Aug 16 2016

A Review of Power Hope Futility Oblivion by Michael Stewart

Power Hope Futility Oblivion by Michael Stewart

Power Hope Futility Oblivion by Michael Stewart

Story matters. I have said this many times in my reviews and being so there are some works where there is story, characters, and a sense of purpose. I’ve never really liked vampire novels, to be clear, but when one appears that has Lilith as a Succubus, then that is one I do have to read and see how she is portrayed.

And that’s the thing isn’t it? It is the characters, who they are, why they acts as they do, that drives story forwards. It isn’t enough to have something happen without explanation however and when it does that causes some problems.

  • Title: Hope Futility Oblivion
  • Author: Michael Stewart
  • Length: 215 Pages
  • Publishing Date: January 31, 2016
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The work tells the story of:

Federico’s, one of the Ancient vampires, life is about to change radically. His entire world will soon be uprooted and devastated by a horrific war between two squabbling sisters. The fate of the entire world hangs in the balance and in his hands.

The past always comes calling, even if you are Lilith and are the beginning itself. The world can be yours, to do as you wish, but there are always those who must oppose your will for that is who they are. Even at the cost of the world itself.

This work is, overall, an interesting mix of the supernatural with some aspects of science fiction and adventure mixed in. For the most part told from the first-person, the work tells a complex story that sometimes loses its way here and there. In spite of this, the characters have clear voices and personalities and in that the author’s strength comes through.

Among all of the characters, Lilith appears in this work and she is described as a succubus, has some of the sexuality of one, but acts more like a general in control of her world dealing with plots and forces which continuously confront her. There’s really very little of Lilith being a succubus, and I found that a little disappointing. However, she has a wonderful personality, I love her occasional quips and how she relates to those around her.

Lilith is a Queen, but she’s more than that. She cares, in her own way, about those around her, the world as a whole, and tries her best as she can. That’s not a simple thing by any means, and seeing her decisions and actions does leave some questions and concerns, but then all such things do over time.

There’s no erotica to speak of, really there need not be because the story doesn’t call for it. But it is necessary to focus on the work and not be distracted because there are little threads running throughout and must be paid attention to.

There are some minor editing problems with this work, mostly some apostrophes missing here and here. But the real issue comes to the dialog which reads very unevenly. At some points there is style and presence in the words and in others the characters sound more like robots than individuals. As well some of the descriptions of event sound odd, mostly how things unfold and aren’t quite explained well. Details are missing, some important ones at times, and that left me trying to piece together what happened exactly and why.

But the single problem that took much of my enjoyment of this work away was the ending. After all of the time spent in telling the story, with all that transpires, the ending is sudden, isn’t explained, and leaves much to interpretation. A single sentence ends this work and it really shouldn’t have. A cliffhanger is fine, and there is one, but the final line of the work was a sentence too far.

Three and a half out of five pitchforks.

Overall an interesting mix of the supernatural and science fiction which works quite well. Lilith was complex and I liked that she was. However the ending bothered me, I expected more considering how much effort went into the work overall and that took away quite a lot of my enjoyment.

There appears to be a possibility of a follow up to this work, though that isn’t clear by any means. If so then my opinion will change I think, but until then, the ending just didn’t work.



Aug 15 2016

And Now the News… Part V By TeraS

It’s been some time since the news has been on the Tale. To get back up to speed, you might want to visit this page on the Tale where the prior four parts of this story can be found. It is time for Paige to make a choice. Whether it is her’s alone or someone else’s is debatable.


And Now the News…
Part V
By TeraS


“There is no such thing as a deal without loopholes.”—As said by Tera to a soul seeking solace.


Thrall lay entwined with Need, their bodies slick and damp, fingers lightly stroking each other’s heat, the lit pots of fire around the circumference of the room being reflected from the oil upon their bodies. The delightful feeling of skin warmed in the oil, hair slicked back, and the sheen from it all making their bodies sleeker, more sensual, more powerful.

Song lay nearby, her soft melody drifting upon the air, coating the two in passionate blanket, a second skin around their bodies. Reclining with Song was Goddess, a soft smile playing upon her lips. She watched the two lovers, then lightly kissed Song’s shoulder, making her voice quiver in pleasure. Then she arched an eyebrow, as if something had disturbed her.

Song felt the change, her voice almost catching in the midst of a verse before continuing. Goddess had explained what was to come, about her Song being all-important when the moment came. Song came and her aria flourished as Goddess wished.

Need’s lustful tonguing paused. She looked towards Goddess, who gave a slight nod, causing Need to dip once more into Thrall’s sex, making her moan and quake, the bliss and pleasure overcoming the change around them. Goddess had explained what she needed, what Her Need was.

Thrall was in ecstasy. She was Hers, like Song, like Need. The part of her that was Paige felt every caress of Need’s tongue and fingers, the heat of their legs scissoring, the wetness of her sex. She was enthralled, as Goddess commanded she be; Her Thrall would obey. Her eyes were closed, her voice quailing in joy as Need—and her own need—brought her fires to their peak. She wanted this, needed this, for all time, for always. Then, on the edge of orgasm, one that she needed, begged for, desired as her reward from Need, a single word from Goddess froze Thrall … and Paige awoke. She turned the tables on her lover, her Need: where once she was being served, she was giving. Her fingers caressed her lover’s nipples, her tongue played with her love’s own. She pressed herself tightly, not wanting to lose this moment, to hold her love in her arms.

She had years upon years to make up for. As she slithered towards her lover’s sex, her body shaking in need to taste and pleasure, Goddess spoke: “It’s time.”

Paige whimpered slightly. She didn’t want to leave, didn’t want to abandon the Need long forgotten and now here. She took a purple nailed hand in her own black nailed one and lightly kissed every finger. The sound of her lover moaning in joy made Paige’s heat blossom, burn, become a flame inside of her.

Her lover purred: “I’ll be waiting.”

That promise alone was enough for Paige, at least for her to disentangle herself from her lover and turn towards Goddess. She did not need a command—Thrall’s knowledge was part of her as she was part of Thrall. Her place was with Goddess, that place that had been hers always. She stood, proud to know she was Hers, and walked across the red marble floor towards where Goddess and Song awaited.

It was only a moment later that Paige knelt, legs open, sex bare, her eyes ravishing the sight of Goddess and her Song entwined together. She remained there, watching, a blissful smile upon her lips as her lover padded to her. Paige managed not to moan as her lover teased a finger along the black collar she wore. Then her lover took the last few steps, crawling onto the collection of pillows and satin sheets where Goddess and Song observed her. Paige’s joy at watching her lover meld her body against Goddess and Song’s own was delicious torture.

When Goddess spoke once more, Paige-Thrall listened intently: “Whose are you?”

“Yours, Goddess. As was written, as was meant to be, as should have been.”


She hesitated: “I … I was guided, mislead, turned away.”

“What do you wish?”

This was a longer pause. Paige thought about this carefully—at least, she tried to as she heard her lover’s voice mewl in pleasure as Goddess licked: “To be free.”

“What of revenge?”

The answer came from Thrall, but Paige accepted it without question: “It is not your way, Goddess.”

The smile was breathtaking: “True.”

Goddess draped her right hand towards Paige, her fingertips glistening red, Goddess’ colour. Thrall knew what to do. Paige inched forward enough to rub her cheek against Goddess’ fingertips. It was the first contact she had with her Goddess, something that she had been needing, whimpering for. The crescendo that blew through her body and soul, the release of her own need to be loved and accepted by Her, made her sex drip and Paige couldn’t have been more thrilled to know that she was.

Goddess loved her.

Paige remained there, her cheek nestled against Her hand, eyes closed, lips parted slightly, as both Song and Need served Goddess and her Thrall. She felt hands over her skin, the tightness of her marks as Thrall being applied to her, the wanton power of her service to Goddess being encased and bound.

Opening her eyes, Paige regarded her Goddess, draped in red, Her clothing seemingly painted onto her skin, Her lips in a seductive smile, Her so-green eyes glinting, the power of Her own seduction palatable in the air. Goddess offered Her Paige, Her Thrall a hand: “Rise.”

Paige’s hand found her Goddess and she stood as commanded. Thrall’s form was perfect, as it was meant to be. The light played off the latex that covered her body: deepest black, from her heels that she stood upon, arcs of light caressing her shiny black stockings, skirt, corset and long, black opera gloves. But greatest of all was the thrum of Goddess’ power rippling over her collar, the joy of knowing she was Thrall.

Goddess began to purposely walk from her sanctuary, holding her Thrall’s hand, their heels clicking on the marble floors as they walked to the elevator at the end of the hallway. Like before, the doors opened without a command. She followed Her within and the doors closed. The descent was longer than the ascent was before, she thought, unsure as the Song had made such things unclear in her memories.

When the doors opened again, it was not in a lobby. The space was deepest black. Goddess entered, still holding her hand, and, once the doors closed, Paige was invisible in the darkness. Thrall was blacker than the black that surrounded her, but she did not fear: the red of Goddess shone brightly in the dark, a beacon upon which Paige locked her eyes.

Goddess released her hand and then waited. Whether any time actually passed or if it was centuries, Paige didn’t, couldn’t know. All she needed was to look upon Goddess in her red and be calm.

A voice then came out of the murky depths that made Paige tremble: “We claim ownership!”

The bemusement in Goddess’ voice made Thrall quiver: “Oh? Do you?”

The voice answered: “She belongs to us.”

Goddess turned to Paige: “What is the truth?”

The Song within her formed the words, the Need pressed her to give voice to them: “I was Hers. I was meant to be Hers. Never yours.”

The answer made Paige tremble. Thrall kept her eyes upon Goddess. They both looked into so-green eyes that loved and cared. She heard the Song of passion in Her voice, they listened to the Need to be with her.

“You have interfered!”

“No more than you did when you took away her right to choose.”

“We gave her purpose!”

“At what cost? She was never given the change to choose.”

“She is ours!”

“No. She is another’s.”

The truth in those words found their way directly into Paige-Thrall’s soul. She was.

She was Need’s, because she was needed.

She was Song’s, because the song was incomplete without her.

She was Goddess’, because she was wanted, not to serve, but to just be.

She was Thrall, because she was enthralled with being part of something more than she, herself, alone.

How could anything compete against those truths?

Aug 14 2016

A Review of Forbidden Fruit by Alana Church

Forbidden Fruit by Alana Church

Forbidden Fruit by Alana Church

It’s been a little while since my last review of The Succubus series by Alana Church. Today on the Tale, the sixth work in the series so far. My first review is here, the second is here and my third review cab be found here. The fourth review can be found here on the Tale with the prior review to this one being here.

There are choices to be made in everyone’s life. Who you trust, who you care about, who you love. There is meaning behind every single one of those choices and all that comes from them. Family matters, in that comes not a choice, but a truth. The choice however is how you relation to them and how they relate to you.

The work tells the story of:

Althea, the first of the succubi, has been freed, released from her prison inside Rachel’s mind. Now her family must learn how to accommodate the beautiful woman in their midst. Driven by passion, haunted by the threat of the demon-spawn Kincaid, Rachel and her family must work together. But before they kill the demon who desires their death, there is still time to taste…Forbidden Fruit.

Althea is herself once more and with that comes some difficulties to deal with. Being a succubus, being who she is, sex to her is like breathing. She loves unconditionally, she watches Rachel and her family work out their own relationships, but Althea has her own needs as well. But among the desires comes the knowledge that there is a threat to them all and defences must be made. Even if some of them happen to be difficult ones to accept for some.

This work in the series is a complex telling of the shifting of of the family dynamic with Althea’s return to her own body. That’s not to say that things change drastically, it’s more of the shift of focus from Rachel alone to both Rachel and Althea. How Althea deals with the family, with those that have been drawn into events is quite telling about her. She does make amends with regards to one specific character, which then leads towards some very deep and painful moments for them. Opening old wounds, even if unintended, does cause harm.

Rachel’s force of will is still strong, she holds her own with Althea and she’s clear in her being who she is. There are moments of Rachel and Althea pleasuring each other, which has some lovely heat, but the more interesting dynamic is that between Josh and Althea. With that came an interesting little tidbit about succubi tails in this universe, one that I hadn’t thought of, but makes perfect sense. I’m looking forward to seeing what Rachel does with hers sometime.

There are several pieces of erotica in this part of the series, all of the couples have their moments together as well as some of them having moments with Althea as well. There’s a glaring omission of one character in all of this, but the reason for that makes sense and having something happen in this moment of the series would have felt, by far, wrong. The heat in each passage is very good, the need and desires are well brought out in each character. There’s also quite a lot of sexual tension that remains unfulfilled which makes for some very good moments of dialogue between the characters that I enjoyed.

As an aside, there’s a teeny little passage that happens to mention Althea’s sisters… one of them happens to have red horns and dark hair. That, along with a certain exclamation of Althea’s about her sister’s “titties” made me smile and wondering about her. She might never appear, but knowing that she’s there was a wonderful moment for me. It was a really nice moment to have Althea talk about her past, her family and while that was but a small part of the overall story, it added a lot to her character and a bit about something she longs about.

The characters develop further, the story moves onwards towards the next crescendo. But in this work the time spent in piecing together what everyone is thinking, settling some of their thoughts and concerns is important. After the action of the prior work, the thoughtfulness of this part of the series worked well.  A pause before things take a turn is a good thing and in this case that time isn’t wasted by simple introspection. There’s a point to it, there’s need and it helps to redefine the relationships which the series needed to do.

Written as well as always, the author’s grip on the characters allows for exploration of them. I’ll admit to having wanted a bit more seen of Kincaid, the glimpse allows for knowing his plans for the future, but I feel like there’s more about him that needs to be said. Beyond that, the only other thing I would have liked is a bit more time within Althea’s thoughts and her focusing upon the effects she’s having on those around her. She sees some of them, but might be a little blind to the important one.

Four and a half out of five pitchforks.

A lovely interlude which adds quite a lot to who Althea is, what is going on around her and more. The blending of the lives around Althea is leading towards a bit of strife, a bit of thought, but that also leads to understanding. That’s the most powerful thing of all. Knowing their own strengths and being able to face what is coming is difficult, but that’s nothing compared to trying to figure out what’s going on within themselves.



Aug 14 2016

A Review of Sacred Lust: Maiden Training by C.P. Brickhouse

Sacred Lust: Maiden Training by C.P. Brickhouse

Sacred Lust: Maiden Training by C.P. Brickhouse

It’s important when telling a story that the characters remain true to who they are throughout. Losing who they are for the sake of some erotica doesn’t make for a well told story. Along with that comes the need to create a universe in the story which makes sense, allows for growth, and most of all, tells a story. If an author can manage to connect the dots in the right way, then what comes from that can be amazing.

The thing about being a Queen is that everyone’s problems come to you. Whether you like it, or not, you are the one in the end that makes the decision, sets a path, and deals with the consequences. However, it also means that you also have to be wise in both the ways of the mind, but also the heart and soul.

  • Title: Sacred Lust: Maiden Training
  • Author: C.P. Brickhouse
  • Length: 108 Pages
  • ASIN: B01AOJM5S6
  • Publishing Date: January 14, 2016
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The work tells the story of:

Lilith Belili, the sister of the Demon Lord Asmodeus, rules in his stead while he is away. However, circumstances in the Realm of Lust have become routine, and she is bored. When a vassal requests her presence to combat a threat involving civil unrest (and a would-be lover), Lilith, along with her handmaiden Dumuzi, see the chance for some long-awaited excitement…as well as numerous opportunities to use their formidable seductive skills.

Lilith has a problem. She’s bored and that’s never a good thing for someone that is known as the Demon Queen. Still, a call for help might help her mood, along with some fun and games with her favourite toy of course along the way. It can be hard to be the Queen, but then again, it’s fun to be the Queen too.

From the first page of this work, it is very clear that the author has taken quite some time to create a universe, the characters, the meaning behind them, and tell a story about the characters themselves. While there are some erotic moments in the work, really this a story of fantasy, telling of Lilith and her dear Dumuzi dealing with the world they live in, the threat that comes towards them, and how that all plays out.

There isn’t a focus on erotica alone, nor is that forgotten along the way of telling the story. There is depth to each character, they have their own wants, thoughts and goals. Not one character is two-dimensional and that appealed to me in the most wonderful way.

Lilith is, as you would expect, the Queen Demon of the story and while she is a succubus in her world, she rules with seduction as her means of control. She isn’t evil as a whole by any means and being so that makes quite a lot of her actions turn towards thinking and finding answers rather than by brute force. Lilith is a force to be reckoned with, there’s no doubt, but it is in how she uses her abilities to control, tempt, and then bring what others desire to the fore.

It was a pleasant surprise to see Lilith be a seductress, one with a quick mind, a sharp wit, and the realization that it is better to seduce and have something given freely than to take it by force, or worse, cause pain. That is a rare thing to be seen in a story like this, and in doing so this work became much more than I expected it to be.

Dumuzi, a leser succubus, is Lilith’s favourite and how their relationship is told to me speaks of a love between the characters. Again, that’s something special and wonderful and it becomes core to the story over time.

There is a smart, well told adventure which mixes with Lilith using her powers of seduction to find answers and then making a plan to deal with them. Along the way there is quite a lot of erotica, but it makes sense, isn’t silly or makes the characters be other than they are. There is a point to the story, to the adventure, and as that is told the detail and care to tell that makes this work a wonderful read.

The one thing I would have liked would be more time spent “in” Lilith’s mind as things transpired. Often her thoughts are cloaked, hiding her plans from the reader and while that makes for some surprises along the way, that leaves something aside. Often Lilith thinks about Dumuzi and that relationship is assumed to be there most of the time. More story about that would have been nice.

Along with this, perhaps a little more of Lilith being a Queen as well. By that I mean she acts like a Queen, which I enjoyed, but she has so few moments where her being a seductress is allowed to play out. Most of the time when Lilith seduces there’s not much time before the other falls and I felt that limited showing who Lilith is. There is one passage where she proclaims her beliefs and what her realm is, which I enjoyed. But her realm isn’t seen as the story is off in another part of the universe. It would have been nice to see more of Lilith in her home and being the Queen.

Four and a half out of five pitchforks.

Just a well told story with interesting characters that doesn’t lose itself in the midst of the erotica. I adored Lilith, her way of thinking and how she tells one simple truth. For succubi, the best pleasure is the one that is freely given and wanted most of all.



Aug 13 2016

A YouTube of a Morrigan Aensland Game Sprite Skin

There are some video games that allow players to put a skin over a game sprite or avatar to change the appearance. There are, obviously, all kind of those to be found and I found one example recently of a Morrigan Aensland skin for a game.

I don’t know the game, no idea where to find the skin, but I thought it was cute nonetheless…


IF you can’t see the video here on the Tale, please try this link:

There really isn’t a good view of the game spite, but here is a screenshot of her…

Morrigan Aensland Game Skin

It seems, as a whole, to be a fairly good representation of Morrigan’s clothing, hair and wings. Of course, there isn’t a lot of detail, and there doesn’t seem to be any “typical” Morrigan game moves or actions to be seen.

I think the idea of Morrigan holding a trident, or pitchfork, is intriguing however…



Aug 12 2016

A Review of The Naughty Succubus Part 8 and 9: The End of Peace by Becca Lusk

The Naughty Succubus Part 8 and 9: The End of Peace by Becca Lusk

The Naughty Succubus Part 8 and 9: The End of Peace by Becca Lusk

Continuing my reviews of the works in the The Naughty Succubus series by Becca Lusk today on the Tale. You can find my first review heresecond, and third reviews are here. The fourth, fifth, and sixth review can be found here. The seventh was reviewed here on the Tale as well. This, the latest work, contains parts eight and nine in a single volume, which makes for an interesting mini saga on their own.

To each side there are reasons for what they do. Perhaps not always said, not always clear, but there is want and desire. Some take these to be dark things, some see them as bringing light. Whichever it is, the path towards crisis leaves nothing quite the same as it was before.

  • Title: The Naughty Succubus Part 8 and 9: The End of Peace
  • Author: Becca Lusk
  • Length: 51 Pages
  • Publishing Date: July 23, 2016
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The story tells of:

Forces of Chaos consummate their alliance as forces of Freedom, fractured from eons of hard war, and centuries of bitter peace, still look at each other with distrust.

For the succubus Krys, and her lover, Gabriel, the multi-verse is poised on the brink of either salvation or destruction. Forces thought defeated long ago have arisen and begun their assaults on everything mankind holds dear.

The decisions made in the present will determine the course of a war that will leave the world either a burned shell or a paradise in the future.

But dark secrets remain hidden in this conflict, covering up eons of betrayal, envy, lust and greed. And many pieces are still left to be discovered, even as new questions come forth.

Seriously…if you ever thought all angels did was sing and pray, let this book disabuse of you of that notion. Watch as angels seduce succubi (that’s right!), succubi seduce mortals, and Goddesses seduce everyone. Filled with enough snark to make an epic tale a breezy read, Becca Lusk is proud to present Books 8 and 9 in a special thank-you bundle to fans of the series!

Krys and Gabriel have found each other. But will it be in a world worth loving in?

There’s only one way to find out…

The is a force in the universe with a plan. Their name is Chaos and there are things they enjoy above all else. Cloaked in lies, mistruths and temptation, some fall and are consumed. Some however turn away, knowing the truth. But in all things a price is paid, some more willing than others. But then, for two souls, the price to be paid is one they are willing to be responsible for.

The single focus through much of this work is in how Chaos comes to life, telling what is wanted, and tugging character into the ongoing strife which is all too apparently to come. Seeing how certain characters have fallen, what they want, or rather what Chaos offers, tells something of each of them. There’s a certain level of being lost within these characters, something that Chaos seems to feed upon.

While the plan for those who Krys and Gabriel face is not clear, there’s little bits and pieces of events in the past, present and future which offer some idea of what they will face next. Clearly there is loss, there is pain, there is terrible outcomes. But in spite of everything, both Krys and Gabriel remain the bright core of the story.

There are passages of erotica in the work which revolve around Chaos and her cherished toy, which makes me wonder. There’s a certain theme to it which brings me pause. A reflection of something else shall we say. It’s surprising. There is a point to each sexual encounter with Chaos, some meaning to it and a certain character falls along the way which, for me, makes some sense, but isn’t explained well as to why that happened. Another bit of story to be revealed along the way I expect.

Krys and Gabriel have their loving moments, some needed joy. Their story pops up and tells more of their first encounter in the past, their rediscovery in the present, but leaves a question in the future which bothers and concerns me. I love the dialogue, the connection between them. The character development works really well and I enjoyed it dearly.

Along the way, a certain Queen is hovering at the edges, being her mysterious self. Tera is there, she suggests, offers, reveals things to be, that were, and are. She doesn’t give everything on a silver platter to those around her, but then she never does. But I am waiting for someone to ask the single question that would, I think. bring her to tell more than what she has. Beyond that, the ending of this part of the series asks a question of her, one that many to be honest have asked of Tera. The answer? That’s one that speaks to who she is, what she believes, and what she knows.

The characters are developing, the story has turned towards the climax to come. The author’s writing has improved quite a lot, which I am so very pleased to see. Her editors need to work on their editing a bit more, there are some glaring mistakes which are theirs and need to be corrected. The story captivates me, makes me expect more and the author does so. It’s really the editing that is holding her back overall.

Four out of five pitchforks.

The story turns towards the battle to come, the falling of some and the rise of others. It’s complex and being so the questions left behind are ones that I rather enjoy pondering. A character asks: “What do you want?” The answer to that, in many ways, is: “That, would be telling.”

The telling is the best part after all.



Aug 12 2016

A Review of Fertile Mistresses by A. Vivian Vane

Fertile Mistresses by A. Vivian Vane

Fertile Mistresses by A. Vivian Vane

It can be very easy for a story to take a turn towards losing itself. There can be the best of intents given at the beginning and then they are just cast aside for the sake of driving towards an endless series of erotic moments. It can work, if the story can be held, remembered, played out through the erotica. The issue becomes one of avoiding the erotica turning into over the top porn.

The question of who you are doesn’t matter as much as what you do. Sometimes your past comes back to haunt you, if you are lucky. Sometimes you are not and then the past seeks out a pound of flesh however it can.

The work tells the story of:

When two demonic shemales meet, the only question is who will be the breeder…and who will be bred!

Worlds collide at the Cum-At-Yer-Own-Risk tavern — literally. Situated at the nexus of multiple mystic planes, the ramshackle inn has become a gathering place for horny lust-demons and the women that adore them.

Well-hung and curvaceous, Azzria rules her harem of pregnant breeder-bitches with a velvet fist. She loves them and they love her, whether they want to or not. But when a fellow demoness takes an interest in the fertile wombs of the “ol’ Cummer” tavern, will Azzria be forced to fight for her position? Or can she and this new rival come to a more…mutually beneficial…compromise?

Azzria owns a particular tavern where universes cross and she, being a meridi, has her pick of those who travel by and catch her attention. Along comes Mahina, and things start to become hard… in more than one way.

The concept of the main characters is interesting as Azzria and Mahina are meridi, hermaphrodites that have quite a lot of succubus-like appearance to them. As well, the two have the desire to create more of their kind and so the constant arrivals makes that quite possible. They aren’t quite succubi, though there is a hint of that within them. While the beginning of the story offers some background and an idea of what things are like, the story quickly devolves into a series of almost constant sexual encounters.

Those encounters are over the top, sometimes very much so, and there comes a point in the story where the repetitiveness just took away my interest in the story. There’s only so many times one can read about Azzria and Mahina having their way with everyone around them before it loses all interest.

That’s the largest problem in this work. The story is there in the beginning, there’s a lot that could be explored, but in the next instant the story turns towards hot flashes of erotica that really don’t have the heat they could have. Much of that simply comes to how Azzria and Mahina treat those around them. They are dominate, but beyond that they simply see those around them as something to poke into and then go onto the next encounter.

The writing can be crude at times, but that is a reflection of the characters, their attitude and how they see things. There’s really little development in Azzria and Mahina as so much time is spent with their sexual encounters. The heat in the story really doesn’t develop well and I think that comes from the push throughout to move on from moment to moment, leaving no time for reflection or narrative.

When the conclusion comes, that is a twist ending which makes some sense all things considered, but didn’t add anything to the story itself. From the characters’ perspective, to explain why things happened in the story, it gave the suggestion of an explanation. But how that was revealed, the speed at which the shoe was dropped and then the work came to a sudden stop didn’t appeal to me very much.

Being that this work is mainly the erotica, I think the author might have spent more time telling of the past, offering more about Azzria and Mahina than is told. That would help I think to give something to build on.

Two and a half out of five pitchforks.

I don’t feel like the twist ending was needed by far, it didn’t add much of anything to the events of the story which didn’t really use what the opening suggested. What came was not so much erotica as it was porn and over the top porn at that. Still, there is something here that was interesting, it’s just a shame that wasn’t followed through on.