Mar 25 2016

A Review of Just Prey by C.P. McClennan

Just Prey by C.P. McClennan

Just Prey by C.P. McClennan

A review today of the first work in the Savannah series by C.P. McClennan. While this is a science-fiction adventure work, there’s an interesting undercurrent in what two of the characters are capable of. In some ways, they have a bit or a succubus or incubus nature, even if that mostly extends towards sex and what happens afterwards. But they are not, and yet they are.

There is a question which asks not why things are, but why you choose as you do. Nothing is constant, sometimes your choices do matter. Sometimes caring is the choice that matters most of all.

  • Title: Just Prey
  • Author: C.P. McClennan
  • Length: 181 Pages
  • ASIN: B00SF29LY6
  • Publishing Date: February 10, 2015
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It is the story of:

Savannah was lied to. She didn’t want him killed. When she saw him again, in a Chicago sex club, she knew she couldn’t go through with it. In fact, she abandoned her mission to try and stop it. These humans were not supposed to be kind or passionate. They were supposed to be just prey.

Savannah isn’t a normal woman. It isn’t that she likes sex, and a lot of it. No, Savannah’s an alien on a mission. But not all missions go as planned. Love shouldn’t be part of it, but it only takes one human to get through to her and make her reconsider. But there are forces who care not about humanity, Earth, or for that matter, what Savannah wants. Savannah needs to choose and choose well.

Savannah, the main character in this work, is an alien, but there’s an interesting aspect to her in that she has, in some ways, similar abilities to a succubus. She possesses a little bit of mind control, she feeds from sex. She also kills those she is intimate with in a rather gruesome manner. There is another character who acts in a similar fashion, is male, and could be thought of as an incubus as being so.

The need for sex, both human and alien, is a constant point throughout the work, many times taking up entire chapters in what Savannah does with others. Thankfully the author doesn’t keep Savannah’s character development to the sex alone. Over time there’s a little bit of humanity that comes into her, changes her character to a point, and it is an important one.

While that story is told, parallel stories come about other characters, their lives interweaving together. To do so the work flashes back and forth in time on Earth, some of those moments causing moments in history to unfold in a rather unique perspective. This, overall, is where I have some problems with the work. The shifts in time also involve different characters, and occasionally events occur from one time and perspective, then a moment is told from another a day prior to that event. It becomes confusing very quickly and I found myself having to scroll back and forth in order to piece the story together, to understand why and what was happening.

The work ends in a rush, events spiral out of control and some of what happens is very sad and, overall, felt like an afterthought. It does lead into the next work in the series, in, again, a flashback method that seems a little odd. Still, it reveals something, offers a hint of what it to come and that seems to be interesting.

I am not sure the constant flipping back and forth through time worked for me. There were several points were I was confused about things and had to go back a chapter or three to figure out what was going on and why it matters. Some of the sex scenes were rather lukewarm in tone overall, occasionally the actions taken by Savannah and her quarry in the work just didn’t work as well. The feeling of coldness from quite a number of minor and major characters made it hard at times to actually care about what was happening to them.

There is a strong undercurrent of loss, of losing hope at times. There are some bright moments, Gerard, as a character, I thought was very interesting and character-wise was an equal to Savannah herself. The loss in the work comes from the lack of emotion, of caring at times, some of the actions that Savannah and her quarry take. While that can be said to reflect an alien view of things, the change in Savannah as the story unfolds didn’t quite get to her passions, save for one pivotal scene.

I think some more time spent on Savannah’s past, more than the fleeting moment told, would have helped a lot. I think her relationship with Gerard should have been explored more. The connection is there, but it gets glossed over in the rush to tell the story overall.

A bit more editing, there are a handful of spelling mistakes, a few bits of dialogue that don’t sound right somehow. A little more heart in Savannah than we are told about and I think I would have liked this a lot more. Good, interesting scifi with a little touch of succubus mythos and I thought that was rather unique. It’s just a very complex read with an ending that left me wanting.

Three and a half out of five pitchforks.

The shifting in time becomes a little confusing as it happens so frequently. While that is a means to telling the characters’ stories, there are so many questions left behind for the missing parts of the story not told. The work coming to follow this one, Darwin’s Sword, I hope will be some more time spent on background, fleshing out more about Savannah, about the universe around her. The work is interesting, but somewhere along the way a little hope in the ashes would be good.



Mar 24 2016

Succubi Image of the Week 427

Something a little bit different today on the Tale for the Succubi of the Week… There are not, as a whole, that many Succubi in comic books. Fewer still that I happen to like as characters, or what they look like. It’s nice to find some art of a Succubus that does, in a lot of ways, make them appear to be something more than simply stereotypical.

Kalli by Tsuzukikun

Kalli by Tsuzukikun

This work is of a Succubus character named Kalli and is by an artist on DeviantArt called Tsuzukikun. You can find the original page with this art here and this artist’s page can be found on DeviantArt here too.

I like her look as a whole, though that she seems to be missing horns is a slight disappointment in a way. Interesting outfit, lovely expression, and I do adore her tail which I think works really well with her overall look. It’s also a neat little touch that the colour of her outfit matches her tail and wings.

It’s nice that she has “normal” skin tones and as such it’s just a better overall look than being red all over would be. She seems more… whole… I think ts the only way to express things here. There’s a sense about her that she isn’t the typical Succubus and, as always, for me that’s what I like to see in Succubi…



Mar 23 2016

Shiny, but what else?

Illuminaughty Sexy Devil CostumeI’ve often admitted that I love shiny costumes. Really they are my favourite kind and in being so there’s a certain level of sexy and seductive that just has to be part of things. For the most part, I don’t think that’s very hard to manage. But that’s not to say that tacky can’t rear up and take things down several levels…

This is called the Illuminaughty Sexy Devil Costume and it comes with the dress, horns, tail, sleevelettes and leggings, which means that it is a complete costume, save for the shoes. I found this on eBay for $75, but this costume has been available for quite some time…

I really don’t dislike this costume very much, there’s actually some thought in the style, the accessories and the overall look does work quite well, at least as the model here is showing.

I’ll say that it isn’t the worst thing I have seen in some time, but not the best either by far. I do get a bit of a disco Succubi thought from this, perhaps that will amount to something eventually…

I will also say that the tail is about the worst part of this costume, the horns are terrible, which either is a good thing or a very light condemnation, depending on your point of view of course.

Really there’s not a lot to change here, save for the tail, which I would, and the horns, because I have better ones by far.

I’ll give this two and a half out of five pitchforks.

It’s… average.

Sometimes you can’t expect much more than that…



Mar 22 2016

A Review of The Last Succubus by Marquis Woolford

The Last Succubus by Marquis Woolford

The Last Succubus by Marquis Woolford

I fail to understand why it is that some authors cannot take the effort to edit their stories before publishing them. It serves no useful purpose to write a story and not take the time to make it read better, to fix structure and tenses, and, most importantly, stop the work from reading like a runaway train that gives the reader not a moment to pause and reflect on what has happened so far.

The other thing that I cannot quite understand is why, as core to the story, there has to be almost constant violence and along with that a particularly off-putting description of the age of the main character which, when coupled with what they are, turns me off completely.

  • Title: The Last Succubus
  • Author: Marquis Woolford
  • Length: 27 Pages
  • Publishing Date: April 23, 2015
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It is the story of:

Chastity was an angel who gave up Heaven for love and was betrayed. Now she’s on Earth disguised as a young prostitute taking down evil men, all while being hunted by both the Devil…and God!

Chastity is a Succubus, known by those that are aware of her as the Mother of Succubi. She gave up Heaven, then Hell and now lives on Earth trying to bring to an end the evil around her. Sometimes that’s not as simple as it sounds. Sometimes it can mean the loss of more than you could know.

There are, to be honest, many problems with this work, not the least of which is Chastity’s apparent age. I’ll just say that she isn’t drinking age, not by any means, and as such when the story turns to some ugly sexual situations I was extremely uncomfortable with them. I did not like the use of a tremendous amount of violence, did not care for all of the death and destruction, and, most of all, I didn’t find that I cared very much about any of the characters and that didn’t need to happen.

To be clear, setting aside Chastity’s age, which is the only thing about her that really bothers me, she’s interesting, has purpose and a past that she knows. The connections between her and the other characters in the work are quite good and I liked the reveal at the end of the story which told of Chastity’s real identity and that of another character.

I liked the story away from the evil characters, which were completely stereotypically evil. I liked the story when it wasn’t telling about Chastity being used and abused before she took revenge of those that did so. I didn’t mind the events when they made sense and weren’t simply a reason to have someone die, someone get hurt, or worse. There is, really, a story underneath all of this “action” which is really muted to the point that it can’t really come out well. But it’s hard to find it among all of the sidetracking into shock value storytelling.

The other problem with this work is that it needs more editing. There are many tense errors, word errors, spelling mistakes, several words crushed together that they didn’t make any sense. The work reads very much like it was published with not much attention put into making the story a better read by fixing the errors for one. For another, the way it reads leaves no time to pause and figure out exactly what is going on. There’s no pause in the story, no moment where things calm down for an instant. What does happen is that there are a massive number of characters introduced one after the next. Many of these last for barely a page before they are removed from the story.

And that’s the real problem here. The work seems like a series of short scenes that are barely connected through Chastity’s existence or tangentially to her. The race to get to the last page means that not a lot of time is spent getting to know them. There’s too much “show” and not enough “tell” by far.

I can’t say that any of the erotica, and there is a smattering of that in this work, appealed to me in the slightest. Again, there’s more shock value to that here than actual story, or for that matter, emotional connection with the characters when it happens.

The works ends on a cliffhanger which tells of series to follow. But here’s where I have a problem. If the author actually wants readers to continue, they had best fix their mistakes, edit their story and help the work to become what it could have been and not what it did.

Just really disappointing considering the book’s description and the promise that I saw in it.

One out of five pitchforks.

The background story is interesting, the violence, blood, and overall destruction is not. There is a story here, one that actually did interest me. But that interest disappeared very quickly and it shouldn’t have. I will give the second work in the series, if it actually does appear, a chance, but after reading this work I have little hope that I will enjoy it any more than I did this work.



Mar 22 2016

A Review of The Dark Queen Returns by Dou7g and Amanda Lash

The Dark Queen Returns by Dou7g and Amanda Lash

The Dark Queen Returns by Dou7g and Amanda Lash

A review of the third work in the Succubus Apprentice series today on the Tale. You can find my review of the first work in the series here, and the second work in the series was reviewed here on the Tale recently.

The thing about being on a quest is that, sometimes, you can’t quite tell those around you what it is exactly about. Sometimes that’s for your own good, something that’s for their’s. When the affairs of the heart are involved, keeping secrets can lead towards more than a misunderstanding. When that involves a mage and a succubus, that’s a real problem for them, and everyone around them.

  • Title: The Dark Queen Returns
  • Author: Dou7g and Amanda Lash
  • Length: 32 Pages
  • Publishing Date: March 18, 2016
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The story is about:

In this installment of “The Succubus Apprentice” Edmund continues his war for books with Phil the Ogre and his girlfriend, Amy, by his side. Then Megan the former Dark Queen of Demons, who was also the object of his unrequited love, returns. Hijinx ensue.

Edmund’s quest for books finds itself a little sidetracked through Amy and Phil, but things get more complicated when Megan appears out of thin air with Kendra nearby. Something’s up, but there are distractions keeping them all from the truth. Perhaps the one thing that ties everything together is Manhattan after all?

The work is every bit as smart and funny as I have come to expect things to be, perhaps a bit more than that really. The wit in the dialogue is wonderful, the story being told so very well. There’s a bit of a mystery still unfolding and with Megan and Kendra returning to Edmund and the rest, the complications get a bit more so.

It’s that mystery that starts making them question each other, worry over boyfriends and girlfriends. There’s a little tension here and there that feels right for what happens and that tension I think added some needed depth to a few of them. The singular question is that of what Kendra is planning and when things slip a little, Megan’s reactions to that were completely what I would have expected her to do.

The thing that I wonder about is where Megan and Kendra have been. That’s really not told and I think there’s a reason for that. Megan’s a little different in her personality, as is Kendra and for that matter, Helen as well. Some of this may well be from being, to greater and lesser extents, succubi in nature, but there’s something more.

That said, the work is just a fun story overall, telling about what Edmund has been up to, what’s happening with his relationship and that of Phil’s and others. There’s a neat little tie into the events that happened earlier in the series when Kendra and Helen went to Manhattan, which I thought was cute. There’s even a little bit of succubus mind control in one scene that made me smile.

There’s a good deal of focus on Amy over most everyone else, and it told a lot about her, what she’s feeling, what she deals with when Megan returns. Having that gave something that I think was missing. Purpose. Where that goes could be good or bad, depending of course.

Another well written, smart, and funny chapter in the series by this author, one that made me smile. I would have loved a little more time spent with Megan and Edmund, perhaps a bit more with Helen and Amy. The teasing in both scenes was delicious, but there’s a little serious tone as well that might have been explored a little further than it was.

Four and a half out of five pitchforks.

It’s just wonderful to see the entire group together, if only for a moment, and then on their own paths again. The mixing of desires, goals, and most of all, just human nature, whether human or not, is what I love the most about the series. There’s something afoot and when, not if, Megan figures out what Kendra is doing… there’s going to be a problem between lovers that might not be fixed with a kiss.



Mar 21 2016

Rebirth By TeraS

I was ready to write that this may well be the shortest, or one of the shortest stories I’ve ever shared on the Tale … That’s not a bad thing, in all honesty. My heart pointed out to me that every phrase in this scene suggested a thousand stories, every one of them bringing a moment of …


By TeraS


The Lake of Fire is something that all who visit the Realm know of, have heard a story or two about, and cannot help but visit.

To describe a deeply blue lake that seems to stretch onto eternity from the shore, upon which the waves break, caress, and then withdraw wouldn’t be that hard to explain. However, attempting to put into words how the foam isn’t foam but rather tongues of red and gold flames that swirl and play among them is a little bit more difficult.

On this particular day, she was resting on the golden sands, her red bikini not quite getting sand in uncomfortable places yet as she watched the tide roll in. Occasionally, she would pick out a flash of red, or white, or some other colour that seemed to peer out of the surf and waters, regard her and then vanish once more.

Pushing her sunglasses down her nose slightly, she peered over the edge of her frames and wondered why the lake was so wild today. Usually there was a placid sheen across the waters, so smooth that, when the light was right, one just could make out the skyline of the Realm mirrored there. But not today. It seemed like there was a storm within the waters, something that was causing things to be different. The home of the Tails was in upheaval. The question was … why?

Moments later, Tera had kicked off her sandals, tossed her glasses to the beach beside them, and made her way to the surf along the shoreline. The waters and their flames licked around her toes. It was the place where two worlds collided, but also embraced each other as one.

As she waded in further, the waters slowly crept up her legs, soon wetting her bikini bottoms and turning them black. A bit further and her tail was beneath the waters, the colour shifting from red to a particular shade of black that was legendary. Further still, and the waters caressed her curves, soaking her top and turning it as black as night just before she kicked off the sandy bottom and started swimming out further into the lake. Some of her hair had turned red now, the flames of the water licking at her hair, her skin. The caress was that of multitudes, all trying to please her, guide her, draw her to them.

Well out from shore now, she took a breath and then disappeared beneath the waters, a wide ripple marking her passage as she did so. Beneath the waves, her hair was red, a beacon in the depths around her. The passage from the Realm above to the Realm below coincided with a shift from Tera … to Tail.

She arced around in a wide circle, her eyes growing accustomed to the darkness in which her kind, the tails of the Realm, existed. A place where they awaited their return to the world above, to rediscover, or discover, that there were always possibilities. She dove deeply, the waters turning darker with the shadows of tails around her, the waters still and at the same time vibrating with tails and the power they held. After a time the darkness began to give way to a light far below her.

Moving towards the light, the waters still held tails, their numbers growing larger and larger. The surface beckoned before her, the light sparkling in wait for her to draw close. She came to the moment of breaking through, her hand about to pass through the division between the water and the air. A black tail came out of the darkness, entwined itself around her waist and began to pull her away. She looked for the one that was holding her back, stopping her from continuing … and found no one there … for it was her own tail that was calling her away. Then a red tail joined the black. Then a green, an orange, more and more came to her, holding her fast and pulling her away from her goal. She struggled, fought to break free, to find her answer, but could not overcome the sheer number of tails that encompassed her and drew her elsewhere.

The light faded away, the darkness returned and still she struggled. Then the light came back, the darkness faded and she ceased her battle with them. The surface came closer, then she found herself breaking the water and took a breath of air again.

She floated there, her red hair around her, looking at the Realm before her, the waters still churning about. Her tail broke the surface, the tip looking at her, then darting below the water again, waters broke, and she faced … her.

From afar, if there had been someone there to witness the moment, it would appear that an ebon-haired woman looked towards the other with hair of fire. If someone had been close enough to see, they would realize that the two looked like twins, echoes of each other, save for their hair, horns, and when they appeared, their tails:

the same, but not …

…opposites and mirrors of one another …

… the one of the past reborn in the one of the moment.

They drew close, their hands reaching, touching, their lips drawing closer until they touched. A burst of power, of the love that encompassed each with the devotion that burned within the other, burst from their moment, rippling over the waters and turning them calm and still once more. The light reached the shoreline, spilled over it, and then, when it faded, there on the beach she stood, looking out into the Lake and smiling softly. Her tail wrapped itself around her waist, the unspoken meaning a simple one that she well knew.

The promise was within each of them, filling their world of the Realm, surrounding them always:

the past held in the moment of the present …

… the present embracing their past …

… the future being shaped by them both …

… the moment bringing with it … rebirth.

Mar 20 2016

A Review of Scarlet Dreams by Jeanna Pride

Scarlet Dreams by Jeanna Pride

Scarlet Dreams by Jeanna Pride

A review of a new series today which has an incubus as the main character. There are some themes that I simply do not enjoy. Abuse, pain, suffering and so on, do nothing for me regardless of how the story might be presented. I cannot find a way into such stories and when this all is wrapped around a domination theme, my view becomes quite a lot dimmer for reasons that shall remain my own.

There are some things that lurk within one’s soul that are very dark indeed. But the darker truth is when the light is taken away and all that remains is the darkness inside.

  • Title: Scarlet Dreams
  • Author: Jeanna Pride
  • Length: 24 Pages
  • Publishing Date: March 12, 2016
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The story is about:

Mandy, a bored and frustrated Manhattan housewife realizes her dark fantasies when she takes control of her husband and releases her frustrations in a very sexual and dominating way, all with the help of Incubus.

There is a darkness in the human soul that attracts incubi. It calls out to them and in that comes the soul itself in which the darkness needs to consume. But also with the soul comes the heart and the mind. Never are they alone in the decent to darkness.

The singular theme of this work revolves around domination and that being very dark, brutal, and heartless most of all. While some will enjoy these themes, personally I couldn’t find my way into the story once Mandy’s darkness came out and the suffering for another began. Before that point the work was interesting, it told the story from a rather unique perspective from the incubus and I thought that worked exceptionally well.

It was when the “erotica” started, when Mandy encountered the incubus that the story started slipping away from me. Really the darkness was on the edges, a temptation. Then the work moved into the dominance theme, the pain, suffering and control through that along with the humiliation and that’s when the story came apart for me. I can’t accept the abuse of a submissive. To me that’s an abuse of trust, at the best, a crime at the worst.

But the work is billed as a dark story, and it really becomes that at the halfway point. There’s nothing of light to be seen, no hopes, only sheer domination of one character in every possible way which involves some sort of abuse and belittlement. The thing of it is, at least in the frame of mind of the main characters, is that it makes some sense. By that I mean the lead up to that point makes what follows reasonable for all of the characters, regardless of how awful some of those moments are.

The ending of the work leads towards the next work in the series, but also brings up a question about Mandy herself. I feel like there’s a hint she might have taken the first step to becoming a succubus and that brings up some questions as well. Being there is a dark tone, and how the incubus acted, I really hope she won’t be stereotypical and that the incubus himself can prove to be less so than he was in this work.

The writing is quite good, there is some character development, even it I found it to be a little uncomfortable at times. The erotica didn’t have any heat for me, and being so the story had to support my interest. Half the work did so, the other half lost me along the way.

Two out of five pitchforks.

I didn’t care for the pain and suffering, even if it was deserved. The characters aren’t attractive to me, though there is the thought that Mandy might become a succubus in the next work, which might be interesting. I’ll give the next work in the series a look, but the darkness and pain so far makes things a difficult read when I can’t find my way in.