Jun 21 2016

A Review of In Judgment of Della by Glen and Vivian Gilbert

In Judgment of Della by Glen and Vivian Gilbert

In Judgment of Della by Glen and Vivian Gilbert

There are some stories in which you must, always, be paying attention in order to try and define what is happening in the story, the characters and the world around them. Regardless of how convoluted the characters’ thoughts may be, to how odd the events might seem as they transpire, focus on understanding what matters is important.

The loss of a loved one can change you, your view of the world, and what everything means to you. Your wishes can, at times, get the best of you, and sometimes they get the better of you. In the end, what is real and what is your perception tells the real story.

  • Title: In Judgment of Della
  • Authors: Glen and Vivian Gilbert
  • Length: 47 Pages
  • ASIN: B019AHMW68
  • Publishing Date: December 11, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells of:

Widowed Irish Watchmaker copes with life during WW2. A customer disappears, his apprentice explodes and the spirit world beckons. Nature abhors a void–and so his long suppressed passions challenge his very soul.

Albert is making his way through a world that is at war. But that war isn’t just the world, but within himself and how the world is seen through him in the wake of tragedy. Events conspire to bring about the impossible and Albert is given a choice to make.

The work is focused upon Albert’s perceptions of the world around him in the wake of his wife’s passing and how much that has effected him. It isn’t just in how he seems himself, but more it is the way his desires and needs seem to be reflected in the world around him and how the events that he is drawn into change him slowly through the story.

At one point the need Albert has for his wife is expressed in an event which turns the story into something that is bit confusing at times, but regardless of that, the almost constant wishes that Albert reflects on push things onward.

There is a character who seems to be a succubus and likely is one, but isn’t quite expressed in the work as actually being one. But the signs of horns, a tail, and an overwhelming sexuality seem to point towards this conclusion. She draws Albert towards making a choice which has consequences, and in being so, makes the conclusion of the story very poignant.

There is no actual erotica in the work, there are moments of passion and need, but this is not an erotic tale, it is meant to tell of a loss and the events that come when the world is at odds with itself.

The writing is very complex and a reader needs to be paying attention throughout the work otherwise it is very easy to lose one’s way in the middle of the work and not be sure about what is going on. This is because Albert’s internal monologue and perceptions are twisted, changed, altered. There are moments where reality and fantasy become very blurred and it is very easy to be confused. Much in the same way, I felt, that Albert is throughout.

I think a bit more clarity in the story would have been nice, perhaps a longer, more involved ending as well. It was a little abrupt of an ending and I didn’t feel like it did the rest of the work well by being so.

Three and a half out of five pitchforks.

Possibly one of the most unique stories I have read in quite some time. A bit difficult to get into and to stay with at times, but that has more to do with How Albert’s perception twists events around him. The inherent overwhelming sadness sets the tone throughout, but the ending I think makes up for that to a large extent.



Jun 21 2016

A Review of The Incubus Journal: Chapters 3 & 4 by The Mad Hatter

The Incubus Journal: Chapter 3 by The Mad Hatter

The Incubus Journal: Chapter 3 by The Mad Hatter

Concluding a review of a rather short series about a man being transformed into an incubus and what happens to him. You can find my review of the first two works in the series here on the Tale, if you’d like to know my thoughts about the start of the series.

Editing matters. It isn’t enough to tell a story, the writing needs to flow, there needs to be some kind of structure. There shouldn’t be a need to retell the preceding parts of the series, over and over again. As well, there needs to be a clear plot, strong characters and some focus. Not having this, and having the underlying story being a good one is a problem.

The third work is:

  • Title: The Incubus Journal: Chapter 3
  • Author: The Mad Hatter
  • Length: 8 Pages
  • Publishing Date: June 19, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells of:

Douglas’s powers continues to grow and so does the changes to his body. After spending a little time considering his powers, fate or something else, decides that he needs to use them again on some unsuspecting delinquents.

Chris continues to change, his powers and knowledge evolving as time goes on. An encounter with a mysterious woman leads to the discovery that the universe abhors a vacuum and Chris will be the one to fill it… in more than one way.

Much like the first and second works in the series, the third leaves a lot to be desired with regards to editing overall. There is a plot, but getting to it through the odd writing style, the uneven dialogue, and, yes, the actions of the main character at times, I found to be a problem.

Each work is so very short as to not allow for a lot of development, but irregardless of that, there is erotica. The problem is that the series seems to be so focused on the erotica that when the real background about what is going on appears, when there is a story to be told, it really isn’t. It’s also a good idea to remember what your main character’s name is as well.

The third work in the series has a number of issues, not the least of which is the appearance of Rose, a succubus, who speaks to the main character, touches him, but isn’t described. It’s unclear if she is actually there or not and this makes for a lot of confusion as to what exactly is going on.

That said, the writing needs a lot of editing because the story wanders aimlessly for the most part and when something does happen, there’s no focus and no direction. The main character’s voice seems to be dumbed down more and more as their transformation continues as well. There are a series of transformations as well, but they don’t make a lot of sense either.

While it’s clear that a measure of justice is done in what happens, the aftermath is confusing and unclear. I have the feeling that these are a series of moments vaguely tied together towards in trying to get back to the main story.

There isn’t any erotica to speak of really in the third work, which means that the story has to carry things along. But it really doesn’t. Spelling mistakes, grammar mistakes, and overall how the text reads just doesn’t work. There is a hint as to what’s going on, a direction for the series to go in. But this part of the series is as short as the rest, so there’s no time to have more than cardboard cutouts for the minor characters before the story ends with a question that leads to the fourth work in the series.

One out of five pitchforks.

The Incubus Journal: Chapter 4 by The Mad Hatter

The Incubus Journal: Chapter 4 by The Mad Hatter

I really want the author to go back and edit this entire series into a single volume. I’d like them to edit the story so that it flows better, reads better and there is, overall, as much story as there is erotica. There is a balance that’s needed to bring out what is, really, an interesting story, but it just can’t really come to the fore here.

The concluding work in the series needed to explain what’s been going on, try to draw the threads together and make sense of everything. While it did manage to explain some of that, it left a huge plot hole behind which needed to be filled.

The fourth work in the series is:

  • Title: The Incubus Journal: Chapter 4
  • Author: The Mad Hatter
  • Length: 13 Pages
  • Publishing Date: June 21, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells of:

Doug now has a sizeable harem forming. His four former attackers now sexy females who are enslaved to making his life better. Turns out one of them had been wealthy and what had once been hers is now his. Doug now wants to push his powers just a little more into the should be impossible, wanting to try out somethings he read in his hentai days. Rose finally explains what the hell is going on with him, and even gets some action.

Chris discovers that he is an incubus, that Rose is a succubus, and his life will never be the same again. Darkness calls within him now and what happens next will be by his hand or that of the darkness that is within him now.

Like the rest of the series, this work needs a serious editing. There’s no flow to the story, characters appear out of thin air, nothing is really explained. The focus is on the sex, which really isn’t so much erotica as it is a smattering of short moments tied together with vague commentary. The writing is very uneven, needs polish, and if that happened it would make this a far better read.

The appearance of Rose, the main succubus character, is, much like all of the other characters in the series, is told by glossing things over, offering a hint of her character and then tossing her aside for the sake of moving onto the next sex scene and transformation. There’s really nothing told about Rose, there’s nothing explained about her and even the singular point that matters the most to the main character isn’t explored.

Another issue is that the main character’s name changes as the story progresses. This is a huge problem and reflects the lack of editing on the author’s part. Telling a story is one thing, telling it well is something completely different. This work, like all of the rest of the series just doesn’t make the best of what is an interesting plot hook.

One and a half out of five pitchforks.

I’d like the series to continue, to get past the novelty of what Chris is now and move onto what that means. There’s something more going on, really that’s what I find interesting. Being able to transform others and use their lust is one thing. Explaining why is where the story is. I want to see that.

Erotica alone is not a story. Transformation alone is not a story. Calling someone a succubus, or incubus, is not a story. Connecting the dots is. If the author can do that, and do it well, then I think there’s something good here. But as it is now I just can’t find it.



Jun 20 2016

Quiet By TeraS

A story with at least somewhat of a connection to reality today. At some point along the way, we all need some sort of place to go and gather ourselves—a place to try, as one can, to find that calm, that missing part of oneself. Sometimes all any of us needs is a bit of …


By TeraS


There is a place in the Realm which is known formally as the Realm Retreat. Few have been there, know of it, or, for that matter, really understand what is there. Some believe that it must be some kind of grand palace, fit for the Queen and her King, an estate at which they hold gatherings for important beings, tend to state business, and so on.

The truth is far more important.

There are a few places in the universe that intersect: points in space and time where two or more realities overlap, more or less. Where this happens, something special comes to be. That something can take many forms, many possibilities. Regardless of all else, that place is special to those that know of its existence.

Many years ago, two linked souls searched. They wanted to discover something special: a spot in which they could go, be away from the hustle and bustle of the city and their lives; a place for him to fish—for that was his only other passion; his soulmate came first—a place for her to rest, occasionally sunbathe, her own passions being more of a moment’s respite before continuing on with their lives. They had searched for quite some time, having seen many a place nestled in a wood, near a stream, over by some hills. Nothing really quite was right, called out to them, suggested that they had found what they had been looking for …

… until, of course, they found what they were looking for.

Many years ago, they signed the deed, agreed to the deal, and, in time, came to own that which they had been searching for. Over time, they brought into the world a family, one in which they all came to visit, doing the things that family do. The family grew, the children became adults and, in time, they married. They and their soulmates would visit, sometimes alone, sometimes with the other souls to whom they were linked.

Time passed, things change, as they do. But one thing never really changed very much: the place they all thought of as their sanctuary. It was a small, white cottage with red-trimmed windows, a single chimney to one side. A long pathway led from the water’s edge to the welcoming door. A dock at the water’s edge hosted a white boat bobbing in the waves. All of it formed the reality of a cottage, on the edge of a river, where a family grew.

In the Realm, there are many streams and rivers to be found. Some of these are set aside, never to have buildings beside them, so as not to disturb the tranquility. Others have a smattering of places where, at some point, someone thought they would be a nice spots to be.

Some distance from the Palace—at least a good three or four hours away by carriage, or car, or other such transport—stood a bridge, straddling a deep chasm. If one was so inclined, if they were travelling upon that road, and cared to look over the edge of the bridge, they would notice a river flowing beneath. Few knew the river had a name, fewer still knew that if one was to find themselves a boat, or canoe, or kayak, and travel in one particular direction, they would find themselves bobbing in the waters by an island with a cottage situated there. A small white cottage, by the way, with red-trimmed windows, a single chimney to one side, a long pathway leading from the water’s edge to the welcoming door, and a dock at the water’s edge, hosting a white boat bobbing in the waves. All of it forming the reality of a cottage, on the edge of a river, where a family’s dreams grew.

Each year the family would gather after the passing of the winter and make their way to the cottage, to the annual opening of their place of refuge—or, as some would say, retreat. This year, however, the time came and passed, the cottage not feeling the presence of those that normally came there. Time passed, the cottage still waiting. Then, finally, one day, the little white boat came around the bend, across the bay, and made its landing upon the sandy beach there.

Three souls were there. The fourth, who had been there from the first day, was not with them. The soul that was linked to the other for so long … seemed to be alone. Not alone in the sense of being there by himself, for he was accompanied by another pair of linked souls, while the echoes of the first two were very clearly felt.

They all set to work; there were things to be done. The dock was pushed into the waters, the boat tied up neatly there soon after. Windows were opened, the cottage aired out after the long winter’s nap. Linens were changed, dishes washed, all of the minutia of setting things out for the new season there undertaken.

The day continued on, some problems being addressed, notes made for things to do on the next visit. A pause for lunch, some memories shared, the cottage protecting those within as a single rain cloud made itself known for a time.

Afternoon came, with a father and his son gathering their things for a bit of fishing on the river. An embrace was shared and then they untied their boat, set out on the river, and disappeared from her view.

In both worlds, a ebon-haired woman came down to the dock soon after. In one world she had a pair of red horns in her hair; in the other, they were only visible to those who knew how to look. In both, she carried two chairs to a specific spot on the dock, setting them up there. In both, she returned to the cottage, then came back carrying two tall glasses of iced tea. She placed one on the chair to her left, then settled into her own chair, looking out over the river.

She began to speak, talking about the day, the travel to this sacred, important place. She mulled over her thoughts as the sun caused little diamonds of light to play over the river’s waves. She looked out towards the last place she had seen the little white boat disappear around the river’s point.

She continued to look there, sometimes sipping her iced tea, sometimes speaking again as the thoughts came to her. In one reality there was no one there beside her in the empty chair with its refreshment resting there. The other was slightly different.

As she looked over the waters, the outline of a woman came into view, the chair once empty now the resting place of a visitor. The visitor looked at the one beside her, listened to the stories. She smiled, frowned, sometimes shook her head, but said nothing as the red-tailed one continued to talk and sip at her iced tea.

The sun continued on its path across the sky, the day turning slowly towards the night. As the sun touched the horizon and began to set, the little white boat came into view once more. She remained where she was, watching them return, the small worry she had for them both leaving her. The boat glided to the dock, bumping against it.

“How was the fishing?”

The older soul replied: “Nothing this time. But it feels good, like we’re all here.”

The younger soul asked: “Had a good time?”

In both realities, the ebon-haired soul turned to look at the empty chair beside her, the glass there as empty as the one she held in her own hand.

“We had a quiet day together.”

Jun 19 2016

A Review of Devilish Desires by Monica-Jay Allen

Devilish Desires by Monica-Jay Allen

Devilish Desires by Monica-Jay Allen

Succubi can be used, and are quite often used, as the means to drive a story in a particular direction. The most common of these is, of course, to draw another character into some kind of sexual situation and then the story unfolds from there. Along with that, at least I hope, should be something about the succubus herself, what she wants and what her story is.

That doesn’t happen when the succubus seems to care only about the sex and nothing more. While that is a story point, and can be used to tell a larger story, it does tend to make the succubus be nothing special overall. Character development is important after all, but then so is telling the entire story and not leaving something behind untold.

  • Title: Devilish Desires
  • Author: Monica-Jay Allen
  • Length: 29 Pages
  • Publishing Date: December 11, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells of:

Prince Leandro is living in a world where humans have to be wary of magical creatures, witches, and demon-like creatures. One such lives next to Leandro’s own castle. She is a succubus, a demon-like woman with a tail and horns and a sexual hunger that could kill. She is determined to take away everything that Leandro holds dear; his soon to be throne, his life and the lives of those whom he cares about most. Can anything be done to combat this evil temptress? Will Leandro simply fall prey to her clutches like many before him and allow her evil beauty to consume him?

Leandro finds himself confronted by a succubus that desires one thing from him. The encounter ends with neither of them getting what they want, exactly and Leandro’s life changes and not for the better. A long journey unfolds with the help of a dear friend and the interference of the succubus. But a gamble taken might tip the scales, but the cost may be more than Leandro is willing to pay.

The work is a mixture of an adventure, coming of age, hidden love, and questing which work well together overall. Leandro and Kylie, the two main characters, are really quite a lot of fun when they are together in that there is a connection between them, but neither of them are really quite able to express that. Leandro starts out being somewhat innocent, but his encounter with the succubus changes his life, his connection to those around him, and in doing so his personality changes. In some ways, the same can be said about Kylie, but from the perspective of her moving from being there to being something more. The twin paths as they unfold are really well done and I liked that aspect of the work.

The succubus, Rica, is somewhat of a stereotypical succubus in that all she seems to really care about is having sex with men, specifically Leandro. She’s “evil” but why, or how, really isn’t explored very much. Rica’s scenes are focused upon her sexuality, how Leandro responds to that, and then what her reactions are. There’s not much told about why Rica makes the decision that she wants Leandro save that he “made her feel different” and that seems a bit thin as a reason. I would have liked to know more about Rica, perhaps to see things from her perspective as the story unfolded more.

Save for her initial appearance, a fleeting tease, and once more at the climax of the work, Rica isn’t very present in the story, even if she is important to Leandro and Kylie’s stories. At times she seems a bit like an afterthought, though she really isn’t considering what she has done to Leandro and the decision that Kylie makes. The other missing part is at the end of the story, Kylie does something and it isn’t told what happens to Rica in the aftermath. Much else is told, but that dangling plot line isn’t and it is a rather strong presence in the conclusion.

The erotica is three hot flashes, the last I felt being more focused and enjoyable than the first two were. Considering what that last bit of erotica meant, it needed to be so and I was happy to see it unfold. The scenes with Rica are interesting, mainly for her comments and what happens to her, but there is a slight touch of succubus mind control that I would have liked to see brought out more than it was.

The writing is quite good, though there are a few minor spelling mistakes here and there, and at least one conversation is a little confusing as the words, if they were spoken out loud, just seemed odd. While the main story, that of Leandro is told, there are a number of subplots that started out, but didn’t come to their conclusion. The most telling one being about Rica herself. Perhaps the author might have been well served to just tie up that last loose end for the sake of completeness as the ending wraps up the story well otherwise.

Three and a half out of five pitchforks.

Overall a good coming of age story with two main characters that are told well and have their own stories to tell. There are some points in the story not tied up at the end, there’s one major question never answered as well. A story that reads very much like a anime series adventure in a way but also offers something more.



Jun 19 2016

A Review of Urge of the Demoness by Alana Sanford

Urge of the Demoness by Alana Sanford

Urge of the Demoness by Alana Sanford

Succubi can be many things. They can be evil, indifferent, or mischievous among other things. To have them simply “do” without having a reason can be a problem. It isn’t enough to have a succubus character just so something for the sake of doing so. There needs to be a reason, some kind of meaning. Really more than anything there needs to be something more than simply a series of sex scenes tied together loosely.

Transformation, mind control are two themes that can be used. But that alone isn’t enough, there needs to be something to possess the main character to do the things they do. Even if the reason might come to a succubus that knows her way around a stripper pole.

  • Title: Urge of the Demoness
  • Author: Alana Sanford
  • Length: 16 Pages
  • ASIN: B01H7TRF7M
  • Publishing Date: June 16, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells of:

I was once a man, a great accountant. I messed with fire and she messed back. I summoned the demoness to give me back my youth. Will she give me back my manhood? Will I remember it? Will I even want it back?

Greg wants things as they were so long ago. Summoning a demon seems like the best way to turn time back for him. But Cheresse has other ideas and Greg soon finds that being young is one thing. Being Jasmine is something all together different.

The story is mainly focused on Greg summoning Cheresse and how she takes control of things. Eventually that leads to Greg being transformed into Jasmine, the telling of an encounter with his roommate and then the twist in the story comes from there. Overall the plot has its moments, there is some nicely written succubus aspects to Cheresse and overall she doesn’t seem to be very stereotypical as a whole. She is very persuasive, there are some hints of succubus mind control, some domination and overall Cheresse is interesting as a character.

Possibly the single part of Cheresse’s initial appearance that I liked the most was her taking control of the situation and when Greg suggests Cheresse has a stripper’s name, she demonstrates her talents about one. That single scene made me smile and I found myself liking Cheresse quite a lot, hoping for her to be more than just a means for the gender swap.

The erotica is a pair of hot flashes, one very short and having little heat, the other a bit longer but, again, there’s a lack of real heat as well. In one case that has a lot to do with Greg, post transformation as Jasmine, and her reluctance to do what Cheresse wants her to do. It’s awkward, uncertain, and as such that did work well all things told.

By the time the climax comes, and what Cheresse really wants is revealed, that leads to a twist in the story that wasn’t expected. While that worked, and made sense, it happened so quickly and left really no time for the story to do anything with the event. It does allow for a bit more succubus mind control, which points towards another work in the series to come and that could be very interesting.

The work is short, really there needed to be a bit more time spent on Cheresse, more focus on Jasmine’s internal struggles as well. But most of all, the sudden twist and then rapid ending of the work was disappointing. That could have been drawn out more, become a bit more solid that “this happened, moving on” which bothered me.

According to the book summary, this is the beginning of a new series. Cheresse is interesting and where the series goes from here could either turn into a series of porn movie level erotica or it could be something more than that.

The writing is good, the erotica could use more heat. The characters are interesting, certainly Cheresse is, Greg/Jasmine as well. The dialogue needs some polishing, but overall it sounds good and each character has a clear voice. But it is a short work and really it could have been at least another ten pages long to really develop the story and actually set up the series better. As well, the author needs to name this series, that would be helpful.

Three and a half out of five.

Hopefully a series will come out of this, the opening is interesting and shows some promise. I will be looking to see what happens next if nothing to see how good a stripper Cheresse might really be.  After all, seduction is but one part of being a succubus. The other is in bringing about the desires of another… whatever they might be.



Jun 18 2016

Still another neat Morrigan Aensland Speedpainting YouTube

Another quite interesting speedpainting YouTube by an artist of Morrigan Aensland. Really very lovely, a neat composition, and as a whole, an image of Morrigan that I think expresses her character quite well…

And if you cannot see this video on the Tale, please try this link: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LKIjtEI1CKM

As always, here is the completed art as well, in case it vanishes from YouTube…

Morrigan Aensland by Cyndy Bell

Morrigan Aensland by Cyndy Bell

The artist, Cyndy Bell, posted the completed art on DeviantArt here and you can find their artist’s page here.

Just a wonderful smile and expression that Morrigan has in this art… I also love her pose, how the entire art just expresses the mischief that Morrigan has within her. Simply adorable and the best art of Morrigan expresses that in the best ways…



Jun 17 2016

A Review of The Haunted Cottage by Robin Macavity

The Haunted Cottage by Robin Macavity

The Haunted Cottage by Robin Macavity

There are some works which, just in their language, how things are presented, and the characters themselves, which can bring about some confusion. Perhaps not so much in the story itself, but trying to place the time when it is set. Expecting a story set in the past, because of the characters themselves, and then discovering that it is set in the present can be jarring.

Part of this is, I will admit, that this work is the second in a series and I did not read the first book beforehand. If I had done so, I might have seen things a little bit differently.

The telling of a story well means to must keep the interest of those that are listening to your words. To be able to do so is a gift, but as well it is a gift to know when the story needs to move on instead of extending things a bit too far.

  • Title: The Haunted Cottage
  • Author: Robin Macavity
  • Length: 18 Pages
  • ASIN: B01992Z1GM
  • Publishing Date: December 10, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells of:

Once again, the occult investigator Richard Polari gathers his four closest companions to recant the tale of his latest adventures; a most riveting tale of a genuine intrusion of unearthly forces, and the remarkable gate through which they have entered our world.

A story about a man, an incubus, and the events that transpire between them. Not everything is exactly as it seems, but then the most interesting encounters are more than they are at first glance.

The work is told in a rather formal British way which gives the impression at first that this work is set in the past, but in truth it is set in the current day. That confusion continues throughout the work because there’s an odd mixture of the past, the strange and the modern. It is a little bit confusing, but that mostly comes from I think the language that the main character uses to tell his story.

He speaks in a very formal, very proper manner and in doing so the story becomes a bit convoluted and odd at times. As he is telling a story to a group of close friends, it can be understood that he is doing so for the sake of telling a good story, but the language reads oddly for being so formal in nature.

That said, the story is a description of the events that he encounters to answer a question about a place where, it seems, an incubus is having his way with willing men that he encounters. It’s actually quite a fascinating read in that the approach he takes, the way he goes about things is very detailed and paints a strong picture of the events that unfold.

The erotica does’t have too much heat in it, mainly because those moments are told in the same, proper, British way. It reads a bit clinical and being so reads a little strange at times. Still, the same can be said about the majority of the work in that the words are complex, almost clinical, and the passion behind them are, for the most part, hidden.

The explanation of way things happened as they did was, I felt, a bit thin. By that I mean the way the incubus found themselves where they did was such a random thing that it bordered on the impossible. It was a completely unexpected answer, and being so I give full credit to the author to think of such a thing, but it felt a little disappointing.

The work’s tone and language set out things well, there isn’t a lot told about the main character, or those he is speaking to however. Possibly the most time spent in that comes from the description of the incubus himself when he is revealed. There are a few minor spelling mistakes here and there, but they do not take away from the work overall. Still, my initial confusion when the story began and when I thought the work was set was troublesome and I wish it hadn’t been.

Three out of five pitchforks.

I feel that the story itself was really very good and the storytelling was as well. But the extended nature of the story, the odd mixture of proper English which didn’t quite make it clear that this story was set in the present, added a bit of confusion that was difficult to overcome. Still, an interesting story of the supernatural and one that I liked for being so.