Sep 20 2016

A Review of Incubus Journal: Complete by The Mad Hatter

Incubus Journal: Complete by The Mad Hatter

Incubus Journal: Complete by The Mad Hatter

Recently I reviewed a series of short stories in which the main character is transformed into an Incubus. You can find those reviews here and here on the Tale. The author added another two works to the series then issued the six parts as a single volume. As such, this review will be of the series as a whole and how, as as whole, I’m rather disappointed in the lack of editing, story, and really only a focus upon what consists of a series of short pieces of porn and little else.

A story needs something more than sex to make it interesting. It needs editing, focus, character development and, at some point, a connection with the reader. Porn alone is not a story. Sex alone is not character development. It’s especially a problem when there are seeds of ideas, but they aren’t developed into something more.

The work tells of:

Follow our protagonist as he slowly finds himself turning into a male succubus, an incubus. He starts to enslave women to his will, changing them to fit his preferences. Huge breast and butt being just a start. Turning a woman into a Nekogirl being one and inflating another. Will he let these powers destroy him, corrupt him or will he master them?

Chris becomes an incubus, uses his powers on various men and women, has sex with a succubus and then faces a demoness that wants to destroy him. Assuming of course all of the sex doesn’t get too much in his way that is.

There is a lot of issues with this work, and the series as a whole. There’s no editing to speak of, there’s no story to follow really. There’s an attempt at plot but it doesn’t go anywhere. The writing is odd, almost unreadable, the dialogue is uneven, and the actions of the main character at times, I found to be a problem.

The problem is that the series seems to be so focused on the erotica that when the real background about what is going on appears, when there is a story to be told, it really isn’t. It’s also a good idea to remember what your main character’s name is as well. Characters are not described much, save for what’s needed for the porn scenes, the transformations are written in a way that seems flat and, as well, there comes a lot of confusion as to what exactly is going on.

The story wanders aimlessly for the most part and when something does happen, there’s no focus and no direction. The main character’s voice seems to be dumbed down more and more as their transformation continues. A measure of justice is done in the aftermath, but it is confusing and unclear. There is the feeling that these are a series of moments vaguely tied together towards in trying to get back to the main story.

Spelling mistakes, grammar mistakes, and overall how the text reads just doesn’t work. There’s a hint as to what’s going on, but all of the characters are cardboard cutouts. The sad part is, from time to time, the author hints at little side stories which would have been really interesting, but only mentions them in passing before going back to the porn scenes.

There are, by my count, about ten ways for this story to have been told better, expanded, the characters made to be more. That it didn’t happen, that the author didn’t spend some time to edit this into something more than a hot mess is a shame. More so that they charged for this.

Half of a pitchfork out of five.

Erotica alone is not a story. Transformation alone is not a story. Calling someone a succubus, or incubus, is not a story. Connecting the dots is. But that didn’t happen. The author needs to edit this work into something more substantial, tell more of a story. This isn’t a story, it’s a short series of barely connected porn scenes wrapped around a charade of a main character.

It could be more, but it didn’t happen.



Sep 20 2016

A Review of Demon Futa Does Vegas by Jocelyn Saragona

Demon Futa Does Vegas by Jocelyn Saragona

Demon Futa Does Vegas by Jocelyn Saragona

At some point in the creative process of writing, there comes a time when editing means more than the writing itself. There is a need to make dialogue sound real. There is a need to correct a multitude of spelling mistakes. The words on the page need to flow, to make sense and for the story not to lost its way.

It doesn’t matter what the story is about, the final work need to have some polish in order for it to be more than a series of words slapped together randomly.

Beyond that, telling a story which seems to hold a lot of background and then not telling that story for the sake of getting to the erotica is a shame. Story matters and without that, the work is not what it could be.

  • Title: Demon Futa Does Vegas
  • Author: Jocelyn Saragona
  • Length: 31 Pages
  • Publishing Date: March 13, 2016
  • This work at

The story is about:

A Vegas comic-con attracts Vianne, a succubus futanari with an appetite for mortal sin. Her obedient thrall Morgan, once shy, has become an irresistible sex kitten herself. Vianne proudly watches her thrall seduce men, though she can’t satiate herself second hand action alone. She enjoys a reckless group tousle with a club girl and another futa. Later, Vianne helps Morgan seduce her long time crush, but it backfires. This man is the other futa’s territory. After accidentally enthralling him, Vianne must break off the spell or face a rival futa’s wrath.

Vianne and her thrall Morgan are in Vegas and having some fun. A chance encounter leads to a problem and in the end there’s only one solution to make everyone happy.

The work is mainly focused on the erotica with a bit of background and plot to hold things together. There’s not a lot of time spent learning about Vianne or Morgan or for that matter any of the main characters. There’s just enough characterization to give them form and not much else. Vianne is a futa succubus, there is another in the story as well. There’s a little moment of her wings appearing and some scattered moments of her true form leaking out here and there, but really the story is mainly about futa erotica overall.

There is a bit of succubus mind control as well, which I thought worked well. There’s a bit of a D/s theme from time to time also. Some of the scenes are a bit contrived, a little expected, and while so the heat in them is fairly good, but could have been much more than it was for one simple reason.

The work needs a lot of editing overall. There are many spelling mistakes, incorrect words being used, and overall the story reads oddly. The dialogue “reads” wrong. It very much sounds like, many times, emotionally devoid of anything. The idea of the story is interesting and I would have liked to know more about Vianne, her past, and how events were before this story started. There’s a “societal” aspect to some points in the story but that isn’t explored for the sake of getting to the erotica.

That then is the problem here, that the story was pushed aside for the erotic scenes. It’s a shame because Vianne and the other characters are interesting. I would have liked more story about them, their relationships and so on.

One and a half out of five pitchforks.

The work needs a serious editing for grammar, spelling, and comprehension. The characters are interesting, there’s a story to be told, but it’s not brought out as much as it could have been. Perhaps there will be a second work, but even so, the author needs to make this work better than it is. Tell the story please, the erotica will look after itself.



Sep 19 2016

Light or Dark By TeraS

I don’t feel much like I can write these days. The reasons are … what they are. I have been told that writing helps in times like this. Perhaps it will, or does, so I try. And, as I write, the words I can manage … well … I suppose … that Queen Tera comes to find me in my darkness and gives me a lesson about whether things are …


Light or Dark
By TeraS


One of the things that Tera has to deal with—and, for that matter, so does everyone that calls the Realm “home” and happens to have horns and a tail—is a question that is asked over and over again by those who don’t have a clue:

“Are you evil or good?”

There is an obvious reason for this question—the horns and tail—but at the same time the question itself brings about questions about the one that asked the question in the first place.

This, then, is what underpins the question: perception.

In any event, Tera often finds herself being confronted and asked the question. As she doesn’t like to hide her tail or horns, this is something she finds herself dealing with to the point she could almost set the train schedules, if there were any in this particular universe, by.

Sometimes the question is asked in some sort of court, a tribal council, a meeting of elders. Regardless of the place, of those asking the question, Tera’s reply is true to herself for she can do nothing less: “I find it interesting that you ask about evil first, then good. Why is that, I wonder?” The questioner then suggests, or insists, that she is trying to avoid the question, which usually results in Tera pinching the bridge of her nose and sighing: “No. I am trying to understand why you have seemingly made up your mind.” This generally makes her questioner snort in derision, make a snide comment or, if it is an especially good day, their answer makes her smile. Much of the time there is reference made to one deity or another, while insisting that she is not of the light. Her answer is, again, seemingly obvious: “All beings are their children, no matter their look, existence or purpose.”

It is not, sadly, a rare occurrence when they take offence at her reply. There comes a long, quite forceful, statement of what they see as fact. She, of course, listens attentively, sometimes tracing a fingertip over her lips in thought. Allowing them to say their peace, whatever it may be, is only being respectful.

When they are done, out of breath or otherwise, then, at that point, it is Tera’s turn. “The thing about having preconceived conclusions is that they are, for the most part, illusions. Your books speak of good and evil. They offer means to see if one is, or is not, one or the other. Your wiser souls have transcended that level of knowledge and seen beyond, to place their vision upon that which Goddess wrote long before you came to be.”

Her expression generally shows slight disappointment in her accusers. They look at her in defiance, about to interrupt, but she holds up a single finger: “I allowed your words. In the spirit of understanding, one does allow the other to have their moment as well.”

Bluster comes, an attempt to find some sort of law, word, or anything which would put an end to her reply. However, before that can go even a bit too far, there comes another voice, sometimes of an elder, other times of an inquisitive younger soul. Once in a while a child asks a seemingly innocent question. Having no recourse, and feeling foolish for the first time in their encounter with her, they sulk back to their place and watch.

“The question is not whether I am good or evil, as has been asked. The question is, why is it so necessary to ask? What has happened here that when a different soul arrives, seeking nothing from anyone, save to learn, that some are threatened by this?” The Queen moves away from the chair, or witness box, or some other place she has been settled to in order to walk among the accusing souls and consider them. As she passes some by, there is clear attraction to her. Others are repelled; the reasons are their own. Some are indifferent, others impatient to return to their lives.

Somewhere in the room she pauses, her tail moving slowly behind her. Guards in the room tense, the judges are concerned. The prosecutor flinches. The audience, or spectators, depending on the venue, await the next moment with anticipation.

“Light is within each of us. Dark is as well. For each soul, each life, a choice is made to embrace one or the other, or so you might think. In truth each and everyone here has been both, one or the other, or shades thereof.”

Her smile is, always, bemused. “I am not the right hand of Goddess, though I know her and love her dearly.”

This admission brings gasps.

“I am not the hand of evil, though I know of them and have no time for them.”

This brings confusion.

“I am the Queen of my Realm, the Eternal of my King. I am called sister and loved for being so. I love, with joy and passion, my dearest loves, I hold them with me always.”

This makes some give pause and look upon their own lives.

“I am the mother to a son who loves me.”

These words bring nods from those that know what these words mean. They are far more than words alone.

“I am the Dear One of my heart. The singularly most cherished words I know.”

Silence comes over the assembled masses, as she has their attention now.

“You ask me your question and yet do not ask the question of yourselves. You seek solace from the questions within you by projecting your own shades towards me. I cannot help answer your own questions, but I can offer this.”

Her focus is on the assembled souls, her gaze accepting, as it always is, as she always is. “If you ask me to leave, I shall. I hold no ill will. If I am allowed to stay, then, I hope, we can learn from each other.” Turning back to the judge or elders or other authority, she concludes, “The choice is yours, it always is. You must choose, whether light or dark; none else can.”

She walks back to the place where it had all started, waiting for their answer. Either way, she thinks, Goddess knows what will come. In one way, there will be light shared, in another the light will be the moment she was given with them. Regardless of the outcome, she knows one pure thing:

Light and dark are not good or evil. No one should ever see them as being the same.

Sep 18 2016

A Review of Succubus Training by Syn Root

Succubus Training by Syn Root

Succubus Training by Syn Root

The thing about a story that has the word succubus in it, is that one expects to find a succubus in the story somewhere. The story can have action, a character can be seductive, love sex, be erotic, but that doesn’t mean they are a succubus. By the same token, calling an action, an encounter a means of “Succubus Training” also doesn’t really mean there is a succubus involved.

Sometimes there are moments when the wilder things rule. One comes into their orbit and cannot escape. But then, sometimes, escape isn’t what matters, it is what comes after and what they wanted in the first place from you.

The story is about:

Dox’s botched Sex Magick with the Forest God leaves her Fae powers gone, but there is no time to rest. Tonight, she needs to be the center of attention at a Billionaire Sex Party. Her friends in the Thieves Guild need Dox to own the Center Stage like nothing that filthy orgy has ever seen. Dox is soon tied up, and every hole is stuffed.. Dox knows she can handle a bit of Public Humiliation, but when it’s all over, she will have taken on more heat than ever before.

Dox is Fae, her life wild and unrestrained. But a God finds and claims her, leaving her life changed and she not quite the same as she was. Still, she is who and what she is, which means she cannot help but do as she is asked in spite of what’s changed in her. Some needs are never fulfilled and some aches go on forever.

The main thing about this work that bothers me is that it’s unclear if Dox is a succubus or not. She loves sex, she tends to use sex magik and her need for sex is just about insatiable. Her thoughts mostly revolve around sex and as a whole she might well be a succubus, but that’s never stated. The closest the story comes to that is the telling of the beginning scenes which are called “Succubus Training.”

Throughout the story, Dox’s thoughts and actions are mainly on her need for sex, much else is tangential to that point. While that does, as a whole, help to define her character, drive her into some situations, one of which is with a certain Forest God that has his way with her, it tends to limit the storytelling for the sex scenes.

Outside of the sex, when there are moments told about the world she lives in, the Fae around her, there’s a strong hint of Lost Girl that nibbled at my thoughts much of the time. Beyond Dox herself it seems like every character in the story is looking to have sex with her, in as many ways as possible. This creates a sexually charged universe which seems to like BDSM themes overall. That telling works, overall, even if some events are pushing the boundaries of suspension of disbelief.

A stumbling point is how the story goes from scene to scene, almost snapping from one sex encounter to a bridge story, then snapping into another sex scene. The story doesn’t flow so much as rush headlong towards the next bit of sex as quickly as possible. Again, this is mainly because Dox needs sex, needs it dearly and so it makes sense for her. But as a narrative I think a bit more “rest” between the erotica, to tell more story, would have made this a better read.

There are a scattering of editing flaws in the work. such as using “You’re” when “Your” is correct. There is story beneath the erotica, which does come out from time to time, but as a whole the sex takes precedence. Dox herself is interesting, but whether she is a succubus or not is unclear, for one, and for another, if she is a succubus, then it would have been good to know what her powers, and effects when she feeds, exactly are.

There’s a lot of questions unanswered in the story, it ends on a cliffhanger as well. There’s really no clear note from the author if there will be another work, if this is a series or not. If so, then I’d hope for more story about Dox and her past. There’s a good deal of mystery around her to explore, beyond the sex she has.

Two pitchforks out of five.

Show me a succubus in this story, a clear one, and I’ll be a lot more interested than I was. Tell more story than sex would also be good. Most of all, the mysteries of this story’s universe need to be explored and drawn out. We’ll see if a series comes from this, or if this was just mainly about Dox cumming.



Sep 18 2016

A Review of Succubus by Kat Lizati

Succubus by Kat Lizati

Succubus by Kat Lizati

The stories about succubi that I truly enjoy are the ones that make me think about the characters, ponder ideas, thoughts and concepts, and in doing so offer something unexpected. There has to be something different, something that takes the stereotypical and ignores it completely. When a work can do that, go past what succubi are expected to be and make them something far more, that’s when I find amazement.

Becoming a succubus isn’t the hardest thing. The problem comes in dealing with being human, being a succubus, and all that pulls upon you every moment. The discovery of what you can do, not what you are, can be the most freeing thing of all. What gets in the way is what you know to be true and what you need to believe in. You start with believing in yourself.

  • Title: Succubus
  • Author: Kat Lizati
  • Length: 361 Pages
  • Publishing Date: December 21, 2014
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The story tells of:

Two years after her divorce, Diane Sizemore has finally decided to date again. Unfortunately, the devil is in the details, or in Diane’s case, on the internet. On her first date since high school, she discovers that the man she met on a dating site is actually no man at all. Coming face to face with Lucifer was a shock, but it was nothing compared to what came next. Announcing that her eldest son is destined for an eternity in Hell, the vile but handsome creature offers her an alternative: Work for him for a month and he will wipe her son’s soul clean.

Diane takes the deal. What else could she do with her son’s eternal soul on the line? Now the newest succubus working for the Prince of Darkness, she must seduce twenty men who may or may not be evil. Lucifer claims that she cannot turn a man evil… a succubus can only expose the evil that is already there.

When the Archangel Uriel confirms the devil’s claims, Diane goes ahead with the deal, but it soon becomes clear that Lucifer has another agenda that could affect all of humanity. Trying to balance being a mother, an accountant, and a seductress in the service of the Lord of the Flies, she must try to focus on the task at hand and believe that, in the end, God will secure Humanity’s future.

What Diane didn’t count on was the addictive nature of being a succubus. She spent her adult life in a largely sexless marriage, and the new and almost constant arousal caused by her new occupation begins to break down her inhibitions and her rather prudish upbringing. Still determined to end her term of service and get back to her own life, she must constantly fight to maintain her hold on her soul and her sanity as her assignments become more and more depraved and exciting.

Diane’s had the most odd date. She met Lucifer who put to her a simple proposition: Do something for me and I’ll make sure your son has a chance to stay out of Hell. Now Diane has to deal with being a succubus, her sex drive going through the roof, and her life changing more than she knows. Events spiral away until one assignment forces her to confront her demons… and angels. Diane’s been told she’s special, and she will have to be.

What i enjoyed the most about this work is the mixture of theology that comes out as the story progresses. There are some points which, for me, strike close to home and I find to be very close to my own. There’s a point at which a simple statement is made by Diane: “I work for Him.” I think that’s a lovely expression of how I happen to see succubi and in saying that, Diane became that much more appealing to me.

Diane never is seen with horns or a tail, or anything like that. However, her changes, to her true form, I loved dearly. I especially thought the “clothing choice” of the succubi was perfect, colour, look and all. There’s some well written transformation scenes when Diane’s form is changed before she encounters someone, but there’s more than that. The author took a bit of a risk in telling of Diane being blind at one point and that telling, the feeling and textures of that encounter without the use of sight was one of the most captivating moments in the work.

Beyond this, how Diane slips into her new form is well told, there’s just this wonderful confusing, exploration and then capturing of her new form which flows with no stumbling or oddities. That then brings me to the erotica in the work. It is far too easy for stories about succubi to go over the top, and impossibly so. That didn’t happen here. The scenes feel real, there’s nothing stupid or odd about them. They have heat, there is emotion, and even when the erotica is Diane within herself and not with others, that heat and emotional connection is strikingly good.

Lil, a secondary character, is just as wonderful as Diane herself in many ways. She’s a bit more physically a “demoness” but there’s a sense of wonder and joy in her. The relationship that comes through the story I wish had been developed more, and dearly so. Her wit, expressions, and sheer enjoyment of the moment was delightful.

The majority of the work tells of Diane accepting her role, how things unfold and then comes an event that turns the story towards being quite serious in tone. There’s a bit of heavy-handedness at two points that I cringed over. Making a point, pushing a particular view of the world is fine and I understand why that happened, but it took some of the wind out of the sails of the work and it didn’t recover well beyond that.

That said, when the truth comes out and Diane goes in search of answers and how to make things right, the beings she meets are so amazing, so different, so special it’s a shame that the story didn’t spend more time with them than it did. At several points Diane is told she is “special” and I wish that had been explored or explained better. It’s a point that the work doesn’t delve into far enough and I wish it had.

The ending is, compared with the rest of the work, a bit sad and disappointing. There’s a suggestion of what it to come, but it is fleeting and not developed. Diane’s path going forward is set out, there’s an idea what comes next, but in the last lines of the work something was lost, something that was in the story, in Diane and one specific character, but it wasn’t taken to a real conclusion, which left me wanting.

Well written, amazing characters, a story that held me from beginning to end. A smattering of minor editing mistakes but nothing terribly so. An ending that needed to be a little more than it was if only for the sake of something resembling closure would have made this so much better.

Four out of five pitchforks.

The ending was disappointing considering all the story had to that point. Richly told, amazing characters and the erotica wasn’t silly or told poorly. All in all an amazing read that I recommend highly in spite of the ending and, at times, when the story became a little bit over the top in how some ideas where presented to the reader.

I’d like to see what comes next. While the beginning of Diane’s story is wonderful, I would like to see what her life becomes beyond this. The hints are telling, but telling the tale of what comes next is what’s missing more than anything else.



Sep 17 2016

A Short Greek Horror Film called Succubus

Some time ago there was a contest by RØDE microphones in which creators of short films were given a chance to compete for various prizes. One of the films that was entered was called Succubus. The film is a Greek language short horror film written, directed and produced by Alexander Orfanopoulos. The film followed a student investigating the cries of a woman while in a university library, then finding himself being attacked by a Succubus. The film was shot, accoring to the creator on the club centre of the Kapodistrian University of Athens.

The film itself is more of a horror film by far, there’s really not much in the way of anything seductive as it unfolds. So, keep that in mind when you watch the film…


If the film can’t be seen here on the Tale, please try this link:

I also took a screenshot of the title card of the film, which shows an image of the succubus of the film…

Succubus AO Short Film

There is, at least to me, a very Hitchcockian feel to the movie, how it is filmed and how the story develops. Being that it is a horror film, there is quite a lot of blood and gore and so on that appears in the film. As well, the succubus is more monster than anything else, again considering it is a horror film, that has to be expected. There is a bit of shock value, some suspense, and as a horror film that seems to work well overall.

I don’t however feel that this is a film about a succubus so much as a being something of a slasher film. There’s really nothing all that seductive in it, the film begins, from the first moment, as a chilling horror and builds up that tension.

As a horror film, that works well. As a succubus film… not so much.

I’ll give this film two and a half out of five pitchforks.

I’m impressed by the film as a whole, what has been created… I just don’t care for all of the blood…



Sep 16 2016

A Review of the The Succubus Trilogy by Emma Jaye

The Succubus Trilogy by Emma Jaye

The Succubus Trilogy by Emma Jaye

There are many stories about succubi that tend to be dark in their themes, plot, or character actions. Sometimes that darkness comes from the characters themselves, how they are, what they have done. It can be a somewhat nebulous darkness in many ways.

There are also stories that tend to be dark in how the characters are treated. They suffer pain, anguish, a life that consists of nothing but pain. Stories like that don’t really appeal to me and I try to find within the darkness a shred of light to hold my attention. Sometimes that turns out to be a very thin thing indeed.

  • Title: The Succubus Trilogy
  • Author: Emma Jaye
  • Length: 532 Pages
  • Publishing Date: August 13, 2014
  • This work at

The series is told in three parts:

The Succubus Trilogy is a dark paranormal tale of lust, deceit, love and indomitable will.

  • Seeking The Succubus: For latent vampire Gwendolyn Jones, her role is clear. Keep the males of her clan satisfied, prevent them seeking partners amongst the fragile humans, and exposing their diminishing species. Its an essential function, but contempt from the fertile females and many of her ‘clients’ makes her yearn for a life where she’s considered more than a sex toy. A part-time job in a souvenir shop seems like an ideal compromise until the overwhelmingly sexy chef next door turns out not only to be a rogue latent, but one with a deluded fantasy that Gwen isn’t a vampire at all, but a kidnapped succubus he’s been seeking across the globe for years.
  • Before The Succubus: Grades are all that seem to be important to Lucas’ parents, that and securing their own future through his hoped for, lucrative career. The double standards of the older generation, especially their ‘do what we say, not what we do’ philosophy, makes life difficult for the most sought after virgin in school, especially as his parents indulge themselves as often as possible. Sneaking out to go to a party proves just how unimportant grades are, and how little his parents told him about the supernatural world. It seems like sex demons like himself are in high demand by vampire clans. But if the bloodsuckers expect him to roll over and play the submissive, they have another thing coming. As anyone who knows him would say, he’s a stubborn git. But it seems as if that may be exactly what they want.
  • Winning The Succubus: Lucas thought all his troubles were over when he fulfilled his ambition to find the succubus Josie Dubois and return her to her loving parents and their varied supernatural friends on a tropical island paradise. Giving her time to come to terms with her new life, including the unfamiliar freedoms and choices it comes with, including whether to make a lifelong bond with him, was the only option, but time was not on their side. Her freedom had been negotiated, but his had been stolen at the cost of vampire lives, and they want their toy back.

Rather than reviewing each part of the series individually, my review will encompass the series as a singular work.

Gwendolyn believes in certain things. She is not quite human and not quite a vampire either. She knows her purpose is to serve at the pleasure of her clan and tend to their sexual needs. Her beliefs are shattered when she encounters Lucas and the truth is revealed. Her name isn’t her own, the past she was told isn’t real. When the truth comes, her world changes and choices are made. The question then becomes who is Gwendolyn anymore?

The singular thing about this work that I couldn’t quite accept was how in almost every chapter, every moment, Gwendolyn was being harmed in some way, shape or form. Whether physically by a vampire, mentally through the seeming lack of communication with her family when they appear, or emotionally when Lucas, the main incubus of the story, cannot manage to fine a means to actually talk to her. It makes for a tragic reading overall and what’s more bothersome is the final work of the series when Gwendolyn fades away and we are left with Josie, the daughter her family knows her to be.

It’s hard to accept that she loses all she was, her thoughts, her personality, her drive, her existence, so quickly and, sadly, at times in such an emotional void. Gwendolyn, at least when she was with the vampires, had at least two people that openly cared about her. With her family of “sex demons” as they call themselves, there’s just no connection with any of them for the longest time. It makes for so many moments when Gwendolyn beats herself up, loses hope, and comes to see only bad things about herself.

There is an overarching plot which holds the series together, but that falls so often into one character or another needing revenge for one reason or another. There’s no real point to much of the moments of terror that Gwendolyn goes through overall because many of the events happen as a result of others making what seem to be obviously bad choices. Characters lash out at the drop of a hat when she is with vampires and when she is with her family, she’s simply lost.

As for the work with Lucas at the core, there comes some understanding of what he went through, those that care about him and the demons he faces within himself. But like with the first work in the series, there’s so much suffering and pain that it’s hard to get to the actual story. There come a point when the suffering seems to be happening for no reason at all, character drives and personality notwithstanding.

There are quite a few moments of erotica in this work, some of them being not that hot, others, when Gwendolyn is herself, is forceful in what she wants, that are delicious, but they are few and far between. The problem comes back to the darkness of the work which the erotica, no matter how hot at times, just cannot get fully away from.

Again, while I understand that this series is “dark” and meant to be so, the pain invoked, over and over again, just gets to the point of being simply there in the story and even when things turn better, Gwendolyn just can’t escape the darkness that comes after her and Lucas.

The writing is very good, the characters, at least Gwendolyn and Lucas, are well defined. Many other characters are not, as a whole, and their drive, their reasons for what they do aren’t delved into very deeply. There are many moments when some characters make a choice and there’s really no good reason for them doing so. Explaining why would have helped a lot I think.

If there wasn’t so much suffering, I would have enjoyed this series much more than I did. It’s just impossible to forget the pain Gwendolyn, Lucas and others go through. That is, of course, part and parcel of their characters, but at some point there needs to be a release from that pain.

The work ends, thankfully, on a positive note with some promise. I wish the story had continued a little further, telling of what comes next. I would have liked more time spent with Gwendolyn, nee Josie, coming to terms with having a family. I wish there would have been less pain for the sake of pain itself.

Two and a half out of five pitchforks.

Too dark, too much pain, too much suffering for my taste. While I understand that comes with the characters, their universe, and what happens, there are too many points where the violence seemed to be there for the sake of it. Characters that act without explanation, characters that don’t listen to others, and a seeming lack of communication overall make for a story that drives events towards seemingly only dark purposes and even with an ending that gave much needed light to the series it couldn’t overcome how difficult a read this was for me.