Aug 29 2014

A Review of Incubus: A Short Story by Nicholas Taylor

Incubus: A Short Story by Nicholas Taylor

Incubus: A Short Story by Nicholas Taylor

Not all stories are romance, days in the sun or are all happiness and joy. Then there are others that are darkness, loss, and despair which take the life out of their characters and, sometimes, their readers as well.

It;’s a fine line that some authors can manage to walk along well. The question is, what’s the point of the story if they do?

It is the story of:

Not all out of town business men are as harmless as they seem, and sometimes the scary stories told around camp fires have some truth to them. Lewis Rudnick isn’t just in Denver for work. He’s a hungry Incubus that’s in town to feed.

Lewis is an Incubus and he lives in w world where there are very few of them to be found. His world is similar to ours save that beings of magic and myth are very real and exist alongside of humanity. But there are rules and one of them is that killing humans means certain death.

The thing is… Lewis has no choice and to survive he has become an expert at doing so and covering up his tracks. But in doing so, who he is has become entrapped with what he must do.

I found it hard to like Lewis, mainly for the overwhelming darkness that floats in his thoughts, actions and manners. He is cold, calculating, and in truth he has to be to survive, but the story remains focused on that for the most part and he doesn’t develop very much as a character.

Except, he meets a woman in a bar, expecting to feed off of her a little and finds that not as simple a thing to do as he expects. I expected some kind of change in him from that meeting, but it was drowned out by the need he has to survive.

Setting aside Lewis’ problems in the story, there is a universe there that seems to be interesting, if only hinted at, and is returned to in this author’s longer story which you can find on Amazon and elsewhere by searching their name. There is a hint of Succubi in his world, what they do to survive and his feelings about it. But only a hint. There is a hint about what they as a species must do to survive, and there is a good explanation for it which I appreciated as well. But it is all fleeting for the story is driven even in the glimpses to return to Lewis and his life of despair and the evil he must do to survive.

That is the point of the story of course. There is no real emotion other than his through the story. There is no other point of view than his that comes to the forefront. It all comes to his ranting within himself at the universe and the game he is forced to play.

The writing is very good save for a minor tense change at the beginning of the story which felt out of place when I read it. One other thing that bothered me was that the work is billed on some sites by its page length, which is thirteen pages, but the actual story is only seven pages in length with the balance being self-promotion and so on. I think that the author would have been better served with about five more pages of story and a lot less of that. Questions were left unanswered which I will assume are answered in their other works, but it would have been nice to tie this work into their other works better as the connections here are tenuous.

Three out of five pitchforks.

I understand why it is such a dark world for Lewis.  I accept that it is a poor existence for him. I see that there is a glimmer of hope, but that’s crushed by his past almost to the point of non-existence. To have all of that in seven pages is an accomplishment, don’t get me wrong.

It’s just that too much darkness makes a story hard for me to enjoy and it really was hard for me to enjoy for all of the suffering, loss and pain…

 

Tera

Aug 28 2014

Succubi Image of the Week 346

Every Tail has her day and really they don’t seem to get enough attention from many artists… And really that’s a shame. As much as a Succubus might have wings and her horns… She always has a Tail…

Succubut by Lykamo

Succubut by Lykamo

This is called, rather aptly, Succubut and us by an wrist on DeviantArt called Lykamo. You can find the page I found this work at DeviantArt here and this artist’s page is here as well.

Yes, I know… She has hooves. But I can almost look at her legs and see her wearing leg warmers and some odd footwear. That might be a bit of a stretch, but it works for me at least. I just think that it is a rather unique perspective of a Succubus in a lot of ways. After all, most of the time people are focused on other parts of a Succubus’ body… So why not give her tail and bum some equal time too?

I do find myself wondering what she looks like otherwise. She’s a mystery and that, more than anything else, makes her quite fascinating to me overall. Still, I would have liked to have her with some normal feet, but… I’m quite fine with the rest of her by far…

But I still wonder, a lot, about her name, what she looks like, and her personality… Going by her Tail, she would be a lot of… fun. And that matters don’t you think?

 

Tera

Aug 27 2014

This costume is a real Sin honestly…

Sexy Sinner CostumeA… Well… A really uninspiring costume this time I think. The name alone makes me cringe and that’s just the beginning…

This is called the Sexy Sinner Costume and it comes with the red crop top and matching skirt with petticoat and the horn headband. The pitchfork and stocking are not included…

It sells for $66 US on the sites I found it on…

The horns are lousy, and the pitchfork is silly. Mind you, I like the stockings, at least they go with the look of the costume even if they aren’t part of it. The top does nothing for me and, in the end, the only thing I like is not part of the costume save for the skirt which I can almost like, but it is a struggle to do so honestly…

I also have to wonder about the model’s look and the mess her hair is in. Really doesn’t at least to me, make the costume all that much more appealing as a whole.

I can’t really think of anything that could make it better, though I am going to find those stockings and order them…

One out of five pitchforks.

At least I found something in this mess that was interesting… Even if it isn’t part of the costume…

 

Tera

Aug 26 2014

A Review of The Warder’s Demon by Viola Grace

The Warder's Demon by Viola Grace

The Warder’s Demon by Viola Grace

The story of characters should not be, by any means, just their recent past. They should not make mention of family that are never seen or things which are touched upon but have no bearing upon the story itself.

The tapestry of the story is the history of the world they live in, what they do, and, if at all possible, the changes that happen in them and around them as the story unfolds. And if that includes a wonderful love story that’s just fine with me…

  • Title: The Warder’s Demon
  • Author: Viola Grace
  • Publishing Date: April 23, 2012
  • Length: 92 Pages
  • ISBN: 9781771110983
  • This work at Smashwords.com

The work tells of:

Elhara Warder has spent her life surrounded by the warmth of friends and family. Meeting a demon by chance at her local bar surprises her, but when he takes her on the most romantic dates of her life she feels herself falling for his considerable charms.

Solar has lived his considerable life span waiting for a woman whose sexual fantasies would not cause his body to shift into her ideal man. When he meets Elhara Warder, his glamour is stripped and she sees him as he is. To his shock, she does not run from his demonic features but rather speaks to him as if he was one of her own kind.

He wants to get to know her better and when she agrees to start meeting him during the daylight they start a relationship that surpasses any he has ever known.

The moment that they commit, a succubus takes action to destroy their happiness, but can Solar recapture what was lost when Elhara loses all memory of him, or will starting over do the trick?

Elhara is out on the town and meets someone… different. His name is Solar and he is an Incubus. The two find that they like, then over time, come to love each other. But then a Succubus named H’cheri does not want them to be wed and things take a turn for the worst.

Solar is the kind of Incubus that I personally enjoy reading about. He is intelligent, he has personality and most of all, he is willing to be more than he is expected to be. He does not feed on souls like the legends, he instead needs both love and lust to sustain him. It was much more interesting when the little touches of his personality came through in the story. His love of nature, the things he does with Elhara, such as minigolf just made me smile. Solar is, simply, a full person in the work and not a paper tiger.

H’cheri on the other hand, the single Succubus that appears, is quite stereotypical in her manners and actions by far. She is an important plot point and drives the work in a direction that it would not have gone without her. But she is not a real character to me. All that she is comes to the single thought of having Solar and not letting anyone else have him. It was a good thing to be honest when she was in the work for only a short time.

Being that this is the final work in the Warder’s series by this author there is a vast tapestry to draw from. Both Solar and Elhara’s families are complicated and vast in nature, but the moments shared between Solar and those that wish to be sure that he is right for Elhara tell of their love for their kindred. His own family, while slightly demonic yes, is not actually evil but instead lives on different sorts of energy which actually makes for some fascinating thoughts about them.

The story is made of moments shared. The ones between Solar and Elhara in the beginning are wonderful and when H’cheri interferes the anger and hurt within Solar is exactly how it should be. More so the battle he undertakes to find Elhara, to be with her, to reconnect… that is the stuff of dreams…

The author has a way to draw the reader into the story that lets you feel the emotions of the characters not just their actions. Beyond that, the descriptions of the places they are leaves quite an impression. The erotica is loving, as it should be between two found souls that desire each other. Some of the moments were hilarious and that took the edge off of some of the more serious ones. It is simply a joy to read…

I’m giving this work four and a half out of five pitchforks.

It is a shame that this work was the final one in this series. As the closing chapter it ends the series on a perfect note, one that really was much more than I expected at the beginning. I would have liked H’cheri to be more than she was or to see other Succubi to have something to compare her with. There are of course as well some secrets about both Succubi and Incubi in this universe untold and I would have liked to know them as well…

 

Tera

Aug 25 2014

Storm Clouds 206 by TeraS

Beginning Chapter 36 this week on the Tale … I think the Queen needs to make an appearance … at least for a little while … And she needs to speak with someone about some things that bother her …

For those that would like to read Storm Clouds from the beginning, you can click this link, and it will take you to the page where all of the previous chapters can be found.

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Storm Clouds 206
Chapter 36
By TeraS

 

Time passed ever so slowly in the room. Someone who concentrated might be able to follow the dust motes as they floated here and there among the bookcases, tables, and chairs. Someone not so inclined to watch them might be held by the image of a woman straddling a man on one of the chairs, her fingers laced into his hair and their lips crushed together in a deep kiss.

One might also notice that neither of them were moving. But there was one other in the room who was. She was stalking back and forth, her long, red, heart-tipped tail swaying pensively as she walked, her eyes scanning intently from the carpet below her to the two intertwined and then back again as she paced.

Out of what some might mistake for frustration or impatience, she would tuck a wayward lock of hair back behind one of her ears from time to time. In fact, it was neither of those emotions, but rather her pondering over what she knew and understood …

… and when Tera, the Queen of the Succubi, put a puzzle together and the pieces fit? That spelt issues for someone.

Her thoughts were interrupted by a familiar presence entering the apartment building, so her pacing came to a stop and a warm smile played upon her lips. She had been wondering when he was going to appear and it seemed that this moment was the one that mattered.

His timing, as always, was impeccable. But then, he was especially attuned to her.

Counting to twelve, Tera walked over to the apartment door and then waited another three beats before opening the door and looking out into the hallway. The elevator dinged, the doors opened and she waved to the one standing there, his hands quite full. “Coming! Just a moment, my heart!”

The man in the elevator, who Thomas would recognize as the pastor from the funeral he attended not so long ago, nodded his head in lieu of a wave: “All fine, Dear One. I’ll manage.”

Quickly making her way down the hall, Tera replied: “Manners will not allow that, you know. At least allow me to be of some use?”

He chuckled: “We’ve talked about this before, Dear One. You sell yourself short. You are more than useful and, one of these days, you’ll see that.”

She scrunched up her nose as she took a small bag from under his arm: “Family trait, you know.”

He nodded once: “Yes … quite so.”

Moving to walk beside him, she slipped her arm with his and they moved towards John’s apartment. As they walked, they slipped into the banter they always shared.

“I’m sorry for being late.”

“Not late. You are exactly on time, as always.”

“How are you managing, Dear One?”

“Oh … managing, my heart.” Of course, she didn’t want to worry him.

“I see.” Of course, he saw right through that.

The next words that passed between them were ones that each knew didn’t need to be said, for they had known each other, it seemed, forever. Tera’s heart would always be so, as would she for him as his Dear One. That was just how things were, and nothing in the universes could change that fact. After they entered John’s apartment, he handed her one of the styrofoam cups he held. As he closed the door he asked: “And where is your Eternal, Dear One?”

Tera smiled as she traced a fingertip around the rim of the styrofoam cup: “Oh, he’s off and about looking after something.” She looked at him and nodded once: “But he is with me and I am with him.”

The look he gave her was somewhere between understanding and concern: “Of course. That was not my concern.”

Her finger stopped moving as she tilted her head to the left: “But you are concerned.”

He nodded, taking the lid off his tea: “I am concerned about you, Dear One. You are troubled, have been for some time. I can see it in your eyes … your Eternal and I are the only ones that possibly could have seen it, of course, but it is there.”

Tera was silent for a time, then admitted: “I think the Dark has been messing with things it should not. So I am … hoping … to fix that damage.”

“I see. And the two over there?”

“They are the thing that needs to be made right once more.”

He took a sip of his tea: “Playing matchmaker, Dear One?”

She took the lid off her own tea: “Oh those two are matched, my heart. I’m just trying to set things right once more.”

“Dear One, are you sure you are doing the right thing, or are you possibly, inadvertently, just maybe doing the Dark’s own work for it?”

Tera paused, her tea almost to her lips: “Memories have been changed, my heart. The reason for that I do not know. Yet the Dark has altered the memories of some of the succubi. It has also changed the memories of innocents. It is trying to set something up to Its benefit. Jane is one of them. John, the dear man she is with at the moment, is the other.”

“Are you sure?”

Tera’s tail moved slowly behind her: “I know Eternals when I see them, my heart. In that I am sure. What happens after that is in their hands.”

“Which means we wait.”

“You need not have to my heart. I’ll wait.”

He winked: “And have you talking to yourself? I shudder to think what your dear Tail will have to say about that.”

Tera smiled a warm, knowing smile: “You are, of course, quite right, my heart.”

He walked over to the couch and settled in: “What would you like to talk about while we wait?”

Tera took a spot on the other end of the couch, curling her legs underneath her as she did: “I have a theory … more of a thought, perhaps.”

He looked at his tea: “Why do I have the feeling, Dear One, that we’ll need more tea?”

She laughed: “Because that is how it always works when we chat, my heart. And, next time, I will bring the pie to share.”

He tipped his cup towards her: “So. Tell me what’s bothering you.”

And so she did.

Aug 24 2014

A Review of Bound to Hell by Carl East

Bound to Hell by Carl East

Bound to Hell by Carl East

I believe that having interesting characters is what drives a story forwards. Without that one thing any story cannot stand on it’s own. Having an adventure, no matter how interesting, no matter how action packed. cannot make up for that.

It is their voice that matters. They have to have personality. They have to be someone that I care about to know what happens next.

The thing is however, having characters that are interesting but cannot express themselves well? That’s where some problems begin for me at least…

  • Title: Bound to Hell
  • Author: Carl East
  • Publishing Date: July 8, 2013
  • Length: 28 Pages
  • IBSN: 9781301831203
  • This work at Smashwords.com

The story tells of:

Dale is struggling to get through college, but something is about to happen that will make college irrelevant. With the aid of a Succubus he’s about to take on the role of the monster killing Reaper and his life will never be the same again.

Dale is a college student, bored out of his mind in class. At least he is until a Succubus named Cindy enters and changes his life forever. Dale finds out that what he thought was reality isn’t quite as simple as it seemed to be, and having Cindy in his life promises to make his live more complicated than he could imagine.

I think the one thing that bothered me the most in this story was that the way the characters spoke was monotonous. By that I mean it was hard sometimes to tell if Cindy was talking or Dale or any of the other characters when they appear. Reading their thoughts, what they say, it seemed to be a lot of nothing with the occasional important bit of information to be shared. I understand that Dale is young, but Cindy is a Succubus, she is supposed to have been around for a long time and I expected much more out of her that was seen.

Of course, she isn’t the focus of the story, Dale is in a “fish out of water” sort of way. But that’s the problem I think. There is so much for him to learn that it is like drinking out of a fire hose. Then he is dropped into situations that he isn’t ready for and things just go wrong from there for both he and Cindy.

Speaking of Cindy, while there is actually a lot about her personality, her role in the story, and how she acts as a Succubus, there were at least for me, pieces of her missing. There was too much emphasis on her being… well as she describes herself “a slut.” She’s more than that, but over the course of the story Cindy acts in that way most of the time, save for a few moments. That made her regrettably a bit too one-dimenisonal for my taste. Not to mention that what she really looks like is hidden away by emphasis on her being hyper-sexual.

I’ve said this before, but Succubi are more than being sex toys, but in this case Cindy is that more than anything else and it bothers me. She is smarter than that, you get glimpses of this being true at several points in the story, but in every case she is driven back towards being a sex toy and I didn’t enjoy that very much.

That’s not to say that some of the scenes between Dale and Cindy weren’t nicely hot, they were, but that alone can’t bring me to like the rest of the story for the emphasis being on sex alone. It could have been much more than that, but it wasn’t and that’s a real problem.

I’ll also add that it felt like there are at least five longer stories within this short one that are trying to get out. For me at least, the better thing would have been writing those stories and giving them life. The entire work just was too rushed, too frantic and it really did not need to be that way. Even splitting this work in two and then creating two stories as long as the original would have been better…

I’ll give this work two and a half pitchforks out of five.

An interesting concept for a new universe really, but there are some bumps in the reading that bothered me. I think it would have been better overall if the story had set up a longer series of stories than darting from one threat to the next. Hyperactivity can be a bad thing and honestly in this case it was for me.

 

Tera

Aug 23 2014

A Devilish Chibi Drawing YouTube

I love cute images of Succubi, and some of the cutest are those I’ve found in what is called chibi art… I found a neat teaching YouTube of one and the character in it just make me smile…

And if you cannot see the video here on the Tale, try this link:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DEXBH7iu9Zo

And, of course, a screenshot of the chibi herself…

Chibi Devious by Mark Crilley

Chibi Devious by Mark Crilley

This art is by Mark Crilley, and you can find their YouTube page here.

She is, quite simply, the cuteness and I just adore her… Her smile, her tail, her entire look is just so very right to me in so many ways…

I’d love to see a webcomic with her appearing in it, I think she’d be a lot of fun to watch ply her cute brand of sort-of evilness over the other in the comic… Mebby that’s something to think about… sometime…

 

Tera

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