Jun 14 2016

A Review of The Devil in the Detail by Jewel Jones

The Devil in the Detail by Jewel Jones

The Devil in the Detail by Jewel Jones

There are some stories that offer a Succubus, or Succubus-ish, character that seems to be interesting. Perhaps that is in their attitude, their appearance, something that seems to suggest they are meaningful to the work in question.

Sometimes what is offered doesn’t quite work out for several reasons. Much of the time that comes to using the Succubus as a means to get to the erotica, the transformation of another character and then they simply vanish never to be heard of again. That’s a shame when there is so much detail in them and it doesn’t go anywhere. Even if there are hooves involved.

  • Title: The Devil in the Detail
  • Author: Jewel Jones
  • Length: 20 Pages
  • ASIN: B018WIU3EY
  • Publishing Date: December 2, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells of:

Summoning demons isn’t too difficult if you know what you’re doing, but when a she-devil shows up in Andy’s pentagram, he’s in for a surprise. The only thing he ever wanted was a chance to get laid, but the demon won’t help him unless she can turn him into a girl. It doesn’t seem like a bad deal, but his new body comes with a few kinks, and Andy is about to get tricked.

With the looks of a supermodel and the mind of bimbo, Andy has no choice but to give in to the cravings of his new body. And his big, black roommate is more than happy to help. It wasn’t meant to go like this, but the devil is in the detail, and there’s no way to resist temptation in this erotic, gender swapping short story.

Andy has made deals with a certain devil before, however this time the summoning reveals that the old deals he had made aren’t much good anymore because there’s a new girl in town and her name is Surazin. The seductive succubus offers a deal with a catch and Andy signs on the bottom line, but one should always be aware of the fine print and the meaning of the words they agree to.

The work is a gender transformation hot flash which, in the beginning, offers the appearance of Surazin, who seems to be, at least partly, a Succubus through her mannerisms, attitude and looks. She’s seductive, crafty, and uses all of her abilities to draw Andy into signing a deal which, of course, is twisted in a way that works to her advantage. I liked her description quite a lot, being sort of a business woman slash librarian and as such she’s so very tempting in a lot of ways… save that she has hooves which, for me, completely wrecks everything else that her sexuality and seductiveness offered.

Once past the deal itself, which does have a few words in it that catch Andy and cause things to turn very wrong for him, the buildup in the first third of the work is tossed aside for Andy’s mental transformation into a bimbo, which takes less than a page, some self-exploration and then, of course, he, now a she, finds herself in a sexual situation with her roommate. The erotica is what you might expect, really special or unique as a whole.

The problem is that Surazin could have been so much more than she was, but she’s really only there to facilitate the transformation and then she is completely out of the rest of the story, save for a passing thought from Andy at the end of the work. It’s a shame because there could have been a lot done with what was, at least to me, the most interesting of all of the characters.

There are hints about her, how she came to be, and doing, what she is, but that’s only mentioned fleetingly. There could have been some more teasing, perhaps more time spent in Surazin’s transformation of Andy, something to make her be more present in the story. I would have been just as interested to have her there with Andy and her roommate when the erotica started to “push” things along in some way.

The writing is very good in the beginning, Surazin’s appearance, and through the rather short mental and physical transformation scenes. The erotic scenes however tend to fall into tropes for the most part, and there’s not as much heat as there might have been all things considered.

Two and a half out of five pitchforks.

Not enough detail and far too much focus on Andy being a bimbo and not a lot more. That’s a shame because the beginning offered an interesting Succubus and didn’t use her all that well. In this case the details were less being a devil than they were being left behind in the wake of the erotica.



Jun 13 2016

With You By TeraS

Yesterday we held a memorial for my Eternal’s mother. It was everything she wanted the moment to be, at least we both hope so. One of the hopes she had was that those that attended were souls that knew her, thought well of her. She wanted to be remembered as the vibrant woman she was. There is no question of that. Those there told stories about Mom, remembered all the things she did. There were moments coming and going as sympathies were shared, hugs given. Perhaps the one thing that was said, more than anything else, was the promise that she was …


With You
By TeraS


The passage of time, it is said, heals all wounds. Given time, the most terrible of losses, and the pain that comes with such things, will ebb away until it cannot do so much harm. Time has a way of building up walls around the pain, boxing it in.

But not all of the pain becomes trapped by time. There are, without doubt, moments in which pain flares back into being, to assault the soul, to drive the hurt, the loss, and, yes, the guilt, back to the fore. Pain, in whatever form it takes, does take a small measure before it leaves.

On this day, time hadn’t managed to start building that box or containing that pain. At this moment, the pain was there, clearly seen, and could not be ignored. It pushed at the souls nearby, taking the measure of them all.

But there was a means to push back.

The dawn in the Realm came with a break in the rains that had been falling for so long. The clouds were still there, the skies were not completely blue. The calls had been made, as they needed to be. With small messages, little notes, and the occasional hand-delivered notice, the news had traveled quickly. Really there wasn’t a need to explain, but they had nonetheless.

The card read: “The King of the Realm, along with her Majesty, the Queen, request a moment of reflection for the loss of His Majesty’s most beloved mother. A small memorial service will be held.

Keith looked at the notice once more, held in his hand. Two short sentences that couldn’t manage to express what he was feeling at that moment. The thin white card didn’t have to say anything more, the words stated what had happened, what they intended to do.

She would have liked things that way. He recalled how she never wanted anything elaborate done, how she was more concerned about others, about not causing them all complications in their lives. She didn’t care for the idea of being put on a pedestal, even if he, as her son, did so regardless. He slipped deeper into his memory.

When she had passed, the Realm’s etiquette director had come to him, offering her services. She brought in vast plans of how to honour her: talk of dragons soaring overhead, a vast processional of dignitaries, officials—and, of course, eventually, well-wishers. Descriptions of urns of gold, silver, or other immensely valuable materials were being bandied about. Then came the talk of statues, or some sort of memorial being built for her, to be placed somewhere in the Realm. On and on it went, the discussions becoming more and more elaborate as they did so.

At one point, Keith asked a simple question: “Is this what she would have wanted?” He was told that her wants would be respected, of course, but that, as well, there needed to be a certain level of accommodation for those that would need to pay their respects. After all—so it was explained—this wasn’t so much about her as it was about their Majesties.

Moments later Keith had left the discussion, adding a comment as he did: “No. It is about her.”

Tera found him standing by a window in the Palace, looking out at the light drizzle. She approached him, taking his hand in hers and twining their tails together.

“You know they mean well, don’t you?”

“Oh, I do.”

“Tell me what you are thinking.”

Keith was silent for a time, Tera not letting go and waiting. Then Keith explained: “I’m thinking that mom would be telling me off right now. That I know what she wants, not anyone else.”

Tera smiled: “Even me?”

Keith chuckled, something that Tera hadn’t heard in some time: “No, not you, little Miss Exception To The Rule.”

She kissed his cheek: “Just checking.”

He continued his thoughts: “Mom would have wanted a simple urn–red, of course. Flowers carved in white I think, all things considered, would be a nice pattern.”

Tera placed her head against his shoulder: “Yes, absolutely. That’s Mom. What else?”

“She’d want a simple memorial service: family, a few friends. I’d want your heart to be there. He’s family, he knows us, knows Mom.”

“Of course.”

Lacing his fingers with hers, he pondered: “I think we’d hold it by the flower garden, over where the carnations and roses meet. She’d like that, she did love her flowers.”

“That she did. Many of those flowers are from her garden, after all.”

He made a non-committal sound, gathering his thoughts.

Tera mused: “I’d like to say … something.”

“We both would.”

“What would you want to talk about?”

“Mom’s love for us, more than anything. Oh, there would be more, without doubt. I don’t want to read from a piece of paper, though. I know what I want to say, sort of. I think I can manage to do so without losing myself.”

Touching his cheek, Tera guided her Eternal to look into her so-green eyes: “You will be fine.”

He nodded: “Hope so.”

“Know so. Anything else?”

“Just some time afterwards to talk about her. Knowing you, that will be over tea and cookies and …” Noting a bit of movement out of the corner of his eye, Keith caught sight of the etiquette director making notes in a vestibule nearby. A small smile tugged at his lips: “Your idea?”

Tera kissed that smile, then explained: “Sometimes you listen too much, my Eternal. Sometimes you have to say what’s on your mind to get things done …”

The memory faded away. Keith was once more looking at the card in his hand with the announcement.

The time had come.

There wasn’t a procession through the Realm, or a parade, or anything else. There was only Keith and Tera walking together from the Palace to the Gardens. Life in the Realm continued around them, but there was no question that everyone knew what was happening. Some nodded, others smiled. There were the occasional tears; sometimes a hand or tail would reach out to touch, then draw away. The souls around them offered their support, help, whatever needed to be was offered without a word.

Upon entering the Gardens, they found Her Majesty’s heart waiting for them, standing vigil. He smiled, stepped back slightly, and waited.

Resting in the midst of the roses and carnations was a small red urn trimmed in gold, white flowers carved into the red. The gold was not overpowering, more of an accent to the red and white. The light played over the surface, a shimmer of light tracing its way over the curves, along the carvings, and about its form. For a time, the two Eternals held hands and spoke quietly. They told stories, some with tears, some with joy. They spoke of the love shared, the promises made, the joy of having had the time they had been given with her.

When the words were all said, when the last story was told, a tear wiped away, a love told in all of the fullness that was given, they offered their hands to Tera’s heart.

He took their hands and spoke of the truths that he knew: of how she lived within them both; of how she would dwell with Goddess; of the promise that they would always hold her and that, someday, they would all be reunited.

A prayer was spoken, a hope expressed. Then the moment came to a close …

… but not the remembrance.

From all around, from near and far, they came: family; the lives that she had touched coming to join in this moment with them. Some carried picnic baskets, others carried tablecloths … all with a single purpose, a purpose that had been expressed in the note: to remember her.

The tears were replaced with laughter, stories being told of love and hope. The tea she loved was shared, those particular cookies she loved, as well. Life came to surround her, to bring to the fore all of the good she had done, the miracles she had made real.

When night fell, as it was want to do, the family embraced one another, made a promise, and then began to drift away, their own lives calling them once more. Tera and Keith moved to thank her heart for his kindness, but, rather than accepting the thanks, he guided them back to where her urn was.

Emphasis on … “was.” A glowing nimbus of light was in its place, a warm familiar glow of love they both knew well. Rising into the air, this light representing her spirit paused, shimmered, then arced away, vanishing into the starry skies above that peeked out from between the clouds.

The promise was kept. For always.

Keith had the last word this time: “Love you, Mom. See you soon.”

Jun 12 2016

A Review of Loving and Loathing Vegas by Lex Chase

Loving and Loathing Vegas by Lex Chase

Loving and Loathing Vegas by Lex Chase

The creation of sexual tension in a story is not the simplest of things to do. There’s every chance to go a little too far, to complicate things more than they need to be. Managing to have that tension and mix humour into the moment is a bit of a art form. To be able to do so, even when the story might be slightly tropeish in nature is quite an accomplishment.

If the characters have that connection, and it isn’t beaten over the readers head constantly, then the story itself will take care of the rest. Getting to a point where the characters themselves see, are able to realize that there’s something that’s been in front of them for ages and accept it matters.

  • Title: Loving and Loathing Vegas
  • Author: Lex Chase
  • Length: 40 Pages
  • ASIN: B018RSHA1S
  • IBSN: 9781634769440
  • Publishing Date: November 30, 2015

The work is about:

Jackson has loved Vegas since God created Man—literally. As demonic incubi hailing from the Seventh Circle of Hell, Jackson and Vegas have never been anything more than roommates. Now living among humans, they run Eaven, a TripAdvisor-recommended detour-worthy diner famous for its devilishly decadent pies. Business is dead on the holidays, and Jackson will gleefully stab himself with a spatula if he has to clean spotless pots and pans one more time.

For fun—or torture—Vegas makes him a bet that should Jackson win, they take a much-needed vacation. Should he lose, he’s doomed to clean out grease traps for all eternity. When the challenge is to fall in love with other people by Christmas, it proves Vegas isn’t the least bit interested. But when they find an abandoned baby in the trash, she could be the Christmas miracle to warm Jackson’s cynical heart.

Being an incubus brings along quite a few problems for Jackson, not the least of which is Vegas, whom he has been connected with forever. Together on Earth, running a little out of the way diner, the two find themselves with a small problem. A baby abandoned, but also relationships strained. The truth will come out, but will it be in time?

Jackson and Vegas are two quite interesting Incubi, with a story that I thought was well told, set up a lot of their background in a short time at the beginning and built on that throughout the story as it unfolded. While they are Incubi, they aren’t stereotypically so and it was good to see that. Both have their personalities, their own wants and secrets and watching all of that unfold I think made for a more interesting story.

There are quite a number of minor characters as well, not the least of these being a baby girl left with the two Incubi. She’s quite the scene stealer as things go on and when her story is revealed at the end of the work, it made a good deal of sense, even if that felt very rushed in comparison to the rest of the work.

While there is a short hot flash towards the end of the story, it doesn’t interfere with all that came before, or after. It doesn’t feel out of place, it makes sense to both Jackson and Vegas and it brings a lot of the threads in the work to closure. Overall, the work has a lot of humour in it, reminiscent of a “two men and a baby” theme in a lot of ways and it works well at times. I’m not so sure that the adding of two minor characters made all that much of a difference however. Being that the baby herself was driving a lot of the story, the two minor characters that keep popping up don’t add much to the story.

The single thing that gave me the largest pause wasn’t the story itself, but the cover. The cover bothers, I’m not sure that the black hands and long black nails really work considering the characters themselves and who they are. There could have been a better choice which doesn’t give the impression that the incubi are stereotypical, which they are certainly not.

Well written, though at times the story is a bit confused, a little scattered in focus. Much of that is the situation that Jackson and Vegas find themselves in, but when that goes a little too far over the top then it takes away from what otherwise is a well told and fun story.

Four out of five pitchforks.

A cute, fun story about two souls figuring themselves out when it really matters to them. A bit scattered at times, but otherwise a solid story, well told.



Jun 12 2016

A Review of Reamin’ Demons by Alana Melos

Reamin' Demons by Alana Melos

Reamin’ Demons by Alana Melos

A review of the latest work in the Janus Key Chronicles series by Alana Melos. The series follows a brother and sister on a rather interesting quest through time, space and mythology which means, of course, that at some point one of them has to visit Hell. That means, of course, that someone becomes a succubus and discovers what that’s like.

Generally, that sort of story turns very stereotypical, very quickly. However, in this case, while there is the erotica you would expect, there’s something more. The succubi are, and this is what captured me, theologians and librarians at heart. But, of course, they are the most sexy of them… glasses and all.

  • Title: Reamin’ Demons
  • Author: Alana Melos
  • Length: 52 Pages
  • ASIN: B01GSR5ID2
  • Publishing Date: June 7, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tell the story of:

Trapped in a sexually savage world…

Having escaped from Valhalla, Debbie now finds herself in hell… for real! She’s in the body of a sexy succubus, filled with lusty thoughts. Our heroine decides to take matters into her own hands, seeking out partners to power the Key of Janus to get her out of there… but Lucifer, the Prince of Darkness, might have other ideas!

Debbie has a problem. She’s in Hell. Actually that’s just the start of things. She’s been turned into a succubus, there are a lot of demons out there that look good enough to eat and she’s hungry. A little nibble can’t possibly hurt, she’s had to do that before. This time however, her new needs might get her into all kinds of trouble.

Debbie’s transformation into a succubus isn’t shown, but all of her prior transformations never have been in the series. While that is a little disappointing, the effects of her new form do give some really interesting moments. There is a little bit of mind control, mostly in a personalty change driven by her succubus needs, that I really liked. It doesn’t turn Debbie into a submissive little sextoy, it gives her some power in the world she finds herself in. That new personality brings a lot of heat to the story and to the erotica.

Eventually Debbie meets other succubi and while the story to that point, Debbie being a little “succubish” I thought worked well, the revelation about the succubi I just adored beyond words. They are succubi, there’s no question from their sex drive, their sexuality and seductiveness, but they are more than that. Seeing them learning, studying, talking about theology, realities was for me a special thing. More than that, the hints of their powers being so strong that the rest of their world trembles at what they are capable of made me smile. The succubi might not rule, but they seem to have a hand in things.

The erotica is a little over the top at some points, but overall I liked how Debbie acted as a succubus, how the other succubi dealt with their sexuality. There is a scene where Debbie dominates some demons sexually, and that I thought was very hot and deliciously told.

While there was so much I liked about this work, the thing that was missing for me was delving into succubi society more than happened. Really the story skimmed over this point, offering it as a tease more than anything else, before moving on to Debbie’s encounter and climax of the story. It felt like a bit of a cheat, considering how much storytelling could have happened, but didn’t. However, after skimming over some of the other works in the series, this tends to happen quite a lot and if I had been following the series I would have been prepared for that.

The writing is very good, it has to be considering that the author is ten works into the series at this point. The characters have depth, soul, personality and more. There’s a good deal of time taken to develop Debbie’s character and tell more of a story by doing so. Well done and I liked all of that very much, but I still wish there was more time spent with the succubi themselves here.

Four out of five pitchforks.

I wish there had been more time spent exploring the world of the succubi more than anything else. The little teases about the power they have, what their aspects are, the succubi themselves I just adored. It’s a shame that the series will likely never revisit them, tell all, show what the reality is. But I will keep the thought of a collective of succubi who have the time to learn, discover and discuss theology as easily as they breathe and look sexy doing so.

For that says they are more.



Jun 11 2016

An interesting Succubus art concept

Still looking through Etsy, looking for Succubus art and other things as I do from time to time. In doing so, I come across various listings for things that make me cringe. Some are “spells” others are “potions” and the like. Of course all of them are listed as “entertainment” and, as well, they cost at times as much as some of the perfumes that you would find in one of the more high end stores.

They are, however, a good source of one thing that they all seem to share. In every case there is some sort of Succubus or similar art that is used to advertise the item for sale. In one of these I notice this work of art.

Succubus by Jinwan Park

Succubus by Jinwan Park

Now, I have to admit that I think she is a Succubus, though that is very hard to be sure of. She might be some other sort of devil or other creature as well. As such, it’s one of the reasons why she isn’t a Succubus of the Week.

If anyone has any sort of good answer about this, please do leave a comment so I can make up my mind about her.

Getting past that, her boots are quite unique, I like her overall look, and she has the most interesting expression. She does have head wings, which usually means a Succubus or other devil most of the time when I have seen them in anime. The two wing/familiars/creatures to either side of her I think look like wings, which again is something quite unique.

But is she a Succubus? I’m just not completely sure. I think so, and as such I’ll have to ponder this further sometime as a story concept…



Jun 10 2016

A Review of The Naughty Succubus Part 5: Clarity by Becca Lusk

The Naughty Succubus Part 5: Clarity by Becca Lusk

The Naughty Succubus Part 5: Clarity by Becca Lusk

A review of the fifth work in The Naughty Succubus series by Becca Lusk today on the Tale which will bring me up to date with the series so far. The first work was reviewed here, the second I reviewed here, and my third review can be found here.

The single most difficult thing to overcome is the question of dogma. Being told that there is nothing you can do, because that is how things are, isn’t an answer. It’s an excuse. The choice to ask why, to try to come to an understanding isn’t a weakness, and sometimes it takes one soul to believe that anything is possible, if she can believe in herself. Sometimes that’s a hard thing to do, more so when you need to accept that you can’t make things right on your own.

  • Title: The Naughty Succubus Part 5: Clarity
  • Author: Becca Lusk
  • Length: 36 Pages
  • ASIN: B01GLT9I06
  • Publishing Date: June 3, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

The story tells of:

The classic definition of a succubus is that of a demonic creature that tempts men as they sleep, steals their essence to feed themselves before moving on without a care in the world. But what happens when a succubus has the misfortune of falling in love? And to further add to the heartache, when the weight of the multiverse rests upon their lover remembering who they are? When ancient evils awaken, people you once thought were enemies end up being allies and long held beliefs, dogmas, and doctrine are put to the test.

Come join Becca Lusk as she weaves a timeless tale of lust, defines what it means to be sinful, and changes the perspective on those acts we condemn as lewd. Because when the universe hangs in the balance, it’s no time to be squeamish.

Krys comes to reflect on her past and in doing so recalls the moment when choices needed to be made. The memories of the past offer clues, but also mysteries to solve. As this tale is told, Krys has to accept she cannot solve everything and needs to trust in someone else. Her heart will suffer in doing so, but sometimes you have to trust. Even if her name is Tera.

While the title suggests there will be some kind of clarity with regards to what is going on, this really doesn’t quite happen. While there is quite a lot told about the past, how Krys and Gabriel met, something of what happened in the past to put Trip in the place he is in, there’s a few pieces missing to the puzzle.

Much of the events in the present are reflected in the past, there are connections made in which some of the motivations of the characters are suggested. Quite a lot of time is spent setting up the conflicts of angels and demons, where things came from and how the events of the here and now started to come together. In doing so that opened things to telling the larger story which, along the way, involves a certain red-tail named Tera.

Tera’s appearance is, as a whole, quite seductive and mischievous, which I thought was delightful, but while she does push the story forwards, reveal a secret, and manages to push both Trip and Krys to the limit at one point, being Tera needs a little bit more. That will come, in time, but for this moment, being that she has what seems to be an important point in the plot, I’m really wanting to know what that will be.

There is a little bit of erotica, but overall the point of this part of the series is to explain where the characters come from, what happened before to draw them together. Not everything is explained, the past is still mostly unclear, but if nothing else there’s a point to be made.

That comes to the question of why angels and demons do the things they do. Why things are how they are. More importantly, is there the possibility of change. It’s that question that draws me to this series. Can one question not just themselves, but the universe as well? What can they do about it, and what happens when the rules are found not to be just uncomfortable, but simply wrong on so many levels.

The writing seems much more focused, the storytelling a bit more clear. There is some confusion however in Tera’s appearance, how that is told at one point. There might have been a better way to accomplish the teasing of Trick and the reveal of Tera overall. The mystery is still being unraveled, the characters aren’t quite to the point where they need to know what comes next. I rather liked that sense of uncertainty. The trick will be how Tera fits into things, what she really wants, and what, exactly, will be the reaction of those about her and Krys.

Four out of five pitchforks.

The mystery is starting to be revealed, the question of what Tera really wants isn’t clear, though I have my own thoughts about that which I am not going to reveal at the moment. But I think that she’s not going to disappoint me, nor is Krys. There are things afoot now, let’s see where that takes us next then.

A postscript: My thanks, and dearly so, to the author for placing my Succubi self in her series and her well wishes in the dedication for this work that mean the world to me…



Jun 10 2016

A Review of Succubus by Lacey St. Claire

Succubus by Lacey St. Claire

Succubus by Lacey St. Claire

There are some stories that appear to give a premise that is just different enough to be interesting. But how that story is told either makes, or breaks, everything. A confused story in which the plot is hard to find, the meaning nonexistent and the reasons for what happens to be not much more than “because” is a shame.

Telling a story with a succubus who is never explored, explained, given a name or a past makes for a difficult read. It becomes more so when the work needs another editing and a structure within the work to be added which takes a series of encounters and makes something of the sum of the parts.

  • Title: Succubus
  • Author: Lacey St. Claire
  • Length: 45 Pages
  • ASIN: B018SQ7TGA
  • Publishing Date: November 30, 2015
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tell the story of:

Life is tough during wartime Baghdad but whorehouses remain an essential part of everyday life. Locals and soldiers alike need release and these sexy women aim to give them everything they want even if their clients demand their tight backdoor. When a diplomat wrongs his night-time plaything she comes back as an evil succubus set on revenge. Her revenge may seem sweet as she pleases both herself and the men she visits, but there will be hell to pay come morning. Two officers are bent on learning the real story of the mystical succubus but there are so many twists and turns they’re never certain where they’ll end up.

An Inspector finds himself ensnared in a mystery that has no end. A tale of a succubus who takes her pleasure and then the lives of the men she seeks for revenge. Along the way, the evil that men do is just as horrifying.

I found this work an extremely difficult read for several reasons, but the chief one is the difficulty the story has in telling its tale. There’s no real connection with any of the characters, the events are rushed and uneven and by the time that there seems to be a point, an explanation, the story loses its focus and loses its way.

This is not really a story about a succubus in that she makes a few short appearances in the story, but otherwise the focus is upon those in search of answers. There’s more focus on telling about the city, the setting up of events, the politics, the disaster that unfolds around all of them. It isn’t a work of erotica by any means, the work tending towards trying to be a mystery-adventure.

There is one, rather long, erotic scene, but there’s no heat in it. A much shorter scene at the beginning is quite good, but it ends in a stereotypical fashion. There’s simply, because of the setting, no real heat from the succubus’ actions to speak of.

The succubus herself is never really described, never fleshed out. She taunts a bit, she exists to give her victims some pleasure, and then the events turn towards the infliction of pain and suffering with an expected conclusion. There’s nothing told about her which explains how she came to be, how that happened and why. She simply “is” and that is the extent to her story.

There is a lack of flow between the scenes, explanations of how some of the characters get from one end of the story to the other. The ending itself is the most confusing thing of all, and I had to read the work twice in order to understand it a bit better. But even knowing who is in the final scene that doesn’t explain how exactly things turned out as they did.

The work needs another editing pass, there are several instances where similar sounding words are used in the wrong places. The prose is rough and unwieldy at times, occasionally becoming confused and uncertain. I suppose that could be an attempt at “the fog of war” which makes some sense, but it doesn’t help the story.

Two out of five pitchforks.

The work is less about the Succubus than it is about the cruelties of the time and place. There’s no real effort to tell her story, really she is for the most part barely there. A story that rambles, that has little purpose and in the end is only confusing is a shame. Editing and more depth at least would be a start.