Mar 27 2016

A Review or The Succubus and The Incubus by Yonder

The Incubus by Yonder

The Incubus by Yonder

Two works for review today by the same author on the Tale. But there’s a bit of a problem in doing so. For the first I was able to read it. The second was… not so much so. The first is somewhat confused, has little focus, and overall is just a rather depressing story overall. The second I can’t even describe, because there was nothing to read.

Telling a story generally means having a plot, having characters that you want to know more about as a reader, and perhaps most importantly, there needs to be some kind of focus in the story. If that’s missing, then the overall work is lessened. Sometimes to an extent that leaves one wondering what they read when it ends.

  • Title: The Incubus
  • Author: Yonder
  • Length: 106 Pages
  • Publishing Date: February 24, 2016
  • This work at

It tells the story of:

Meet the Incubus, seductive, strong, and sensual with all the other qualities you’re looking for in a man. He has it all ladies, and he is willing to please. He comes to you in a dream; being everything you need him to be. He will have you surrendering, giving in to his every whim, before you know it. Just be careful. Your first night with him may literally leave you breathless. Everyone is left in unbridled fear as bodies of young women are piling up throughout a small Arizona town. Many of the women are left in compromising positions as their bodies are drained of all life. Mynah Hill is hot on the case and she is resolute to solve it. The new Black Bird Detective, Mynah is a determined woman and a brilliant detective. With her cleverness and her knack for solving crimes, she has been lauded as one of the greatest Detectives in her small town of Glendale, Arizona. Will Mynah be able to solve the murder before it’s too late or will she end up with the worst fate? Find out inside.

An incubus stalks his prey as a detective tries to solve the murders that are rampant. But the truth takes her in an unexpected direction. Sometimes knowing the truth isn’t enough, not for the one responsible or for the one looking for justice.

The work is less about the incubus than it is about what happens to Mynah as the story unfolds. There’s so much more focus on all of the women that are involved in the story than the incubus himself and that’s a little disappointing.

There is but one short series of paragraphs when his true form is seen, a scattering of his past is told and then the story moves back into his finding pray, having sex with them, which has very little heat in it, and then their passing on. While from time to time his thoughts are heard, and they are somewhat remorseful, that just doesn’t ring true much of the time. It’s confusing as well, not really having focus, and being so there’s really not a lot to hold me into the story.

The work overall is morbid, sad, and depressing for all of the characters. There’s nothing of joy or being positive to be found. It’s just a slow downward spiral for Mynah and others, the incubus just appearing from time to time to add a bit to the story before vanishing again.

The story is confusing because it seems like there’s something going on around Mynah, but that’s not really focused on and when the ending arrives, that too doesn’t make a lot of sense overall. There’s a gap between the start of the work and where it ends that bothers me. It’s like there is a lot of missing information that was either left out or edited away.

The incubus himself seems to be quite stereotypical as well, what happens with him happens often, his appearance, his true one, at least as much as we are told of, seems to be stereotypical as well. He just wasn’t interesting as a character, being rather two-dimensional overall. Much the same can be said about a lot of the other characters as well, they fitting into a lot of roles that are familiar.

My overall problem was that I didn’t find my way into the story, I didn’t really care about any of the characters. There was no heat in the sex scenes, they really can’t be called erotica in all honesty. It’s just a work with no heart, no passion and nothing that I enjoyed. It’s a shame because the plot summary I thought offered something and it could have worked well. But it didn’t.

Two out of five pitchforks.

I just couldn’t get into the story, I didn’t care about what was happening all that much. There wasn’t a lot of time spent with the incubus himself, so he’s less of a character as a result. The ending didn’t connect well and the flow of the story felt much too scattered. I hoped for something more because of the plot summary, but in the end the plot summary was promising something not to be found really here.

The Succubus by Yonder

The Succubus by Yonder

The other work this author has published is about a succubus, and like the first work the plot summary seems to be interesting. It promised a lot, I wanted to read that story, to see what it was all about. But then I ran into a problem, one that has not been corrected by the time of this review, and as such I have little choice but to rate this work as I will be.

I have to expect that authors will do some checking to see if their work publishes correctly on Amazon, really that’s not a difficult thing to do. More so, I expect that when someone states there is a problem, it should be looked after.

  • Title: The Succubus
  • Author: Yonder
  • Length: 106 Pages
  • Publishing Date: February 24, 2016
  • This work at

It tells the story of:

A high profile murder has the town of Cold Creek reeling with fear. With victims piling up, the pressure on Raven is heating up. Trying to prove that she is still a competent Detective, Raven is desperately trying to find the murderer who has their town by the throat. Her investigation reveals something so sinister and frightening, it leaves everyone questioning reality. Raven and Adrian are faced with something that they have never seen before. Leaving them with the burning question, “How do you arrest someone who is supernatural?”

I can’t tell you a thing about this work at all. The main reason is simply that I could not download anything more than the cover and one single page of the work. That single page consists of a short line of text and nothing more. I’ve tried repeatedly to get a copy of this work through Amazon which I can read, but to no avail.

When I manage to get a copy of this work, I will review it.

UPDATE (28/03/16): The second work was reuploaded by the author, but I still cannot read it. They have been in contact with me, I have emailed them, and I am hoping for a resolution to the issues i am having being able to read their work…



Mar 27 2016

A Review of Lilith by Paul Cavedaschi

Lilith by Paul Cavedaschi

Lilith by Paul Cavedaschi

There are some stories that, from the very beginning, make it impossible to like the main character. In doing so, that turns things from being ‘want’ to being ‘forced’ By that I mean there are unlikable characters, they are a part of storytelling and have to be there. But making every thought, action, expression, and concept that touches them something which only serves to make the reader wish the story would get to the point sooner isn’t really a good thing.

It’s also not a good thing when after all of the experiences, the character doesn’t change at all. As well, it’s not a reward for the reader to come to the end of the story, find all of the questions about another character are summed up in a single word and then the story closes. It feels like the reader is cheated somehow and that’s not an enjoyable thing.

  • Title: Lilith
  • Author: Paul Cavedaschi
  • Length: 202 Pages
  • Publishing Date: February 10, 2013
  • This work at

The work tells the story of:

Men are bastards. Malcolm Scott, medical doctor, from Bangalow, Northern NSW, couldn’t agree more. After all he is one. At fifty, he has a midlife crisis, and goes on walkabout—no, he does not go bushwhacking in the hot outback of Australia: he surfs internet sex dating sites. He doesn’t just want an affair with a younger woman–that would be too clichéd. He wants to have sex with as many women as possible, to live an erotic life, to escape the humdrum reality of modern civilisation. He wants to live out all the erotic desires he has repressed his whole life. He wants to smash the whole misconception of monogamy altogether–and to do so without his wife finding out.

But online, He finds perhaps more than he bargained for—a woman who calls herself ‘Lilith’ and never shows her face grants him three erotic wishes—he can have whatever his heart desires, providing he can answer one simple question: what is it that women want?

The first thing I will note is that this work very much has the same tone as the summary given in that the main character Malcolm, is completely unlikable, has no redeeming features, has lost his humanity, cannot make a connection with anyone. What makes this unmistakeable is a single conversation with a patient of his, seeing his thoughts as that unfolds, and knowing that he has a heart of darkness which, no matter what the story accomplishes, will never change.

This then, more than all else which the story touches upon and tells about, serves to set Malcolm’s path in the story, how dark things become, now little love, if any, there is. At times he is amazingly stereotypical in his thinking and actions. As the main character of the story, his approach to things, his thoughts were, for me at least, the most difficult thing to get past. Even when the story finally turned in the direction of Lilith and her mystery, that fell pray to Malcolm’s darkness which consumes all here.

Lilith herself, throughout the work, isn’t really more than a shadow, a voice, a thought. She’s insistent, commanding, in a lot of ways, but in that comes the problem. The Lilith of his work is, in many ways, every bit as dark as Malcolm. She has very few redeeming qualities, and in being so, that adds another layer of indifference that is hard to get past. When she finally appears, fully, even then, at the climax, there’s nothing there to bring all of that came before into some sort of focus and bring a point to the work.

The work, as a whole, is difficult to read for the simple reason that listening to all of Malcolm’s negativity about himself, the world, and all that he once cared about, just gets old very fast. There’s not a whit of positiveness anywhere from any character and this just serves to drive Malcolm onwards into Lilith’s hands. Even where there is an inkling of erotica in the work it cannot overcome the blanket of darkness that exists throughout. There’s a need, a dire one, for a single bit of light to make things hopeful, at least for me, but that doesn’t happen here.

The work is a long read as a result, tending towards having to take breaks from it because the darkness of the characters emotionally is very draining. There is such a thing as being sarcastic of course, even a little dark, but when every single moment of one’s existence comes to that, and nothing more, it’s just sad.

The work does reflect an attitude that has become more prevalent over time, notably with the rise of the internet and dating sites and so on, which take up a good part of Malcolm’s journey. That of there being a barrier between souls, and that making the other not seen to matter so much. When we do so, we ourselves are lessened for it.

The end of the work, when it arrives, hints at much, could have given a lot, but instead, when the truth comes, the reader doesn’t see that, only Malcolm does and we are left with a single word that ends the story. It was disappointing because after all that transpired we are given a rote answer which leads to nothing and in which Malcolm has not changed at all. The answer as well, I don’t particularly agree with, but some might. Nonetheless, I was disappointed that after all of the journey the story is tossed away with a question and no real answers for anyone.

One and a half out of five pitchforks.

Too much internal strife and hurt for my liking, an ending that was a disappointment, and, as a result, one of the most difficult reads I have had in some time…



Mar 26 2016

Another neat Morrigan Aensland Speedpaint YouTube

A cute Morrigan Aensland speedpainting YouTube today on the Tale. Sometimes the neatest image of Morrigan are the ones that look so simple and yet have so much going on within them…


And if you cannot see this video here on the Tale, please try this link:

And, as always in case YouTube removes the video, here is an image of the completed artwork as well…

Morrigan Aensland by neeneejb1

Morrigan Aensland by neeneejb1

While this might look like a “simple” piece of Morrigan art, i think there’s quite a lot of detail as a whole. Beyond that, that expression of Morrigan’s really works well, shows her personality, and is the icing on the cake of some art that is wonderful.

A little sexy, a lot of cute, and just a lot of fun… All really good things…



Mar 25 2016

A Review of Sacrificed to the Succubus by Phoebe Yearns

Sacrificed to the Succubus by Phoebe Yearns

Sacrificed to the Succubus by Phoebe Yearns

A minor rant today about a work that, at least for me, I found to be uninteresting, lacking quite a lot of heat, a D/s story that really doesn’t understand what that means and, most of all, has a title that makes one expect something and then does not deliver.

When someone writes a work, and then titles it with the word “Succubus” a reader expects, at some point, there should be a succubus in the story. When there isn’t, that simply means there’s nothing of interest in it for me at least.

It tells the story of:

When Emma pledged to Sigma Eta Xi, she knew she was in for a wild ride. Especially when her first task as a new member is to sacrifice herself to Kade, the sexiest man she’s ever met. When the whip comes out, she’s not sure if she should run and hide or submit to what is sure to be the best sex of her life.

Emma pledges herself to her sorority and finds that she has to submit to the whims of the head of a fraternity on campus… and submit she does.

This isn’t a story about any kind of succubus whatsoever. There’s not a hint of one, not a suggestion that one might appear. What this story focuses on, when the build up is over, comes to a fantastical version of a D/s fantasy which, at least in my eyes, has not a clue what that means.

It’s extremely male dominant, which would be fine except I don’t care for how Kade acts, what happens to Emma in his hands, and more importantly, the entire wrongness of the scenes where Emma is forced to submit… over and over again.

What really gets me most of all is that there is a suggestion of a safe word and then Emma is silenced so she cannot say it, cannot express that she doesn’t like what is happening. This is a huge breaking of trust and it’s what completely turned me off of this story.

Any heat that had been building to that point was taken away and what came afterwards just didn’t sit right with me. While I understand that this is fiction, there are limits to what I can accept in any sort of BDSM story and in this case it goes too far for my own tastes.

Adding to this, as I noted, the complete lack of any sort of succubus appearing turned me off further still. There is a huge suggestion in the title, and for that matter the sub-title, that I expected someone to be a succubus in the story. That didn’t happen and as such this work is, sadly, a disappointment.

Zero out of five pitchforks.

Didn’t care for the story, didn’t care for the outcome, but most of all the thing that turned me off was the complete lack of anything succubus in nature within the story. Now, at least by the title, this might well be the first work in a series, and as such I’ll revisit this I’m sure when the next work appears, but if there isn’t a succubus in that work as there was in this one then I most certainly will not be reading further.



Mar 25 2016

A Review of Just Prey by C.P. McClennan

Just Prey by C.P. McClennan

Just Prey by C.P. McClennan

A review today of the first work in the Savannah series by C.P. McClennan. While this is a science-fiction adventure work, there’s an interesting undercurrent in what two of the characters are capable of. In some ways, they have a bit or a succubus or incubus nature, even if that mostly extends towards sex and what happens afterwards. But they are not, and yet they are.

There is a question which asks not why things are, but why you choose as you do. Nothing is constant, sometimes your choices do matter. Sometimes caring is the choice that matters most of all.

  • Title: Just Prey
  • Author: C.P. McClennan
  • Length: 181 Pages
  • ASIN: B00SF29LY6
  • Publishing Date: February 10, 2015
  • This work at

It is the story of:

Savannah was lied to. She didn’t want him killed. When she saw him again, in a Chicago sex club, she knew she couldn’t go through with it. In fact, she abandoned her mission to try and stop it. These humans were not supposed to be kind or passionate. They were supposed to be just prey.

Savannah isn’t a normal woman. It isn’t that she likes sex, and a lot of it. No, Savannah’s an alien on a mission. But not all missions go as planned. Love shouldn’t be part of it, but it only takes one human to get through to her and make her reconsider. But there are forces who care not about humanity, Earth, or for that matter, what Savannah wants. Savannah needs to choose and choose well.

Savannah, the main character in this work, is an alien, but there’s an interesting aspect to her in that she has, in some ways, similar abilities to a succubus. She possesses a little bit of mind control, she feeds from sex. She also kills those she is intimate with in a rather gruesome manner. There is another character who acts in a similar fashion, is male, and could be thought of as an incubus as being so.

The need for sex, both human and alien, is a constant point throughout the work, many times taking up entire chapters in what Savannah does with others. Thankfully the author doesn’t keep Savannah’s character development to the sex alone. Over time there’s a little bit of humanity that comes into her, changes her character to a point, and it is an important one.

While that story is told, parallel stories come about other characters, their lives interweaving together. To do so the work flashes back and forth in time on Earth, some of those moments causing moments in history to unfold in a rather unique perspective. This, overall, is where I have some problems with the work. The shifts in time also involve different characters, and occasionally events occur from one time and perspective, then a moment is told from another a day prior to that event. It becomes confusing very quickly and I found myself having to scroll back and forth in order to piece the story together, to understand why and what was happening.

The work ends in a rush, events spiral out of control and some of what happens is very sad and, overall, felt like an afterthought. It does lead into the next work in the series, in, again, a flashback method that seems a little odd. Still, it reveals something, offers a hint of what it to come and that seems to be interesting.

I am not sure the constant flipping back and forth through time worked for me. There were several points were I was confused about things and had to go back a chapter or three to figure out what was going on and why it matters. Some of the sex scenes were rather lukewarm in tone overall, occasionally the actions taken by Savannah and her quarry in the work just didn’t work as well. The feeling of coldness from quite a number of minor and major characters made it hard at times to actually care about what was happening to them.

There is a strong undercurrent of loss, of losing hope at times. There are some bright moments, Gerard, as a character, I thought was very interesting and character-wise was an equal to Savannah herself. The loss in the work comes from the lack of emotion, of caring at times, some of the actions that Savannah and her quarry take. While that can be said to reflect an alien view of things, the change in Savannah as the story unfolds didn’t quite get to her passions, save for one pivotal scene.

I think some more time spent on Savannah’s past, more than the fleeting moment told, would have helped a lot. I think her relationship with Gerard should have been explored more. The connection is there, but it gets glossed over in the rush to tell the story overall.

A bit more editing, there are a handful of spelling mistakes, a few bits of dialogue that don’t sound right somehow. A little more heart in Savannah than we are told about and I think I would have liked this a lot more. Good, interesting scifi with a little touch of succubus mythos and I thought that was rather unique. It’s just a very complex read with an ending that left me wanting.

Three and a half out of five pitchforks.

The shifting in time becomes a little confusing as it happens so frequently. While that is a means to telling the characters’ stories, there are so many questions left behind for the missing parts of the story not told. The work coming to follow this one, Darwin’s Sword, I hope will be some more time spent on background, fleshing out more about Savannah, about the universe around her. The work is interesting, but somewhere along the way a little hope in the ashes would be good.



Mar 24 2016

Succubi Image of the Week 427

Something a little bit different today on the Tale for the Succubi of the Week… There are not, as a whole, that many Succubi in comic books. Fewer still that I happen to like as characters, or what they look like. It’s nice to find some art of a Succubus that does, in a lot of ways, make them appear to be something more than simply stereotypical.

Kalli by Tsuzukikun

Kalli by Tsuzukikun

This work is of a Succubus character named Kalli and is by an artist on DeviantArt called Tsuzukikun. You can find the original page with this art here and this artist’s page can be found on DeviantArt here too.

I like her look as a whole, though that she seems to be missing horns is a slight disappointment in a way. Interesting outfit, lovely expression, and I do adore her tail which I think works really well with her overall look. It’s also a neat little touch that the colour of her outfit matches her tail and wings.

It’s nice that she has “normal” skin tones and as such it’s just a better overall look than being red all over would be. She seems more… whole… I think ts the only way to express things here. There’s a sense about her that she isn’t the typical Succubus and, as always, for me that’s what I like to see in Succubi…



Mar 23 2016

Shiny, but what else?

Illuminaughty Sexy Devil CostumeI’ve often admitted that I love shiny costumes. Really they are my favourite kind and in being so there’s a certain level of sexy and seductive that just has to be part of things. For the most part, I don’t think that’s very hard to manage. But that’s not to say that tacky can’t rear up and take things down several levels…

This is called the Illuminaughty Sexy Devil Costume and it comes with the dress, horns, tail, sleevelettes and leggings, which means that it is a complete costume, save for the shoes. I found this on eBay for $75, but this costume has been available for quite some time…

I really don’t dislike this costume very much, there’s actually some thought in the style, the accessories and the overall look does work quite well, at least as the model here is showing.

I’ll say that it isn’t the worst thing I have seen in some time, but not the best either by far. I do get a bit of a disco Succubi thought from this, perhaps that will amount to something eventually…

I will also say that the tail is about the worst part of this costume, the horns are terrible, which either is a good thing or a very light condemnation, depending on your point of view of course.

Really there’s not a lot to change here, save for the tail, which I would, and the horns, because I have better ones by far.

I’ll give this two and a half out of five pitchforks.

It’s… average.

Sometimes you can’t expect much more than that…