Oct 28 2014

A Review of Post Secondary Succubus: Graduation by Lacey Layton

Post Secondary Succubus: Graduation by Lacey Layton

Post Secondary Succubus: Graduation by Lacey Layton

A review today on the Tale of the third work in the series Post Secondary Succubus which seems to draw the series to a close. I was somewhat disappointed in the second book which at the time I thought was a shame, because the first book I thought had lot of promise in spite of some oddness in it. You can find the first review of this series here on the Tale and the second review can be found here as well.

Sometimes the resolution to a plot comes from a direction you don’t expect. The thing of that is, how exactly does that answer fit into the rest of the series, does it make any sense, and when the work comes to a close, were all of the loose ends tied up? Not always.

 

The story is about:

Life hasn’t been easy for Kaylee. Being a Succubus is one thing. But in her short University career she has had jealous lovers try to kill her and had a serial killer take away someone she loved. Now Kaylee is trying to keep the same mistake from happening again with Detective Bryan Storm, a fierce and powerful man. She thinks by keeping him at bay she can keep her feelings in control, and will avoid losing yet another man she loves.

However, as her University life is wrapping up, so too is this chapter in her life. Faces from the past, and new dangers in the present converge to push Kaylee to new limits. In the conclusion to the “Post Secondary Succubus” trilogy, Kaylee faces off against a group where her power holds no sway. A group that endangers all of those that she loves in the pursuit of owning the power Kaylee has. All conflicts will be settled, and all truths exposed just in time for Graduation Day.

Further time has passed and Kaylee is in her final year, her future in front of her. The problem is that the past won’t let go and it’s coming back to haunt her in every way imaginable. When a new threat to Kaylee and her kind appears, she’s forced to make a choice and that choice will mean everything to her… or she’ll lose it all.

The one thing that I did like, more than anything else really, was that Kaylee had to face a lot of the choices she has made and their consequences. There is closure for some of those, but for quite a number of others she doesn’t find exactly what she needs, but rather gets something a bit different. It’s very clear as the story is told that she isn’t quite the same person she was in the first and second books and that I found made her a lot more interesting as a character.

There are still, on occasion, hints of her past view of things in how she deals with events and as well the choices she makes in order to try and find her way to solving the overwhelming problem that she faces in this work. Some of that is her relationship that started with Bryan, but a lot of it comes from the loss of Mike and in how she finally faces that loss. There is also an appearance of another character who vanished in the second work but suddenly reappears to point Kaylee in the direction of a threat to the succubi… and that’s a large part of what I didn’t really like in this work.

Gavin, possibly the single most irritating character in the series returns and with him comes his attitude and complete disregard for the past and what he did to Linda, Kaylee’s friend. That becomes a secondary plot in the work and there is, at long last, some character development in him. But it comes I think far too late in the story and when it does, and he reaches out, it just feels wrong in many ways. There seemed to some purpose to his thread in the story but at the last it gets tossed away with a short bit of dialog which takes him back to where he started. It could have been a bit better in how that worked for him, but also for Linda as well in that she doesn’t have closure either.

The threat that is revealed slowly in the story bothered me as well in that I couldn’t quite see how it worked exactly. I followed what it did, and it sounded like it could be interesting. But it devolved into what seemed to be an excuse for some moments of erotica that didn’t work for me at least. Some of the moments that Kaylee has with Bryan are very hot, but that turns a corner in the middle of the story and in a way that I just couldn’t get connected to. As for the threat, I can see the why of it and the how… But it didn’t make a lot of sense if the mechanics of how the powers of a succubus work in this universe are followed. There’s something unsaid and missing and that bothers me.

The work is the best written of the three by far, there isn’t anything that tends to take you out of the story overall. The ending of the threat, what happens to Kaylee as a result, and what it does to her I think was well done and put a good note to her story. Past that point the wrapping up of the story mostly worked but there are a series of dangling plots that aren’t closed and which would make another work in the series possible.

It would be interesting to see where that might go, what the consequences are to Kaylee’s actions, and perhaps to get more into the society of the succubi, both the good and the bad, and tell that story. It’s still a murky tale to be told and it need not be.

Three and a half pitchforks out of five.

The work seemed just a bit too scattered in handling the main plot and with bringing back some of the characters in the past, there just wasn’t anything like grow in them to speak of. There is closure, thankfully, and Kaylee at the end of the series is someone I liked a lot better. That in itself was good to see. But there are a lot of dangling threads in this work and another book in the series seems to be the obvious reason for them. There shouldn’t be a lot of hand waving about the threads if there is because they are some really major ones.

For the series as a whole I’ll give four out of five pitchforks.

Kaylee wasn’t the overall problem with the series. She’s interesting, I like her development as the series went on, even with the glaring mistakes she made throughout the series. The main problem with the work was some of the supporting cast just rubbed me the wrong way, they didn’t learn much of anything and at the end, when they seemed to, that was sort of tossed to the side in a way that didn’t work for me. As well, the final work in the series introduced a threat to Kaylee that just came out of left field and didn’t seem to connect to the rest of the series as a whole.

The erotica is very hot, there’s no doubt of that, the characters are unique and memorable, even the ones you just can’t really like. The story as a whole has a good coming of age vibe to it that I think works well. It’s just the little things in the story that keep getting in the way of my liking it more than I do and that really bothers me.

I think if the middle part of the work had been handled better in what Kaylee did as a Domme, if the latter part of the trilogy had more of a connection to previous events that would have helped too. But overall my concerns are really minor ones that don’t take away from the series as a whole too much and if there is a “after this” for Kaylee I hope that shows her becoming more than the world and some of those around her expect her to be.

Because, in truth, that’s really when you learn the lessons of life.

 

Tera

Oct 27 2014

Sparkly Horn Horror – Part II By TeraS

It’s been a little bit since the story of Sparkly Horn Horror began on the Tale. While this particular part of the story isn’t complete, I know I can do more with it, it is the next part of the story regardless.

If you’d like to read the first part of Sparkly Horn Horror, you can find it here on the Tale.

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Sparkly Horn Horror
Part II
By TeraS

 

The scene in the Realm Library was one of organized chaos. The staff all understood what they were looking for, though some of the younger ones didn’t honestly believe that Tera was serious about things until she crossed her arms over her chest and then started tapping the sleeve of her jacket with a finger—a clear sign that she was on the edge of being disappointed.That shocked them into taking the work they all faced very seriously.

The Queen was very clear that they all needed to search the Library, and they had just under two hours to do so. They didn’t need that long to come up with an answer. Miriam’s computerization of most of the card catalogue took care of the heaviest searching, and it was with some worry that she approached Tera’s office and knocked on the door frame. “Your Majesty … um … Tera? There’s nothing. I can’t find a reference to this … thing … anywhere.”

Tera was sitting on her desk in thought when Miriam spoke. She nodded and ran her fingers through her hair: “I’m not really surprised. It is something that my parents would not have wanted to become common knowledge in their time.”

“What do you know about this?”

She looked at Miriam and smiled: “Only the stories that my Mother and Father told me. Keep in mind that to me the stories were the sort of thing that was meant to frighten little me and make me go to bed.”

Miriam giggled: “I can’t see you being a problem child, Tera. That isn’t at all like you.”

Her Majesty allowed herself a bemused smile in return: “Well of course not. Perish the thought.”

Miriam walked just inside the door and closed it behind her, fidgeting with her hands as she asked: “Tell me one of them, please. Maybe it will give us a clue or something.”

“Keeping in mind that I haven’t the storytelling ability of my parents …”

The yellow-tailed librarian shook her head: “With respect, I doubt that. I’ve seen you telling stories to the young.”

Tera tucked a lock of hair behind one ear: “Right … Seriously, I’m nothing compared to them. To be honest, I have been mulling over the stories in my mind and none of them are really specific. But then they are children’s stories, so there are a lot of bogeymen in them to scare and not a lot of facts to hold onto. The one that I remember the most is one my Mother told often.”

Miriam looked at the clock and then at the Head Librarian: “And?”

Tera had a faraway look in her eyes as she spoke: “It came from the dark and touched the lost, the seeking, the needful. One by one they all succumbed to the hungers they held in check, waiting. A wave of what was came across the lands, unstoppable by those who were. All seemed lost until the moment when the lost were found, and then the battle was won, save for those that were never to be found. The lost were taken, never to be seen again.”

Miriam was quiet for a time, then said: “Not really all that useful, is it?”

Tera shrugged: “Remember that all stories have some truth in them. There is an answer in there; we just have to figure out what it is.”

The strawberry-blonde succubi nodded and looked out the door at the library: “Well, the answer isn’t where we can find it.”

The brunette pushed off from her desk and walked towards the door, taking Miriam by the hand as she did so: “Then we look in the places that aren’t meant to be found.”

Miriam stumbled a little as they marched through the Library and then started to walk down the spiral staircase towards the Grotto and the Special Collections far below. “Tera, there’s nothing down here that we haven’t cataloged and indexed. All of the Collections were checked, and your friend in the Grotto hasn’t any idea of what’s going on. I asked.”

“Miriam, I know this will come as a shock, but there is one part of the Library that you have never seen and you were never meant to.”

Miriam came to a stop on the stairs and watched as Tera continued on her way: “Hang on a second. I know every inch of the Library. I know this place intimately.”

The Queen didn’t stop as she called out over her shoulder: “Oh, I’m sure of that. You and Irving do have the most fun late in the evenings, don’t you?”

Miriam’s blush was redder than red and her tail turned just that little bit more yellow than it usually was, even for the most strikingly yellow of all of the yellow tails in the Realm in at least a hundred years.

“Come on. Not mad at you. I mean, Keith and I have had fun in every room of the Castle … twice? No, no … more times than that. I’ll have to check my dairy when I get home.”

Miriam shook her head and replied in a sing-song voice: “Not listening!”

She watched Tera come to the bottom of the stairs and then wait for her. When the younger librarian arrived, the red-tail explained: “There is a part of the Library that only the Head Librarian can open. It isn’t meant to be a place where anyone can get in because it holds the most cherished secrets of the Realm.”

Miram nibbled on her lip: “Like?”

Tera took Miriam’s hand and led her towards what appeared to be a solid wall of red stone, roughly cut into, unfinished, and seemingly out of place with the rest of the Library. Miriam recognized it, though she really hadn’t paid much attention to it before.

“Like how old I am?”

“Okay. Seriously, Tera.”

“I am being serious. Okay, I admit that it is not the most vital secret, of course, but it is one of them.”

They stopped just short of the wall and Miriam asked: “So? Now what? Does it open or …” The rest of her sentence was swallowed by a flash of purple light which surrounded the two of them and, in the next moment, they weren’t there any longer. Miriam found herself gripping Tera’s hand tightly in a place which seemed to be no place, with nothing around them at all. There wasn’t even a glimmer of light around them, and Miriam couldn’t see a single thing.

“… something?”

“Welcoming, isn’t it?”

Miriam’s answer was an uneasy sounding: “Your Majesty …”

“Just wait. It has to wake up.”

“It?”

“Yes, “It.” This might take a bit. It hasn’t been woken in a very long time.”

Miriam’s tail wrapped itself around Tera’s waist as they waited. The red tail did the same, drawing Miriam a little closer to her: “Hopefully it is in a good mood.”

“Great. I hope Florence is okay.”

Tera gave her a hug: “I have faith in her.”

Florence had been hunched over her desk long enough that her back was beginning to complain loudly to her about it. She had gone over what little information Miriam had found, and it was very little indeed. Worse still was that the reports of what she was facing were, to be blunt, so superficial that they were next to useless.

She swiped the glass of her desk and looked over to where John was still pacing: “Time, John?”

John stopped and looked at her in what appeared to be irritation: “Will you be specific? Really, Florence, you must learn that skill.”

She leaned back and sighed: “How much time until I am infectious?”

“Assume approximately one hour. I have deducted some time, as your exposure time cannot be accurately calculated.”

She looked at him with a slight smile: “Who’s the one that keeps talking about being specific, again?”

John’s glare was surprising. If he had been real, Florence might feel hurt by it.

She rubbed her right horn and looked at the blue flakes that came away in her hand: “It’s rather insidious, isn’t it? Can’t really be sure I am or I am not. So, have to assume that I am.”

She considered her hand, rubbing the flakes between her fingers: “We don’t even know the actual transmission method, or if there is a means to resist it.”

John walked up to the desk and glared: “Really? Your mind must be dulling. Are you only thinking of sex already?”

She stood up and glared right back: “Fuck you John. I’m all here, and I’m not looking to have a cock up my ass or to be eating out someone.”

He actually did look angry, Florence thought as he replied: “You will, Florence. And soon it will appear. At least you had the sense to get away from those in the isolation ward.”

She looked down at her desk and sighed: “What is their condition?”

John turned away: “At the moment they are both rutting away. I believe that they each have reached orgasm at least ten times in the past hour; possibly more. The stamina of those in the Realm is legendary, after all.”

She thought for a moment, then sighed: “Let me see them.”

“This is not advisable, Florence. You do not know what the effects would be.”

She laughed bitterly: “I know that if I am in the room with them I’m doomed. I need to know how far the two of them are. At least then I’ll have a clue what’s coming.”

John’s scowl was piercing: “Very well.”

Across the room, one wall shimmered as an image came into focus. It was of the isolation room where Adam and Deborah were trapped. If someone else had been viewing the image they might have assumed that what they were looking was wasn’t an actual hospital, but rather more likely the set of an adult movie. Deborah was bent over one of the gurneys in the room, completely naked, and Adam was right behind her. Florence idly remembered that Adam had a lot of stamina, and yet, somehow, he seemed to have a lot more than she remembered.

The sound was off, but it was clear that Deb was screaming her head off in pleasure with every thrust that Adam made. She seemed to be looking into the camera, her eyes deeply purple instead of the normal grey that Florence remembered. She couldn’t see John’s eyes, but she assumed that they were every bit as purple.

For a moment she wondered why they both looked odd, and then it struck her. Their skin was as purple as their tails—in its own way very erotic—and then another thing about the image hit home. They didn’t have feet; they had hooves.

She walked around her desk and approached the screen … to have a better look … not because there was a dampness between her legs … nor that her breathing had become deeper. Standing in front of the screen, she traced one hand over Deb’s face and remembered the feeling of Adam’s cock thrusting into her own sex, recalled how he brought her to the edge of climax over and over again until finally he pushed her over the edge. Her other hand slipped between her legs, a fingernail stroking … slowly … She licked her lips and the thought came that she needed to go to them … needed to be sandwiched between them … needed to be fucked by them both.

The sound of an air horn blasting in the room shocked Florence out of her daydream and she screamed in surprise at the interruption, turning away from the image of Deb and Adam. John stood there, the horn continuing to wail, his arms crossed as he mouthed something, but the noise was so loud that Florence couldn’t hear a word. She walked up to him and swept her hand through the air where he stood and then the horn stopped … and there was silence for a time before John spoke again. “Obviously, your sexual drives are higher than normal for you to be turned on so quickly.”

She shook her head: “No shit. Anything else you learned?”

“Clearly, the point is to turn those of the Realm into what they were before: creatures of sex and nothing more, both physically and mentally.”

“Again, no shit.”

John waved his glasses at her, and she wondered why it was that he needed glasses, being that he wasn’t real: “I believe the term is: ‘The shit has hit the fan and the fan’s on high.”

Florence turned away from him to brace herself against her desk: “Five hours. Then I’ll be there, too.”

John just continued to glare as he put his glasses on: “One hopes not, and …”

The pause made Florence turn to look at him, but in the midst of doing so, another voice echoed in the room: “Um … Doc? Where’s Adam? And what’s going on?”

Standing there in the room was a pink tail with green hair and a confused look in her eyes.

“Oh shit! Abby …”

Abby had a confused look as she asked: “Doc? You don’t look so good. There’s something wrong with your horns and … umm … wow … you’re really horny, too … I mean … wow!”

Neither Florence nor John, for that matter, had a response to that.

Oct 26 2014

A Review of Succubus Dreams 2: The Bargain by Chastity Swallows

Succubus Dreams 2: The Bargain by Chastity Swallows

Succubus Dreams 2: The Bargain by Chastity Swallows

Sometimes I wonder why it is that some authors insist on releasing a lesser work as their first book when their second work is much better. They add to the characters, their personalities and more… Things that you didn’t see in their first work.

Then, to make matters more interesting, the story you expect to go one why, because it only seems to make sense, and then the twist in the tail makes you really wonder just what happened and why…

And perhaps more accurately, who it is that actually gets the worst end of the deal?

  • Title: Succubus Dreams 2: The Bargain
  • Author: Chastity Swallows
  • Length: 17 Pages
  • ASIN: B00EZ7233Q
  • Publishing Date: September 3, 2013
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells about:

Jackie made a deal with an incubus, a deal she survived but does not want to pay the piper for. To keep her life she’s been keeping her legs closed but the sorry half existence isn’t for her, she wants out of her contract. Enter Succubus Dreams with a trade her life for another.

The Bargain is told through the eyes of Wyatt Alan who spends an evening banging a woman who may or may not be what she seems.

One of the things that I find is difficult for an author to manage is the art of misdirection. In this work the author did so quite well managing to cause one story to appear that while looking to be one thing actually became something quite different. This story begins with something expected and while all in the story seems to point at a certain end that you expect… It doesn’t happen.

In truth that’s a good thing for the most part, save that the actual erotica when it comes into the story was not something that I personally enjoy. Some may like the brutality of the scenes, but for me personally it was a turn off.

That said, moving away from the erotica and into the story itself, there was quite a lot to like from the aspect of looking for more about the Succubi, and in this story, the Incubi in this universe.

The most important thing to me at least was that the Succubus in charge of Succubus Dreams is named, that being Miss Priss by a client, whether that is her name or not isn’t clear. However she is called Mistress by her secretary and as a play on words, that is rather delicious I think. It is also a good bit of character development to learn she isn’t a full Succubus, that she is quite powerful in her own right, and more so, quite dangerous to those that cross her from the scene at the beginning of the work.

It becomes more interesting when she reveals, through a conversation that sets up the rest of the story, that there is a place called Incubus Dreams as well. In the short passages where they are seen, and talked about, it appears that they are competing with each other and that could bring about some interesting stories as well sometime from this series.

While the erotica itself does not endear itself to me, I have to say that the background apart from the main male lead of this work, does quite a lot. I’d like longer stories that tell more about the Succubi and Incubi as the series goes along, but I have the feeling that this likely will not be seen all that much.

Overall, to this point at least, I have enjoyment out of the edges of the works and not the actual story that appears. Perhaps a longer story with more to be told would make the series as a whole more for me personally. The other thing that would be nice would be moving away from stories that are mainly about pain and suffering and towards something more sensual and erotic. If that happened I think that it would make me like things a lot more than I do and I really want to for the Succubi, especially one, that have appeared….

I’m giving this work three out of five pitchforks.

Character development, if only a little bit is a huge difference to me. A story that is more than it seems to be at the beginning makes it more so. Adding to a universe, opening story paths for future works completes things much more… But, more Succubi and Incubi please? It would be nice to have considering the series title…

Now if only this continues in the next work… We shall see won’t we? I do hope so…

 

Tera

Oct 25 2014

A cute Lilith Aensland YouTube

Last week I shared a Morrigan Aensland tribute that someone posted on YouTube… They also posted one for Lilith Aensland and that one appears today on the Tale… Like the first, I’m not sure about the music, but the art is nice…

If you cannot see the video here on the Tale, try this link:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aGNItaSlUiA

And, as always, a screenshot of the one piece of art that I liked the best in the video…

Lilith aensland

I always prefer when Lilith is drawn a bit more mature than she appears normally. I do know her background and story and I know why she appears the way she does… I just think that in spite of all of that, she is Morrigan’s equal and she should look a bit more like her…

Not exactly like her, but at least proud of who is she and what she can do…

 

Tera

Oct 24 2014

A Review of Succubus Dreams 1: Daddy’s Girl by Chastity Swallows

Succubus Dreams 1: Daddy's Girl by Chastity Swallows

Succubus Dreams 1: Daddy’s Girl by Chastity Swallows

Some ideas, at their core at least, are fairly good ones. For example having a place where you might go to have a fantasy fulfilled is a good plot hook. Having that place be populated by Succubi is as well.

The problem becomes when the need for the Succubi in the story is wafer-thin and in the end, the typical, usual, expected end arrives…

  • Title: Succubus Dreams 1: Daddy’s Girl
  • Author: Chastity Swallows
  • Publishing Date: April 23, 2012
  • Length: 14 Pages
  • ASIN: B00EOEF8UA
  • Publishing Date: August 20, 2013
  • This work at Amazon.com

The work tells about:

Martin Jacobs wants his stepdaughter. He wants to hold her, wants to slide deep inside of her and he never wants her to know. To get everything he want he’ll risk everything he is because at Succubus Dreams the doors are always open but the bills are never settled in cash.

Martin has wanted his stepdaughter Emily for some time now, but of course he cannot have her. But he can have the next best thing can’t he? A visit to a place called Succubus Dreams, a deal agreed to and suddenly his dreams are true.

It is a story about Succubi, and yes, I can see them in the story in several characters. But the thing is that, to be honest, while they are part of the story, in truth they are simply a means for a long drawn out sex scene that did absolutely nothing for me.

The Succubi are there in spirit, on the edges of the story, teasing their existence, but in the end we never really see them save for a fleeting glimpse of the one who rules, one who serves, and as for the one that Martin sees… We never see her for who she is, only the fantasy that she drapes around herself.

Their names are not spoken, not once in the work. And that’s a problem for me because, to be honest, I was more interested in who the Succubi were than what the story was about. The two that are seen are ones that I would have liked to know more about, but we never do. There are some interesting hints, mannerisms and actions that happen in the beginning of the story, but then we leave them behind and move onto… well… just the sex.

When the end of the work arrives, the end result was telegraphed from the first couple of pages and I was not at all surprised what happened. In fact I expected it for just how stereotypical Martin’s first moment with the Succubus in control was and his actions with her.

The writing isn’t bad, actually some of the dialogue outside of the sex scenes is really quite good. But otherwise the work turns into an attempt at a hot flash, but without the heat. I found myself not really caring about Martin or the Succubus that was taking the place of Emily. I did care about the Succubus in control at the beginning and her secretary… That says a lot I think… Probably more than it should have.

I’m giving this work one out of five pitchforks.

A story without background really. A story that was driving towards the sex and not the characters. And in the end was much less than I expected it to be. Some might find heat in it… I just found myself shaking my head and moving onto the next work in the series… Which I will review next time…

 

Tera

Oct 23 2014

Succubi Image of the Week 354

I love doodles. They are hints of thoughts and ideas that while not perhaps all clear in one’s thoughts, they do open a window to what could be. I found a doodle that made me smile, and that really is a wonderful thing…

Succubus Sketch by Octopooch

Succubus Sketch by Octopooch

This character does not have a name, it is simply called Succubus Sketch and is by an artist on DeviantArt called Octopooch. You can find the page I found this work here and this artist’s site on DeviantArt is here.

I love her look, her eyes, the hint of the dress she is wearing, and her lovely hair style most of all. Really everything about her I love, especially the cuteness which just makes me smile every time I see her.

I sort of see her name as being Daphne for some reason… I’m not sure why but she looks like one to me if that makes any sense at all.

I really think it is amazing that this artist put so much character into something that looks like a simple doodle, but really it isn’t. I’d love someday to see some sort of finished art of her, I think she looks like she’s fun and that, of course, is important for one of the Succubi to be isn’t it?

 

Tera

Oct 22 2014

This is simply just ugly as a costume…

Hot & Sexy Adult Lady Devil Costume Halloween Outfit Dress LingerieHalloween fast approaches and, of course, there has to be the appearance of something of a horrific costume doesn’t there? Well, not really, but that’s what will happen today as I found something that is simply… Ugh.

This… thing… Is called, and it really is a name that is much too long, someone was trying to hit all of the Google keywords I think with this one, the Hot & Sexy Adult Lady Devil Costume Halloween Outfit Dress Lingerie. Doesn’t that simply roll off the tongue?

It comes with the horns. And the dress. The pitchfork, the stockings and shoes are not included. If you are looking for bargains, you can find this for as little as $18 US. Not that I would recommend that you would mind you.

All kinds of lousy, cheap and uninspiring here to be seen. I for one won’t be seen wearing this I promise you. The huge black band of ugly in the middle of the dress adds to the ice factor here by quite a lot. The horns even look to be inflatable, if that’s possible. Not to mention that they look so very wrong by any stretch of the imagination.

There is no possible way to save this, really it should remain on the shelf, gather dust, then be tossed into the nearest waste bin as soon as possible. I for one will do doing so.

Zero pitchforks out of five.

Even last week’s was better than this disaster…

 

Tera

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