from her mind as there is nothing but him, her submission to him, and his ownership of her very soul.

A woman finds herself at the mercy of an incubus who does whatever he wants to her, then walks away after she surrenders all she is to him.

Possibly the shortest and weakest hot flash that I have read in quite some time. There’s no character development, no story, nothing save a few pages of well over the top sex followed by a series of repetitive questions asked by the incubus before he just walks away from her and the story ends.

It’s a good example of the book blurb being a lot better than the actual story in fact. If one didn’t pay attention to the length of this work, you might expect an interesting story with a little depth to it. What happens however is that the work is one very short encounter and it isn’t all that erotic at all. After reading this, I really don’t think much of the series if this is a good indication of what the rest of the series is like. If nothing else at least this was something I read on Kindle Unlimited and didn’t pay for it because if I did I would be really quite upset that I had.

The characters are not named, the incubus is called “He” in a D/s relationship sort of way which I didn’t care much for either. How the scene was written I feel like the author doesn’t really understand the concept of a healthy D/s relationship, and yes I know this is a fantasy work but still some grounding in good practise would have been a pleasant surprise. The writing was rushed, the story flew by faster than it being a mere five pages would have indicated really. It actually crossed my mind as I was reading if the author had written this as a challenge to write a piece of erotica in under a half-hour.

A very thin story, characters that had nothing to them, erotica with no heat in it. All in all this was a disappointment and it didn’t need to be so. Edit the work, add some length to it, make the characters better and make the hot flash really hot. Of course what that means is adding about 30 pages on top of this and completely rewriting things.

One pitchfork out of five.

Really nothing to look at, terribly disappointing and that’s a shame. The author gets one pitchfork for creating the work, but otherwise… there’s nothing here.

 

Tera

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