Dec 07 2014

A Review of The Sorceress Next Door by Anya Merchant

The Sorceress Next Door by Anya Merchant

The Sorceress Next Door by Anya Merchant

I’ve run into a bit of a problem of late and it comes to this: There have been quite a lot of novels written lately about Succubi and I haven’t really been keeping up with them all. As such, here and there, I will be reviewing two novels on my book review days from this point going forwards.

Now, I have a lot of books that have been released some time in the past that need to be reviewed as well, so what will likely be happening is that there will be an older book and then a newer one reviewed. This won’t happen all of the time mind you, but more often than not I expect.

As well, with Lost Girl coming back this evening, there will be some double Tale posts on Fridays as a result. I’ll see how this all works, I think I’ll manage this, but… we’ll see…

Onto the book review:

Heat in a story is what you expect to find when the work is described as erotica. There’s a right way and a wrong way to write erotica and that, for the most part, is really a matter of taste. Where there isn’t much in the way of wiggle room is editing of a work so that it sounds right and reads right. There will never be enough heat to overcome glaring mistakes in writing that aren’t corrected for the sake of the sex scene they are attached to.

That is really a shame when the story is interesting, the heat is really well done and the Succubus herself is a mystery…

  • Title: The Sorceress Next Door
  • Author: Anya Merchant
  • Length: 38 Pages
  • ASIN: B00QG1TT36
  • Publishing Date: December 1, 2014
  • This work at Amazon.com

It is the story of:

It always feels warm to Dan when he walks by the house of his neighbor, and after being invited in on a calm winter morning, he discovers why. Stella is a woman well versed in the hot, sexy realm of magic, and before Dan knows what’s happening he finds himself and the women closest to him being pulled into a tumultuous whirlwind of lust and desire.

Dan meets his new neighbour and after touching something he shouldn’t have, notices certain things around him that weren’t there before. One of them happens to be a Succubus who decides that he needs a bit of excitement in his life. So does his new neighbour and that’s when things start to get a little out of hand.

Dan is, as a whole, a bit of a lost soul in this story. There’s all kinds of erotic thoughts that swirl in his mind that he’d never act upon, but when the Succubus appears, all bets are off and things get heated up really quickly. He is rather quick on his feet, for the most part, and that makes for some quirky and embarrassing moments for him. However when one part of his body starts doing all of the thinking for him, his personality gets buried in a lot of moaning and that’s really a shame for the story that leads to the erotica.

Stella is a witch with a exhibitionist streak about a mile wide which leads to some cute moments between herself and Dan that tie the two of them together. She has a strongly presented personality in which she knows what she wants and what she can do. At times she’s a bit full of herself and that gets her into a situation which could have gone really badly, but Dan’s personality manages to get them both out of that mess and, I expect, into many others.

The Succubus of the work is never named, but I really found her to be more mischievous than anything else. She didn’t appear to be at all stereotypical, which only added to how much I liked her overall. She is controlling and her own needs do sometimes get the better of her. She just turned out to be sort of a cross between an sex elf and a ghost which, when Dan comes in contact with her, makes her image in the story very erotic, not evil, and that put the right tone to the entire story from the beginning. It’s about having some “fun” for the sake of doing so and what mischief that creates.

The heat in the erotica runs hot and cold, depending on the characters and the situations they are in. Personally when Dan and the Succubus became more than intimate I think that was about the hottest part of the story by far. There is a bit of taboo erotica as well, which was well written, and another scene that had its own heat as well, but really they weren’t quite as hot to my tastes.

I liked the story as a whole very much, I like the universe this author has created as well. There’s a lot of opportunities for stories to be told and if the Succubus remains around for a time, that could make Stella and Dan’s lives very interesting. Good characters, lovely heat, and a story that kept my interest. But there’s a problem.

The work needs some editing to remove a lot of minor, silly mistakes and errors. Some of the dialog seems awkward and stiff in that reading it out loud it just sounds wrong. As well, mistakes such as: “There are tons of snowplows that would do the job for cheap.” or “he smiled at him and offered up a suggestive wink.” where it is a she that is winking, are a problem. The mistakes seemed to be more evident as the erotica almost upon the story and it felt like there was a rush to get there. As such some of the grammar and spelling went by the wayside and that, for me, is always a problem.

I’ll give this work three and a half pitchforks out of five.

I really like the idea of this story and as it appears to be a series going forwards I do hope that the Succubus reappears just to see what mischief she brings once again. One of the more interesting and unique Succubus stories I’ve read this year by far. The only problem is the editing. That really needs to be done again to make this so much better honestly…

 

Tera

Dec 07 2014

A Review of The Succubus of Savannah by Tarrin P. Lupo

The Succubus of Savannah by Tarrin P. Lupo

The Succubus of Savannah by Tarrin P. Lupo

I’ve run into a bit of a problem of late and it comes to this: There have been quite a lot of novels written lately about Succubi and I haven’t really been keeping up with them all. As such, here and there, I will be reviewing two novels on my book review days from this point going forwards.

Now, I have a lot of books that have been released some time in the past that need to be reviewed as well, so what will likely be happening is that there will be an older book and then a newer one reviewed. This won’t happen all of the time mind you, but more often than not I expect.

As well, with Lost Girl coming back this evening, there will be some double Tale posts on Fridays as a result. I’ll see how this all works, I think I’ll manage this, but… we’ll see…

Onto the book review:

The myth of Succubi comes in many different forms. There are some tales told where they are female only, and others where they shift from female to male when need be towards a purpose. There are are legends of beings like the Succubi in many different cultures and lands around the world.

The thing which I personally like to see when these lessor known tales appear is that they are not the means to an end, but the means to a better story…

For in the end, isn’t it the story that matters?

  • Title: The Succubus of Savannah
  • Author: Tarrin P. Lupo
  • Length: 21 Pages
  • ASIN: B009KZ3A0I
  • Publishing Date: October 2, 2012
  • This work at Amazon.com

It is the story of:

William Garrett lusts after the woman of his dreams, but what happens when those dreams become reality? Sometimes getting everything you want can be a living nightmare….

William, better known to everyone around him as Will, has a problem. His dreams are getting in the way of his life in more than one way. He dreams of a woman that takes his breath away and it is beginning to effect his wife, his work, and more. Then something odd starts to happen with the women he works with, and things get stranger from there on.

Overall the story itself is interesting. A Succubus-like being entwines themselves into the lives around them in search of something very specific. As time passes, their effects become quite clear on the men and then the women as well. The men become weaker and the women are drawn to them. One woman is not and by the end of the story has figured out what they are. But by then the Succubus has what they want, and the other shoe drops.

The thing of that wanting is… It really turns out to be a very petty thing indeed. The reason for what the Succubus does seems so out of balance with what happened to them that when it appeared, I found myself disappointed in the turn of events.

There is a lovely undertone of mind control and manipulation which the Succubus is responsible for that is nicely played out. It fits with what they are and what they need from those around them. The problem is that while that is played out, the barest bits of who they really are comes out.

There is a lot of misdirection and confusion from the characters as all of this happens and that’s a bit of a problem. As the main character and most of the others are police, I expected somehow a lot more… attention to detail from them. From the first moment they appear it is obvious that something is very wrong with all of them, and the one person that knows something is wrong is brushed off.

At one point there is proof, clear and undeniable, that things are very wrong, but the confusion overwhelms all of them and they miss it. While that is part of the Succubus’ power, I was somewhat disappointed in how quickly things went from a slow reveal to a very quick resolution of the work and straight into an ending that felt rushed to no end.

It is that ending, the event that happens to William that concerns me. It isn’t so much what happens, but rather why it was that the Succubus did not simply take what it wanted from the beginning of the story? They knew who William was, where he lived, and what they wanted was there with him. So why was it that the climax of the story came to a short “You are the one” scene followed by a short chase and then the aftermath?

I realize that I have more knowledge than most, but the ending was telegraphed within the first two scenes of the book, the only thing that I didn’t pick up on was why William was the target of the Succubus…

Truthfully, I think there should have been a better reason than there was here.

Setting aside that, the characters are well written, the scenes are compelling and save for a few awkward moments, overall it was a tight read. It wasn’t necessarily an erotic one, though it had a moment or two… More of a “Who done it” story with the why of it being… off… a bit.

I’ll give this work three pitchforks out of five.

A really interesting premise that made good use of the myths of Succubi and one of their more traditional forms. A bit of telegraphing of the end of the work, but I can forgive that. What I can’t quite manage to is the plot hole which really didn’t make a lot of sense and bothered me to the end of the story…

 

Tera

Dec 06 2014

A pair of Work in Progress YouTubes of Succubus Art

Succubus Bloodstones ComicThere is a comic book out there which I have only found written in French which tells the tale of a Succubus which is called Succubus Bloodstones.

You can see the cover I found of it over there to the right, and it does look interesting, and yes I have a copy and yes I am translating it as I can to understand the story better. I do intend to add this to the SuccuWiki as soon as I do have a grasp of the story…

Now the Succubus of the story is there on the cover, appearing rather pensive I think. I had been looking for a better work of her, at least to have an better idea about her overall.

She obviously has a tail, a red one, but her horns aren’t the same colour. I had wondered if she had wings or if there was something else about her that could be interesting to see.

I was looking through YouTube the other day and came across a series of two videos of an artist working on some art of this Succubus and as such, those are the videos I will be sharing on the Tale today…

The first one:

And the second one:

You can find both of this videos at the following links if you cannot see them here on the Tale:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gKS-XD0qY-I

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GJ8oOOFs_-w

And that image of this Succubus that I mentioned, which I think is really quite unique in its own right….

Succubus Bloodstones

I am rather curious about her in many ways. She looks interesting and I am intrigued by her quite a lot… Somehow I don’t think she’s stereotypical, her facial expression doesn’t seem to have the usual “evil” look that Succubi generally have in comic books… I do hope that’s a good thing…

 

Tera

Dec 05 2014

A Review of Summoning the Demon Brat by Vivian Archer

Summoning the Demon Brat by Vivian Archer

Summoning the Demon Brat by Vivian Archer

There are some characters who are Succubi that I just adore. That happens because they are not stereotypical, they have personality, and most importantly, they aren’t what they are expected to be. Being a Succubus does not, at all, have to mean that one has to be evil, cruel, or worse. It’s much more satisfying to have control, know how to use it, and with that, bring pleasures to not just oneself, but the one you are with.

All of that is what I look for in a story, and it’s nice to find a work that has, as a whole, everything I want in a Succubus. The problem comes when the editing takes away from that and it shouldn’t. Ever.

  • Title: Summoning the Demon Brat
  • Author: Vivian Archer
  • Length: 20 Pages
  • ASIN: B00QEF52MQ
  • Publishing Date: November 29, 2014
  • This work at Amazon.com

The story tells of:

Isaac is a Summoner, and when his first summoning leaves him on his knees, he knows he’s in trouble. In a pillar of black flame a petite demoness stands in front of him, smiling down. Of course, for pulling her from her awful hellish realm, she wants to give him whatever reward he desires, and she’s pleased to see the reward he wants seems to be her.

Isaac comes into his power and summons a creature from the other worlds that holds power greater than anything anyone has seen. Her name is Lilandra, she’s a Succubus. And she has the power of sexy cuteness. Isaac’s quite doomed… But that might not be such a bad thing for either of them.

From the start, there is a quirkiness to the story that just really worked well. While Isaac is a bit lost at times, and the reason for that when the story comes to a close is just perfect, Lilandra herself sets the tone by far.

Lilandra is not, at all, a stereotypical Succubus. Really she’s the definition of a sexy cute Succubus with a bit of dominance tossed into her character. While her initial appearance sounds really bad, when she is fully described I couldn’t help but smile and just adore her. She has horns, wings and a tail of course, and most interestingly, her tail is an erogenous zone and the author plays that up quite a lot which I just loved dearly. Being a bit smaller than Isaac also ramps up her cuteness and that snowballs into something really special.

She has a impish personality, which suits her well, and that leads to some very interesting moments between herself and Isaac. There always seems to be a smile in her words, a bit of teasing of Isaac, that draws out her character and builds upon that. She does have a dominant streak in her personality, but it isn’t overly mean and it isn’t cruel as a whole. There was only one point in the story where Lilandra makes Isaac do something that I didn’t really like, but that was a fleeting scene that didn’t last long thankfully.

Isaac himself has honour in his personality and that was important in this story I felt. He gives Lilandra something she didn’t expect, and that made him more attractive not just in the physical sense, but emotionally. That bound the two characters together in a way that built up their own personalities. It made what otherwise could have been a story about a Succubus appearing and having sex into something with emotional context to drive the story onwards.

The work is a bit more than a hot flash, mainly for the story and the character development that occurs. When the erotica arrives there is a mix of dominance, submission, magic and a bit of mind control mixed together. The erotica touches on many different sorts of passion, some a bit on the violent side, but not too much so. The scenes are erotic, sensual, emotional. They create something that mixed with Lilandra’s personality and Isaac’s own, brings out something special and unique.

But in spite of all that I loved about this work, there are problems. First and foremost the work needs a serious editing. There are some silly mistakes such has using “he” instead of “she” at four points in the story. Also, there is a disconnect with the location of one specific named character from where they were at the beginning of the story and where they were at the end. At the beginning of the story this character is in the room with Lilandra and Isaac, but unconscious, and at the end of the work they enter the room the following morning. That’s a problem as in-between there is no mention of any of the other characters introduced at the beginning of the work leaving the room. There is also some confusion when Lilandra and Isaac first are face to face. It’s hard to see how Isaac needs to look up to Lilandra when she has to look up to him in the next moment.

There’s just a lot of small little details that bothered me and they shouldn’t have. The story is written well otherwise, the characters I really liked and by the end I just adored Lilandra, her attitude, and what emotions swirl around her. She’s a Succubus that I love very much and as such I think the story just didn’t need to have as many flaws as it did.

Three and a half pitchforks out of five.

The author noted on their Twitter feed that there will be another work in this series, and I really look forward to seeing where Lilandra and Isaac go from where this story ends. Being that Lilandra isn’t exactly what she’s expected to be, I think that will be something to watch unfold. But the author really needs to edit their work a lot more. Too many errors just take away from what otherwise is a story I really enjoyed very much and that shouldn’t have been. Part Two, whenever it happens, I will be looking for.

 

Tera

Dec 04 2014

Succubi Image of the Week 360

Back in March I came across what an artist on DeviantArt called their idea for a Succubus character that they thought might be a good idea for a comic of some kind. The art itself I loved, and when I read what the Succubus did as her job… Well, that just made me adore her even more…

Demon gal redesign by RasTear

Demon gal redesign by RasTear

This art is titled Demon gal redesign and is by RasTear, an artist on DeviantArt. You can find the original page with this art here and this artist’s page can be found here.

She’s described as being a front desk worker at a succubus service centre and that idea really appeals to me in a lot of ways. She’s just so cute and I really feel like there is a wonderfully happy story to tell about her. Love her look, her hair looks right and the expression in her eyes is something that I find captivating too. The full image of her here on the right for me has such personality in it. It feels like she’s a good friend to someone and she seems to be fun to be around if a little bit shy in her own way…

The artist’s style is very appealing to me. There is life in their art and that makes for art that catches your eye… Having looked at their other art they have shared, they have a talent for telling a story with their characters and I do hope that someday her story is told.

Tera

Dec 03 2014

Black sort of works for a Fire Devil I suppose…

Fire Devil CostumeI have a thing for shiny black sexy costumes… I think that the right costume like that has has a really nice, sexy look really does work for me in a lot of ways… Especially with a red wig, but that’s another story I suppose…

This is called the Fire Devil Costume and it comes with the corset, mini tutu, pair of wrist bands, choker and set of devil horns. Shoes and stockings are not included, nor is a tail. Oh, and the company that makes it is called… Trashy Costumes, but I won’t hold that against them.

I will hold the $640 US price tag against them I think however… Or I am really going to try to at least.

The thing is that I have looked at this company’s costumes before and some of them are really quite tempting in many ways to me and this one really does as well. To a point.

The main issue I have is that while it looks lovely, and really it does, I’m unsure if it is really worth the price tag. There is at least one other costume by this company that is slightly less expensive and to me is a far more sexy and Succubish costume than this one is.

That’s not to say that if I was offered one I wouldn’t at least try it on to see what it really looked like on me and I’m almost sure that having done so it would be a hard decision to make whether I would or wouldn’t.

I wouldn’t have the fishnets though and I would find better heels at least. I do think the horns making the outfit is a nice touch even if I don’t really care for the mottled look of them all that much here…

Four of out five pitchforks. Likely almost a four and half with better horns and shoes, but then I’m picky aren’t I?

 

Tera

Dec 02 2014

A Review of Taken By The Succubus by Della July

Taken By The Succubus by Della July

Taken By The Succubus by Della July

Sometimes there are books that give me pause when I read them. It’s not normally the themes or the characters that do, the problem comes when the story feels… off.

Trying to understand why that is, at least for me, is important because I want to enjoy the stories I read and not wonder after all is said and done what exactly happened within them. But sometimes I can’t work out the reason and it bothers me.

  • Title: Taken By The Succubus
  • Author: Della July
  • Publishing Date: August 27, 2012
  • Length: 3,300 Words
  • ASIN: B00938E0K6
  • This work at Amazon.com

The story tells of:

When Joey rubs an old Aladdin’s like lamp he doesn’t expect a creature living inside to show up and turn upside down his viewpoint on his dream orgasm. But then he realizes that something important is missing in this great sex recipe…

Joey uses a lamp from a friend that promises to give him what he desires, his fondest wish to be with someone he wishes to be with. That dream comes true, but not exactly how Joey thought it would be in many ways. And in that dream, he learns a lesson about reality that he should have known in the first place.

This is an odd work in a lot of ways to me at least. The main one has to do with the way the Succubus in the story, if she is one mind you, acts and speaks. It seems off somehow in the course of the story in tone or words or both at times and that jarred me from the story many times. I didn’t have a problem with the themes, or the actions, or even what happened to Joey as a result of his desires and the trickery of the Succubus.

My problem is that the writing seemed uneven moving from well written passages into hard abrupt moments in the story that felt wrong. It is most likely my personal preferences speaking, but there was just no… soul… in the characters for the most part I felt until the last few pages where the climax was.

The Succubus herself was very two dimensional and quite stereotypical for the most part. Joey was not much better as well and while I can chalk that up to this work being a short hot flash it doesn’t make for a work that I could really enjoy as a whole.

I should say, quite clearly, that I didn’t have a problem with the themes of gender swapping in this story nor did I have a problem with the sex scene overall. Where my problem comes in is in the cardboard emotions and dialogue within the work. I wanted to have just a little bit of character growth along with erotica and, to me at least, there was very little of that to be seen until there was almost nothing left to read.

As a hot flash, this work could have been better than it was if there was something more given to Joey’s personality from the beginning and not just what happens at the end. Lessons learned need to come throughout a story and not as a bolt of lightning out of the blue.

Two pitchforks out of five.

A hot flash that was missing something. I’m still not sure what that is exactly, but in having it not there hurt the story and that bothers me…

 

Tera

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