Sep 23 2016

A Review of Cuffed and Collared by Kastil Eavenshade

Cuffed and Collared by Kastil Eavenshade

Cuffed and Collared by Kastil Eavenshade

There are some works that I find difficult to enjoy. What causes me the most difficulty is that sometimes the characters are just unlikeable. It’s a shame really when the story is interesting, but you don’t feel any sort of connection with them. Mix into that moments where the events “feel” wrong in how things happen and there comes a point in which the story really has to have one single thing going for it to keep me involved.

Sometimes, that can be one minor character, who isn’t a succubus or incubus. A character that is a mystery untold and, when the work is done and that still isn’t, then one wonders why it wasn’t.

The story is about:

A creature born in sin and debauchery, Markus Theo is as insatiable as they come. He’s relegated himself to a rather shallow life of sucking souls and committing petty theft—until a sexy half-incubus cop cuffs him to a table for more than just questioning. A prison cell is the least of Markus’s worries when tempting Detective Leo Vincent collars him and ignites a hunger like no other. Something stirs beyond the carnal greed and one kiss brands his damned soul.

Lost in a world of submission and sin, Markus will do anything for his lover—even infiltrate the underbelly of an incubus crime operation. But when a piece of his past surfaces and threatens to destroy everything, he must choose between losing Leo or his anonymity. Never wanting to return to the emptiness that was his life before, Markus prepares to sacrifice his freedom for the one thing he has never known. A man he truly loves.

Markus lives in a world where his existence revolves around his crimes, his passions, and his secrets. But not all secrets can be hidden for always and when his deepest one comes back to haunt him, Markus has little choice. The truth hurts, and the one that hurts him most will bring the most pain and passions.

While the story is written well, the interleaving plots are well thought out, and there are some moments of brilliance, there is a deeply dark tone through this work that is only really broken by a single minor character that I will come back to. Markus, and for that matter, really all of the main characters, is just unlikable from the first moments of the story.

There’s no soul in him, there’s a deeply seated expression of darkness, foreboding, and loss that remains with him throughout the work. His personality is rather grating and as the story unfolds he really doesn’t change very much from being, at least to me, somewhat of a cad in his personality. I hesitate to call him a stereotypical incubus, though he does takes souls, has a rather dim view of humanity, and sees the world around him as being not much more than a chance to take and not give.

The same can be said of the other main character Leo, or the other incubi and succubi that appear. There’s nothing attractive about them to speak of. Their world revolves around sex, dominance, and the occasional evil act they conspire to. This is reflected in the erotica which didn’t do anything for me really because it was brutal at times, certainly dehumanizing and any heat that started to build didn’t have a real chance to burn brightly. The sexual tone of this work is dark, there’s really nothing close to love in it, and when that is suggested, it tends to be brushed off quickly. I wanted to see the slightest glimmer of light in Markus, but every time that came close to happening, his darker nature took that away.

That brings me to the single character in the work that fascinated me, which is Leo’s sister. She’s a lovely ray of light amongst all of the darkness and she intrigued me. She has a secret of course, and when that is revealed I wanted to know more about that. Sadly she only appears fleetingly in this work, her story isn’t explored, and I really wish it was.

The climax of the work tells of Markus’ past, the truth about him and those around him. Some of those truths are brutal in their outcome, almost all of them are very dark. I felt like there was something missing at the end which might have tied up things somehow, but I’m not sure what that is exactly.

The writing is strong, a bit harsh, but overall the tone of the work matches the main characters well. I wish there was more light in the work, that there was something more than the darkness that was around every single character. The ending left me wanting in a lot of ways as well. There are a lot of unanswered questions, some threads are not closed up at the end. Perhaps there’s a need for a happy ever after for someone. I’m just not sure of where that comes out in the end.

Two and a half out of five pitchforks.

Being that I didn’t like Markus, or any of the main characters meant that I just couldn’t find a connection with them. While the story itself is very good, the plots are woven together well and there were moments of brilliance, not caring much about the characters is a problem. Considering that the only character I really cared about and wanted to know more about was Leo’s sister, and nothing really was explained about her except vaguely, there was a little bit of light in an otherwise dark and sad tale that couldn’t come through.

 

Tera

Sep 22 2016

Succubi Image of the Week 453

Another cute image of the Succubi this week on the Tale. A smile is important, a look matters too. A sexy outfit catches the eyes as does one’s tail too…

Succubus by 音無 涼風

Succubus by 音無 涼風

You can find the original source of this art here on Pixiv. She is just really quite adorable as a Succubus. Lovely hair that contrast well against the dark of her outfit, horns and tail, a cute smile. She has a look that just lends itself to her being fun in so many ways.

Her outfit is quite attractive, and I think speaks to the power that succubi have of hinting and teasing others in so many ways. It’s nice to find art like this which offers something more than simply a succubus looking sexy… She is a succubus with personality, charm, and more…

 

Tera

Sep 21 2016

Another costume idea to ponder…

Red Metallic Fishtail SkirtAnother idea I have been playing with is sort of a 1950s starlet succubi costume. In red of course. But what sort of dress would one need? I think something like this might be a place to start with an appropriate skin tight top as well…

This lovely idea sells for about $50 US, it is only the skirt and nothing else, but really, as the start to something more… It’s an interesting thought…

Perhaps I would match this with a lycra vest or bandeau top as a thought. Adding some opera gloves as well is a thought that comes to mind. Obviously there would be horns, not a tail though, that just wouldn’t work here. Red heels, but I don’t think really tall ones as this would be rather restricting my ability to walk.

But yes, this does give me ideas to mull over, if not for being out in public than certainly for my Eternal of course…

Four and a bit out of five pitchforks for the thoughts certainly. Four pitchforks as this is, just because it looks so marvellously sexy…

 

Tera

Sep 20 2016

A Review of Incubus Journal: Complete by The Mad Hatter

Incubus Journal: Complete by The Mad Hatter

Incubus Journal: Complete by The Mad Hatter

Recently I reviewed a series of short stories in which the main character is transformed into an Incubus. You can find those reviews here and here on the Tale. The author added another two works to the series then issued the six parts as a single volume. As such, this review will be of the series as a whole and how, as as whole, I’m rather disappointed in the lack of editing, story, and really only a focus upon what consists of a series of short pieces of porn and little else.

A story needs something more than sex to make it interesting. It needs editing, focus, character development and, at some point, a connection with the reader. Porn alone is not a story. Sex alone is not character development. It’s especially a problem when there are seeds of ideas, but they aren’t developed into something more.

The work tells of:

Follow our protagonist as he slowly finds himself turning into a male succubus, an incubus. He starts to enslave women to his will, changing them to fit his preferences. Huge breast and butt being just a start. Turning a woman into a Nekogirl being one and inflating another. Will he let these powers destroy him, corrupt him or will he master them?

Chris becomes an incubus, uses his powers on various men and women, has sex with a succubus and then faces a demoness that wants to destroy him. Assuming of course all of the sex doesn’t get too much in his way that is.

There is a lot of issues with this work, and the series as a whole. There’s no editing to speak of, there’s no story to follow really. There’s an attempt at plot but it doesn’t go anywhere. The writing is odd, almost unreadable, the dialogue is uneven, and the actions of the main character at times, I found to be a problem.

The problem is that the series seems to be so focused on the erotica that when the real background about what is going on appears, when there is a story to be told, it really isn’t. It’s also a good idea to remember what your main character’s name is as well. Characters are not described much, save for what’s needed for the porn scenes, the transformations are written in a way that seems flat and, as well, there comes a lot of confusion as to what exactly is going on.

The story wanders aimlessly for the most part and when something does happen, there’s no focus and no direction. The main character’s voice seems to be dumbed down more and more as their transformation continues. A measure of justice is done in the aftermath, but it is confusing and unclear. There is the feeling that these are a series of moments vaguely tied together towards in trying to get back to the main story.

Spelling mistakes, grammar mistakes, and overall how the text reads just doesn’t work. There’s a hint as to what’s going on, but all of the characters are cardboard cutouts. The sad part is, from time to time, the author hints at little side stories which would have been really interesting, but only mentions them in passing before going back to the porn scenes.

There are, by my count, about ten ways for this story to have been told better, expanded, the characters made to be more. That it didn’t happen, that the author didn’t spend some time to edit this into something more than a hot mess is a shame. More so that they charged for this.

Half of a pitchfork out of five.

Erotica alone is not a story. Transformation alone is not a story. Calling someone a succubus, or incubus, is not a story. Connecting the dots is. But that didn’t happen. The author needs to edit this work into something more substantial, tell more of a story. This isn’t a story, it’s a short series of barely connected porn scenes wrapped around a charade of a main character.

It could be more, but it didn’t happen.

 

Tera

Sep 20 2016

A Review of Demon Futa Does Vegas by Jocelyn Saragona

Demon Futa Does Vegas by Jocelyn Saragona

Demon Futa Does Vegas by Jocelyn Saragona

At some point in the creative process of writing, there comes a time when editing means more than the writing itself. There is a need to make dialogue sound real. There is a need to correct a multitude of spelling mistakes. The words on the page need to flow, to make sense and for the story not to lost its way.

It doesn’t matter what the story is about, the final work need to have some polish in order for it to be more than a series of words slapped together randomly.

Beyond that, telling a story which seems to hold a lot of background and then not telling that story for the sake of getting to the erotica is a shame. Story matters and without that, the work is not what it could be.

  • Title: Demon Futa Does Vegas
  • Author: Jocelyn Saragona
  • Length: 31 Pages
  • ASIN: B01CYL2VOU
  • Publishing Date: March 13, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

The story is about:

A Vegas comic-con attracts Vianne, a succubus futanari with an appetite for mortal sin. Her obedient thrall Morgan, once shy, has become an irresistible sex kitten herself. Vianne proudly watches her thrall seduce men, though she can’t satiate herself second hand action alone. She enjoys a reckless group tousle with a club girl and another futa. Later, Vianne helps Morgan seduce her long time crush, but it backfires. This man is the other futa’s territory. After accidentally enthralling him, Vianne must break off the spell or face a rival futa’s wrath.

Vianne and her thrall Morgan are in Vegas and having some fun. A chance encounter leads to a problem and in the end there’s only one solution to make everyone happy.

The work is mainly focused on the erotica with a bit of background and plot to hold things together. There’s not a lot of time spent learning about Vianne or Morgan or for that matter any of the main characters. There’s just enough characterization to give them form and not much else. Vianne is a futa succubus, there is another in the story as well. There’s a little moment of her wings appearing and some scattered moments of her true form leaking out here and there, but really the story is mainly about futa erotica overall.

There is a bit of succubus mind control as well, which I thought worked well. There’s a bit of a D/s theme from time to time also. Some of the scenes are a bit contrived, a little expected, and while so the heat in them is fairly good, but could have been much more than it was for one simple reason.

The work needs a lot of editing overall. There are many spelling mistakes, incorrect words being used, and overall the story reads oddly. The dialogue “reads” wrong. It very much sounds like, many times, emotionally devoid of anything. The idea of the story is interesting and I would have liked to know more about Vianne, her past, and how events were before this story started. There’s a “societal” aspect to some points in the story but that isn’t explored for the sake of getting to the erotica.

That then is the problem here, that the story was pushed aside for the erotic scenes. It’s a shame because Vianne and the other characters are interesting. I would have liked more story about them, their relationships and so on.

One and a half out of five pitchforks.

The work needs a serious editing for grammar, spelling, and comprehension. The characters are interesting, there’s a story to be told, but it’s not brought out as much as it could have been. Perhaps there will be a second work, but even so, the author needs to make this work better than it is. Tell the story please, the erotica will look after itself.

 

Tera

Sep 19 2016

Light or Dark By TeraS

I don’t feel much like I can write these days. The reasons are … what they are. I have been told that writing helps in times like this. Perhaps it will, or does, so I try. And, as I write, the words I can manage … well … I suppose … that Queen Tera comes to find me in my darkness and gives me a lesson about whether things are …

 

Light or Dark
By TeraS

 

One of the things that Tera has to deal with—and, for that matter, so does everyone that calls the Realm “home” and happens to have horns and a tail—is a question that is asked over and over again by those who don’t have a clue:

“Are you evil or good?”

There is an obvious reason for this question—the horns and tail—but at the same time the question itself brings about questions about the one that asked the question in the first place.

This, then, is what underpins the question: perception.

In any event, Tera often finds herself being confronted and asked the question. As she doesn’t like to hide her tail or horns, this is something she finds herself dealing with to the point she could almost set the train schedules, if there were any in this particular universe, by.

Sometimes the question is asked in some sort of court, a tribal council, a meeting of elders. Regardless of the place, of those asking the question, Tera’s reply is true to herself for she can do nothing less: “I find it interesting that you ask about evil first, then good. Why is that, I wonder?” The questioner then suggests, or insists, that she is trying to avoid the question, which usually results in Tera pinching the bridge of her nose and sighing: “No. I am trying to understand why you have seemingly made up your mind.” This generally makes her questioner snort in derision, make a snide comment or, if it is an especially good day, their answer makes her smile. Much of the time there is reference made to one deity or another, while insisting that she is not of the light. Her answer is, again, seemingly obvious: “All beings are their children, no matter their look, existence or purpose.”

It is not, sadly, a rare occurrence when they take offence at her reply. There comes a long, quite forceful, statement of what they see as fact. She, of course, listens attentively, sometimes tracing a fingertip over her lips in thought. Allowing them to say their peace, whatever it may be, is only being respectful.

When they are done, out of breath or otherwise, then, at that point, it is Tera’s turn. “The thing about having preconceived conclusions is that they are, for the most part, illusions. Your books speak of good and evil. They offer means to see if one is, or is not, one or the other. Your wiser souls have transcended that level of knowledge and seen beyond, to place their vision upon that which Goddess wrote long before you came to be.”

Her expression generally shows slight disappointment in her accusers. They look at her in defiance, about to interrupt, but she holds up a single finger: “I allowed your words. In the spirit of understanding, one does allow the other to have their moment as well.”

Bluster comes, an attempt to find some sort of law, word, or anything which would put an end to her reply. However, before that can go even a bit too far, there comes another voice, sometimes of an elder, other times of an inquisitive younger soul. Once in a while a child asks a seemingly innocent question. Having no recourse, and feeling foolish for the first time in their encounter with her, they sulk back to their place and watch.

“The question is not whether I am good or evil, as has been asked. The question is, why is it so necessary to ask? What has happened here that when a different soul arrives, seeking nothing from anyone, save to learn, that some are threatened by this?” The Queen moves away from the chair, or witness box, or some other place she has been settled to in order to walk among the accusing souls and consider them. As she passes some by, there is clear attraction to her. Others are repelled; the reasons are their own. Some are indifferent, others impatient to return to their lives.

Somewhere in the room she pauses, her tail moving slowly behind her. Guards in the room tense, the judges are concerned. The prosecutor flinches. The audience, or spectators, depending on the venue, await the next moment with anticipation.

“Light is within each of us. Dark is as well. For each soul, each life, a choice is made to embrace one or the other, or so you might think. In truth each and everyone here has been both, one or the other, or shades thereof.”

Her smile is, always, bemused. “I am not the right hand of Goddess, though I know her and love her dearly.”

This admission brings gasps.

“I am not the hand of evil, though I know of them and have no time for them.”

This brings confusion.

“I am the Queen of my Realm, the Eternal of my King. I am called sister and loved for being so. I love, with joy and passion, my dearest loves, I hold them with me always.”

This makes some give pause and look upon their own lives.

“I am the mother to a son who loves me.”

These words bring nods from those that know what these words mean. They are far more than words alone.

“I am the Dear One of my heart. The singularly most cherished words I know.”

Silence comes over the assembled masses, as she has their attention now.

“You ask me your question and yet do not ask the question of yourselves. You seek solace from the questions within you by projecting your own shades towards me. I cannot help answer your own questions, but I can offer this.”

Her focus is on the assembled souls, her gaze accepting, as it always is, as she always is. “If you ask me to leave, I shall. I hold no ill will. If I am allowed to stay, then, I hope, we can learn from each other.” Turning back to the judge or elders or other authority, she concludes, “The choice is yours, it always is. You must choose, whether light or dark; none else can.”

She walks back to the place where it had all started, waiting for their answer. Either way, she thinks, Goddess knows what will come. In one way, there will be light shared, in another the light will be the moment she was given with them. Regardless of the outcome, she knows one pure thing:

Light and dark are not good or evil. No one should ever see them as being the same.

Sep 18 2016

A Review of Succubus Training by Syn Root

Succubus Training by Syn Root

Succubus Training by Syn Root

The thing about a story that has the word succubus in it, is that one expects to find a succubus in the story somewhere. The story can have action, a character can be seductive, love sex, be erotic, but that doesn’t mean they are a succubus. By the same token, calling an action, an encounter a means of “Succubus Training” also doesn’t really mean there is a succubus involved.

Sometimes there are moments when the wilder things rule. One comes into their orbit and cannot escape. But then, sometimes, escape isn’t what matters, it is what comes after and what they wanted in the first place from you.

The story is about:

Dox’s botched Sex Magick with the Forest God leaves her Fae powers gone, but there is no time to rest. Tonight, she needs to be the center of attention at a Billionaire Sex Party. Her friends in the Thieves Guild need Dox to own the Center Stage like nothing that filthy orgy has ever seen. Dox is soon tied up, and every hole is stuffed.. Dox knows she can handle a bit of Public Humiliation, but when it’s all over, she will have taken on more heat than ever before.

Dox is Fae, her life wild and unrestrained. But a God finds and claims her, leaving her life changed and she not quite the same as she was. Still, she is who and what she is, which means she cannot help but do as she is asked in spite of what’s changed in her. Some needs are never fulfilled and some aches go on forever.

The main thing about this work that bothers me is that it’s unclear if Dox is a succubus or not. She loves sex, she tends to use sex magik and her need for sex is just about insatiable. Her thoughts mostly revolve around sex and as a whole she might well be a succubus, but that’s never stated. The closest the story comes to that is the telling of the beginning scenes which are called “Succubus Training.”

Throughout the story, Dox’s thoughts and actions are mainly on her need for sex, much else is tangential to that point. While that does, as a whole, help to define her character, drive her into some situations, one of which is with a certain Forest God that has his way with her, it tends to limit the storytelling for the sex scenes.

Outside of the sex, when there are moments told about the world she lives in, the Fae around her, there’s a strong hint of Lost Girl that nibbled at my thoughts much of the time. Beyond Dox herself it seems like every character in the story is looking to have sex with her, in as many ways as possible. This creates a sexually charged universe which seems to like BDSM themes overall. That telling works, overall, even if some events are pushing the boundaries of suspension of disbelief.

A stumbling point is how the story goes from scene to scene, almost snapping from one sex encounter to a bridge story, then snapping into another sex scene. The story doesn’t flow so much as rush headlong towards the next bit of sex as quickly as possible. Again, this is mainly because Dox needs sex, needs it dearly and so it makes sense for her. But as a narrative I think a bit more “rest” between the erotica, to tell more story, would have made this a better read.

There are a scattering of editing flaws in the work. such as using “You’re” when “Your” is correct. There is story beneath the erotica, which does come out from time to time, but as a whole the sex takes precedence. Dox herself is interesting, but whether she is a succubus or not is unclear, for one, and for another, if she is a succubus, then it would have been good to know what her powers, and effects when she feeds, exactly are.

There’s a lot of questions unanswered in the story, it ends on a cliffhanger as well. There’s really no clear note from the author if there will be another work, if this is a series or not. If so, then I’d hope for more story about Dox and her past. There’s a good deal of mystery around her to explore, beyond the sex she has.

Two pitchforks out of five.

Show me a succubus in this story, a clear one, and I’ll be a lot more interested than I was. Tell more story than sex would also be good. Most of all, the mysteries of this story’s universe need to be explored and drawn out. We’ll see if a series comes from this, or if this was just mainly about Dox cumming.

 

Tera

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