Sep 24 2016

A cute Succubus 3D character model

I was looking through Vimeo again and came across a sort of highlight reel of characters created by one 3D artist. One of these happens to be a succubus, and quite a cute one at that…

 

If you can’t see the video here on the Tale, please try this link:

https://vimeo.com/122288352

As always, in case the video vanished, here is an image of the succubus herself…

Succubus Rosie by Daniel Oberhansley

Succubus Rosie by Daniel Oberhansley

She has quite the unique look, something that’s sensible, cute, and still has that little bit of succubiness that I like to see in such characters. I think the simplest thing to say is that she just looks  “right”. There’s personality in her style, expression, pose and overall look and it all just makes for a character that has a lot going for her.

She would be a neat character in an animated series I think really…

 

Tera

Sep 23 2016

A Review of Seducing the Succubus by Sabryna Nyx

Seducing the Succubus by Sabryna Nyx

Seducing the Succubus by Sabryna Nyx

At times there are certain things which are good to know in a story. Knowing the main character’s name, for one, I find to be quite helpful in being emotionally involved in the story. A story that is driven by the characters is something I rather like as well. But sometimes it’s difficult to give the suspension of belief needed when events take a turn.

Submission is a very personal thing. It is not a question of taking that from someone than it is the giving to one that is worthy of being submitted to. Along the way, sometimes, the two meld into something that cannot help but be very messy.

The story is about:

A female witch decides to summon the Succubus Lilith for her ultimate sexual fantasies. There is just one problem; the Succubus is only interested in mortal men. The Succubus eventually succumbs to the witch’s summoning spell, but can a mortal witch handle Lilith’s power?

A witch takes the risk in summoning the Queen herself, Lilith. She seeks Lilith’s power, her touch, her seductive nature. To fall into the clutches of a succubus and be enthralled by her. But there is a price to be paid, a pound of flesh, and the soul that cries out in need.

The main character of this work is never named, simply calling herself a witch and being referred to as such by Lilith when she appears. There’s a story behind the main character that’s skimmed over in the rush to the summoning, which was disappointing as so many of her thoughts offer hints of things that are never paid off in the story.

While much of the work revolves around the witch being taken, controlled, dominated by Lilith, there’s a little bit of a false start at the beginning of the work that felt a bit like filler in a way. Once past that, and into Lilith actually making herself known, the story moves directly into the erotica which has a very clear fantasy BDSM story at the core. Along with that comes the question of submission and domination, a little bit of Lilith using her powers, and body as a succubus in various ways, to draw the witch into her orbit and spirit her deeper into her clutches.

The erotica which is told in the seduction I enjoyed, Lilith was quite delicious in being seductive. However, when the more violent aspects came, such as biting, blood, some whipping and other punishments, i found the heat in the story faded rapidly away. There didn’t seem to be the same focus on telling than there was in titillation. The heat fell away as the biting, scratching and various means of pain being inflected by Lilith on her prey were told.

It’s a shame because outside of those odd moments where things were told in a rush, not expanded on, there was something interesting there that didn’t come out. Some of the events made some sense, but there were far more that gave me pause and wondered just how what happened would actually work.

One of the larger issues of this work is the flat dialogue. There’s no passion in the words, they read like someone was reading from a script and not putting emotion into it. Really that’s what’s missing the most from the story, the passion of the characters. The witch toying with herself has heat, but her words and thoughts dampen them. Lilith has power, but her words don’t seem to reflect that power fully.

There’s a disconnect between the moment of dominance and the words spoken. They are too calm, too rote, too matter of fact. The replies of submission read oddly, needing passion and to evoke the need within the character to submit fully.

The description of events is quite good, the author paints a vivid picture, but the dialogue, again, is lacking and the narration at times sounds almost bored. Once past the encounter, the story takes a turn into something far more interesting, more alive than the encounter with Lilith in many ways. There’s a certain threatening nature to events, a hint there is more to come and it’s very promising from adding suspense and power to the story.

The work ends on a kind of cliffhanger which offers a very obvious hint that another work should follow to continue the encounter between Lilith and the witch. There’s a need to suspend one’s belief about some parts of the work, especially towards quite a lot of lactation with regards to the sexual encounters.

There’s a good story at the core however, if one gets past the blood, the odd BDSM aspects and the occasional moments of the story getting lost within itself. But the dialogue doesn’t help and the lack of a name for the main character is troublesome.

Three out of five pitchforks.

It would be nice to know the main character’s name, it would be nice for the dialogue to sound more natural than it is. There’s a bit too much over the top BDSM for my tastes, though some will enjoy the scenes I’m quite sure. Lilith is a bit two-dimensional, needing more purpose that the little taste given. There is an interesting story here, the witch herself and Lilith also. Perhaps, if there will be a second part, that will be explored more.

 

Tera

Sep 23 2016

A Review of Cuffed and Collared by Kastil Eavenshade

Cuffed and Collared by Kastil Eavenshade

Cuffed and Collared by Kastil Eavenshade

There are some works that I find difficult to enjoy. What causes me the most difficulty is that sometimes the characters are just unlikeable. It’s a shame really when the story is interesting, but you don’t feel any sort of connection with them. Mix into that moments where the events “feel” wrong in how things happen and there comes a point in which the story really has to have one single thing going for it to keep me involved.

Sometimes, that can be one minor character, who isn’t a succubus or incubus. A character that is a mystery untold and, when the work is done and that still isn’t, then one wonders why it wasn’t.

The story is about:

A creature born in sin and debauchery, Markus Theo is as insatiable as they come. He’s relegated himself to a rather shallow life of sucking souls and committing petty theft—until a sexy half-incubus cop cuffs him to a table for more than just questioning. A prison cell is the least of Markus’s worries when tempting Detective Leo Vincent collars him and ignites a hunger like no other. Something stirs beyond the carnal greed and one kiss brands his damned soul.

Lost in a world of submission and sin, Markus will do anything for his lover—even infiltrate the underbelly of an incubus crime operation. But when a piece of his past surfaces and threatens to destroy everything, he must choose between losing Leo or his anonymity. Never wanting to return to the emptiness that was his life before, Markus prepares to sacrifice his freedom for the one thing he has never known. A man he truly loves.

Markus lives in a world where his existence revolves around his crimes, his passions, and his secrets. But not all secrets can be hidden for always and when his deepest one comes back to haunt him, Markus has little choice. The truth hurts, and the one that hurts him most will bring the most pain and passions.

While the story is written well, the interleaving plots are well thought out, and there are some moments of brilliance, there is a deeply dark tone through this work that is only really broken by a single minor character that I will come back to. Markus, and for that matter, really all of the main characters, is just unlikable from the first moments of the story.

There’s no soul in him, there’s a deeply seated expression of darkness, foreboding, and loss that remains with him throughout the work. His personality is rather grating and as the story unfolds he really doesn’t change very much from being, at least to me, somewhat of a cad in his personality. I hesitate to call him a stereotypical incubus, though he does takes souls, has a rather dim view of humanity, and sees the world around him as being not much more than a chance to take and not give.

The same can be said of the other main character Leo, or the other incubi and succubi that appear. There’s nothing attractive about them to speak of. Their world revolves around sex, dominance, and the occasional evil act they conspire to. This is reflected in the erotica which didn’t do anything for me really because it was brutal at times, certainly dehumanizing and any heat that started to build didn’t have a real chance to burn brightly. The sexual tone of this work is dark, there’s really nothing close to love in it, and when that is suggested, it tends to be brushed off quickly. I wanted to see the slightest glimmer of light in Markus, but every time that came close to happening, his darker nature took that away.

That brings me to the single character in the work that fascinated me, which is Leo’s sister. She’s a lovely ray of light amongst all of the darkness and she intrigued me. She has a secret of course, and when that is revealed I wanted to know more about that. Sadly she only appears fleetingly in this work, her story isn’t explored, and I really wish it was.

The climax of the work tells of Markus’ past, the truth about him and those around him. Some of those truths are brutal in their outcome, almost all of them are very dark. I felt like there was something missing at the end which might have tied up things somehow, but I’m not sure what that is exactly.

The writing is strong, a bit harsh, but overall the tone of the work matches the main characters well. I wish there was more light in the work, that there was something more than the darkness that was around every single character. The ending left me wanting in a lot of ways as well. There are a lot of unanswered questions, some threads are not closed up at the end. Perhaps there’s a need for a happy ever after for someone. I’m just not sure of where that comes out in the end.

Two and a half out of five pitchforks.

Being that I didn’t like Markus, or any of the main characters meant that I just couldn’t find a connection with them. While the story itself is very good, the plots are woven together well and there were moments of brilliance, not caring much about the characters is a problem. Considering that the only character I really cared about and wanted to know more about was Leo’s sister, and nothing really was explained about her except vaguely, there was a little bit of light in an otherwise dark and sad tale that couldn’t come through.

 

Tera

Sep 22 2016

Succubi Image of the Week 453

Another cute image of the Succubi this week on the Tale. A smile is important, a look matters too. A sexy outfit catches the eyes as does one’s tail too…

Succubus by 音無 涼風

Succubus by 音無 涼風

You can find the original source of this art here on Pixiv. She is just really quite adorable as a Succubus. Lovely hair that contrast well against the dark of her outfit, horns and tail, a cute smile. She has a look that just lends itself to her being fun in so many ways.

Her outfit is quite attractive, and I think speaks to the power that succubi have of hinting and teasing others in so many ways. It’s nice to find art like this which offers something more than simply a succubus looking sexy… She is a succubus with personality, charm, and more…

 

Tera

Sep 21 2016

Another costume idea to ponder…

Red Metallic Fishtail SkirtAnother idea I have been playing with is sort of a 1950s starlet succubi costume. In red of course. But what sort of dress would one need? I think something like this might be a place to start with an appropriate skin tight top as well…

This lovely idea sells for about $50 US, it is only the skirt and nothing else, but really, as the start to something more… It’s an interesting thought…

Perhaps I would match this with a lycra vest or bandeau top as a thought. Adding some opera gloves as well is a thought that comes to mind. Obviously there would be horns, not a tail though, that just wouldn’t work here. Red heels, but I don’t think really tall ones as this would be rather restricting my ability to walk.

But yes, this does give me ideas to mull over, if not for being out in public than certainly for my Eternal of course…

Four and a bit out of five pitchforks for the thoughts certainly. Four pitchforks as this is, just because it looks so marvellously sexy…

 

Tera

Sep 20 2016

A Review of Incubus Journal: Complete by The Mad Hatter

Incubus Journal: Complete by The Mad Hatter

Incubus Journal: Complete by The Mad Hatter

Recently I reviewed a series of short stories in which the main character is transformed into an Incubus. You can find those reviews here and here on the Tale. The author added another two works to the series then issued the six parts as a single volume. As such, this review will be of the series as a whole and how, as as whole, I’m rather disappointed in the lack of editing, story, and really only a focus upon what consists of a series of short pieces of porn and little else.

A story needs something more than sex to make it interesting. It needs editing, focus, character development and, at some point, a connection with the reader. Porn alone is not a story. Sex alone is not character development. It’s especially a problem when there are seeds of ideas, but they aren’t developed into something more.

The work tells of:

Follow our protagonist as he slowly finds himself turning into a male succubus, an incubus. He starts to enslave women to his will, changing them to fit his preferences. Huge breast and butt being just a start. Turning a woman into a Nekogirl being one and inflating another. Will he let these powers destroy him, corrupt him or will he master them?

Chris becomes an incubus, uses his powers on various men and women, has sex with a succubus and then faces a demoness that wants to destroy him. Assuming of course all of the sex doesn’t get too much in his way that is.

There is a lot of issues with this work, and the series as a whole. There’s no editing to speak of, there’s no story to follow really. There’s an attempt at plot but it doesn’t go anywhere. The writing is odd, almost unreadable, the dialogue is uneven, and the actions of the main character at times, I found to be a problem.

The problem is that the series seems to be so focused on the erotica that when the real background about what is going on appears, when there is a story to be told, it really isn’t. It’s also a good idea to remember what your main character’s name is as well. Characters are not described much, save for what’s needed for the porn scenes, the transformations are written in a way that seems flat and, as well, there comes a lot of confusion as to what exactly is going on.

The story wanders aimlessly for the most part and when something does happen, there’s no focus and no direction. The main character’s voice seems to be dumbed down more and more as their transformation continues. A measure of justice is done in the aftermath, but it is confusing and unclear. There is the feeling that these are a series of moments vaguely tied together towards in trying to get back to the main story.

Spelling mistakes, grammar mistakes, and overall how the text reads just doesn’t work. There’s a hint as to what’s going on, but all of the characters are cardboard cutouts. The sad part is, from time to time, the author hints at little side stories which would have been really interesting, but only mentions them in passing before going back to the porn scenes.

There are, by my count, about ten ways for this story to have been told better, expanded, the characters made to be more. That it didn’t happen, that the author didn’t spend some time to edit this into something more than a hot mess is a shame. More so that they charged for this.

Half of a pitchfork out of five.

Erotica alone is not a story. Transformation alone is not a story. Calling someone a succubus, or incubus, is not a story. Connecting the dots is. But that didn’t happen. The author needs to edit this work into something more substantial, tell more of a story. This isn’t a story, it’s a short series of barely connected porn scenes wrapped around a charade of a main character.

It could be more, but it didn’t happen.

 

Tera

Sep 20 2016

A Review of Demon Futa Does Vegas by Jocelyn Saragona

Demon Futa Does Vegas by Jocelyn Saragona

Demon Futa Does Vegas by Jocelyn Saragona

At some point in the creative process of writing, there comes a time when editing means more than the writing itself. There is a need to make dialogue sound real. There is a need to correct a multitude of spelling mistakes. The words on the page need to flow, to make sense and for the story not to lost its way.

It doesn’t matter what the story is about, the final work need to have some polish in order for it to be more than a series of words slapped together randomly.

Beyond that, telling a story which seems to hold a lot of background and then not telling that story for the sake of getting to the erotica is a shame. Story matters and without that, the work is not what it could be.

  • Title: Demon Futa Does Vegas
  • Author: Jocelyn Saragona
  • Length: 31 Pages
  • ASIN: B01CYL2VOU
  • Publishing Date: March 13, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

The story is about:

A Vegas comic-con attracts Vianne, a succubus futanari with an appetite for mortal sin. Her obedient thrall Morgan, once shy, has become an irresistible sex kitten herself. Vianne proudly watches her thrall seduce men, though she can’t satiate herself second hand action alone. She enjoys a reckless group tousle with a club girl and another futa. Later, Vianne helps Morgan seduce her long time crush, but it backfires. This man is the other futa’s territory. After accidentally enthralling him, Vianne must break off the spell or face a rival futa’s wrath.

Vianne and her thrall Morgan are in Vegas and having some fun. A chance encounter leads to a problem and in the end there’s only one solution to make everyone happy.

The work is mainly focused on the erotica with a bit of background and plot to hold things together. There’s not a lot of time spent learning about Vianne or Morgan or for that matter any of the main characters. There’s just enough characterization to give them form and not much else. Vianne is a futa succubus, there is another in the story as well. There’s a little moment of her wings appearing and some scattered moments of her true form leaking out here and there, but really the story is mainly about futa erotica overall.

There is a bit of succubus mind control as well, which I thought worked well. There’s a bit of a D/s theme from time to time also. Some of the scenes are a bit contrived, a little expected, and while so the heat in them is fairly good, but could have been much more than it was for one simple reason.

The work needs a lot of editing overall. There are many spelling mistakes, incorrect words being used, and overall the story reads oddly. The dialogue “reads” wrong. It very much sounds like, many times, emotionally devoid of anything. The idea of the story is interesting and I would have liked to know more about Vianne, her past, and how events were before this story started. There’s a “societal” aspect to some points in the story but that isn’t explored for the sake of getting to the erotica.

That then is the problem here, that the story was pushed aside for the erotic scenes. It’s a shame because Vianne and the other characters are interesting. I would have liked more story about them, their relationships and so on.

One and a half out of five pitchforks.

The work needs a serious editing for grammar, spelling, and comprehension. The characters are interesting, there’s a story to be told, but it’s not brought out as much as it could have been. Perhaps there will be a second work, but even so, the author needs to make this work better than it is. Tell the story please, the erotica will look after itself.

 

Tera

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