The concept of a succubus can be different things to different souls. At the core, however, the need for sex, whatever kind it may be, seems to be unshakable. When a work needs the erotica to tell the story, there is a danger that the story is pushed aside, left behind. It also becomes a problem when who the succubus is can’t quite be resolved or their name continuously shares one out of the story.
Craving sex sometimes means the attraction you have brings the thing you need. Sometimes the need you have takes a form you don’t understand. Sometimes understanding isn’t as important as the craving it leaves behind.
- Title: Gwen’s Succubus Lover
- Author: Lucinda Leigh
- Length: 20 Pages
- ASIN: B01LBH23F0
- Publishing Date: August 30, 2016
- This work at Amazon.com
The work tells of:
Jethro Rom’lik of the planet Xanthar was headed back to his ship to leave the Earth planet for good when he smelled the most alluring scent—a human female in desperate sexual need. As a male, it wasn’t easy to resist the urge to seek out such a woman. But as a succubus, it was impossible to stay away.
Gwen was on a mission—she was going to lose her virginity to someone who could give her multiple orgasms. According to her friends, most guys could barely last through one of them, let alone two!
Luckily for her, Jethro was up for the challenge…
Gwen needs to scratch her itch and she’s intent on finding the one person that can do so. But the person she finds isn’t quite what she expected. The ride she gets isn’t anything like what she imagined.
There are quite a few odd things in this story. Naming a succubus Jethro is odd. Having him describe himself as a succubus is odd. Not explaining why he is a succubus is odd. Having Gwen crave sex, and not explain that, is odd.
There are quite a few unanswered questions which left me wondering about a number of events and comments in the work. Overall, the focus of the story is having Jethro and Gwen in the midst of what really is a porn movie scene and not really erotica. It’s a shame because telling more about Gwen’s story would have been interesting. Explaining Jethro’s view of himself, telling more about him being an alien on Earth, and why, would be interesting.
And that’s the real problem here. The story isn’t interesting because the time spent setting up Gwen’s character doesn’t lead towards anything as a whole. The characters are not developed, really they are almost stereotypical in their actions, their personalities, and what each of them desires.
It appears this work is the start of a series, and if it is, there’s a lot about Jethro and his kind that could be explored. But keeping the focus on the erotica and leaving so much story undeveloped means, to me, that there’s no heat, no connection to the characters. It’s a shame because the single question, why Jethro is a succubus, and what that means here, is a really important question.
The erotica takes up the majority of the work, but it isn’t so much erotica as it is a porn scene that happens to have one character describing themselves as a succubus, and an alien for that matter. It’s not critical to the story, the comment about being a succubus could be removed and it wouldn’t change a thing about the story.
There’s not really anything that Jethro does that is, overall, succubus-like. Certainly many things he does are alien-like, but not succubus. He’s dominant, he’s actually well over the top dominant, almost caveman-like at one point.
The work closes in a way that felt like it was rushed. It does leave the door open to further works in the series to come, but it’s not a satisfying ending for me. The writing has promise, mainly in the story telling outside of the erotica, but the erotica itself reads too stereotypical and thin for my liking.
One out of five pitchforks.
If Jethro is a succubus, that really needs to be explained if the author continues this series. I’ll accept shapeshifting, calling him a “male succubus” which other authors have used. But as things stand, he’s more incubus than succubus.
There’s a story, but it’s hidden by the erotica and as such there’s just something missing, something that could have made this more than just the heat that it is. Gwen seems to be something more than her need for sex, and perhaps that’s where the series needs to go and explore before anything else.