A review of a new series, or what the author promises to be a new series called Vanity Mae about a rather different succubus with some interesting personal quirks and issues to work out.
But there is a rather pointed issue which bothers me about this work. Part of that comes from assuming that the note in the book summary of this work being set in a universe where humans meeting succubi is an everyday thing is fine, but that’s not said in the story itself. The other part of things that bothers me is that, at one point the main character is said to be “shy” and yet later in the work she’s also noted to be “disinterested” at her partner. There’s something off about that, at least to me. The two sides of Vanity seem to not make sense somehow…
- Title: Vanity Mae and the Electrician
- Author: K Tucker
- Length: 13 Pages
- ASIN: B01DWM7CG2
- Publishing Date: April 5, 2016
- This work at Amazon.com
It is the story of:
Vanity Mae is a succubus. In a world where monsters and humans live together, the life of a monster who gets power from seducing humans should be easy, right? The only problem is, Vanity Mae is hopelessly clumsy and shy.
When the lights go out in the kitchen of the apartment she shares with a part-angel hybrid, Vanity Mae has to call the electrician. To her surprise, the electrician that arrives when her roommate is at work is actually pretty cute! Will Vanity Mae finally get the power she craves? Or will she crash and burn?
Vanity is not your average succubus. She’s shy, which is a problem, she’s liable to make a lot of mistakes, which is a little more unfortunate. But most of all, her slightly ditzy personality makes her a bit of a pain to her roommate. Still, she is a succubus, if not the best in her own eyes, and when she’s attracted to the man that came to fix her lights, she can’t help but take advantage of the opportunity.
The work is very short, really a hot flash with a good deal of story and character introduction leading to the erotica itself. It’s fun, cute, and passionate when the moment arrives and I liked that most of all. The story isn’t written in a way that it makes no sense, Vanity’s efforts to nibble on her handsome prey are exactly what they should be from all that is told about her at the beginning of the work.
Vanity isn’t stereotypical and for that alone I am so very pleased. There’s no “evil” in her, really she’s very much a lost lamb looking to find her way, if she’d manage to get out of her being so shy and try to be a little more outgoing. There’s a moment when her own needs take over a bit, but even so, she’s still a little shy, a little clumsy, and a little bit unsure of things at times. She isn’t perfect and that, for her, is perfectly fine.
As the work jumps directly into what’s happening with her, there’s a bit of confusion as the story unfolds. Vanity’s tail is visible, always. Her roommate is part angel and glows. When the electrical arrives, she’s not at all surprised by what Vanity looks like, tail and all. While this is explained in the book summary, the author doesn’t mention this in the work itself. It’s an important point because some of the events don’t make a lot of sense unless you are aware that in this universe it’s not uncommon for humans to meet, and live with, supernaturals beings.
The other thing that’s a bit unclear is what exactly succubi, and for that matter, incubi need to feed upon. It doesn’t seem, at least from Vanity, that they kill others, or take souls, but it’s a little unclear. It might have been nice to define Vanity’s needs a bit more than they are.
Which brings me to a bit of a conflict in my thoughts about Vanity herself as the story comes to a close. Her thoughts seem to shift away from being shy and become more… succubus-like I think would be the best way to put it. She has a need and now wants to indulge in it. While there at the end her shyness coming back, it just felt wrong when she was “bored” with her partner and started thinking about where she would go for her next nibble.
The erotica is lovely, I enjoyed Vanity’s attempts at seduction, her needs as they grow within her. The telling of her using her powers to her advantage is well done and I liked that a lot. But Vanity in the midst of feeding is a lot different than Vanity in the midst of playing a video game and I’d like that to be explained because it isn’t here.
Lovely writing, Vanity just made me smile. The ensemble characters were a lot of fun and the story offers a lot going forwards from here. I’m hoping that Vanity remains herself, shy and all, but perhaps gains a little bit of confidence. Or at least her balance.
Three and a half out of five pitchforks.
As cute and wonderful as Vanity is, the work is very short, really leaves a lot of detail suggested and not played out. The seduction that Vanity falls into is really well done, cute, and quite a lot of fun. Really, Vanity is a wonderful character. The thing is, the author teases her, offers a delightful personality, and then kind of loses that by the end of the work.
Perhaps there will be more time spent within Vanity herself in the next work, assuming the author takes the plunge and continues this series onwards. There’s no question that there’s talent here, the characters are wonderful. The thing that missing is developing all of the ideas offered and not leaving them aside for the erotica itself.