Jul 24 2016

A Review of Lilith by Kelly Shamblee

Lilith by Kelly Shamblee

Lilith by Kelly Shamblee

A review today of a work that was to be the first in what was to be called the Demon Chronicles series. I note this because the work appeared in 2012 and no further works in the series have ever appeared.

That’s a shame because the series showed a lot of promise through the main character, those around her, and the book blurb which I think set up what should have been an amazingly good series in spite of a series of flaws that took away some, but not all, of what I enjoyed about it.

There comes a moment when a choice must be made. Sometimes that is forced upon you, with no change to choose another path. Sometimes that goes wrong. Sometimes it leads towards something unexpected. A dream unimaginable.

  • Title: Lilith
  • Author: Kelly Shamblee
  • Length: 61 Pages
  • ASIN: B009R9XTMG
  • Publishing Date: October 14, 2012
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells the story of:

Lilith is not your ordinary sophomore in college. Although she has everything going for her, an amazing boyfriend, she lives with her best friend in an awesome house, and she currently has her dream job, shes also a demon and her father is in fact Satan. Lilith has been enjoying her life not harvesting souls for her father for the past two years, but now he wants her to continue or else their will be dire consequences that she dare not entertain in her head.

All goes terribly wrong when she kills a man and draws a great warrior angel to her location and then accidentally shattered the angels halo and sends the angels soul to hell. Now she must travel through time and find the pieces of the shattered halo and forge them back together while she tries to juggle her currently life and the lives that she must live in the future and try to avoid being killed by her fellow brother and sisters in the process or else she and the angels soul are literally doomed for all eternity.

Lilith seems like an ordinary, average girl at college. She’s not stunningly beautiful, although her rich roommate tries her best to make her be so. She’s pining for a boy, which might be her soulmate, but can’t have him. She wants to be on her own, away from her father’s influence, but that’s everywhere. The life of a succubus who just wants to be herself and free gets more complicated when she does the right thing for the right reasons and is made to pay for that. No good deed goes unpunished, even when your father is the Devil himself.

Lilith, the succubus, or demoness of the work, is funny, cute, intelligent, and more than anything else is the focus of things as she should be. She’s miffed at her roommate a lot, she’s desperately attracted to a boy she meets. The trials of college live, of finding a job, and dealing with it, just bring so much to her character that the fun in her becomes the best part of the work. It’s clear that Lilith wants to be herself, needs to be, and tries to be.

But, of course, her father appears, demands she “does her job” and after a deal is made, things slowly start to go wrong. How that happens is told in a way that’s not telegraphing the entire story and that works well. There are some lovely hints about “claimed souls” which I think I know the answer to. There is a moment when Lilith does the right thing, being that she was attacked, quite brutally, and the one that did so deserved what happened. Among moments of joy, the first stirrings of love for Lilith, there are moments when her true, hidden self comes out. I’ll say that when she dresses up in a devil costume, then tosses away a pair of sparkly horns before making her own appear, in that moment, Lilith was perfect as far as I was concerned.

Still, her good deed brings an unwanted fight with an angel that doesn’t care about anything save removing Lilith from Earth. A battle comes, and then the ending arrives. The ending is abrupt and unclear. The event unfolds in a meaningful way, there is story being told and then it all comes to a literal crashing halt. The ending doesn’t even feel so much like and ending so much as it does seem like the author left off at least a page, possibly more. Being that there hasn’t been another work in the series, that’s a real shame and one has to look back at the book blurb to get an idea of where the author was going to take things. I really wish they had.

There’s no real erotica in this work, really it is a story of growth and how that unfolds for Lilith. Core to that is one single truth. Lilith has never had sex with anyone. But the one soul she encounters, that draws her. Even when she realizes that he is “spoken for” that doesn’t stop the attraction. It seems fairly obvious where that plot thread is going, I wish for that to be, but as this was the only work to appear… we’ll never know.

We’ll never know who the characters are, I feel like there are a few that her devils and angels around her. We’ll never know how the story unfolds, what happens to Lilith in her future, what she faces to make things right. It is the loss of that, the promise of what was to comes that it the saddest thing of all. But there is a major flaw in this work as well.

The single major problem with this work is the really poor editing. Even in the book blurb, there are a number of mistakes which take away from things. There are spelling mistakes, tense errors, words missing, or used wrong. Almost every page has a little stumble which gave me pause and shouldn’t have. The story itself is strong, the characters are too, but the lack of editing care just makes this work not shine as it really should have.

Three out of five pitchforks.

I wish I could give this the four it really should be, but there are so many spelling, grammar, and word mistakes that I just cannot do so. That doesn’t mean that the story idea, the characters and how things unfold isn’t well done, for it is.

The larger shame here is that the series never continued, never told the latter part of the book blurb and didn’t allow for the story to move from an unfinished thought to a complete tale. It might never be, but the little moments that made me smile about Lilith herself I will remember…



Jul 24 2016

A Review of Marked By The Succubus by Vivienne Black

Marked By The Succubus by Vivienne Black

Marked By The Succubus by Vivienne Black

There are many short stories appearing which have succubi as characters. The single most common problem with stories that are so short, is that there’s no time spent in actually telling a complete story. There is the suggestion of one, the offer of something more than happens.

Many times such works seem to be an opening chapter in a novel. Many times the story is brushed aside for a hot flash that tries to make up for the story’s length. But story matters, the characters matter and seemingly giving up on the story just as things get interesting is a real shame all things considered.

  • Title: Marked By The Succubus
  • Author: Vivienne Black
  • Length: 6 Pages
  • ASIN: B01HZX84S4
  • Publishing Date: July 4, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

It is the story of:

Klaire Reed is a creative, love-starved loner who has a fascination with all things dark and dastardly. She owns a magical ring that she’s kept on her finger for years. When this ring releases a much more powerful force, what will Klaire do when she finally meets the creature of her wettest dreams and most jolting nightmares?

Klaire tells of a ring she owns and the mystery surrounding it. A dream, or is it a dream, comes to her in the middle of the night and she cannot resist her. It is reality or her own fevered imagination. Either way, something has come and something has happened.

The work is a stream of thought from Klaire, telling of her needs, mainly sexual, her fantasies and how a ring, a rather unique one, fits into everything. The writing is a bit dry, Klaire’s emotional connection with her words really only coming to the fore through her erotic moments. Otherwise she drifts through her thoughts, scattered as they are.

As the story progresses, and her thoughts turn towards a certain ring she possessed, her thoughts become more focused, more directed and then her fantasies wrap into the ring. When that happens, a being appears, which could be a succubus, but really isn’t said to be one, only suggested. Assuming she is a succubus, she is dominant, powerful, and knows all of the secrets that Klaire holds and how to use them.

The succubus is never named, never really described. She is a fleeting piece of thought and imagination that doesn’t quite develop into something more than a means for Klaire find relief. Being that this work is so short, that’s not surprising. But as well, being so short, the building up of the story means there’s little time to develop the succubus as a character outside of her being seductive and playing with Klaire.

While Klaire is interesting, and the succubus, again, if she really is one, is as well, the limit of the story means there’s no character development, no plot, no expanding story to unfold. The work becomes a hot flash that just simmers in what it offers, but doesn’t bring things to a boil.

Two and a half out of five pitchforks.

This reads very much like the opening chapter to a novel. There’s a good hook, a character that seems to be complex, and a mystery to be delved into. But that doesn’t happen here, the story being pushed aside for a bit of heat which doesn’t go anywhere.

The author needs to develop this further, to take this work and make from it what seems to be here. Doing so I think would be interesting, and really should happen. There’s more here than my rating suggests. But like the story, it can’t come out to play as it wants to.



Jul 23 2016

A cute Morrigan WIP YouTube

A really cute Morrigan Aensland artwork being created by the artist today on the Tale. She sort of reminds me of a Chibi Morrigan, in a way, which I think works really well. Cute Morrigan is always a fun thing to have after all…


If you cannot see this video here on the Tale, please try this link:


The artist, ZeldaLukaChan, was nice enough to share this art on DeviantArt, and you can find this finished work here on that site and this artist’s page can be found here.

Here is a smaller image of the art in all of its cuteness…

Danger! Morrigan Aensland by ZeldaLukaChan

Danger! Morrigan Aensland
by ZeldaLukaChan

I think this is just adorably cute, especially Morrigan’s eyes and her expression which just makes me smile quite a lot…

Please do visit this artist’s page on DeviantArt and see some of their other works too!



Jul 22 2016

A Review of Fuzzy Magic by J.H. Bond

Fuzzy Magic by J.H. Bond

Fuzzy Magic by J.H. Bond

I like stories where Succubi are described as being different than what they are generally expected to be. The idea of what seems be a witch, in many ways, being said to be a Succubus to me is a little different and I think it is an interesting concept to explore.

The thing is, when that idea is just used as a means to get to what is a rather silly piece of erotica mixed with a somewhat oversexed pair of Succubi, it doesn’t quite live up to expectations. Nor does it really when the reason why they are called Succubi itself isn’t explored. Perhaps that missing piece makes all the difference…

  • Title: Fuzzy Magic
  • Author: J.H. Bond
  • Length: 20 Pages
  • ASIN: B01A4YAPZ6
  • Publishing Date: January 3, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

It is the story of:

Shortly after her eighteenth birthday Megan learns she is a Succubus. A sorceress who summons spirits of lust and drains their energy to fuel her own powers. Each Succubus embodies and promotes the spread of a specific type of desire. Her initiation and awakening is going to involve Sir Benjamin Bunbury, the stuffed rabbit she’s slept with all her life. When Megan summons him though he transforms from stuffed toy to tall, lean, muscular furry hunk. In order to awaken her abilities, and before she can send him back, Megan must drain him of his lustful energies, and there’s only one way to do that. Hint: It doesn’t involve potions or spells.

Megan is told by her aunt Samantha, who isn’t quite her aunt, that she is a Succubus and she needs to deal with it. A certain stuffed plushie rabbit, a little succubus magic, and the need within her turns the experience into something that Megan isn’t likely to forget.

As a whole, this is a cute, funny work of erotica that doesn’t take itself very seriously, There’s a feeling throughout the story that the characters are winking at the reader, teasing them with what happens in the story. There’s just this lovely bit of mischievousness that runs throughout the work, holds things together, and in doing so makes this work quite the unexpected read.

Megan and Samantha are called Succubi, but they aren’t what one might expect them to be. It’s never really clearly explained why they are called Succubi exactly, though the need they both have for sex, almost constantly, seems to be the biggest indication of why things are as they are. I feel like it is more apt to call them sexual witches more than anything else because their powers seem to be set towards that and not really towards something more Succubus-like.

That’s not a bad thing, really it leaves some interesting paths for the story to take, but while the erotica’s path is taken, almost from the beginning, nothing else really is. There’s not a lot of time spent explaining things, how it is that Megan accepts things so quickly and why she does. The focus is on Megan’s summoning and what happens after that, for that led to the erotica itself.

With the balance of the work being focused on the erotica as much as it is, there’s a real lack of story and it is a shame because I wanted more of the story than there is. It was interesting, if passed over quickly and I wish it wasn’t. As well, there aren’t really Succubi in this work and calling characters Succubi doesn’t make them so.

One and a half out of five pitchforks.

A cute read, lots of humour and there’s just that little bit of silliness from Megan that made things work. But I wanted more story, a lot more… and some real Succubi, because these really aren’t.



Jul 22 2016

A Review of Home In Her Arms by C.V. Walter and J.D. Rammer

Home In Her Arms by C.V. Walter and J.D. Rammer

Home In Her Arms by C.V. Walter and J.D. Rammer

There is such as thing as promise in a story. The promise of the characters, the promise of the story. Sometimes there is the promise of a succubus appearing, even if they only do so fleetingly and tangentially to the story itself.

In May of 2015, I reviewed a work by this author in which I commented on some issues I felt needed to be addressed in their writing. The work I am reviewing today is, apparently, set in the same universe as that prior work and the author has improved to an extent. There is story, there is not quite so much focus on erotica, but there still the minor problem of dropping in a succubus for no real reason.

  • Title: Home In Her Arms
  • Author: C.V. Walter and J.D. Rammer
  • Length: 44 Pages
  • Publishing Date: July 11, 2016
  • This work at Amazon.com

It is the story of:

Rikett’s a soldier who’s been away fighting for someone else. When word comes that his village has been attacked, he rushes home to help. Half of his home is in pieces and the only person left is Solana, a girl he grew up with, and she doesn’t want his help.

So, what’s an elf to do but fight for his home… and her heart.

There are choices that Rikett needs to make. None of them are simple, save for one. It’s making that choice which will set out not just his future, but that of Solana as well. Together, their future will be more than they expected, and greater than others thought it would be.

The work, overall, is written better than the prior work and series that the author released, called Evil Sorceress In Training. In that series, there’s not much in the way of character development, plot or much in the way of anything succubus themed, save for one minor scene along the way.

There’s a connection in the main characters here, which is good, the erotica isn’t overpowering the story, which is also a good thing. But there’s still the problem of dropping a succubus into the story for really no good apparent reason.

There is a succubus in this work, though she is never really described other than being a succubus. Her name is never given, her reason for appearing isn’t explained. She simply appears at the end of the work as a means to give direction to some sort of ‘evil’ that the main characters will be facing. Assuming that this work leads into some sort of series.

As such, this isn’t much of a succubus themed work. The succubus is a tease, a thought, a passing idea and then the work comes to a close. She’s a very minor character making an appearance… just because.

Overall, the work offers an interesting start to a series, there’s some good plots to carry forward, but if this work goes off in a direction that’s more focused on sex than story, it would be disappointing. The author’s note suggests there’s the possibility of something more to come. As things stand, the succubus isn’t so much a character as she’s an idea, not fleshed out. From the perspective of anything succubus themed, there isn’t. That’s not to say there might be, eventually, possibly.

Three out of five pitchforks.

An interesting story with some promise for a series, but this isn’t a succubus story. There is a succubus here that only promises to be part of the story, but really isn’t. Perhaps the author will continue things forward, that is unclear from their comments at the end of the work. If so, we’ll see what comes. The name of the succubus for one would be a good place to start.



Jul 21 2016

Succubi Image of the Week 444

There is some art of Succubi that tells the most amazing story. There is something about the moment captured, the expressions, the pose, that tells an unspoken tale. A story that teases, suggests, offers the most tempting things to be discovered… Those are the images that I am most drawn to…

Little Devil's wall boom by Violic Chen

Little Devil’s wall boom by Violic Chen

This work is titled Little Devil’s wall boom and is by the artist Violic Chen. You can find the original page on ArtStation.com where I found this art here.

There’s the most… Harry Potter feel to this art I think, certainly the young man who finds himself looking into the eyes of a rather intense Succubus has that look to him. The entire work is just strikingly powerful in so many ways. The background, the pose, the little details here and there, but then comes the Succubus herself.

I simply adore her. Her expression, the force of will she has is amazing. The intent in her eyes, how she holds him, trapped, as if to demand an answer from him about something he has done. Her form is exquisite, not over the top sexually, but instead she’s a force of nature wrapped in horns, wings and tail that just expresses the power she holds. Most of all, she looks human, she does not have hooves, and really her outfit and those boots just add so much to her character…

Possibly my favourite Succubi Image of the Year by far…



Jul 20 2016

If there is Delight in this costume I can’t find it…

Devil Delight CostumeOnce again I have to wonder at what point exactly a costume goes from being a good idea into the realm of being a disaster. There is a tipping point where I think there needs to be a giant flashing neon sign to which heed needs to be taken.

This is called the Devil Delight Costume and it comes with the flame colour gown, the horn headband and the sleevelets. The shoes and pitchfork are not included and it sells for around $75 US online.

The horns are silly, at least they had the intelligence not to include that wonderfully trashy pitchfork, which I have to admit I am surprised that they managed.

It isn’t the worst gown that i have seen offered and really it wouldn’t be quite so bad if not for the jagged hem, which I just do not like at all.The colour pattern actually looks relatively nice compared to some of the costumes that I have reviewed on the Tale in the past.

I’m not sure I would want to use the sleeveless really, they don’t quite suit me well, for one, and I don’t like things that drape over my hands as they do in this image.

I suppose as a none-too-sexy costume for more public occasions this isn’t all that bad a choice overall, but there are many other costumes that look quite a lot better for about the same cost.

I think I would have to look for one of these in a larger size so that I could have it adjusted to remove that hem line, for one, and possibly find a way to cinch in the waistline to make it a bit more body conforming…

I’ll give this two and a half out of five pitchforks.

Not totally awful, but at the same time it isn’t completely delightful either…