Not all succubi have red skin, or hooves, or for that matter are overtly sexual beings. Some of them are somewhat more forceful, almost warrior-like in their attitude, poise and mannerisms. It’s a rather unique aspect to consider and one that offers some interesting plots and stories to unfold… assuming that the story actually goes in that direction and doesn’t take a turn for the expected.
There is a saying that suffering is good for the soul. Some succubi have a talent for making that true. But what are they beyond the teeth, the claws and the pain? Sometimes they amount to a lot of fury but so little substance.
- Title: Dommed by a Big Dicked Lesbian Succubus from Hell
- Author: Sarah Azad
- Length: 19 Pages
- ASIN: B01JX1ST5E
- Publishing Date: August 6, 2016
- This work at Amazon.com
The work tells the story of:
John Meyer is a quiet and unassuming young man who never backs down from a challenge, when his frat brothers dare him to summon a demon he goes all out, sure it won’t work. When a succubus appears it challenges everything he thought he knew about the world and himself.
John is challenged to summon a succubus, thinking it will never happen. But Lori appears and John finds himself at her tender mercies. But Lori is a very particular succubus and John will have to meet her standards… one way or the other.
Overall the only way I can really describe this work is a mixture of horror, BDSM and a little bit of sexuality touching a gender transformation. It’s a little scattered, a bit unsure of where it wants to go. There are quite a few grammar and spelling mistakes, a story that tends to focus on pain and suffering above all else.
There’s a bare hint about who Lori is, what her personality is like before the story turns directly into all of the pain and suffering that John is taking through. At times that verges on B-grade horror with a bit of porn mixed into things. As such I didn’t find much in the way of heat, nor did I really find my way into the story.
This is the single problem really in that the story begins with Lori encountering John, but before anything really develops, he is bound, pushed, used and beaten in all sorts of ways. I can’t find anything sexy in John bleeding, being turned black and blue. It does not interest me at all.
But Lori does. She’s a series of contrasts that I wanted to know more about. Possibly the most surprising of all is her comment of never losing a pillow fight. Noting that and then all else she does that’s a difficult thing to keep with her character. It is those odd little quirks that needed to be explored more, but never were.
There are a number of spelling and grammar mistakes, many of which make comprehending the story a little difficult. There’s no heat in the erotica, and there’s barely a connection between the two characters by the ned of the work. It feels like there’s something missing here, something important. Perhaps focusing on story above sex and pain would have made this something more.
One pitchfork out of five.
I’m certain that for some this work will be attractive to them, but personally I didn’t enjoy all of the inflicted pain and suffering that became the core of the story. The work needs another editing pass, the story needs to be more about who the characters are than it being about what one does to the other. Torturing isn’t that sexy and somewhere there’s more of a story about Lori than is revealed here.